get well soon martin!

i like this piece a lot, the short lines work well to put home the message of repetition of the days.

Comment is about I am arisen (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

good stuff paul. eerie and creepy but not because it lays it on thick, but uses clever, subtle lines to enhance the feeling, as the piece progresses, that there is a quiet desperation and longing. reminds me a lot of the technique used in asian horror movies, the creeping sense of unease as opposed to the shock value. far more effective i would say.

Comment is about Stalker (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

like this a lot neil, especially the end which is excellent and takes the poem from a slightly humorous look at a little life into more poignant territory

Comment is about Moth (blog)

Original item by Neil Robertson

Neil, Thank you for this poem written in a style which I enjoy reading and use myself. The poem leaves me in a quandry of thought which in itself provokes further thought. Please write more. Thanks again. Keith

Comment is about Neill Barnard (poet profile)

Original item by Neill Barnard

Thank you David, I'm pleased you enjoyed this and that it made you smile ?. In truth, it only has a smidgen of the autobiographical.

And your words are right about not surrendering to age. But much as I'm trying to remind myself not to lose my mojo, at times I wish I would finally grow up and slow down ?

Paul

Comment is about A So-So So and So (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Hi Suki, how interesting that this put you in mind of that Police song, and thank you for the lovely compliment.

And thanks, too Graham, for your kind praise.

I am really chuffed to read comments like this.

Paul

Comment is about Stalker (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Thanks you Paul and Suki for your comments. The Iron Maiden was a reputed instrument of torture whose doors opened up to reveal a lining of metal spikes, one example having extra knives that revolved underneath, just to take no chances. It was also known as the Virgin Mary for obvious reasons. An example was used in the film Sleepy Hollow in a dream sequence.

Don't try this at home.

Ray

Comment is about IRON MAIDEN (blog)

Original item by ray pool

I'm a tad superstitious in respect of numbers - love prime numbers , live in a prime number house. So, when at the printer to finalise a random misplaced semi-colon in the 'acknowledgements' of my soon to be unleashed book, "Not For Sale," I mentioned that having 82 pomes made me uneasy he said,
"It's not too late to put one in."
So I added this pome to make the number up to 83 ?

Comment is about Last Summer in Co. Clare (blog)

Original item by Rick Gammon

Thank you so much for your comments and interest in my poems. Keith

Comment is about heartbakedpoet (poet profile)

Original item by heartbakedpoet

Like many of today's dramas on the TV, this finished too quickly and suggests its going to be part of a franchise. The follow-up would be eagerly awaited.

Well done on POTM Kevin!

Comment is about 'Driving through Grimstone Low' by Kevin is Write Out Loud Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

The cleverness of this piece (as the previous comments suggest) is its ambiguity. Deliberately sparse albeit finishing on a slightly threatening note "I'm going nowhere", there is more unsaid than expressed here.

Comment is about Stalker (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Hi Paul,

Much more subtle and ambivalent than "Every Breath You Take" that your poem reminds me of.

"Preparing for something" leaves the interpretation of intent quite open..

Suki

Comment is about Stalker (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Hi Ray,

Thank you so much for reading, and your very kind feedback. Always appreciated.

Col,

Thank you too. I just listened to the Joni Mitchell song. Cheers for the link.

Isn't it great when we are introduced to and discover gems that are new to us.What a great song, and the musical arrangement/coda..

I can tell that the more I listen to this song, the more I will discover. Great songs with such lightness of touch in both the production and arrangement give this song a timeless quality. Thanks so much.

Suki

Comment is about Nocturne Dance (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

Hi Stu,

Another fabulous title Stu.

A magical realist vibe; I'm a sucker for this kind of verse. You evoke images so beautifully, effortlessly..

Thanks for sharing.

Suki

Comment is about i am a cloud and when i cry it rains (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Dear Colin Hill Thank you for the feed back
Where --->
//When a traditional
Music and dance,
Accentuating
A century-old bilateral
Ties, took place// Ethiopia and Greek marked a 100 years old ties this week
Who the loved one is a lady having a blend of Greek and Ethiopia
Greek is famous for goddesses and Ethiopia for being a cradle of mankind Lucy is a metaphor for Ethiopia
/ A biracial and mesmeric
Greek goddess,
With chocolate Lucy's face/-->
Further characterization of the girl
/Exhibiting elegance
And radiant face/
How she rented my hear and made it beat fast/-->
With splendour
Leased in the citadel of
My heart a place
Making it palpitate
Picking pace/

The message
// Driving home
The intermingling of
This with that race
At times lends human beings
Unmatched grace! //

Here instead of Intermingling I should have used cross breeding
After face I shoud also have used a comma.
The message is/
Driving home
The intermingling of
This with that race
At times lends human beings
Unmatched grace! // the title also speaks about the message.
The poem with the amendement looks like this

Unmatched grace

When a traditional
Music and dance,
Accentuating
A century-old bilateral
Ties, took place
A biracial and mesmeric
Greek goddess,
With chocolate Lucy's face,
Exhibiting elegance
And radiant face,
With splendour
Leased in the citadel of
My heart a place
Making it palpitate
Picking pace
Driving home
The cross breeding of
This with that race
At times lends human beings
Unmatched grace! ///

The title itself talks about this observation

Comment is about Unmatched Grace (blog)

Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos

Medieval Manga Ray,

Very apt reading for an overcast Monday morning!

Suki

Comment is about IRON MAIDEN (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Hi Martin,

Touching stuff.

So sorry to hear about your recent heart attack but I am so pleased for you that you are recovering. Your many friends in the WoL community will be wishing you well, too.

Take good care of yourself,

Paul

Comment is about I am arisen (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

Hi Ja'Net,

Just finished eating my breakfast and reading your lovely comment on my profile page - thanks! It's been great reading your work here on WoL, such a wonderful place to make connections with other writers around the world. I very much hope you will stay and share more of your creativity.

So pleased you like my sample poem. I took a look at Walt's and appreciate the wonder of looking and being in that moment. Sometimes we get too immersed in learning and naming and remembering that we forget to simply stop and observe and listen. Poetry is all about that moment for me.

Thanks also for visiting my blog. I should post there more often but for now time doesn't allow. Take care,

Colin

Comment is about Dyphrent (poet profile)

Original item by Dyphrent

this is so beautiful! very well written.

Comment is about Afternoon Tea (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

this is breath taking.

Comment is about Submerged (blog)

Original item by Matthew Will

DOPE! LOVE IT!

Comment is about Fade to Burn (blog)

Original item by MyDystopiA

Martin, love the declaration to rise...I pray that you live to write many more inspirational poems and enjoy your family and friends and most importantly grow in relationship with the Father above.

Comment is about I am arisen (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

your words really got to me... thank you. x

Comment is about Ten Years (blog)

Original item by Maria Renea

Thanks, Martin. I find the one-way system rather Kafka-esque. It reminds me of the scene in Midnight Express where the guy walks the wrong way round the exercise circle.

Comment is about IKEA (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

I guess its one of those place s you either love or hate. many people go to this temple to worship. Have to say I will probably be going tomorrow. Sniffing the glue sounds good though John. great poem.

Comment is about IKEA (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

if you
could
ever listen
to another
voice,
please listen
to mine.
there is
so much
love in
the world
it is obvious
in the smile
on your
face.
it is so
much more
than a dark
memory.
you are
so beautiful
inside
and out.

time will
heal all.

and you are
stronger
than him.

be free
of it all
do not
ever give
him a
second thought.
he does not
deserve it.
and one day
love will
find you
and never
let you
hurt again...

Comment is about Ten Years (blog)

Original item by Maria Renea

Good morning from the States. Thanks so much for reading and your comments. My imagination needs much tending to, at times, Paul. So I'm very glad to have the outlet, here, through writing. And, Nicola, I can recall grasping for that word, "forsaking" in trying to decide just exactly what the subject was doing...I'm happy that it connected with you.

Thanks, kindly, to the both of you,

elP

Comment is about missive (blog)

Original item by nunya

Hi Ray,

Whatever the real story is behind this it sounds painful!

And I've loved reading the banter it has provoked.

Paul

Comment is about IRON MAIDEN (blog)

Original item by ray pool

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THANKS
AATIF

Comment is about AATIF (poet profile)

Original item by AATIF

Thanks Ray, Col and David. As always, great to read your comments. Interestingly, you clever chaps seem to have picked up on the potential for multiple interpretations, positive as well as negative. David, thanks for the link and the interesting point about the changing definitions of stalking.

Although I recognise the very serious nature of what is now the offence of stalking, I had in mind the idea of intense attraction and craving to be with someone so badly that we, in a sense, 'stalk' the person. But, of course, there is no doubt a fine line between going far enough and going too far.

Thanks again you three wise men,

Paul

Comment is about Stalker (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Yes, and there was more than one accusation from female students about his behaviour. He was 'admonished' but never punished. Because 'great writer'.

Comment is about Nobel prize poet Sir Derek Walcott dies aged 87 (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

lots of powerful hammer blow lines ringing out here Rich. For the sake of aesthetics I would be tempted to tap those 'watch' lines down a notch so that they don't stick out. Good stuff - like Dyphrent's recent Poem of the Week 'Man' there is a strong beat, a poem also that could be lengthened. Reminds me also of a couple of early 80's industrial bands that used tools and metal objects to make something resembling music - Tools You Can Trust, SPK.
thanks for posting. Col

Comment is about Dynamis (blog)

Original item by Rich

It's a beautiful poem I especially like forsaking the encroaching future?

Comment is about missive (blog)

Original item by nunya

morning MC - there are indeed some remarkable stories still left to be told but the gaining of access to private archives is not always straightforward. Even within families there sometimes exists a peculiar reticence to share documents and photographs.

In the case of the de Havilland connection it was frustrating as I have barely any photos of that generation of Hills and Thomas's (apart from the one mentioned in the book and one or two yet to be identified). But there must have been plenty taken at the time. Louise's sister Gladys was a witness at the wedding and another sister Lottie was housekeeper for them for most of their lives. I have often wondered about the interactions between these two very different families - were they awkward or accepting of each other's social backgrounds? How was Louise accepted by the de Havillands? It had all the elements of a classic crossing of the classes love story.

