Well done Pete...my sort of poem...

loved it
Gus

Comment is about swimming underwater (blog)

Standard? You commented on my standard!
have you read this Mike?
Maybe you dont know how powerful your work is!
The power and commitment in the war poems you write just sends me out there mate.
its pure, tight, raw right to the bone, no frills
it hurts to read as I know you were there
unbelievable mate.
classic.
what can I say.

March you bastard / starch

oh yes, like that couplet
the regiment and the ritual mate
the regiment and the ritual

Comment is about Noel Hill (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Poetry reveals as much, or as little, as we care to look. Once again, your work is demonstrating a sense of depth that I enjoy. Graham 'touches' (I sense anyway!) upon what is contained within these words.
I'd be tempted to use the present participle for the verb 'turn' and not past tense.
'I turn to an empty chair'. or simply 'turning to an empty chair'.
Another good 'un. Keep 'em comin'...

Comment is about Empty (blog)

Original item by sian howell

Enjoyed your poem Chris. I am sure many Dads share your thoughts. Well done.

Comment is about Bump! (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

Photographs by Melanie Rees

Comment is about Gus Jonnson at the Tudor House, Wigan Feb 2009 (photo)

nice poem

Comment is about swimming underwater (blog)

cheers for the comments maggie there most appreciated, im glad you enjoyed it. i like the way your poetry has such insight aand is straight to the point yet gets the message accross so directly, cheers, chris. x

Comment is about Maggie (poet profile)

Original item by Maggie

hi chris, nice poem.

Comment is about A verdict chosen (blog)

Original item by Chris Heidtbrink

hi chris, this is a very nice poem, im sure you will come up with a title for it, just look within your words for one, its there.

Comment is about Untitled (blog)

Original item by Chris Heidtbrink

Thanks for the comment hun, look me up on facebook or myspace and would love to share more work with you. Love your work

Comment is about LOVE (blog)

Original item by Maggie

Thank you Val re Summer's Day...

Love ya to bits
see you soon
Gus x

Comment is about Valerie Cook (poet profile)

Original item by Valerie Cook

Thanks again Sian

For your lovely words re Summer's Day...

Gus x

Comment is about sian howell (poet profile)

Original item by sian howell

Perhaps someone you both loved and feared a little? If not the ambiguity is cleverly worked.

Comment is about Empty (blog)

Original item by sian howell

Hi Gemma

Congrats on a great gig at ShangriLa last night. Impressive stuff under a lot of pressure!

Cheers

Tony

Comment is about Gemma Lees (poet profile)

Original item by Gemma Lees

like it, I was on Bournemouth peer at the time. Remember it well.
Mike

Comment is about TWO MINUTES (blog)

Original item by Rodney Wood

Hello Pete, your an inspiration. I wonder how long you been writing to reach this standard. I read it a couple of times and each time i found something new to ponder on. Yup! Fine wordage blue.
Mike

Comment is about swimming underwater (blog)

No it isn't Rodney. It is an observational piece certainly, but that is very different from voyeurism. It is a story highlighting in verse the horrible reality of the dangers of this way of life and the kinds of emotions it raises as well as the fact that it continues unchanged by the horrible violence that has always gone with it. To suggest that it is in some way sexually titillating misses the point by a very long way.

Comment is about Bobbing and Peering (blog)

Original item by Malpoet

This has great rhythm, expect this sounds good in performance!

Comment is about SEARCHING... (blog)

Hi Sian

Your poem
depicts a sense of longing and disappointment many can identify with..

Comment is about Empty (blog)

Original item by sian howell

Border Crossing...had me from the first line, I thought it was great, made me laugh out loud. Very funny. I wish there was more of your pieces to read. Sian

Comment is about Jeff Cottrill (poet profile)

Original item by Jeff Cottrill

Wow Sian, I can totally relate. This says it all, beautiful and plaintive. Sigh..never mind, you can always use the chair to pile your laundry on and no-one will tell you to move it..cos it's your chair.. thank you for reading my words and your comments on my writing, hope your weekend is a good one,Deb x

Comment is about Empty (blog)

Original item by sian howell

thank you Rodney for your comments on Belladonna. the repetition..witchy herb..spell... ; )
Deb

Comment is about Rodney Wood (poet profile)

Original item by Rodney Wood

I really enjoyed the above "death will come"... I liked the idea that when death comes it resembles an ordinary day...giving the impression that death can visit any of us without warning. Sian X

Comment is about Death will come (blog)

Original item by Carol Falaki

Enjoyed this thoroughly...a very well thought out
piece and great idea. Sian X

Comment is about Our first colour TV (blog)

A bit voyeuristic eh!

Comment is about Bobbing and Peering (blog)

Original item by Malpoet

Thanks very much i really appreciate your comment its nice to know that theres some people left that are real....And appreciate realness...Thats put me in a gud mood! Lol thank you!

Comment is about NAKED (blog)

The content of this poem is brillaint, makes you think. The comment from Elise is valid, I have to agree, on the page it needs, not necessarilly an order, a structure, but it needs better presentation. I think this one could be an epic, but the links make it sound a bit disjointed. If it were perhaps a little more fluid and flowin, it would provoke more than just a startle, it would jump out and grab you. Nice poem, needs a lil fine tweakin but really good.
Mike

Comment is about SHOOTING STARS (blog)

I can really empathise with this. Some people say too often, "You wear your heart on your sleeve." And I wonder whether this be a taunt for the fact they find it hard to express themselves. It can leave you wide open to ridicule. But this poem, says all about the passion that some people have. And the fact, they're not afraid to ask of it. If more people expressed how they truly feel, perhaps the problems of communication would be overcome. Nice one Yosh.

Comment is about NAKED (blog)

Aye, when a woman becomes pregnant, and the bump is there for all to see. you can only admire how proud they be. I feel this one. Women do bloom when carrying babes. Wonderful. You must be proud too. Biggupz and good luck.
Mike

Comment is about Bump! (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

I like this poem, the last stanza is just genius.
Mike

Comment is about Private Rainbow (painbow) (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

Hi Sian, did you succumb to the subtle blackmail that is tescos or did you rush home to make a red rose out of toilet rolls and pipe cleaners?..hmm they make it all too easy...damn them....thank you for your kind comments on my wee poem, Deb

Comment is about sian howell (poet profile)

Original item by sian howell

Thanks for your input its appreciated! Ive been writing since i was little but ive only jus started putting it out so any feed back is welcome! Thank you!

Comment is about SHOOTING STARS (blog)

i was floating along with the romance of that 'til you burst my bubble at the end. i liked that- it's true, too x

Comment is about Girls and bubbles (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

As it is presented it reads well as a performance piece, on the page i feel it would benefit from the stanzas being more visually defined, but maybe thats because i'm rather new to this. would you do a sound clip?
I really like the poem, the images it creates and the message you're sending out. shine on :)

Comment is about SHOOTING STARS (blog)

thanks for the chat , yeah it broke ,
i too have an essay to write :)

Comment is about Simon Rennie (poet profile)

Original item by Simon Rennie

Please feel free to leave ur comments!

Comment is about SHOOTING STARS (blog)

Yeah, he could probably put her six feet below the surface but it was probably worth it. :-)
I'm happy in my bubble by the way.
Janet.x

Comment is about Girls and bubbles (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

nice one Chris, there's been a few dodgy vicars!
alanxx.

Comment is about Vicar of Stiffkey (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

Hi Val
Thanks for commenting upon my football poem. Nice to write something lighter for once
Win

Comment is about Valerie Cook (poet profile)

Original item by Valerie Cook

Hi Jordan, No apology necessary... We are still in business and look forward to your return.
thanks for reading and commenting upon Nearly Nine, I liked your "War Poem" and the returning Helen of Troy line. Good story line feel to it. Winston

Comment is about Jordan (poet profile)

Original item by Jordan

Truly written with Banjo Patterson in mind.

Comment is about Australian Wedding (blog)

Original item by Malpoet

Oh, this is so full of reminiscences and imaginings, so gently written and yet creates an image of the vast empty space we live in yet to be revealed.
We plough the fields and scatter the good seed on the land came to mind while reading this and seeing the picture you included.
Very nice poem in my humble opinion.

Janet.x

Comment is about Constant Gardener (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

Your poem is soooo sweet.
I saw the colour of summer in the pic.
All lavender blue hues.
Lovely. :-)
Janet.x

Comment is about little days (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

The first piece of work that I have read on here (just signed up) and encouraged by your quality. By the way hello! Graham

Comment is about Appeal to the 'Bar' (blog)

Original item by sian howell

I agree with the positive AND negative comments here, I also see the irony in the stereotype angle....

..which leads me to my point that it is the writer's view/feeling/expression, so for me can't be challenged; merely being up to others to decide if they enjoy or not.

I can imagine that this reads really well and LOVE the fact that this guy wants to reach those not usually exposed to poetry.

Personally I don't agree completely with the politic and do accept that the last stanza wouldn't be required for this to work, it actually compounded my anti towards it's message.

Liked the style and imagination, a piece with purpose I feel.

Comment is about Asylum Seeking Daleks (article)

I read so very little poetry, disliking so very much of it...but I really did enjoy and like this piece.

Any simple person could read, follow and understand...perhaps that's why!

Comment is about Bobbing and Peering (blog)

Original item by Malpoet

Got a pair of underpants like that!

Comment is about A Good Age (blog)

Original item by Malpoet

thank you for your comment on playstation, Daniel. i've added to it again since and am still unsure (is that a common thing?)
The poetry bomber is excellent- you must keep dropping them into the midst of the madness all around. I think our own personal madness is what makes us.. invincible nightmares in our blue pants! x

Comment is about Daniel Hooks (poet profile)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

Hi Andy
Yes you're right...it was sad...it's from part of a letter sent to someone very dear to me...saying goodbye.

Thanks once again for your comments
Gus

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

i never even saw a color telly til i was about 12, would you believe? I think it was 1984 ish... nice stuff

Comment is about Our first colour TV (blog)