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Harry O'Neill

Wed 23rd Jan 2013 23:19

Laura,
This got us all going.If that body thing is a compo this should get the prize.

Your metaphorical figures are breezily apt forthe subject and yet mind-loose for wider interpretation. (for instance: that last stanza with its `three` `Jesus` `soul` and `confessor` got a Christaian geek like me thinking Trinitarian...I `got` the title but read it as a higher power)...You can`t legislate for some people!

You could have left that final question mark out and it would still have been fair.

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Yvonne Brunton

Wed 23rd Jan 2013 21:31

I think you have a pretty strong case to enable you to ' sue ratty wolf' because the 'warts flout- yes!'XX

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Yvonne Brunton

Wed 23rd Jan 2013 21:12

well it helps now I don't read Huami to rhyme with tsunami. Very clever Laura. The 'eyes' have it as they say.I enjoyed this. XX

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Isobel

Wed 23rd Jan 2013 21:03

Crumbs - I dread to think what some of them might come up with... is this wise? ;)

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Cathy Bryant

Wed 23rd Jan 2013 20:49

You are the eyes! (I think!)

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Wed 23rd Jan 2013 20:33

Awwww soooooo cute!x

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Hugh

Wed 23rd Jan 2013 19:46

Enjoyed the poem,loved the pic,in fact thought they were dancastic ! Well done.

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John Aikman

Wed 23rd Jan 2013 19:29

'Take-Care Tony'. What a fab name! Sounds a bit Mafioso...but equally well could be a removals expert, or gardener, or maybe looking after your aged aunt.

I want a poem for Take-Care Tony, pronto!

: )

Jx

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tony sheridan

Wed 23rd Jan 2013 19:16

Nice one Laura. Take care, Tony.

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tony sheridan

Wed 23rd Jan 2013 19:10

Love the rhythm in this poem! Nice one. Take care,Tony.

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Isobel

Wed 23rd Jan 2013 16:57

Lol - and there was me thinking it was yiddish!

Your link helped - derrr - I should have clicked on it earlier!

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John Aikman

Wed 23rd Jan 2013 16:55

Initially I thought this might be a paean to a cypriot goat cheese (which I rather like) but, on reflection the eyes have it!

Charming.

: )

Jx

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Laura Taylor

Wed 23rd Jan 2013 16:38

Is - say it slowly, and break up into the 3 syllables. It is a bit of a riddle, and the title is a mini-riddle in itself. It's not a real word ;)

Hu am i

who...

It's written from the perspective of a body part.

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Isobel

Wed 23rd Jan 2013 16:36

I've no idea what Huami means - tried googling it but couldnt get an answer.

I'd say the poem is about the 3 facets of a personality though, symbolised by the holy trinity. Or maybe it's the other way round. It would help to know the meaning of the title :)

It's a fascinating read cos it's so different. My favourite line is the one Greg's highlighted.

Perhaps Huami means enigma - which is the note you end on?

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Laura Taylor

Wed 23rd Jan 2013 16:35

Thanks you two :)

Shoeless - maybe this will give you a clue...
http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=33608

;)

Greg - no, definitely not a ranter this one :D Cheers - got a bit carried away with it and it turned into a riddle within a riddle in the end! Really enjoyed writing it :)

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Greg Freeman

Wed 23rd Jan 2013 15:52

Beautifully crafted, Laura, I'd say. (Can't imagine you ranting this one on stage!) Particularly enjoyed "the whites of her lies". Good prompt, and a striking poem.

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shoeless

Wed 23rd Jan 2013 15:33

I dont think I have much idea what this is really about, but it feels lovely on my tongue and is beautiful to look at.

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nick armbrister

Wed 23rd Jan 2013 13:28

Man mainly thinks how to kill, butcher his own kind Nick. look at Syria now, Iraq a few years ago and also Afghan. i rest my case...

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David Cooke

Wed 23rd Jan 2013 12:02

Well spotted, Cynthia, trouble is I keep re-ordering them each time I do a new one. When I get around to it I'll have to retitle them on this site too. I must say WOL is great in enabling you to post a poem and an appropriate image - which can then be re-posted on Face Book. Technology is really great these days! Didn't have all that in 1975 either!

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Tom Doolan

Wed 23rd Jan 2013 11:40

Hi guyz - Thanks for comments. I lived and worked in Jamaica back in 95/96 so picked up da patois lilt. My nickname was Pinky lol.

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Laura Taylor

Wed 23rd Jan 2013 11:35

I can't remember how the original went now but this, from my vague memory of it, seems to flow much smoother

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Wed 23rd Jan 2013 09:01

Plenty there to get one's teeth into! I was a little worried that if I added a coment some of your words would disappear - let's hope not. ta muchly, nick.

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Wed 23rd Jan 2013 08:53

Animals, and possibly planets don't consider the ethics - just survival. Man is a THINKER is should that be, STINKER? ta muchly, nick.

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Wed 23rd Jan 2013 08:49

I love this. The tomorrow diet and start to do all the right things is my kind of plan. ta muchly, nick.

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Chris Co

Wed 23rd Jan 2013 07:13

Walt Whitman has nothing to fear! lol

Overly sentimental, schmaltzy, non lateral, list poem.

Highlights include his rain and footstep moments, but the moon imagery was particulaly poor. A silent drum tapping...oh sure (jeez).

Very faux-aspiration/inspiration though and I'm sure many enjoy that. As ridiculous a look at America as Wordsworth's view of London via Westminster bridge.

It's most apt for any politician gaining office. Even if it is the politician I would choose if American.

Neither Wordsworth nor this guy can smell the shit or the reality.

Nice postcards.

Real American poetry, a real address;

Go on youtube and type in 'leaves of grass' and click on the third link down - Walt Whitman. I would just add the link but the site has issues with ipad links.

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nick armbrister

Wed 23rd Jan 2013 00:15

thanx Tony this is a work from the late 90s:)

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tony sheridan

Tue 22nd Jan 2013 20:10

Love the sample poems.Will read your blogs. Take care, Tony.

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tony sheridan

Tue 22nd Jan 2013 19:46

Hi Nick. Love this. Great punchline! Take care, Tony.

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tony sheridan

Tue 22nd Jan 2013 19:40

Love this! Take care,Tony.

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Simon Austin

Tue 22nd Jan 2013 18:13

I don't know what you're talking about? ;)

(Thanks for the spot!)

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Neil West

Tue 22nd Jan 2013 17:33

Hi Yvonne. Apologies for not replying sooner, thank you for your kind comments on feeling the pinch. Don't know if I'm ready to perform yet, maybe soon though, I'll let you know!

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Simon Austin

Tue 22nd Jan 2013 15:52

Wow, beautiful poem, I love this - conjures so many different thoughts and feelings, and has a such a poignant close. Fantastic.

Thank you for sharing.

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Anthony Emmerson

Tue 22nd Jan 2013 15:11

Enjoyed reading this, but more so listening to it. He reads with great conviction and clarity and excellent pacing. I guess it's essentially a list poem (or "pome" as he pronounces it) and eminently suited for the occasion.

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Isobel

Tue 22nd Jan 2013 14:11

Really enjoyed the poem. It could have become a bit oversentimental but just managed to steer away from that. I liked the imagery in it - the roofline/story connection stays in mind, also the dreadful implications of the children marked forever absence. It does bring a lump to the throat.

Meanwhile, I'm sure I'm not the only woman wondering why he has to be gay! Sorry for that superficial comment - couldn't help it :)

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Nigel Astell

Tue 22nd Jan 2013 13:37

When floating on the surface
From out of the deep
Comes a light of hope
Faith grabs hold and takes
The deep from the demons
Who are drowning your soul.

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David Cooke

Tue 22nd Jan 2013 13:29

Hi Cynthia Thanks so much for the encouragement re my 'postcard'. I wasn't sure if they be of any intetrested to others. I've done about 18 so far and have really enjoyed using a form that is very short, but enables you to use some quirky little memory, but then open up a pathway to something bigger. THemes are also beginning to link them up as well. I'll keep you informed!

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Julian (Admin)

Tue 22nd Jan 2013 11:39

What a wonderful, touching poem, weaving the universal with the personal, the topical with the timeless. Greg, well done getting this up. I hope we can get lots of folks reading/listening to it.
Now, Mr O, time for action.

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Travis Brow

Tue 22nd Jan 2013 11:17

Thank you all, much obliged. T

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Greg Freeman

Tue 22nd Jan 2013 10:44

Hi Tony, thought I recognised the face! Good to meet you at Mole Valley Poets the other night, and thanks for the welcome and hospitality. Greg (Woking Stanza group)

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Tony Earnshaw

Tue 22nd Jan 2013 10:22

Thanks for the welcome - I'll do that

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Tue 22nd Jan 2013 07:56

Hi John,
Thank you for the compliment - I don't have the means to do audio on here but these tales do originate from live performances of 'Hunting The Great White Prawn'.
Them sailors and their Rum ration eh?, they treated it as gold dust by all accounts!

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John Coopey

Tue 22nd Jan 2013 00:07

Hello Harry,
I see you've been rooting through my back issue!
Yes, this is one I did when I came over last year. I thought I'd give it a re-post along with the triolet poem we chorused.
Hope you're keeping well and pleased to see that we have both been spared for another year!

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Harry O'Neill

Mon 21st Jan 2013 23:46


John,
Was this the one you read when you guested
at Liscard?...Thoroughly enjoyed!

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Francine

Mon 21st Jan 2013 23:15

A truly heartfelt poem that everyone can relate to in some way.
And what a deeply profound line too - 'the impossible vocabulary of sorrow' ...

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Carla Tombacco

Mon 21st Jan 2013 21:44

Maybe you are right Cynthia, nevertheless here I prefer the infinitive at the end. Regards

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Harry O'Neill

Mon 21st Jan 2013 20:30

Steve,
I understand and agree that the theory of Evolution allows all the different - and even contrary beliefs that you speak of. for me it`s the so-called `science` of the thing.

I can, at least read well, and When I read the explanations of the theory intended for the layman I can`t help feeling the `evidence` for the theory is presented in the conviction that Evolution is already incontrovertibly proven. But I don`t find this at all. Quite frankly I find the surmises of some of the paleological bone guys to be quite hilarious `evidence` `I mean: The fish with the bony fins hauling themselves up on to the land - (one can`t help wondering - were they dreaming about one day turning into elephants?)

Despite all this impressive talk about it being an `elegant theory` I can`t escape the feeling that, as they say, I`m being `blinded with science`...It`s all a bit too glib and trendyfor me.

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Yvonne Brunton

Mon 21st Jan 2013 20:11

Love this, a great play with the words and a lovely lilting cadence to the rhymes ( I too have an affinity for rhyme)
On holiday in deepest Wales once I decided the sign on the door which read CLOOPSEEND must be the welsh word for OPEN. It was days before I realised that the sliding section of the sign was missing and I was reading an amalgamation of closed and open. Never thought about turning it into a poem though.

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Katy Megan Hughes

Mon 21st Jan 2013 19:58

odd you should say that. sent a shiver down my spine....

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Mon 21st Jan 2013 19:30

Hi Yvonne,
Thank you for your comments on Rum, Weedy and Bilgewater-not only will it blow your head off, it'll take your socks with it!

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