nice poem!
Sounds like a list of exam questions in political science for me - i would fail all of them :((

Comment is about Things We don't write about (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Very interesting poem, Andy. Beautiful poem. But... there are a lot of poets who write about the rising crime, about drugs, about global warming, about brave soldiers, war and peace. I write about all those things, sometimes even about political events, certainly from my point of view. Here on this site you could read the poems of my friend Dave Dunn. He also writes about all those problems.
With warmest wishes,
Larisa

Comment is about Things We don't write about (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Thanks Andy - don't think I've ever had a poem dedicated to me before and a passionate one it is. There are a few typos/ grammar glitches but as you say it is a first draft. It could work well as a performance piece. Not everyone would agree with everything (Christine's comment is understandable for instance) but performance is partly about provocation isn't it. Thanks again.

Dave

Comment is about Things We don't write about (blog)

Original item by Andy N

An interesting poem Andy. There are very occasionaly poems about drugs and the devastation they cause but they are few and far between. By and large you are right to say that people steer clear of subjects that are depressing and unchangeable - except war - you do get the odd pacifist poem...
Someone should definitely write a poem about 20% vat - what a way to kick start an ecomomy. It gives a whole new meaning to the concept... I'm just smarting cos it will put back the new kitchen I am saving up for. Perhaps by the time I've got the money, they'll have put it back down - or there'll be a new government in.... LOL . I enjoyed your poem! xx

Comment is about Things We don't write about (blog)

Original item by Andy N

I find it alarming that you want to kill anyone, Andy, and why? -presumably for holding a different point-of-view to your own? Cx

Comment is about Things We don't write about (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Thanks for your comment on my latest Andy. By 'not serious' I meant that the poem was chopped up prose rather than classical poetry - with no startling imagery, assonance, alliteration, rhyme or anything you would associate with poetry.
Its strengths are its simplicity and the message which is very serious. I guess I'm looking at the props we all need to make life bearable, love being one and faith in something, the other. The unhappiest people I've met are those who believe absolutely in nothing.
I look forward to reading your poem on a taboo subject LOL xx

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Hi, Andy! Thank you so much for your comment on my poem "Spring meets summer". You know that English is not my mother tongue and I sometimes don't feel the exact meaning of this or that word as you do. May be it could be better if I finished the poem with the word "wisdom" without looking for the rhyming word and without that "winsome".
Your poem "Perfect place" is beautiful. I love it.
With warmest wishes,
Larisa

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Original item by Andy N

Very good, Dave.. I like the use of stripped down language in this poem - works really well..

Btw - on your topic of 'thing we don't write about' - i have wrote a poem following on in part from the themes off that piece.. gonna post it up shortly (it is dedicated to you)

Comment is about Reeling (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Enjoyed this, Larisa.. I am not particularly keen on the use of the word winsome at the end of the piece, but there is a lot of images i love in this..

You may want to check our my poem 'Perfect Place' which is among my sample poems, as that's similar to this in places I think!

Otherwise, top banana (In English - nice one!) x

Comment is about Spring meets summer (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

actually, isobel.. until i read your comment - i didn't realise until the last line it wasn't meant to be that serious a poem.. as it stands however, i really, really like this.. the last stanza is a perfect way of finishing this off..

one of my favourites off yours.. keep em coming defo! x

Comment is about Water Into Wine (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Welcome to WOL Cathy. Looking forward to reading more of your work.

Comment is about Cathy Bryant (poet profile)

Original item by Cathy Bryant

Very moving, Isobel, I just love the things our children say. xx

Comment is about Water Into Wine (blog)

Original item by Isobel

I love this too...

Comment is about Reeling (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Thanks for your comments. I know it isn't serious poetry as such - just a little true life/death story. I am sometimes a little overwhelmed by things my kids say - I am very lucky - they have beautiful souls.

There is an amusing footnote to the story. A week later, they dug the damn thing up! So much for resting in peace eh? They were surprised that it was just fluff, beak and a couple of maggots - but surprisingly accepting of the fact. Unlike me who was felt sad - what a difference 30 years makes... xx

Comment is about Water Into Wine (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Cheers again Lynn-no,was only jesting re your lovely story.Re the painting-you can click on it-then click on save the picture-it then goes to your 'pictures' then you can expand it and print it off-only if you are desperate! lol! catch you later,mater-Stef-xxx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Thank you, my dear Lynn.

Comment is about Spring meets summer (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

I like this one Dave. You capture the wonder of looking beyond earth, perfectly. Once you get beyond the clouds, it's awesome, it's scary - it makes you realise just how insignificant you are. The only hope we have is the 'Beyond Space' bit...

Comment is about Reeling (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Lovely poem, Larisa, well done.

Comment is about Spring meets summer (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Ta Lynn for watercolour comment-do you paint(as in artistry-not lounge ceiling)if not,you must try-very relaxing indeed! thanks again Angel-Lynn-Stefan-De-Wilde-xxx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

It's very nice! I love it. With warmest wishes, Larisa

Comment is about Reeling (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Wow Isobel - this is such a moving poem.
Later, I comfort them

with words,

tell them it is better to die

surrounded by love

than survive

alone, abandoned.

is so touching, real and beautiful. xxxx

Comment is about Water Into Wine (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Beautiful and touching Isobel. Childlike innocence is so precious, and so fleeting.
Cate xx

Comment is about Water Into Wine (blog)

Original item by Isobel

How lovely! Logged on specially to say so!
Cate cc

Comment is about Reeling (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

love it, especially the ending. x

Comment is about Water Into Wine (blog)

Original item by Isobel

No don,t worry Lynn-according to your explanation I shall not need to endeavour unravelling your lovely story like an old oxfam shop jumper any further-out of pity for all your efforts-if nowt else-put it down to my incapablity to read between the sunset shagging lines-lol!might I suggest the last chapter be titled-she sells sea shells and shags vagabonds on the seashore-so she gets her oats(and money for her 'orses oats)and makes a living at the same time? or take the story further by him pimping her at the 'ot dog stall? might give it a new thrust if you,ll pardon the pun! good luck Angel! by the way,my first attempt at doing a watercolour landscape can be seen if you back log to a poem of mine called 'As one' while you are there could you put a value on it please(as in terms of fowsands preferably! love ya n leave ya for now-Cheers L.D....Mr.W-xxxx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Lol, Stefan, find the three changed lines! I'm going back to non-rhyming after this!!!

Comment is about They Ride Together (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Beautiful, heartfelt emotions Isobel...
I love the title and the sentiment behind it - powerful.

xxx

Comment is about Water Into Wine (blog)

Original item by Isobel

thanks Cynthia, i value your honesty but to reciprocate in honesty, and maybe for this reason i shouldn't have put it here,this time i didn't want it to be a poem but i think i might take it away and ponder some more..i think my scissors and my brain are slightly tired from cutting, i had to lose 10,000 words last month from a big piece i was working on, so i'll go away and think about it. ta, deb

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I think this is good, a universal theme expressed with individual passion. The repetition works well for emphasis. I would cull 'intrusive' small words to make the point faster and stronger. Usually, with careful thought and organization, three lines can be two better lines; sometimes even one smashing line.

Comment is about Stunted (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

Hi, Winston,
I had to think about your question. When you say 'write like that' I wasn't sure if you meant the theme or the diction, or both. I visited three separate highschool friends while on holiday, each one a vibrant and influential part of my late teenage years. I had the SS template with me on a bit of loose paper, not sure if I could possible 'arrange' anything readable, ever. Thoughts about 'early friendship' were dodging around in my head, and I suddenly realized this form had potential with this theme. I did a Manley Hopkins thing, and jotted down long lists of rhyming words, and then waited for inspiration to point the way. It was very hard, to be honest, to be so caged up, and yet still sound like you are expressing 'free thought association'. Thanks for your encouragement.

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

WHHHHHAT!!! climax with a smile!!!! so I,ve waited all this time,getting myself in a lather and these two end up just smiling! I,m going back to the Beano! and heres me thinking you were going to outdo Barbara Carthorse(not real name)aw Lynn,you could have let me down more gently than this! anyway they deserve each other-he sold a painting for loadsa cash-her dad owns the stables-and none of them want to cop for the restaurant bill? that relationship aint-a-gonna last! in my books the Lady always gets the plastic out-after I,ve stuffed my mush!Enjoy your day Angel-I,ll be trotting by later(with a flask and butties)Stefano the watercolourist(not real word)-but have made a start in that direction-put one on in a poem soon(there will be a charge though(for the door!)-cheers Lynn-xxxxxx

Comment is about They Ride Together (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Good Morning Mrs.Dye-my goodness,you have heaped your praises on me today-believe me,they are appreciated-thank you.Yes there are words I do make up(but keep it to yourself)as to the Angel and beachcomber,I apologise for getting a little too hot under the collar from reading about their shenanigans(real word)I promise to control my impatience as from now,and my intake of popcorn.But I will keep a bucket of ice handy in preparation,if the story becomes steamier.Am really getting in to the story now,and sitting comfortably, so pray continue!yours pantingly(not real word)Monsieur Wilde-xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Sorry about my misinterpretation of The Pump: it was Hepstonstall in the title that got me going. To continue the water theme, while commenting on it I had a bath running, and got so carried away in warming to my subject it nearly overflowed. I went on an Arvon course, a prose one, back in 2004, and found it difficult to write while I was there. It was a lovely spot though, John Osborne's old gaff in Shropshire.

Comment is about David Cooke (poet profile)

Original item by David Cooke

Hi Lynn-re the sequel-no wait,I have to have my heart checked first
and something else that can,t be named for medical reasons-lol! take too LONG to explain(ooer missis) lotsa love,lovely Lady-Stef-xx

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

OOOHHHH Lynn! the plot thickens! this is better than corrie!I can,t wait for the bedroom scene-woo-oo!I better stock up on popcorn! don,t leave us in suspenders too long Lynn! love-Mr. Wilde-x

Comment is about Just Like An Angel (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hi Lynn, thank you : ))

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Any relation to David?

Comment is about LEE JAMES BLUNT (poet profile)

Original item by LEE JAMES BLUNT

Hi Greg, it has been a while so I thought I would post something new. I recently went on an Arvon course, where I couldn't write anything all week until on the last day I strolled down to the old pump in the village. Funny you make a connection with Plath, I didn't actually give her a minute's thought! The poem is really just about the pump, but is also about the break up of communities. I think that's what the ending is about, although subconsciously it might also be about my difficulty writing that week and indeed for many periods extending over years.

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Hi Andy glad you liked the poem and thanks for the comment.

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Thank you Ann, thank you Janet for your comments.

Comment is about Two souls (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Hi Elaine,
just been reading your samples here.
Love the poets lament. It rings true for me too ;-)

Janet. (also a healer)

Comment is about Elaine Speakman (poet profile)

Original item by Elaine Speakman

Hi Larissa,
I enjoyed the same thoughts as Ann in this. The many facets of a diamond is a great analogy for the many facets of a personality and the merging of two can be so very powerful.

Janet.

Comment is about Two souls (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Hi Isobel
thanks so much for your lovely comment on 'Summer's Eve.'
You are right in the sense of it being a gentle letting go. It's about letting go of Spring and the last stanza is about the ashes of Spring being used as hope for the Summer by nurturing/protecting the roots of a rose. Positive continuous existence :-)

Janet.x

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Hi Andy, thanks again for your wonderful comment on 'Summer's Eve.'
It wasn't really meant to be spooky but i love it when other people see something other than was intended. :-)

Janet.x

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Hello, Ann! Thank you very much for comment on "Two souls"

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Larissa - I like the image of the diamonds polishing each other and sparkling together. x

Comment is about Two souls (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Beauitfully reflective.. Love it!

The repeating works particularly well for me also..

Comment is about 12/02/10. (blog)

It has a middle ages feel about it for me. Raw, metallic and brash. (in a caring sort of way)

Comment is about love to the blood and bone (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Lynn-Angel on horseback forgotten? er...'scuse me but who do you think this fresh bag of apples is for-saddle up girlie! gee up! Stefan-x

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Line 9 Alexandrine - Yes As in my bible 'The Ode Less Travelled.' I like that Cynthia. As in Keats - The Eve of St Agnes. Perfect

Comment is about Spenserian Stanza (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas