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Hugh

Sun 27th Jan 2013 13:50

Well done Katy,an unique piece of verse,full of action and vivid descriptions.
"kitten scramble onto bed"
"you declare your predatory love ."
"You recite poetry loudly,off the cuff of your duffle coat."

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Hugh

Sun 27th Jan 2013 13:37

Fabulous flow of words,possessing a clever stream of rhythm and rhyme.Well done ! More please Tony.

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Anthony Emmerson

Sun 27th Jan 2013 12:56

Deliciously decadent Katy. You just need a little rock'n roll and you have the full set!

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Anthony Emmerson

Sun 27th Jan 2013 12:54

http://news.yahoo.com/blogs/sideshow/cat-born-without-leg-bones-getting-operation-thanks-011228150.html

Easier maybe for this one Win. My black cat does a passable imitation of a tea-cosy when he's all tucked-in

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 27th Jan 2013 12:28

Katy thanks!
I know I`m a bit of an old fart but-honest - after reading the rest of it, I`ve never read anything so hugely humorous as those last four and a bit lines

Thanks again.

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joe kozarzewski

Sun 27th Jan 2013 09:26

Whites of her lies refers to 'don't shoot until you see the whites of their eyes' which is being at war and 'her lies' could be your better self admonishing your lesser self. The tripartite thing is referring to the Christian god and you feeling like god, which we all do especially as 'artistes'. That's the way I 'interpret' your poem anyway.

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Tommy Carroll

Sun 27th Jan 2013 09:21

I avoid town Ged- unless I have to...noo I avoid town. Please explain the 'Caterpillar' to me-Tommy

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winston plowes

Sun 27th Jan 2013 03:41

Hi M

As Cynthia says...

You are one of the best poets I have ever read.

X

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winston plowes

Sun 27th Jan 2013 03:38

yes, you have done it again John.

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Ged Thompson

Sat 26th Jan 2013 23:28

Thought I recognised the name, so I clicked on it and this pic came up, I was at that competition, it was nice to meet you Jess X

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Ged Thompson

Sat 26th Jan 2013 23:26

very clever

Well done X

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Ged Thompson

Sat 26th Jan 2013 23:24

After going over this word by word sentence by sentence I am so sorry to tell you my friend that this piece is not only good but.........

Fucking brilliant

(I was in the car with you)

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Ged Thompson

Sat 26th Jan 2013 23:17

I like this

Money cant buy you happiness but it can afford you a much better standard of misery.

Good one Tony

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Ged Thompson

Sat 26th Jan 2013 23:09

Its really nice this Tony, such is life, fast and slow, hard and soft, light and dark, lovely stuff.

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garside

Sat 26th Jan 2013 20:24

three decades under your thumb
each one curves lines
of journeys won

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tony sheridan

Sat 26th Jan 2013 20:15

Love it. Take care, Tony.

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tony sheridan

Sat 26th Jan 2013 20:11

Unicorns, The little people, Fairies.....etc. Did they ever exist? Did we forget about them?.....Maybe they had to let us do are own thing. Nice one. Take care, Tony.

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Yvonne Brunton

Sat 26th Jan 2013 19:35

lovely poem . Great contrast in the two womem and in vocabulary used to describe each. ( long vowel sounds/short vowel sounds.Scrums is a great word - never seen it used as a verb before.

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tony sheridan

Sat 26th Jan 2013 19:01

Great stuff! Take care, Tony.

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Ian Whiteley

Sat 26th Jan 2013 17:58

M.C.N
it would garner exactly the same amount of sympathy if the protagonists were dressed in their fancy dress and deemed to call it a 'sport'. Man has no place in setting himself 'above' other animals on this planet - especially when subjecting them to (in)human barbarism in the name of sport.
thanks for the comments
Ian

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Yvonne Brunton

Sat 26th Jan 2013 17:06

great rant! I enjoyed this. Hope you managed to get past them. XX

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Yvonne Brunton

Sat 26th Jan 2013 17:02

great but a tad puzzling Mike. Have you mis-spelt Ladies or are you after the old boys?Isobel may think it gross but you should hear what the bus drivers round our way call the elderly who whiff a bit! xx

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Yvonne Brunton

Sat 26th Jan 2013 16:56

I like the poem but the words 'Oh dear' in line don't seem to fit in with the rest of the vocabulary - too trite for this artwork

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Yvonne Brunton

Sat 26th Jan 2013 16:43

How come we never saw this job advertised???
I was quite irritated when I read this in the papers - we all know abbout these Speechwriters but isn't it pathetic that someone who purports to have an Oxbridge education does not write his own speeches? I enjoyed your use of inverted phrasing Hugh as, for me, this highlighted the irony of Cameron using a hired pen.

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Harry O'Neill

Sat 26th Jan 2013 16:39


Mark,
Trying to home in to what I said about `scrum`.

I feel that she should have been absorbed in some way out of the dreaminess - instead of fighting her way out through a `scrum`.

(and - by the way - what happened to the `judder`...the `savage panicking shudder`.(imo) also militates too harshly against the dreaminess)

The contrastive astringency of the first four lines of that last stanza made it a very good poem....I look forward to your next.

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Yvonne Brunton

Sat 26th Jan 2013 16:34

love the cunning use of the word 'clipper' here, Hugh as it left me wondering if you were writing about a woman or a ship( although the title seems to lean more towards it being a woman I don't want to relinqish the idea of a ship.)Although I am usually allergic to repetition the deliberate repetition of 'placid'is well thought out and very effective - as is the len gth of the poem . We are given a brief snapshot which leave us wanting more of this ephemeral image of perfection.

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Yvonne Brunton

Sat 26th Jan 2013 16:22

Loved your reading of this so powerful as the spoken word and so well read.XX

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Harry O'Neill

Sat 26th Jan 2013 16:14


Cynthia
I`m always doin` that comma thing

Yourpoint about the last line is sound


Changed `em...thanks

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Yvonne Brunton

Sat 26th Jan 2013 16:02

I think this is a good example of the impact free verse can have when done well - and we don't find too much of that. You have a great sense of rhythm and cadence in this piece which gives it the right flow to draw the reader /listener on.
I love caring for my granddaughter 1 day a week by choice- but it leaves me exhausted. You have so well got into the mind of someone who has to do it because blood is thicker than water. XX

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M.C. Newberry

Sat 26th Jan 2013 15:56

Powerful and well constructed of its type. The fox - a predator that will decimate a hen-house and not just for food - has received a sort of "Walt Disney-ish" transference of human identification in recent decades. I wonder how much sympathy the large brown rat - against which the "Hand of Man" is always turned - would receive if it were big enough to be chased across the countryside by a pack of hounds and folk on horseback.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 26th Jan 2013 15:44

A good one, short and punchy, and with skilled metre and rhyme. What's not to like.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 26th Jan 2013 15:34

You never fail to enchant, to drown the senses in your images and ideas. I relish the words you spin out as your own 'silk threads'.
Somehow, you always make me think of such contradictions as 'killing me softly'. I could never write with such enigmatic skill. You are one of the best poets I have ever read.

How have you used META? Change? Transposition?

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Yvonne Brunton

Sat 26th Jan 2013 15:30

Hi Hugh
thanks for your comments on 'The New Me' and 'The Last Kiss ' glad you enjoyed them - I enjoyed writing them.

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David Cooke

Sat 26th Jan 2013 15:27

Hi Cynthia I'm glad you're keeping up with the postcards. I did worry in this one that I might come across as a bit dismissive of 'ancient wisdom' - however, the context is ironic. It is after all tragic that civilizations that have roots going deep into ancient philosophies couldn't do better than murder each other for decades. Even BUddhism in SRi Lanka can be quite militant and bloodthirsty. I suppose also there is the ironic contrast between the bluntness of the Customs sign - which I must say was really disconcerting (even though I've never touched an illicit drug in my life!) and the labyrinthine complecity of the philosophy of the Indian subcontinent.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 26th Jan 2013 15:17

I had a very good chuckle as it rocketed along. BASIL is a great link to keep the variety hanging together, especially with its sound value.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 26th Jan 2013 15:10

I also like this imagery and its extended idea very much. Check the possessives: 'Hers' and 'its'. 'they be' is quite arresting in its archaic use. While I'm here, perhaps dashes would separate 'never - ever - ' more dramatically. Just a thought to share with a keen writer.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 26th Jan 2013 15:02

Mark, check the typo in 'woman'. I forgot to mention it yesterday.

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Hugh

Sat 26th Jan 2013 14:59

Again a great read,made me smile as well .

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Hugh

Sat 26th Jan 2013 14:56

A fabulous relaxing read flowing smoothly with perfect rhythm and rhyme.Well done !!

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Tommy Carroll

Sat 26th Jan 2013 14:47

Cynthia- your poem seems to question balance in a relationship
'' Are we still in our roles?’
His shuddering breath betrayed
The cold question.
‘Yes,’ she answered kindly, ‘we are.’ ''.
I see equilibrium under threat. I think short work -such as this- is, like humour, glorious in its brevity. I think you have hit a point in a precarious relationship and done it well. I have worked on this idea myself and It has inspired me to address an issue with a response. kindly Tommy

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Sat 26th Jan 2013 14:43

Only from 'Grey Morning' which was perfect at the time of writing; but the recent James' brouhaha would now make it look like copying another writer's idea, and you know I wasn't having that. Too bad, actually.

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Karli

Sat 26th Jan 2013 13:52

sex and guilt, beauty and modesty; molest

pitted in the stomach like acid,


nice

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Karli

Sat 26th Jan 2013 13:50

not sure everything must appeal to the masses just take from it whatever you feel
i like the flow

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Ged Thompson

Sat 26th Jan 2013 13:40

Thankyou Isobel any feedback from yourself is welcome especially positive as I know all of your feedback is galvanised in candor.

I do write a bit of free verse I should dig it out and post it, but

god blyhmey
I love rhymey

Love you lots
Like Jelly Tots

Ged XXXXXXXXX

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Isobel

Sat 26th Jan 2013 10:09

Great social comment here Ged. How many times do you see this pattern repeated? We are all tied to the mortgage macnine that drives us to work longer and harder. It's quite common to see grandparents who are way too old looking after young kids. Not good for them or the children they manage. I've told mine that there's now way I'll be doing it - but I've no doubt I'll get sucked in - cos at the end of the day, you do all you can to help your own.

'The push of a person who has to push on'

I like your dabble with unrhyming poetry - it says what you want to say in an uforced way. Free verse can be done without losing the poetry as your above line illustrates. I very much like the flow of the last verse also.



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Noetic-fret!

Sat 26th Jan 2013 05:54

Thanks Isobel for taking the time to comment on my epic piece - Old Laddies, there is a comment there for you. Best wishes, Mike

x

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Noetic-fret!

Sat 26th Jan 2013 05:52

he he, I know Isobel. Actually I do have a lot of respect for the elderly, they have been through times much more difficult than what we complain about! But sometimes, my humor cannot resist as like us all, we all deserve a little comedy taken out sometimes. (we tend to take ourselves so seriously). Sadly though, my humor has got me into trouble in the past and I dare say it will happen again. (and to be honest I couldn't be serious if i tried) I deal with a hex that parodies my every moment. I hope they don't find it too offensive and can see the comedy. Stay well Isobel and best wishes to all, including our elderly folk. xxx

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David Blake

Fri 25th Jan 2013 23:43

Cheers mate!

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Ian Whiteley

Fri 25th Jan 2013 23:15

Ann
thanks for your 'welcome' comments on my new profile page (3rd Jan)- sorry it's taken a little while to respond, but I've been finding my feet around the site and trying to understand the etiquette of posting/blogging/responding etc - and where and how to do it.
Took up your suggestion and started to blog some poetry - and it's getting a few responses - so thanks again for the tip
Ian

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Kenneth Eaton-Dykes

Fri 25th Jan 2013 23:08

Hi Hugh
Nice take on what goes on in Downing St.
Just emphasizes how much those pillocks rely on hired speech writers. Might not have been put as Freda would like. She chooses to criticize choice of words, balance, and content, "not the message" contained therein.

keep 'em coming Ken.

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