ta again chuck re-'Hair' yes indeed 'them waz the DAZE! love,peace,beads and bells to you! -Stefan-x

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Thanks Lynn re 'lifted' now lift your quill and get writing! lol! best regards-Stefan-x

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Welcome back dear tanned Lady and family.Do not mention straw donkeys! you are just in time for a cheery little poem from me-crash witness!(should,nt make fun really)terrible subject.hope you had a lovely time-catch you later Lynn-Stefan-x

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Hi Cynthia - thanks for the explanation you left on my profile. You should post a copy here also - so that people might have some idea of the rigours you are writing under. I had no idea it was so complicated - such a hard thing to do but worth it, for that sense of achievement at the end! x

Comment is about Sapphic Stanza (blog)

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Isobel, your comments are excellent; but the challenge of Sapphic is to write in very structured 'feet'; the pattern can't be broken. So one's 'freedom' is dramatically curtailed. The first 3 lines had to be:
/, // /,, /, /,
and the last line:
/,, //

Good words kept twisting and turning on me, mocking me. I refused to be beaten; this is an effort.

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a very unusual but fitting choice of words & phrases lifts this poem to rare heights for me - brilliant. I've often thought that this klimt ought to be corny/kitsch but somehow, because it's sincere, manages to be very moving for me. well done Ann !

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

thank you Reverend x

Comment is about £300 (blog)

Lovely Cynthia - you are leading the way with these structured poems.
I would have been tempted to go for 'trembling on the restless breeze' rather than breezes - no idea why - just prefer the sound of it.
Think I'd also prefer 'wild blue notes sounding from the woodland shadows'
Love the last line! x

Comment is about Sapphic Stanza (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

well done Cynthia.. I really wouldn't have fancied tackling that.. Good Stuff - the 3rd line is my favourite! x

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Enjoyed this, Ann. Some striking use of words. Passion runs right through the first 21 lines. Then the one final line, like a heavy weight on scales, balances all the rest, and speaks volumes

Comment is about love to the blood and bone (blog)

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Thanks Andy. Yes it is a Buddhist style poem. Much appreciated.

Janet.x

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

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I expect it depends if they were the kind of teeth you keep in a glass by the side of the bed! ;-) x

Comment is about love to the blood and bone (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Fanny Cornforth was the antithesis of the droopy PRB models. She was a feisty big boned creature with a strong jaw and masses of golden hair, passionate and not averse to a little tea-leafery, or so it seems. But she ended up as Rossetti's best friend. She truly cared for him. I adore her!

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Cyfarchion Dave,thank you very much for your kind comment on Hamishagos. Dymuniadau gorau : )) Deb xx

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

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Beautiful Cynthia!
I can hear it...

Comment is about Sapphic Stanza (blog)

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This was difficult, surprisingly so. All input welcome to keep me on my toes.

Isobel suggested I include the prescribed 'feet':
lines 1,2 and 3:
/, // /,, /, /,

line 4: /,, //

Comment is about Sapphic Stanza (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Oy - lay off Coldplay - they are just the target of a vicious media who can't abide anything middle of the road or popular with all generations. They are at least talented musicians and very listenable to, unlike JLS. I too am burdened with a teeny bopper who likes that manufactured bunch of muscle pumpers.
Have you ever tried Tanka Marvin? I once had a bit of fun with it - I may repost it one day. I enjoyed your moth burger haiku.

Comment is about Instant publication (blog)

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nice to see you back and i enjoyed this.. certainly wouldn't liked to have attempted this myself however! lol x

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Hi there Zion

Loved it, though it's a pity that the world is such that you have to write it. I'm involved with a charity helping asylum seekers, and there are so many stories of how people are treated with hostility/ lack of respect. Women are being put out on the street, there are literally hundreds destitute and depending on charity and friends. All to reduce the alleged 'pull factor' ramped up by our appalling press

Talking of the press, well done for taking a swipe at the Daily Mail. Check out http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5eBT6OSr1TI&feature=youtube_gdata

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Mike, this is a very striking and emotional read. My daughter is a children's nurse, and I'm a parent, so I have a little idea of what people go through and what they feel. I'm sure those who have been right there in the middle of it all would be very touched by this poem.

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HI Andy
I just wanted to thank you for making time to give your views on my Stalingrad poem. It means a lot especially as it resonated with your friend too who is more aware than most of the history.

Hopefully I'll be getting more time to return comments after this project I'm working on.

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very nice!!

Comment is about Instant publication (blog)

Original item by Marvin Cheeseman

excellent...I agree with ann!

Comment is about Relativity (m.c.escher) (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

Beauitful tomas.. Really enjoyed this.. Hope to see you perform this at P E shortly..

I must admit, I mis-read it originally to Cornflake!!! lol

Comment is about For the Corncrakes Sake and Mankinds (blog)

Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

Excellent, Marvin.. With my luck - I would probably become the target of cheeseburger guzzling JLS enthusiasts.. Still - at least it's better than Coldplay or is it? lol

Comment is about Instant publication (blog)

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Good luck with the World Cup Haiku - don't think they're absolute purists, they've used my 5/5/7s at least.
cheers, Marvin

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Loved your Lawrenson haiku, Lineker's the one I can't stand though.
Yes, I moved the goalposts a bit, not yet resorting to "Western Haiku" - seems to be jumpers for goalposts there.
all the best, Marvin

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Thanks for commenting on Life Model. It means a lot! x

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

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Thanks for your comment on my meagre offerings...
Haven't managed to watch any footie yet - can't muster up any enthusiasm - it's a great time to get your shopping done though - the roads and aisles are empty...

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Thanks for your comment on my haiku Marvin. I have emailed it to those people you suggested, though I think it probably isn't 'traditional' enough... I'm fully expecting someone to come back to me though, telling me how brilliant it is and offering to publish it if I bung them a tenner. You can get a lot of haikus to one page LOL!

I'm glad to hear your friend Simon will be back with us soon. The politically incorrect is always a lot of fun.

Comment is about Marvin Cheeseman (poet profile)

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Well - thank you for changing those spelling/grammatical errors I made Dermot. You did promise LOL - and I should have known better...
In future you can leave what I write totally unedited.

Comment is about Oh June, you make my heart go boom! (article)

da-da! :-)

Comment is about Immigrant Infiltration (blog)

Just enjoyed your 3 profile poems, Larisa. David.

Comment is about Larisa Rzhepishevska (poet profile)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Interesting Poem. I particularly like the latter part of the poem, which is tense, cryptic, short and at the same time has an air of explicitness to it. As Stefan mentions, a sequel would be much looked for!!

Comment is about maelstrom (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Saw Jon perform once upon a time in the bowels of Bolton Museum. Was a wonderful experience. The world has lost a great entertainer.

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Hi Zion,
Just wanted to let you know I enjoyed this poem!Unfortunately a lot of people do seem to subscribe to narrow-mindedness nowadays!

Comment is about Immigrant Infiltration (blog)

John, you are SO RIGHT! So it is NOT a Spenserian Stanza; that Alexandrine is essential; I revised this stanza so often I just lost the last line in the process. I will fix it (although the ending is actually good, too. Damn! Another foot. Oh, the pain!) OK. Done. What think you?

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Hi Anthony, thank you for your very kind comments on 'Hamishagos'..where did i find the word?..hmm i think the brashki gave it to me during their brigaki djili one evening in early summer : ) thank you again, Debz xx

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Like the Siddal girl whose face seemed so 'ideal' for that current sentiment?

Comment is about lifemodel (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

And what, exactly, do you think they do?

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grazie, Ann, per il tuo commento genere di 'Hamsihagos' Deb x

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

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Good afternoon Larisa-a very open hearted poem-I especially like the last line-now thats my kind of poetry-lol! lovely photo too-is that tea or.....!! best regards-Stefan-x

Comment is about I like to live my own life (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

More Hugh Masekela,
And less vuvuzela!

...whatever the embouchure ;-)>

Comment is about World Cup haiku (blog)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Excellent World Cup haiku, Marvin, even if you've moved the goalposts a bit!

Comment is about Marvin Cheeseman (poet profile)

Original item by Marvin Cheeseman

Anthony, first let me thank you for your heartfelt and ebullient comment on 'Stark cold truth'

I have just read your poem 'lifelines' and it is a fantastic poem with a rich tapestry of well woven and unforgettable images. On the strength of that one poem I can't believe you are not published as I have read with some poets of fine repute and it reminded me a so many poets, from the accessibility and execution of Auden, to the warmth of Khalil Gibran. It also reminded me of my friends poem 'Allihies', go to Mike McKimm's website to see if Allihies poem is on there - I think you'd like the inspired response from a poets stay in somewhere as beautiful as Allihies.

Fine poem sir, we should keep in touch occasionally as I am sometimes in Cornwall and if you are ever in Coventry I co run an open mic at the tin angel on mideieval spon street, would love to collab a performance with you !

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

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Hi Cynthia

I liked your comment and I want you to always feel you can be bold as honest critiques are such a great compliment opening up new possibilities for the writer and the reader.

The title is ambiguous and could serve as a national or personal description of a Mother. The tools in the two flag are symbols of the industrial proletariat and the peasantry; placing them together symbolises the unity between industrial and agricultural workers. This emblem was conceived during the Bolshevik Revolution. I guess the line skinned moon from there own struggling flag describes the peasants who created the symbolism believe in in it ne more, after retreating to cannibalism during the WW2 the irony of them eating each other and skinning a labourers sickle with a crescent sickle of moon shows the destruction of something natural (moon) and something vile (the loss of identity of a nation).

Thanks for commenting on my Stalingrad poem Cynthia, its refreshing to take time out from my manuscript and read some intelligent feedback.

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cheers for the haiku feedback Tomas - and great work with the Corncrake poem - my ornithologist mate Martin will really love that. best wishes, Marvin

Comment is about For the Corncrakes Sake and Mankinds (blog)

Original item by Tomás Ó Cárthaigh

Thanks Tomas - have been sending the haiku to HaikuWorldCup - worth having a go at, they're producing an e-book. Once you start you can't stop! all the best to you.

Comment is about Marvin Cheeseman (poet profile)

Original item by Marvin Cheeseman

a great poem - disturbing & sad - sometimes things in life remain like that - "unfinished". B

Comment is about Displaced (blog)

Original item by Deborah Jordan Bailey

C
You've motivated me to look up Spencerian Stanza - I too like experimenting with different forms, although I'm never as successful as you've been with this.
I notice that you maintain a pentameter in the final line whereas Spencer uses an Alexandrine. I prefer your form. The Alexandrine is ponderously long ("snake-like").

Comment is about Spenserian Stanza (blog)

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