Totally awesome opening!

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Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

I like your ghazal John. I must try and write one, they can be really beautiful. But it does seem rather a daunting process! The romantic theme suits the form very well. x

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Original item by John Aikman

When I find the strength of journey to read between the lines of others portrals, yours,then momentary I can escape my present day shell,and escape to another,past tense,but real enough to become enlightened.Thankyou.

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Wow! This is superb. Wonderful feelings and thoughts expressed and heart breaking towards the end.x

Comment is about Lost Ghazal (blog)

Original item by John Aikman

I know those feelings... Intensely beautiful.
I will forever be lost...

Comment is about Lost Ghazal (blog)

Original item by John Aikman

Hey John :)
Thanks for your comment, appreciate it!

Rachael x

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

I really enjoyed these, Larisa, especially the one about looking for a man to share the same interests! Love, Lynn xx

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Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

very nice Rachael, can almost hear it... Win x

Comment is about Touching Skies Tonight (blog)

2 headed boy poem simmering away nicely, wrote a bit more of it today. Win x

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Thanks for your comments on Snow on the Pass, Win. You're right, there is a real story attached to it, and the journey is Sheffield to Liverpool and back, across the Pennines. Always dodgy at this time of year. Greg

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John, thanks for your comments on Snow on the Pass. I've given the game away about it now, somewhat anyway; hope that hasn't spoilt it for you. Greg

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Hi Winston. Weather permitting I will be there.

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yes, I liked this one Freda, great to see some of your new work. (It was not from my workshop though lol) see you Wed. XX

Comment is about The Plain Girl (blog)

Original item by Freda Davis

some wonderful retrospectives in this one John. a pefrect radif for a ghazal. Thanks for posting. Win x

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Original item by John Aikman

Brill Rach! nice light(Brookside type)voice lovely poem indeed-pray do keep posting and reading-thanks very much-Stef-xx

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Love the voice.

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Awww! me poor(old? nay lass!)Yanty! the only advice I can give you is get a beechams down yer cakehole and double up on the baby-gro,s..even if they do clash with the yellow/green mules clacking up and down the High Street-no seriously-ahem-beechams are brill(IMHO)love the snuggy fox pikky/image-ta chudgy-Mr Snifan Wilde-xxps can I have a long distance clap for doing me monthly 24 tins of cat food donation for our local sanctuary(Bleakholt)-I bung it in their bin in Asda-which neatly leads on to a related funny incident-did the same last month as they were bringing new stock in-and put it all around the donations bin-I had to climb a dirty great mountain of boxes to put the tins in-and! got bleedin trapped between two bleedin palettes of stuff(Mr Bean or wot!)to make you laugh yer phlegm up,heres another Mr Bean tale-neighbour of ours has a sloping driveway-(upwards)and was struggling to get kiddy in pram up it cos of the ice etc-so Mr Bean to the rescue! I remembered we had a log night night before and the ash pan(as in fire ashes-not meat n two veg)was full-so I scattered a huge amount of ash all over the icy slope-to my 'orror I had completely overlooked the fact that I had also been burning lots of d-i-y bits of wood etc(there is an end to this)which in turn were full of nails and screws! I spent half an hour picking all the nails/screws out of the ash,just in time before her hubby came down in his new car-otherwise..pop!..pop!..pop!..pop! not including the spare wheel-thats in the boot-I say this because you are a pedestrian and might not know..tee hee..do I get the clowns crown for my Mr Beanings? wot a plonker! you can go back to your lemsip now-tattybye! Mr St****(the last letter is 'd' ha!-xx

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Freda-very compact poem-one suggestion,second line I think would suit the 'plain girl'-"she-hides-her life in the shadow of night", to continue the hiding?

Comment is about The Plain Girl (blog)

Original item by Freda Davis

Good evening Larisa-some wise words in this poem indeed-well done-Stef-xx

Comment is about Rzhepicks (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

'Evening Lynn-hope your poor feet are improving.as for all your comments-you certainly do me kind service thank you so so much! re the 'baggage' poem-the stanza you referred to was the girls preparedness to share memories of when she-was-in love with the guy she,s leaving,hence the 'half each-but if you want to bung in your idea,please feel very free-no problemos at all-always willing to oblige-thank you very very much-let me know how you are coping-especially in this slippy walking weather-hey! and keep Mr copper coat warm!(which no doubt you do)cheers Lynn-lotsa love-Stefan-xx-B-xx

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Original item by Lynn Dye

HaHa - I can't even blame the wacky backy - that ran out quite a while ago :(
(bigfoot)

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

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I have a lot of respect for everyone who tackles these ghazals - but I must admit to not overly liking the form. For me emotions are best explored without constraints - the echoing of certain words and tight structure makes it artificial in some way - reduces the scope for interesting imagery, also. Just my opinion :) x

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Thanks for your thoughful comments on 'Lost'. The irony of it being lost is not lost on me. :)

It was a callow effort from some years ago...long before I joined WOL. I dug it out because I admired some other Ghazals that were being posted...far better than mine.

Being lost can be fun, frightening and...bliss.

Jx

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Original item by Isobel

It really does feel warm Ann. Freckle-making warmth is a lovely phrase. I would have liked you to have described the smell of heat on skin and the sticky feel of sun cream more evocatively. I love all the seasons and this feels a long time away. Regards, Graham

Comment is about skylark place (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hello Rachael. Is bide in the first line a typo?
There are a lot of lovely ideas in this piece.
I'm not too keen on the rhyming but enjoyed the song throughout the work.

Comment is about Silver Moons Throne (blog)

Really love this Freda. It kind of reminds me of that song 'I learned the truth at 17, that love belongs to beauty queens...'.
Perhaps it is better to mature into beauty than start off with it. As your poem highlights, it is a long fall from the top of a mountain - much easier to cope with loss of beauty if you've never really had it as such. This is such a thoughtful poem - beautifully expressed.

Comment is about The Plain Girl (blog)

Original item by Freda Davis

You shouldn't have posted anything this close to the end of the month John - it only has a 2 day life span - then it gets lost!

I'm no expert on this form but love the play on the word lost - lost as in so happy you are beyond the everyday and lost as in deprived of the thing you want most.

I find the syllabic structure of some of the lines odd - but that is probably because I don't write to form any more - just write to flow of how I like reading something. I must study this structure and have a go myself. x

Comment is about Lost Ghazal (blog)

Original item by John Aikman

This is neat Freda. Really enjoyed the contrast between plain and beautiful. Reminds me of the saying 'don't hide your light under a bushell.' :-)

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Original item by Freda Davis

I love those last two verses and the silver theme running throughout.
Beautiful imagery too.x

Comment is about Silver Moons Throne (blog)

Love this, Andy. A very good read. x

Comment is about The Other Side (Space Poem) (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Thx for the comment on the memory poem Greg, and thx for the welcome back.

My best

Chris

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Appreciated the feedback on the Memory poem Isobel...thx

Chris

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Thx for the comments on the Memory poem- appreciated.

Chris

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Original item by Marianne Daniels

Thx for the feedback on the Fleeting Memory poem- appreciated.

Chris

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Original item by Dave Bradley

Again, I think this is lovely and well read, too. There would appear to be something about your work which makes people want to re-visit it, which can only be good!

Comment is about Silver Moons Throne (blog)

Oh! Forgot to tell you Steve. I was born on the 27th of May. I am Gemini. So, there was nothing strange if you thought of different writers.

Comment is about Rzhepicks (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Another beautiful poem. It is so light, so touching. Enjoyed reading it. "The clarity of you love rings through" and other lines sound fascinating. With warmest wishes, Larisa

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the independence of the paper doll! breaking away :) really like this Janet

Comment is about Success! (blog)

Well, Steve! Is it a compliment or what? And with what other work you compared these "rzhepicks"? Do you mean other "rzhepicks" or my poems?

Comment is about Rzhepicks (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

I read the second line wrong in audio, oops...re-record

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Cynthia
Thanks for your comments on Tale from the North Country. I can enjoy free verse, but for me the essence of poetry is rhythm. I find the management of syllabic stress the real challenge of writing verse.
I think this sort of advice on keeping warm ought to be made available on the BBC for pensioners through Public Service Announcements.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

hi Laris :)
thanks for your lovely comment on my song lyrics,
peace and love to you
Rachael x

Comment is about Larisa Rzhepishevska (poet profile)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Hi Cynthia, thanks for your comments on Snow on the Pass. I've put some background to it on the poem's blog. You were exactly right to think that "bereavement without a funeral" meant "no closure". The "no music" line was just about an inability to listen to any kind of music in case it brought back painful memories. I found the idea of having to shut music out of your life really shocking. Greg

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Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Ta Stef - Actually there was a mention of ice cream in my first darft/draught but it's on the cutting room floor - very messy! Did I mention we have an ice cream at the cafe at Chapel Porth beach called a Foxy? And Ta Banksy - Hosepipe bans - how lovely! I'm fed up with winter!!

Comment is about skylark place (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Mornin! this early-ish bird has woken up to find his worm has frozen! hope you aint been icicled too,best thing to do is sew up the 'oles in yer string vest-if yer dont hear from me in six months,please come to the ashes scattering ceremony-in your back garden-your freezingly-Mr Nastycoff-xx

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

A brilliant win, Rachel.
Hey, you were very kind to old fellah me at The Atrium.
Where can I access the two poems you performed?

Comment is about Rachel McGladdery (poet profile)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Oi ! - we've only just got rid of our hosepipe ban up here :)

Comment is about skylark place (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thankyou Larisa, its about someone I love very much :) x

Comment is about Touching Skies Tonight (blog)

My God! It sounds just wonderful. I liked it so much. I've touched the sky listening to this beautiful song. Would like to last it for ever long.

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Hi, dear Isobel! Thank you so much for your support. I mean Alain English's "I Like Strong Women But I Can't Stand Bitches video.lol With warmest wishes and hugs, Larisa

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