Like Isabella Bird's relationship with Jim Nugent, it's the sub-plots that so often make social history so fascinating. I feel drawn to Louise Thomas / de Havilland's story for those reasons and hopefully one day will revisit her and Sir Geoffers to dig a little deeper.

Cheers, Col

Comment is about Lift-off for anthology inspired by trail-blazing women (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Good thought. I agree!

Comment is about gold stars (blog)

Original item by Little Bit

Going down the list of blogs, I read the first few lines and dismissed this - skipped on.
Then I went back and read it again. Read some others, then came back to this.
It certainly deserves a good read, there is so much to like here although I think it is one small edit away from finished.
Mind you, a good poem never finishes, it lives on in heads - lines which can't be forgotten.
The first three lyrical stanza are strong but although I understand the last stanza, the implied threat derails me. The complete turn-around in character from a goodie to a baddy is clever and explains his distance, but somehow the poem needs one more edit.
Not sure it's anything to do with lines Colin tripped on... can't put my finger on it.
However, I did enjoy the poem and will add it to my favourites.

Comment is about In The Light of The Evening (blog)

Original item by Tom

Love: "okay! I stopped just once!" Keeping running and keep writing! ?

Comment is about Running (blog)

Original item by Seamus Mac Fhearchair

yes! I'm gonna do it. Which window do you suggest? Waterstones?

Comment is about Situationist Haiku (blog)

Original item by David Blake

looking forward to Poem XX Karen. This one is intriguing enough to want for more. Thanks for posting. Colin

Comment is about Poem XIX (blog)

Original item by Karen Al Ahmed Verkerk

King of Farts surely for Trump! Parp!
I reckon the Republicans said oh what the heck
let him run for President
if he gets elected we'll just ignore whatever he says
and do whatever we want instead.
But then again
maybe they're just blagging it as they go along
and taking us all for a ride at the same time.
who can tell?
I'm only here because I'm waiting on the call
the one says come pick me up
taxi of dad
wish it would hurry up
I wanna go to bed !!
kids eh!!
?

Comment is about Trump Cards (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

'Thank you' for posting this Keith - interesting concept. I can't help but think of the wonderful Montag in Ray Bradbury's Fahrenheit 451:

"It took some man a lifetime maybe to put some of his thoughts down, looking around at the world and life, and then I came along in two minutes and boom! it's all over."

Col

Comment is about Thank you (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

dark as you like with extra treacly coagulated blood this could be about one of any number of interpretations but for me it has something ghastly and embolic in its foreboding atmosphere (clutches hand to chest).
Col

Comment is about Stalker (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Lots going on here Alem - I have images floating in and out of my head and am not sure how well they fit with your words but it doesn't really matter. What matters is that you have written something to inspire them.
The Greece club in Ethiopia sounds enticing too.
All the best,
Colin

Comment is about Unmatched Grace (blog)

Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos

Thank you for reading Juan - very glad it hit the spot ! It is incredible how lurid and perverted such inventions were.

Cheers David. It's funny but when I read your assessments I feel you are my guide as if you have scavenged my mind that bit deeper. Spot on - Again you have tumbled my plans for extra marital exploration. I'm reading the Picture of Dorian Gray ; maybe that triggered off the idea.

Ray

Comment is about IRON MAIDEN (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Really interesting read Leej...there are a myriad of poems on this theme but one more is not too much...I really enjoyed the rhyme scheme and the positive ending - I read that Maybe...change for good as a positive thought coming into being

Comment is about untitled (blog)

Original item by LeeJ Waters

Hi Keith . .. thanks for your comment on 'Sewer' , nothing will change .. nobody cares ....

Comment is about keith jeffries (poet profile)

Original item by keith jeffries

This is quite graphic..seems like an excerpt of a fiction novel that I probably wouldn't read...I think this poem is lovely though and having encountered Iron Maiden characters elsewhere I can totally relate to this. Great share.

Comment is about IRON MAIDEN (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Paul, I have read a number of your poems all of which I have thoroughly enjoyed in both content and style. In particular I like ¨Nostalgia¨. as it is highly evocative. I have friends who own a four hundred year old home and their kitchen table came immediately to mind. You are the author of its description. Thank you. Keith

Comment is about Paul Waring (poet profile)

Original item by Paul Waring

As a complete ignoramus on any political issues, I thought I would simply make another point on your poem, Mark and that is how Guinness has always been viewed with a romanticism, and I wonder if that element has been grafted on to the whole Irish perception of itself and whether that has any bearing on the insanity of justification adopted in the name of killing for cause. I thought it was a point worth making. Of course, Guinness has been a sort of symbol as was Newcastle Brown and I have seen a definite north/south divide re-inforced around local beers. (Again this seems to me to be woven around a skewed romanticism. )

Ray

Comment is about THE POINT OF McGUINNESS (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Born and lives in the imagination where it is entirely at home, Stu. A bit of magic!

Ray

Comment is about i am a cloud and when i cry it rains (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck