Some great flowing imagery here Ian, enjoyed it.

Comment is about The Devil On My Right Shoulder (blog)

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Thanks David, would be great to know your thoughts!

Comment is about Night Work - Collection (blog)

Original item by Tom Harding

This evoked many memories of youth spent in yet-to-be-grown American suburbs--places where no cars and no cops go.

Yet, I see now, the speckled landscapes that exist before me in older cities, and thus I see what will become of those, then, newly broken lands that existed in my youth.

It seems that all the land is doomed to domestication...

elP

Comment is about CHELSEA CREEK 1970 (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Hey, Colin..I do like to come at things from irregular angles when I see an opportunity, however I'm not sure my attention span is quite long enough for stealth without serious guidance and some fine tuning. Though, I was once told that I look like the cat that just nabbed the bird.

Hi, David..I wrestled somewhat with the title. Sometimes, aggression just feels like the only natural reaction--there are simply times when you don't want your intentions mistaken through the exchange of too many civilities, if you know what I mean. In my experience, motive really only comes to mind once the deed is done and you get the pleasure of rethinking it all and how it could've gone better. Anyhow...

And you, Ray..I really like the word "intent". Maybe that should be included in the title. Anyway, I think most of us (many of us..some of us..a few of us?) reach many points of no return--that place from which you can never go home. Otherwise, maybe we would revert repeatedly to situations and habits that spell trouble for us.

Thanks to each of you for your comments and for giving me this food for thought on an otherwise boring Friday evening.

elP x

Comment is about motive (blog)

Original item by nunya

My tribute to the late Sir George Martin who once produced The Beatles.

You can find more of my work on this site or by simply searching David Subacchi on line.

Comment is about GEORGE MARTIN (blog)

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Beautifully written from a yearning heart

Comment is about Bhupindra Singh (poet profile)

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Beautifully written from a yearning heart

Comment is about Bhupindra Singh (poet profile)

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Daniel, This is good, very good. Thanks Keith

Comment is about Daniel Carrigan (poet profile)

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Very powerful pieces that you have written, Keith. Welcome to WOL, I look forward to reading more of your work.??

Comment is about HAAS - 2016 SYRIA (blog)

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Hi Dave ta for your comment re "Lift" Tommy

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Kishore cheers re "Lift" Tommy

Comment is about kishore karunik (poet profile)

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Ta Ray for your comment re "Lift" Tommy

Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)

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Thanks Paul for your comment re "Lift" Tommy

Comment is about Paul Waring (poet profile)

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There is a kind of assurance to your writing drawn from experience of the craft and this poem is a classic example that is like a journey from the general to the particular - you end up with knowing exactly what you are reading.
Thanks for putting this up David.

Ray

Comment is about Prickly Pear (blog)

Original item by David Cooke

News Flash - News Flash - News Flash

There will be no meeting next Monday due to the train strike!

Next meet up for March will be the 20th that gives us another week for the theme of Internationalism/globalism
as we might be doing something for International Poetry Day!

If there is another train strike we might not!

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Meeting for Monday 13th March has been re-scheduled

to Monday 20th March due to the train strike!

The theme will be internationalism/globalism since the group might be doing something for - - -

International Poetry Day in March

Comment is about Rescheduled Write Out Loud at Stockport art gallery tonight (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Refined and powerful, a definition of intent, and perhaps could be the point of no return - which on rare occasions we might experience.

Always a pleasure to read you elP.

Ray

Comment is about motive (blog)

Original item by nunya

For me, Paul, it is the 'intimacy' you evoke, with what you choose to talk about and how you choose to say it. Your words create atmosphere and deep feeling, a sense of real participation in your experience. Including the dog is icing on the cake - a superb choice to conclude the moment. I highly respect your work.

Comment is about Inevitabilities (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Probably with a steel wire mesh, eh Travis? My grandson did the same when 'privileged' to stay for a week in my house while his grand-dad and I were away. And it was a brand new pan - all scratched up like mice with long toenails had danced a fandango.

Comment is about Nan Was My Nigella (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

I think you have invented the stealth poem elP.

Comment is about motive (blog)

Original item by nunya

sexy... romancing the words is not bad anyway...

