Looking forward to more words from you... I sense a romantic.

Comment is about Lan (poet profile)

Original item by Lan

There's a lot to like about the cleverness of this piece. Well done, Lan, now I'll have to read more of your words... ?

Comment is about North (blog)

Original item by Lan

Hi, John..I listened to the song--a few times over, in fact. And, I couldn't help but explore the story of the songwriter. I hope that any who read this comment will do the same--it's a beautiful and poignant song. I thank you kindly John, for sharing with me, and thus, the rest.

Rachel

ps
watching Jansch in his early days reminds me much of Jose Gonzalez..

Thanks again, John!

Comment is about 'To earth we return' by elPintor is Write Out Loud Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thank you so much for the feedback Raj, I really appreciate it ? Singing up for WoL was a total leap of faith but I'm glad I did

Comment is about Lost Friends (blog)

Original item by Mia

Beautiful.

Comment is about i am light once more (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Thanks Collin haha I was just sleep deprived I think ? Only God knows aye! X

Comment is about They say.. (blog)

Original item by Connie Walter

I've admired your poems from the sidelines for ages and you have encouraged me so very much. Thank you. I thought a lot about what you said. This is a present from me to thee. From a northern man to an Appalachian poet. My favourite singer, Bert Jansch's take on Jackson C Frank's 'Blues Run the Game'. '. Hope you like it.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4MO_Xxq3LVw

Comment is about 'To earth we return' by elPintor is Write Out Loud Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

is it ok if two original quirkies applaud this Connor?

yeah quirky-tas indeed got one and a half foot in the grave -defo!


P&S

Comment is about Housewives, Magic Circles, and Poetic Gimmicks. (blog)

Original item by Connor Lannes

thanks so much

Comment is about REACH FOR THE STARS. (blog)

Original item by kanini Beatrice

Hello Jessica, Welcome! You write ¨how to keep my life on paper ¨. Well, you have made a good start so I look forward to reading more. Thanks. Keith

Comment is about Jessica Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Jessica Thomas

Hello Kanini. This is an excellent piece of verse. In particular I really like the final five lines. They say it all. Thanks. Keith

Comment is about REACH FOR THE STARS. (blog)

Original item by kanini Beatrice

This is so beautiful! X

Comment is about REACH FOR THE STARS. (blog)

Original item by kanini Beatrice

You're welcome - and welcome to WOL too, I hope you'll enjoy it here.

We all like to play with line breaks don't we? But what we should be aiming for is extra meaning, more significance, added ambiguity, rather than 'why's it ended like that?'.

Anyways, have a great weekend ?

Comment is about Watching a Group of Angry College Kids is Weirdly Entertaining (blog)

Original item by Connor Lannes

Alem, This poem fascinates and intrigues me as you focus on an aristocrat. Along with What a Farce, Unmatched Grace and Heroines in the Dark I enjoy your work enormously. I am reminded of being at dinner in the Sultanate of Oman 35 or 40 years ago and met an Ethiopian lady of great charm and intellect. I think she was married to a British Army Officer. She exuded sophistication and could be compared with the lady in A Black Empress´Legacy. Thank you. Keith

Comment is about A Black Empress's Legacy (Taytu Betul ) (blog)

Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos

Hey there Colin and Laura!

Thank you for the comments, I really appreciate it! I will admit this poem was a bit more on the spot then my usual stuff. I tend to write with a metaphor or concept in mind, but this came out in one long thought, so I can totally understand how some of the metaphors are hard to understand.

As for the line breaks, I like very broken lines that leave words by themselves to play with pacing, but I definitely could have put more thought into where they break.

Thank you for the critique!

Comment is about Watching a Group of Angry College Kids is Weirdly Entertaining (blog)

Original item by Connor Lannes

Thanks x

Comment is about Beautiful (blog)

Original item by Emma-Jane Stradling

Thank you Colin and Laura.
There's nothing like the Power of the Present eh.

Be blessed.
Raj

Comment is about Honestly speaking, there's beauty in the NOW (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

love this. strong, confident writing that takes me from gigers biomechanoids (the first lines are reminiscent of the unfurling of the xenomorphs in the original alien films to me, as is the way you compare it to reptilian movement), through innocence, strength, self-belief and wisdom. very good.

Comment is about Beautiful (blog)

Original item by Emma-Jane Stradling

Ha. I liked your reading of it actually - that's the first time I've heard your voice. Loving the contempt dripping off those upward inflections (god I hate them!).

A neat poke in the eye for contemporary culture this Ray.

Comment is about ROMEO AND JULIET IN REAL TIME (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Some cracking lines in here


where cars run rare
and exude mating calls
through means
of
rap.
Across from
the
funeral home
with running rust
that
synonymous to melting

Lots of ideas in here. Would you consider tidying up the line lengths? Bringing the shorter ones maybe into each other? They don't always make much sense being cut where they are.

Comment is about Watching a Group of Angry College Kids is Weirdly Entertaining (blog)

Original item by Connor Lannes

Oh I love this. I love that it doesn't just slip into the usual physicality, that it stays on the cerebral and emotional level. And I couldn't agree more with the sentiment.

Comment is about Honestly speaking, there's beauty in the NOW (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

Wow, thanks so much all ?

Cynth - she's a poet, quite well known for her 52 prompts idea. I came across her as I was doing a half-arsed attempt at NaPoWriMo, and found this, which I've used to spark off quite a few poems. I don't always (never) stick to the actual prompts themselves, but they're really useful as springboards. Check these out:

https://belljarblog.files.wordpress.com/2013/04/a-month-of-poetry-prompts1.pdf

That WAS a bit weird Colin! I thought the funeral was gobsmacking too.

Aww, thank you so much Stu. And aye, heh - we were all a bit 'wtf' when this kinda crashed into our night/day too! Great way to express that ?

Comment is about 3:15 am (tunnel vision) (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

i'm a busy little bee but i had to drop (buzz?) by and let you know how fucking amazing this is.

pixellated puckered tin

bathed bodies in the flicker

i mean. really. thats some hot shit.

not the same occasion but i was still split off my tits when the wtc came down and i remember it being a transformative moment, as if the real world was clawing into the fantasy i had created, kind of like rubbing away the paint of an abstract piece of art to find a realist landscape underneath. fab fab fab and you are also fab.

Comment is about 3:15 am (tunnel vision) (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Hi Ray,

I read the poem as also being about thinking outside of rigid expectations and norms; thinking for oneself, and refusing to be thrown into the collective limbic system psyche of fear and war - and hate..

This also could be about imagination, and allowing it to run free> "Sometimes a curve is all we seek.."
A curve here could mean Hope too. I'm not sure if that was your intention? Anyway I really love this poem. Thanks for sharing.

Suki

Comment is about TO A CURVE (blog)

Original item by ray pool

This is a poem which reminds me of the words of Alexandar Pope when he said that hope springs eternal in the human breast. I think we are constantly being reborn. Thank you for this. Keith

Comment is about Born Again (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

Cheers Col. Haven't read Ray's R&J. Let me check it out.

Raj

Comment is about Honestly speaking, there's beauty in the NOW (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

Classic Raj poetry. There is a corner of WoL that only your words can fill.

As a cheeky afterthought I wondered if Ray's recently posted 'Romeo and Juliet In Real Time' could be appended to this?

C?L

Comment is about Honestly speaking, there's beauty in the NOW (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

it's really great that more contributors are adding audio versions of their poems here on WoL but I have to admit I don't always listen - preferring instead to read through first and find a voice in my own head before deciding whether or not to hit the play button. With this one the voice I found was completely different to yours Ray. This is not negative feedback - just an observation if that's okay.
Cheers
Col

Comment is about ROMEO AND JULIET IN REAL TIME (blog)

Original item by ray pool

I like the idea behind this although a few of the lines leave me guessing at their meaning. I also like the idea of the students creating new meaning to that part of town - it's a fair enough summation of all things arty in a world where each generation has to find its own point of reference. Thanks for posting Connor.
Col.

Comment is about Watching a Group of Angry College Kids is Weirdly Entertaining (blog)

Original item by Connor Lannes

Hi Cynthia,

Thank you for your comment re 'Under Our Blue Umbrella' much appreciated.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Beautiful Mia. Couldn't have started my day in a better way.

There are many things I like about this piece, especially the central theme which strings everything together very nicely indeed.

3 parts I particularly like:
"I can still feel the love in our captured memories,
hear the leaves rustle with a deafening reminder"

"...unharmed by the agonizing cut from
life's long blade of time. "

and then the wonderful finale:
"but maybe," a small voice chillingly whispers,
"just maybe, the blame is yours to claim."

More please.
Raj

Comment is about Lost Friends (blog)

Original item by Mia

Marianne I have only just read your profile with keen interest.

First of all if you have the craving to write -- just write. Let your voice be heard, irrespective of people's response to it.
Never let another person's judgement of your work affect you. Having said that WOL is a wonderful site with established poets who are both supportive and encouraging. So you're in good company.

You seem to have an inquiring, restless mind and that's a good thing. So bring it all out.

May I also humbly add that with every poem you need to have a "big idea' and then express them through engaging words.

C'mon let have the first one!
Raj

Comment is about Marianne May (poet profile)

Original item by Marianne May

Thank you very much! Sure I will. ?

Comment is about Captured (blog)

Original item by Marianne May

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Comment is about Graham Eccles (poet profile)

Original item by Graham Eccles

This is by far my absolute favorite poem. it is so heartbreaking especially since I feel as if I can whole-heartedly relate to this. thank you for your beautiful and tragic words.

Comment is about Numb (blog)

Original item by Louise Clarke

I'm glad this had you liking it Kevin. An interesting picture you paint of the poem, one that I hadn't thought of!

Ray

Comment is about CHESS VERSUS LIFE (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Hi Keith, I'm so pleased you found favour with this one. I feel I must have succeeded if someone gets the message!

Ray

Comment is about TO A CURVE (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Ray, thank you for commenting on The Tango. It is something which is all too familiar where I live. I have grown to love the music which is so rich in drama. Much appreciated as always. Keith

Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)

Original item by ray pool

I agree with Cynthia's comment...and your message here John will resonate lots of us.

Well done.

Paul

Comment is about Under Our Blue Umbrella (blog)

Original item by John Walton

Thank you for you kind words. It means a lot.

Comment is about Believe (blog)

Original item by Louise Clarke

Well-spoken on a very important issue. Putting it in the first person, whether actual or not, is a good decision.

Comment is about Believe (blog)

Original item by Louise Clarke

I hope to read more of your work, Louise. I'm not on-line as much as I used to be. Thanks for joining WOL.

Comment is about Louise Clarke (poet profile)

Original item by Louise Clarke

I like this - fast, imaginative, and only too true.

Comment is about Under Our Blue Umbrella (blog)

Original item by John Walton

A good subject and strongly put with interesting ideas. The last two lines make a great ending.

Comment is about 50 shades of red (blog)

Original item by invisible

Welcome to WOL. I very much like your free ideas. And look forward to more. Do keep writing.

But, before actually posting, do a quick spell-check to weed out simple errors that may be only from the keyboard fingering. Posting makes a poem a 'written' or 'page poem' and presentation does count.

Comment is about invisible (poet profile)

Original item by invisible

This is a very interesting idea.

Comment is about SUN/MOON (blog)

Original item by invisible

One of your best, Laura. You are a star!

Who is Jo Bell?

Comment is about 3:15 am (tunnel vision) (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

I've not been too active on line lately. IMO, 'Momentary Musings' is really splendid. I think you have a fresh but sophisticated voice, and a fine command of language. It's wonderful to read works where ideas are strong and sharing them seems to be both a real desire and a labour of love.

I find poetry as 'emotional dumping' very hard to read sympathetically. But I'm just me. Lots of people really like it, like voyeurism.

Comment is about Neil Robertson (poet profile)

Original item by Neil Robertson

Brilliantly sensuous and introverted Keith. A study in form and emotions screwed down in movement.

Love it. Ray

Comment is about The Tango (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries