I'm not sure I get this LB, but that's poetry for you; often enigmatic.

A.

Comment is about this rain, it knows (blog)

Original item by Little Bit

Morning LB, is your biological mother still alive? My dad's known for years that his father was an American GI, but only in the last year, with the benefits of DNA testing, has he established precisely who his father was. Sadly, by that time he'd died but my dad has managed to start building a relationship with his new found step sister/brother.

So, brackets or not; are you loud, and do you feel you've made 'mama proud'? Hope so.

A.

Comment is about true self (blog)

Original item by Little Bit

Oh you got me salivating there Suki.
You have deliciously taken the humble samosa and sublimated it into a seductive piece of culinary foreplay.

What's for dessert?

Well done.

Comment is about Ode To My Vegetable Samosa (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

Wow, this piece got me in a meditative mood.
I felt cleansed by the "drippling brook".

Suki beat me to it -- I love the word arcanum too.

More please!
Raj

Comment is about Healing Waters (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Congratulations Hazel; there's something of Eliot in this.

Comment is about 'In Budapest' by Hazel Ettridge is Write Out Loud Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

What a funny piece... You made me laugh out loud ?

Comment is about My Unfavorite Things (blog)

Original item by Jeff

Hi Folks,

What can I say? Thanks for enjoying my food-porn doggerel. Col, I didn't know if you click suki the suggestion is Saki. Perhaps I should have called myself Saki spangles instead. I like it!

Suki/Saki

Comment is about Ode To My Vegetable Samosa (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

A lovely flowing poem, Cynthia. And a lovely new word for me too - arcanum.

Cheers,
Suki

Comment is about Healing Waters (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I can certainly relate to this. Love the analogy of the star collapsing. Enjoyed this lovely poem!

Comment is about A star collapses (blog)

Original item by Emma-Jane Stradling

Often when you break through the outer skin, the experience can be disappointing - slightly soggy vegetable matter in a puffy case. This poem had me admiring the triangle again. Excellent fare Suki.

Ray

Comment is about Ode To My Vegetable Samosa (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

They certainly enliven the circus.

Comment is about NOBODY WANTS YOU WHEN YOU'RE DOWN AND OUT (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Accomplished writing David. I enjoyed reading this very much. Thanks for posting.

Paul

Comment is about Final Act (blog)

Original item by David Redfield

Thanks Stu, so pleased you enjoyed this. I think Da Vinci must have been a genius (of course he was!) to have captured the world's imagination with this piece.

David, thank you, very good point about perspective and perception. That was one of the things I wanted 'her' to moan about, that people often see the same things completely differently. And, yes, my humourous take on Mona Lisa is that she is a reluctant celebrity, almost an iconoclast. So your idea of modern day celebrity fits well. And maybe that was why Princess Diana suffered so much.

Thanks again to you both. Lovely comments.

Paul

Comment is about Mona Lisa Musing (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

I like this very much Suki. Is it me, of have you single-handedly elevated the vegetable samosa to food heaven with lines like:

"your lingual volcano kisses my melting snow"

and "your translucent bronze sari skin wraps and teases?"

And the eyeful/Eiffel trifle is truly inspired.

Paul

Comment is about Ode To My Vegetable Samosa (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

Thanks all you realists ! David, that is a liberty of a word, but it doesn't exist so I may be the first to use it, yippee!
Imagine on....

Great Col. I feel I have scored on my home ground, thanks.!

Paul, very kind. It really is enjoyable to have a jolly good go in verse.. Aythangyow.

Suki, Why not - even if that sounds like a Mel Brooks special. Nothing new under the solstice. Thanks.

Thanks Mark. Really I think the plots are pretty much interchangeable albeit with different regional accents - by gum!

Stu, you are right of course and that is a liberal view and a justifiable one even if unfathomable in practice!

Thank you one and all! Ray

Comment is about TV SOAPS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

that is first class ? teach me

Comment is about eighteen (blog)

Original item by Little Bit

I identify with that so much.. always searching, but what really for?

Comment is about true self (blog)

Original item by Little Bit

hi Seamus, welcome! enjoyed reading your sample poem. i can really hear you and feel you. my favorite bit's "I no longer wish to live my life, as a toy upon the shelf." keep writing. looking forward to seeing more!

Comment is about Seamus Mac Fhearchair (poet profile)

Original item by Seamus Mac Fhearchair

Hey.. was disappointed.. your twitter url doesn't work. Nice work above ? Seamas

Comment is about Danni Matthews (poet profile)

Original item by Danni Matthews

very clever and enjoyable. i have seen the mona lisa several times now and am always shocked at how highly it is regarded. i guess its just one of those things that us humans take up and run with!

Comment is about Mona Lisa Musing (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

hate the bloody things. but totally understand why people watch them. it takes all sorts to transport people from the drudgery of their lives. whatever makes them happy i guess.

Comment is about TV SOAPS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

yes, wonderful, makes me want to make them myself. my mouth actually watered while reading.

Comment is about Ode To My Vegetable Samosa (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

oh how lovely cynthia, you describe the three scenes so vividly that i could taste the salt in the air.

Comment is about Healing Waters (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Delightful. You sure like strong tea!

Comment is about untitled (blog)

Original item by Freda Davis

Hi ! Great work. I'm new to this site, could you help me figure out how to submit a blog entry?

Comment is about I After Me After I (blog)

Original item by MyDystopiA

I read this first thing this morning and rather liked it. Just thinking out loud I wondered about cutting that long line down to match the rest and rhyme with the next, say:

He preyed on her weaknesses
the holes (through / in) her defences

I also wondered, because the characters are basically the same whether you could make the whole thing into more of a battle of wits:

she was just as guilty.
he was just as guilty!

he was gonna score
she was gonna score!

hiding behind her sheep
hiding behind his sheep.

It's one of those poems that you could easily play around with I think. Anyways, just some thoughts. Fun with words. C?L

Comment is about Army of pacifists (blog)

Original item by medamorfisis

Oh,
And Oh again..

you are the Heston Blumenthal of wordy inventions Suki.

I like that if you right click on 'Blumenthal' (with red squiggly line underneath) the suggested option is 'Enthralment'. And if you right click 'Suki' one of the options is 'Saki'.

If Heston was to do the samosa it probably would have trifle inside.

love it !

Comment is about Ode To My Vegetable Samosa (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

That old arbiter - time - will tell...but the existence of Ukip
will continue to enliven the political scene and prevent
the somnolence of previous political assumptions occurring again.

Comment is about NOBODY WANTS YOU WHEN YOU'RE DOWN AND OUT (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

A pinpoint portrayal of television trivia.
Soaps have always been a big switch-off for me...all that
bad tempered bawling and those short fuses on depressing display. I wouldn't want any of the characters next to me
in the pub - or ahead of me in the queue in my local shop!

Comment is about TV SOAPS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Hi Frances,

The short answer is "no" - I cannot recall any images of a comparable experience (or even the possibility of one) in the UK when I wrote this poem way back in 1994. I spent many weekends at Scarborough Beach in my early, dissipated adult years, which evidently had their long-term effects on me.

Strangely enough, last year - in the early UK summer - I visited the seaside town of Newquay on the north Cornwall coast, which possessed all four of the qualities you list. I can add that it also has a strong surfing culture, with numbers of Australians in evidence, judging by the Aussie flags around the place. It certainly failed in the temperature department though!

As for beach culture in the Scarborough, UK, version, that is definitely a non-starter as far as I can tell.

Cheers,

Chris

Comment is about On Scarborough Beach (blog)

Original item by Chris Hubbard

A lovely little poem.

Suki

Comment is about (blog)

Original item by Adam Whitworth

Funnily enough, a soap opera about the builders of Stonehenge would probably be worth watching. Instead of Eastenders having their usual Christmas punch up, we could watch the builders and pagans dancing in praise of the Solstice!

Suki

Comment is about TV SOAPS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Thanks Frances, so pleased this made you laugh out loud...and that you liked the style. I am particularly pleased because it took some time to figure out how best to characterise her humourously as a moaner... and I almost called it Mona Lisa Amusing.

Best wishes,

Paul

Comment is about Mona Lisa Musing (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Love it Ray, brilliantly written and 'another plot as old as Stonehenge' and 'torpulent corpulent' are blindingly good.
Take a bow sir ?

Paul

Comment is about TV SOAPS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

I like the idea that it could be about falling in love. It fits well and I'm happy with that interpretation. The meaning of the pin is quite personal to me. I guess in a way, the pin represents my emotions and my fears.

Comment is about Pin (blog)

Original item by Matt

Ha-ha-ha! Made me laugh out loud. Nice perspective - a device I have used often... loved the 'top & tail' too.
Clever poem, Paul.

Comment is about Mona Lisa Musing (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

I'm intrigued - wondering if the pin is the metaphor for falling in love...

Comment is about Pin (blog)

Original item by Matt

As a fellow Perthite, I automatically went to our Scarborough Beach - sun, sea, surfers and wide blue sky & ocean. I'm wondering if this can also be applied to a beach in the UK version? I've never been there, so can't compare but would like to know if this is a comparison poem?

Comment is about On Scarborough Beach (blog)

Original item by Chris Hubbard

I do love your 'Poor Man's Sonnet'.
Favourite lines: "Or think til' I can't say," and
"Her name gets whispered when I breath".
Well done.

Comment is about Daniel Carrigan (poet profile)

Original item by Daniel Carrigan

Hmmmm, don't know whether I 'like' this or not.
This poem certainly has some memorable lines and a different take on the expectation of the first line...
But, do I like the ideas here - no matter how well they're expressed?
I did like: "...nullifies your need for the stratosphere by force feeding you fulfillment."
and: "...tainting your most sacred dreams with the smell of her breath."
and: "...a crippling fear of a time that came before..."
So many clever expressions, but as a girl - I'd hate to think I ever did that to my lover.

Comment is about The Right Girl (blog)

Original item by Daniel Carrigan

this is so very good Ray - nothing less than perfect - I've read it through several times and cannot find a syllable out of place. Terrific!
Col

Comment is about TV SOAPS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Hi hazel, sorry to hear about your daughter. your poem makes even more sense now that I know what it is about.

regarding reading some of my stuff at your open mic night-
of course it would be alright. I can think of no greater compliment.
if you do go ahead could you please let me know which one's you choose, and how it goes.

cheers Kevin

Comment is about Hazel Connelly (poet profile)

Original item by Hazel Connelly

I had terrible acne many moons ago ? No laughing matter?

Comment is about (blog)

Original item by Adam Whitworth

Hahaha! Totally mate! My mum was the same.
You need to send me one of your poems so that I can illustrate it!

Comment is about Pin (blog)

Original item by Matt

You voted Corbyn and you quoted Bill Hicks. What's not to love?

Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

HI Dave, I just ferretted this one out and do like it a lot - it's just a great play with day to day considerations. It has a sort of dystopian quality I think, a bit like Camberley.
The imaginary orchestra is a clever biting line - and you need reality to underscore and lift such a poem I think.

Ray.

Comment is about Winebar in Worktown (blog)

Original item by Dave Morgan

Great piece Andy - really enjoyed reading it. I think you meant to write 'able' on the first line of the second stanza.

Comment is about From Friendship to Love (IV) (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Once the adverts were better than the programmes, now it's all mostly dross. Still the issue gives pseudo celebs a chance to think they have a worthwhile point and opinion to foist on others just like so called real celebs think they do too.

Comment is about 'It's depressing': Luke Wright's 'old-fashioned rant' about spoken word on TV ads (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thanks Graham, good point, I also wonder what they would say..?

Paul

Comment is about Mona Lisa Musing (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Thanks for posting Mark. It got the nostalgia juices flowing yet again. The magic of steam.... In 1963 I took a trip from Waterloo via Bath and went down the Somerset and Dorset to Bournemouth, thence back to W'loo. You must know Bradford on Avon on the canal. Few tourists around in those days.
Steam at night was fantastic - the anticipation . I could go on.

Ray

Comment is about A TRIP TO LOOE (blog)

Original item by ray pool