A true story -- we nearly crippled ourselves laughing at her!

Comment is about ghosties (blog)

Original item by John Embley

Isobel, I'm glad you enjoyed Apparition and thank you for your very generous comments.

Graham.

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Love and parting can't live without each other.

Comment is about The Ghosts (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Thanks John, for the comments on Apparition.

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

Thank you John! You are right. If it were not for the happy memories I wouldn't write this poem.

Comment is about The Ghosts (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

I really like this, and not that I am in any way qualified to talk about poetry, but that last verse seemed to tail off a little. I love the first two lines, and also that last couple of lines, but the filling doesn't sit as gleefully with me as the rest of it did :) I bet this is ace read out loud

Comment is about Kissing the Alien (a boyhood dream) (blog)

Original item by Nash

This is a really sad poem, Larisa, beautifully written. I hope you also have some happy memories to make you smile ...
regards
John

Comment is about The Ghosts (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

still trying to get into the swing of things i'm afraid

Comment is about Kissing the Alien (a boyhood dream) (blog)

Original item by Nash

Love the subject, lovely little crafted poem.

Lines of male ending/upstroke iambic tetrameter followed by alternate lines of female ending iambic trimeter.

Really good use of sibilance in the opening lines.

The poem has a great feel/cadence with the trimeter lines falling as they do. It conveys a sense of solemnity or loss that is very much appropriate.

I love the syntax reversal in the last line of the first stanza and also like the way this echos the second line in the stanza which itself has the more modern syntax.

Sometimes a middle-English type of line affords a beauty that modern day syntax simply doesn't allow for. While some may sniff at the mixing of the too and decry a lack of continuity, I really like it and guess you do as well John.

To me it is like have a building that brings together the best of differing periods of architecture- tastefully done it's great.

The only thing that could be said (subjectively) is...could another two lines be contrived in place of the word But...just to make it a perfect sequence?

Is that asking for too much or indeed is it what the poet would want?

Either way- lovely little crafted poem.

P.S Sorry for banging on.

My Best

Chris

Comment is about The Ghosts of Bamiyan (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Thank you dear Chris! This poem has come out of my heart in a moment. May be you know that I take part in all competitions here on the site. When the theme about ghosts appeared I was a little bit confused, didn't know what to write. But...yesterday something happened, something inspired me. May be it was a call from my husband.

Comment is about The Ghosts (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Very well written Larisa.

I thought it was coming from a deep place and it seems so from what I have read in your comments.

My Best

Chris

Comment is about The Ghosts (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Thank you dear Stella for the comment. You are so right: we cannot chose. Yes, we can chose clothes or vegetables in a market but not the time of our death. Sounds sad, but ....What to do? It's life.

Comment is about The Ghosts (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

ohhhhh...I geddit now! :)

actually though I rather like the idea of wrapping the door!

Comment is about Like A Stranger Bringing Bad News (blog)

Original item by Tom Harding

Oh my Larisa :(


No we cannot choose can we?

Powerful words Larisa x

Comment is about The Ghosts (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

I really enjoyed pathway, very deep and powerful, M

Comment is about NICK ARMBRISTER (poet profile)

Original item by NICK ARMBRISTER

hi mike well yes i guess youre right, till such stuff is taught, there'll be big trouble in our small world. i write such work when in deep melancholic moods. thanx for reading nick:)

Comment is about Think poem (blog)

Original item by NICK ARMBRISTER

Thanks for your reflections on 'Mighty Love' and you are right, although not written for my child it is very maternal - I wrote it for an uncle and I was feeling very protective and maternal towards him (wanted him to know he was not alone in what he's going through). M xx

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Thank you for your kind words John. It's good to know you found it uplifting as I wrote it for a family member and that's exactly how I wanted them to feel. M xx

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

Thanks Dave, I really appreciate it. M

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Hi Sharon

Welcome to WOL - hope you enjoy it here.

Just like to say that I really enjoyed all of your samples and think you should get them blogged :)

When you are logged in, there's a linky at the top right of the page, 'Make Blog Entry' :)

Take care, see you around here no doubt

Laura

Comment is about Sharon Larkin (poet profile)

Original item by Sharon Larkin

Hahaa John - yeh Ann, double dare ya! :D

Brilliant - made up for you :) Will try and listen to this!

Comment is about Ann Foxglove on the radio (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Really enjoyed this - thought at first the repetition was going to annoy me, but no - it worked well. Flows beautifully, and I love the symmetry of the first and last lines.

Comment is about you are not bukowski and neither am i (blog)

Original item by Tom Harding

Hiya John

Cheers for your comment on Dissonance - I'm pleased it got you reading The Prophet again. It's one of my favourite books. It's kinda spooky but whenever I'm in 'need' of it, it falls open onto the pages that give me the most succour.

Anyhoo - the 'she'? Who do YOU think that is?

Comment is about John Embley (poet profile)

Original item by John Embley

LOL yes it would have been Ann!

Good luck (I did one for our local radio station not so long back it was great fun but I had to remember not to fidget or rustle my papers lol)

You will have a blast x

Comment is about Ann Foxglove on the radio (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

A nice read....

Comment is about I Adore (blog)

Hasta la vista, Larisa. I had my heart broken 3,4, and 5 years ago but I have recovered. I generally write poetry books about lost love.

Comment is about The Ghosts (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

'Doing it Twice.'
Is my kind of stuff John, I really enjoyed it.
I will read more when I get my new spectacles; but am struggling a bit at present. I like the audio suggestion. As a matter of fact I am now trying to put my "Strictly for the Birds" to my three chord guitar range, doing the Carter lick similar to "A boy named Sue." I do that some tmes
at my folk club.
I'll be in touch. Tom Mc D.

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

I gather from my forks porks that the Clyde Paddle Steamers have nothing to do with Glasgow?
Hey Ho! Glasgow's nice anyway.

Comment is about The Clyde Paddle Steamers (blog)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Very gentle and light of touch, like all your poetry Stella.

'of a life left over after all have grasped their slice and more' echoed a bit with me :-)

Lovely. x

Comment is about On Ice (blog)

This is writing at its best: worlds in grains of sand, the universal in the particular.
Honesty, humanity, without sentimentality.
If you are not submitting for magazines, you should be.

Comment is about rallying (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

excellent as normal, kealan.

you want to consider splitting the last line into a stanza by it's self as it may have more impact by itself.

otherwise, keep em coming! x

Comment is about The Laughing Neanderthal (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

Probably my favourite piece of yours Ann, first rate... you've carried this piece beauitfully and you can see it's a labour of love for you.

top stuff x

Comment is about rallying (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Must admit I went through my Bukowski phase I guess maybe 4 years later, but he's a poet that I've read lots of people try to be inspired by etc.

On your poem, I love all the movement and colour that is it. Are you going to try and perform it - it would tie me up in knots this if I tried it, I bet.

Top stuff however.

Comment is about you are not bukowski and neither am i (blog)

Original item by Tom Harding

I really like the colorful imagery this brings to mind.

Comment is about you are not bukowski and neither am i (blog)

Original item by Tom Harding

Thanks much for the comments on 'I Adore.'

Comment is about Tom Harding (poet profile)

Original item by Tom Harding

ditto Stella,s observations
but with golden knobs on!

cool one Robbo!

2u-the best

Stef.

Comment is about C U LATAZ! (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Bittersweet and somewhat sad. This is you at your best Ann.

Comment is about rallying (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Great timeless feel, good tumbling and building rythmn too.

Comment is about I Adore (blog)

This is lovely, wonderfully soft.

Comment is about On Ice (blog)

Hi Frances, good to have you aboard. Hope that you enjoy exploring and contributing to the site. Winston

Comment is about Frances Spurrier (poet profile)

Original item by Frances Spurrier

Nice one Ann. Win x

Comment is about Ann Foxglove on the radio (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thank you so much for the comment, Tom. But...what to do?
You can't delete the words from the song whether they are sad or joyful.

Comment is about The Ghosts (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Very effective larisa, very sad too.

Comment is about The Ghosts (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

This poem is about me and my husband who went to another world seven years ago.

Comment is about The Ghosts (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Wigan's a tricky one for me to get to of an evening to be honest. I can't really see many opportunities arising for me to perform this poem which is why I've stuck it on here. It did take some time to write so I'd be happy for people to enjoy it in any way they can - as long as I get a namecheck at the end! Glad you liked it Isobel and Terry. Many thanks for the comments.

Comment is about Wigan And Leigh, One Or The Other Is Where We Want To be! (blog)

Then you'll have to come to the Tudor in Wigan a week on Thursday and perform it for us - or get some of us to perform it for you. I could rustle up some Wigan accents for you - or even try to sink back into a broad accent myself.

There are a lot of funny lines in this as well as history but it needs to be heard. I'm not sure how it would sound with posh Lymm accents - you are right about that. My sister once tried to put on a scottish accent to read a poem about Scotland - it sounded awful - we persuaded her to do it in 'english'.

I did enjoy this and approve of anything that puts Wigan where it deserves to be on the map - bang in the cultural centre of the North West...

One thing missing was the warmth and fiendliness of the locals (older generation at least) - you'd love the Tudor I'm sure - but don't try over stepping you 3 - 5 minutes or we'll be throwing pies at you! xx

Comment is about Wigan And Leigh, One Or The Other Is Where We Want To be! (blog)

Apparently it was videoed but we never received a copy. Performing it was quite a mammoth task and a bit daunting as neither of us are from Wigan! We didn't know how to pronounce Mesnes Park. We're from Lymm near Warrington - I think it would be nice to hear it performed with proper Wigan accents.

Comment is about Wigan And Leigh, One Or The Other Is Where We Want To be! (blog)

Ah, I would have loved to heard that performed.

Comment is about Wigan And Leigh, One Or The Other Is Where We Want To be! (blog)

thanks ann! yes it's been awhile.

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Now which make of bunny rabbit would that have been?

Well done you - hope you do us all proud - what a blast to be on the radio. I think your silky sexy voice is made for it! x

Comment is about Ann Foxglove on the radio (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman