Thanks very much for your kind comments on 'Snowblind' Tina - they're very much appreciated
Ian

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I like this, the first verse is amazing x

Comment is about Snowblind (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

Oh Win - that sounds sad :(
xx

Comment is about The Magician Cat (blog)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Hi all. Thx for the comments. Cats are very much in my mind at the moment. The pic shows squeak (left) and his sister Bubble (right). sleeping togehter on Bubbles' last night last Wednesday.

Comment is about The Magician Cat (blog)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Cats do lots of magic things!

Comment is about The Magician Cat (blog)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Not a great poem - but it was such fun to do - and to read aloud! Subject was our "homework" for my writers group - I think I'd probably not bother to write some months if it wasn't for them!

Comment is about city in the sand (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Amusing and clever.

Comment is about The cat, the damselflies, and the deer (blog)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Lovely poem Claire. Welcome to WOL. Hope to see more of your work on here.

Comment is about Claire Booker (poet profile)

Original item by Claire Booker

Welcome to WOL David. I have enjoyeds reading your work thus far.

Comment is about David Blake (poet profile)

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I like this too. Very oblique and mysterious, open-ended. I like the turf reckoning especially. The red light is interesting - I wonder what you had in mind. I'm afraid I can't help seeing a zombie-like creature but I'm sure there's a lot more to it!

Comment is about The Intruder (blog)

Original item by David Blake

I really enjoyed this poem David. It really formed itself into a very visual image in my mind.

Comment is about Orange Garden (blog)

Original item by David Blake

I’m lucky, I don’t suffer except for some, maybe:
The headaches and the nightmares of what could nearly be.
An SAS saved my life by using his dawn knife,
But we weren’t there, so that can’t be,
No, we were not the cavalry.

I am so sorry that you feel the way that you can’t help,
But I have been in places where the enemy wants your scalp,
Before your time – so what? – Lost mates hurt just the same,
I try to sleep, but nothing, no, nothing is the same.

To break away from horrors – I write and do my best,
It’s good that you can, ‘get it out’ – despite my lame protest,
I wasn’t condescending, of that I am most sure,
For you, it is more difficult to quell the fighting roar.

A raw that I know well - that wears its anger for all time,
Ignore those fucking analysts; you fought and spent your prime,
This has now been taken – given to our Queen,
I trust that I do not offend – for I had earlier seen.

The wish was for your solid words to come across most strong,
Not ignored as babbling squaddie – redress always dies long,
I was not a ‘grunt’ but a ‘shiny’ you would say,
Nonetheless, I was there, albeit, previous day.

Comment is about Noetic-fret! (poet profile)

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Many thanks for being my spell checker! Offending words corrected. xx

Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)

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Samantha Louise is, of course, every bit as sweet as Sarah Jane (but doesn't need the syllabic input).

Comment is about Samantha Louise and Sweet Sarah Jane (blog)

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Beautiful. Thank heavens for little girls. Do you remember that song? Take care, Tony.

Comment is about Samantha Louise and Sweet Sarah Jane (blog)

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Hi, John. No, I don't miss the headlines. I still get to write a few on Write Out Loud!

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"Watch the wall my darling as the peloton goes by" is a great line, Tony. Enjoyed your alternative amble round the Surrey hills.

Comment is about Olympics in Dorking (blog)

Original item by Tony Earnshaw

Jaunty little sonnet Would St George have approved of the dalliance?

Comment is about Margaret (blog)

Original item by Marnanel Thurman

Ahh what a lovely tribute.Well written JC. Wocher doin' in a whistle ' n' flute?

Comment is about Samantha Louise and Sweet Sarah Jane (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Hello Greg,
It gave me paws for thought.
You must miss those headlines!

Comment is about The cat, the damselflies, and the deer (blog)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Just caught this - I did an Olympics in Dorking poem. Wonder how many others there are around the country. I'll put mine up as a blog

Comment is about The bike race (blog)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Yes, Win. I rather did the over-elaboration in the song just to draw attention to the eye-rhyme between penis and denis.

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Hi John. Yes, I found your penis, penis very interesting. The first line got the bigist laugh when I suddenly got your v cleaver word play. :-) Win

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I see you've been looking at my "Penis, Penis", Win!

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Hello Cynthia,
Thankyou for commenting on "Hotel Fawlty Towers". Glad you liked it.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

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Hello MC,
Glad you liked "Hotel Fawlty Towers". I know what you mean about the Major!

Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)

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Hello Yvonne,
Thankyou for commenting on "Hotel Fawlty Towers". You would not credit the number of times I blobbed in recording it; I must have done 20 takes!

Comment is about Yvonne Brunton (poet profile)

Original item by Yvonne Brunton

I'm really looking forward to hearing the resignation/concession masterpiece. Bring it on!

Comment is about Clare Foges -this girl is on fire. (blog)

Original item by hugh

Yvonne,

Your comment about `clipper` has been very helpful.

It made me think of the billowing sails of a clipper being too full for the intended image (a clean beauty cutting across placidness)This in turn fetched up some words for `sharp`and an anxiety I blogged in the discussions about fear of copying Hopkins (as if I could!)So I`ve changed it

...Lost the alliteration but`shippy` turbulence and wake are still there.

Thanks.

Comment is about Lily going by (blog)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

A two day poetry bender which sounded like a wild wild wild time.

Comment is about Soho (blog)

Original item by Katy Megan

I love your take on it Greg - very original! And what a cat - more of a puma, I'd say :))

Comment is about The cat, the damselflies, and the deer (blog)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Funeral of lives
Run like a crazy for your coffin
run in fever for finding a bus
That will carry people ,pain,team..
Run to refuge,residence,-cemetery
But and for going there you need a friend
Fiends for a grave,gravedigger friend..
To seems like you and not somebody else
Friend for marble,friends for...
Run.run in this funeral
Funeral of lives..
Run,like in my funeral
Leon Qafzezi-Poetry books 2012

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Original item by Leon Qafzezi

It is ironic that I have just read this as I have just finished listening to this very topic superbly discussed on Radio 4's Start the Week, with Joan Bakewell, Tim Montgomerie and Blair's speech writer, Philip something. Chris Mullin admits hating having to read speeches prepared by others containing meaningless phrases. Well worth catching on Listen Again: http://www.bbc.co.uk/programmes/b01q8l31
You have the makings of an even better poem here. How about equating the speech's effect with the durability of an ice-cream cone? Great, important, choice of subject.

Comment is about Clare Foges -this girl is on fire. (blog)

Original item by hugh

JANUARY 2013

Despite clashing events we had a great night at the Ring O Bells with everyone in high spirits. Carol Keys started us off with a New Years Eve themed poem. While Joy got us all involved with her Balls themed poem. Pete read a big f@ck you to the world and Darren wowed us with his newly written words. New poet Carol Kelly made us think with her creative piece about the Cournals daughter. Alvin Sawdust had us all in giggles with Cockneys Sell Fruit, while Deslexic said Good God. Joe the ranter joined us for the first time at the Ringers and ranted about the British pastime of queuing. Julia spoke of a modern day Robbie Burns and I read through a Window Pane. Our guest Gus Jonnson read some touching and honest poetry about his past, his mothers OCD and how painting is a messy form of poetry. He kept us all captivated with reflective words. So a great night.

FEEDBACK

Areas for improvement

Noise from downstairs, a fez for everyone, £1,000,000 for each, bit cold

My apologies for the noise on the stairs. As for a fez for everyone, not sure where to get them and I can't afford to give you all lots of money lol. And the cold, I'm afraid the radiators were on so there isn't much I can do for this.

Good Points

Excellent content as usual, Overall pretty good, The fecking lot, Lovely wasn't a disappointment, Nice quiet but comfy, Enjoyable evening, some great poetry as usual, Great evening, Lovely,Chums, creativity, food and raffle.

Some great feedback there. And I'd like to say a big thank you to everyone whose supported me, practically the Nearly Dead Poets and Just Poets who compered the nights and Carol Keys for making the cakes. But I couldn't have done this without the support everyone as given me. Now I pass the reins proudly back to Gemma "the poet " Lees and I'm looking forward to her return. Next months guest will be the talented Catherine Coward. See you all then.

Review is about Write Out Loud - Middleton on 27 Jan 2013 (event)

Thanks again folks

Joe - I do love how people interpret poems - that's the absolute beauty of them innit?

Francine - thank you :) Yep, to me, the Look/See/Observe were MASSIVE clues, but then, I was the writer so it's obvious when you already know!

Comment is about Huami (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Just for fun ... and in the hope that it will inspire a few more entries to Dave's Cat's out of the Bag January WOL competition

Comment is about The cat, the damselflies, and the deer (blog)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thank you Hugh! Really appreciate your comments - Katy

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Hi Anthony - thanks for comment, I was, of course, enough rock and roll to make up for it!

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Thank you Harry!

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Lovely!x

Comment is about The Magician Cat (blog)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Hi Hugh. Thanks for your comments on The Rapids. Glad you like it. Take care, Tony.

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Thank you, Laura : )

You've been writing up a storm! I must go through some of what I've missed...

xx

Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Thank you : )
You've been quiet too lately - hope all is well and you are just busy having fun!

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Love the initial mysteriousness and perception of this, Laura - though the 'Look..., See, Observe were obvious clues.
Observe was my favourite part (as well as note).

Comment is about Huami (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

we've all moved on a long way in the past half-century - if the destruction of a species and self absorbed killing of other species is the crime - where are the great 'sportsmen' from the stars who will visit us and obliterate humans in the same way? let's face it - the fox is no greater a self-centred troublecauser than man himself.
i prefer my sport to be based on carrying a ball across a line of whitewash. inter-species combat just doesn't do it for me.

Comment is about Vermin (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

Thanks Yvonne - I meet more than my share here in the "tourist land" of central London, tho' I am better than most at spotting them in time to take avoiding action!

Comment is about STREETWISE (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Ian - Man is a predator and whilst "progress"has subverted the instincts, they have their place in nature, just as hounds will do what hounds do and foxes do what they do. I grew up in the English countryside of half a century ago and recall its occupants as generations of unsentimental realists who practised husbandry and whose hard-nosed acceptance of nature's harsh realities made it possible. The fox was no friend to any species but his own and the enemy of most.
I recall a barn being cleared of rats in ways that would have caused palpitations in today's sentimental breasts had they had been foxes. The crime seems to be to dress up for the event and even worse, ride a horse!

Comment is about Vermin (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

If i remember correctly Ged, didn't you win with your amazing poem. I came second x

Comment is about Jess Green (photo)

Original item by tina

Must admit I've recently got into the bad habit of slipping in what attempt to be comical lines in otherwise serious poems. I think you're right - it doesn't really work in this one. Thanks so much for commenting! :)

Comment is about Sonnet on Death (blog)

Original item by Irina

Well done Katy,an unique piece of verse,full of action and vivid descriptions.
"kitten scramble onto bed"
"you declare your predatory love ."
"You recite poetry loudly,off the cuff of your duffle coat."

Comment is about Soho (blog)

Original item by Katy Megan