Thanks to each of you for your kind comments. Love and intimacy aren't subjects that I write about often. I would certainly never want to be guilty of trivializing such deep emotions by throwing words at them. I'm really glad that this touched each of you.

And, thanks for the suggestion, Graham. Though, John hit the nail on the head with his explanation as to why I choose to leave it. Things often have a sound and rhythm all their own that seems to take form even as they are being penned, and I often favor remaining faithful to that integrity.

Again, thank you!

elP

Comment is about cellular memory (blog)

Original item by nunya

Thanks so much for picking up my short poem, elP David Graham Colin and Paul. I think we're all agreed; the purveyors of religious texts are constantly seducing us with elaborate ideas, so they deserve a pithy response.
It's especially dodgy when the young are sacrificed to unreachable ideals.

Ray

Comment is about CHURCH RIDDLE (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Really a spiritual dimension that lifts your work almost out of the reach like soap bubbles, but worth entering in to the maze to claim them. Beautifully written elP

Ray

Comment is about cellular memory (blog)

Original item by nunya

Instantly comforting to read John and a sort of folk honesty to it. It could be presented on the underground for everyone to read for a feelgood experience.

Ray

Comment is about A Three-chord Song (blog)

Original item by John Garbutt

Nicely turned Paul. You are enjoying the creative form and it reveals different levels of thinking. It's interesting to see how the fallow years have not been wasted (another soil idea).

Ray

Comment is about Insomnia (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Thanks, Dave. Maybe the rhyme with Nuttall might have needed bleeping over on TWTWTW.
Yes, indeed, MC. I suspect his Troika of friends I mention will be plotting his removal.
I think UKIP have a problem as a one-issue party when its issue has essentially been achieved. What do they stand for once Brexit has been delivered?

Comment is about NOBODY WANTS YOU WHEN YOU'RE DOWN AND OUT (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Liked the tune - and smiled wanly at the words. I have to
say the man was hardly up to speed by failing to check
what was posted online in his name. In politics, you have
to watch your back and, as the saying goes, keep your
enemies as close as your friends - mainly because it can
be difficult sometimes to detect the difference! The man himself is due to address a Ukip meeting for the south/west
so all is not over just yet for him.
As for Stoke, they get the MP they voted for and they
deserve each other.

Comment is about NOBODY WANTS YOU WHEN YOU'RE DOWN AND OUT (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

How pleasant to see that there are others who do not
follow the crowd (& the money!) in the popular music of
today and can put their view forward in enjoyable rhyme
I found myself substituting the following for the last line,
to carry on the theme of togetherness v.fad & fashion.
"To kindle kindred hearts". Hope I'm excused!

Comment is about A Three-chord Song (blog)

Original item by John Garbutt

Yes its merits outweigh its negligible demerits.No felling of trees for firewood and little use of petrol that pollutes the environment are chief among its upsides.I think GERD is in line with the green -resilient economy.But all due care must be given to the environment I agree with you!

I used to read classic poems that de-familiarize language like
"I sit me down" I try also to use inversion for the sake of rhyming,in Amharic poem rhyming is a must. You see a sense of local touch is manifest in my poems. Inversion could also be used for emphasis and aesthetic effect. I think writing in a way I feel poems must be written has become my style.I have not read modern poems much hence I less appreciate them because I feel such poems could be better expressed in prose!
Thank you for the comment

Comment is about Distilling from the past making tomorrow bright (blog)

Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos

thank you so much for another wonderfully kind compliment Stu. I really appreciate how much you've encouraged me.

Sorry I am replying late, I somehow managed to miss this comment yesterday.

Cheers,

Paul

Comment is about Inevitabilities (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

I share your sentiments John. You've written a deeply touching poem here describing beautifully the connection humans can share with dogs. Lovely stuff.

Paul

Comment is about Drinking where the river bed is dry (blog)

Original item by John E Marks

Two very good poems David. I particularly like Heron Taking Flight.

Paul

Comment is about Two bird poems (blog)

Original item by David Redfield

Excellent Ray, quite a feat to say so much in so few words.
And deadly accurate. Lovely poem.

Paul

Comment is about CHURCH RIDDLE (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Sorry I've come late to this Stu.

This is beautiful, so powerful and so moving. A real belter.

Paul

Comment is about like skin upon my bones (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Hi elP,

beautiful, sensuous words that speak to me of spring.

Paul

Comment is about cellular memory (blog)

Original item by nunya

well thanks everyone, really glad you enjoyed it. have a great weekend!

Comment is about like skin upon my bones (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Thanks Graham! I'm only sharing some old material at the moment, but I'm hoping that being on here will motivate me to start writing properly again.

Comment is about A Three-chord Song (blog)

Original item by John Garbutt

Very clever stuff.
You've got the heron to a T.
We have three on our lake.
So graceful standing still. Awful in flight!
Well done on this.

Comment is about Two bird poems (blog)

Original item by David Redfield

This is almost like lyrical word association.
I ached reading it, we feel the pain of the ecstasy and the agony spilling.
Bloody good work Stu

Comment is about like skin upon my bones (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Don't get me started!
First off, the poem is a pretty verse.
Without a doubt, in the intelligent world, more people are seeing religion for what it has always been. A form of control.
Suffer the children?

Comment is about CHURCH RIDDLE (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Often difficult to know if work on here is autobiographical or not. Whichever is the case, you have identified the crucial points that all of us consider, when confronted with grief.

Comment is about The end (blog)

Original item by Louis Audet

Quite frankly this is one of the best pieces that I have read here on WOL for a long time.
There are so many brilliant sentiments through this I don't want to pick one! This is the sort of work we all wish we were capable of. Great work!

Comment is about Drinking where the river bed is dry (blog)

Original item by John E Marks

Lovely playing John and fit for any late night satire programme (you know the sort that doesn't exist any more).

Comment is about NOBODY WANTS YOU WHEN YOU'RE DOWN AND OUT (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

As below, a lovely piece. I think you could change betwixt or just remove it all together,
Stilled fields.......great words.

Comment is about cellular memory (blog)

Original item by nunya

Who is this tortured genius? Thanks for the insightful comments Greg. I'm beginning to think there's more to me than meets the I. Julian, I understand that the great Bolton Institution THE Chinese Buffet, revealed its secrets on TV this week. Few surprises there from what I've read but they really should consult the experts. Enjoyed the Jeff Nuttall show; just the right tone of irreverence.

Comment is about Chuang Tse's Caterpillar: Dave Morgan, Flapjack (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

An interesting topic. Isn't it strange how we think we can save people who we perceive to need help. Not always true though. A great intro on WOL, well done.

Comment is about Homeless by the lovely Vienna (blog)

Original item by Marques Spraggs

Interesting thoughts RT.
Quite a hard read paragraph style, better in lines for emphasis. Good work.

Comment is about Beneath (blog)

Original item by R.T. Pait

You're in good company on here then John! Good to see you posting.

Comment is about A Three-chord Song (blog)

Original item by John Garbutt

Initially it wasn't in inverted commas Juan. A quote I know by heart, because I've felt it, was also just added to this recently edited piece.

I feel very strongly about plagiarism, if I see plagiarism here again I will point it out. I certainly would not like somebody to steal my work and claim it as their own.

Thankfully, this is the first time I have witnessed plagiarism here and I am an active user since December 2015.

Comment is about You'll always be with me (blog)

Original item by Dana Lee

ohnonotanotherRiddler! I was never very good at riddles.

But yesterday brought yet another scandal - that of the countless babes buried in an unmarked grave at a former Catholic orphanage in Ireland. Such sad history.

Comment is about CHURCH RIDDLE (blog)

Original item by ray pool

ditto John's comments - blindingly good

Comment is about cellular memory (blog)

Original item by nunya

Much to think about here, John--our lives are so fragile. This relationship you frame with Charlie is priceless. They say that wolves came to seek human companionship for survival and in the process became dogs. But, they've become a model for friendship that is almost impossible to match within the "human herd".

Just a side note--I hope that humans lose this strange fetish they have with pedigrees. They breed such terrible debilitations into these animals through their ignorance.

elP

Comment is about Drinking where the river bed is dry (blog)

Original item by John E Marks

I once read that writing poetry in translation is like taking a shower with your clothes on...

elP

Comment is about সু সা, আপনাকে- (blog)

Original item by Nafees Sabur

You know, Ray, I was just having a personal rant about the hypocrisy of religion before I read this. It seems that if you search it out, you could find a new story every single day of your natural born life about the crimes of an institution that claims to be so gd more righteous than the rest of us. I, myself, have had a belly full of it.

I like it short and sweet, Ray--just like you put it, here.

elP

Comment is about CHURCH RIDDLE (blog)

Original item by ray pool

I particularly like the economic use of words in part two--very reminiscent of a forensics investigation and report. And, I really like it's contrast with part one..clearly a change in tone and style.

Truly extraordinary construction all the way 'round, to me.

elP

ps
there's a scene in the movie 'Sully' where the main character (Sully, the pilot) is sitting in a bar and is approached by two patrons who tell him that they've recently named a cocktail after his harrowing experience--"grey goose with a splash of water"...I don't believe Sully found it funny at all.

Comment is about Two bird poems (blog)

Original item by David Redfield

I can't put it any better than Ray and Colin. There are tones of eroticism that are both under spoken and unmistakable, as in many pieces of yours--it always seems so natural, unextracted and undressed of modern culture.

Really quite beautiful, like emotions you can see.

elP

Comment is about like skin upon my bones (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Harry. You're in depth explanation that describes this lovely piece is far too enigmatic for a numpty such as me. The beauty's superficial without digging all that deep

Comment is about Carol (blog)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

Thanks allx?

Comment is about 'Rose Petals' by Nicola Beckett is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Dana,
I shed tears reading this and they weren't crocodile tears either. I feel like this poem made me appreciate live so much more. Thank you for sharing this masterpiece with us.
I loved every single word in every single line in every single paragraph.
.------------------
Emer Ni Chorra,
I think that since Dana made it known that it was a quote it wasn't really necessary for her to credit the author since we could google the quote. However, I am grateful that you made it so that we don't have to google it anymore.

Comment is about You'll always be with me (blog)

Original item by Dana Lee

Nobody does this full - bloodied poetry like you Stu. You are the master - It feels as if it has just flowed through you - the best kind of mindplay. It feels as if there is no separation between mind and body and spirit - just a great waterfall of feeling. With no punctuation it works so well.
Excellent stuff.

Ray

Comment is about like skin upon my bones (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

I'm intrigued that you've billed (sry!) this as two separate poems David. I think I would be inclined to scrap all three titles and find something that links the two together and present it as one - maybe with a little dash between stanzas to show they are individual yet connected. Presented in this way would definitely tick all the black boxes for me. Regardless, I very much enjoyed. Colin.

Comment is about Two bird poems (blog)

Original item by David Redfield

".. Then you're no end of an ass" (boom boom). Thanks, Colin.

Comment is about NOBODY WANTS YOU WHEN YOU'RE DOWN AND OUT (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

brilliant paul. i couldnt work out where it was going, was it 'misery' or something more touching. i'd have been happy either way but the ending was sweet, touching and superbly written.

Comment is about Inevitabilities (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

lovely and dark, foreboding and excellently written. top marks from me, i read this several times.

Comment is about today (blog)

Original item by Cesca

thanks colin! this actually took longer than my usual pieces so i am glad i didnt lose any of the flow i had hoped to capture

Comment is about like skin upon my bones (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

beautifully lyrical and hypnotic - it feels like this just spilled out onto the page. Well impressed.

Comment is about like skin upon my bones (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

love the first piece, wonderful study of an incredible animal. nailed it.

Comment is about Two bird poems (blog)

Original item by David Redfield

Thanks Colin (again). Our next door neighbour had a Hillman Hunter for donkey's years, I think it ran on tobacco judging by how much it coughed and spluttered and wouldn't start each morning.

Thanks Graham, I'm feeling very left out now, having never driven a Hillman ? but I'm sure you're right.

Thanks Ray, what a truly wonderful and touching thing to say about this piece and my writing. I'm trying to stick to my 'ditch the ditties' campaign, hope it's working. And, yes, I was a passenger in a Husky in 1963!

Thanks to all you lovely, warm-hearted gents.

Paul

Comment is about Inevitabilities (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Suki, thank you for liking that line - I should have added a few headstones just to set it off!

Ray

Comment is about ON THE OTHER SIDE OF READING (blog)

Original item by ray pool

David,
I know this is a bit anti-cannine...But I`ve always loved owls, ever since I heard that one of the those giant
ones they display in town centres once swooped down on some woman`s darling Pekinese and carried it off.

Comment is about Top of the Tree (blog)

Original item by David Lindsay