Comment is about To that tantalizing lady in red (blog)

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Hello elP, sorry for the delay in responding. I make it a rule never to suggest explicit alterations, or propose one word should replace another; it's a cardinal sin in my view. I might suggest however that you could lose 'does' from the first line (last verse). I think 'close' and 'claim' work well alliteratively. If you're happy with it then that's all that matters really. If, though, you feel inclined to tinker, come back to it periodically; i do this with mine and sometimes i surprise myself by spotting obvious options that had hitherto remained invisible.

Comment is about reconquistadora (blog)

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Hi Paul Glad you liked 'Prickly Pear'. David

Comment is about Paul Waring (poet profile)

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'and her eyes were her scales' - perfect, Paul. My Nana was a cracking cook and had a pub in the 70s. I used to like washing up the customers' plates; unfortunately, never having seen a non-stick pan before, i gave that s good scrubbing too.

Comment is about Nan Was My Nigella (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Hope you don't mind, Paul but I have written a Wordpress blog entry about your poem: https://francesmacaulayforde.wordpress.com/2017/03/10/nan-was-my-nigella/

Comment is about Nan Was My Nigella (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Colin, I am a rare pipe smoker, but ashtrays are not involved in that. Mainly I send smoke signals to my wife, (she loathes the smell). Talking of the art of stone ashtrays, I did have one in serpentine (from the Lizard in Cornwall, blue and veiny(like me). I knew a draughtsman once who had a piston ashtray made from a 600cc pot from a Panther single m'bike, that was a beaut. I love old artefacts and am an avid collector of bits and pieces. Thanks for the compliment, I try to present a variety as you know.

Thanks for your comment Paul, goodonya.

Thanks everyone for the likes too!

Ray

Comment is about SMOKING REQUISITES (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Hello Ebonaya,

This piece seems more fitting for the discussion forum section of this website. You posted this in the poetry blog section but it is not really a poem.

Moreover, I think that this piece is a little narrow minded. Yes, mainstream rap is infamous for promoting sexual vulgarity and violence.

However, there are many rappers that share their Christian world view through their craft. That means their lyrics are positive, free from vulgarity and promotion for drug abuse and violence. I could actually name more than a few and I shall below in the following format-

Label: rappers

Reach records: Lecrae, Andy Mineo, Tedashii, Kb
Humble Beast: Propaganda, Jackie Hill Perry, Braille, Sho Baraka

Capitol CMG: NF, Social Club Misfit Generation
Clear sight music: Flame, Mike Real
Collision Records: Alex Faith, Dre Murray
RMG: Derek Minor, Canon, B Cooper
GOM: Bizzle, Flo, Datin, Selah the corner

There are many more that I don't know their label or they might just be independent. Other include: Benjah, Aha Gazelle, Kaleb Mitchell, WxNDER Y, KJ-52, ect, ect...

That's a lot of rappers right there and if you look up some of them you will realize that there are many people tuning into their music because it is uplifting and still ''dope'' rap music.

I don't think that Poetry should be versus Rap. I get that you like poetry better and that's cool. I think Rap utilizes poetry as the lyrics over a great beat...the same way that rhetoric uses poetry when a poem is performed as spoken word.

Well, that was my two cents.

Comment is about Poetry Vs. Rap (blog)

Original item by Ebonaya Smallwood

David, just like the other poems you've posted on here that I've commented on, another beautifully written piece. I yearn to develop this style of writing. Very enjoyable, thanks.

Paul

Comment is about Prickly Pear (blog)

Original item by David Cooke

Thanks a million Colin, Ray and Frances, you have no idea how much these lovely comments have touched my heart. I wanted to write about my nan for ages but couldn't get it right, but hopefully the finished piece has done her proud.

Paul

Comment is about Nan Was My Nigella (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Lovely Ray. Hope short comment suffices as only just flown back today and everything is still up in the air. Aythangyow.
Paul

Comment is about SMOKING REQUISITES (blog)

Original item by ray pool

andy, there is sort of an unspoken "i'm" before the hopeful in the 4th verse.

thank you for your kind words, miss, david, and andy. this one is pretty personal and recent.

LB

Comment is about one day (blog)

Original item by Little Bit

Thanks very much all, glad you enjoyed it ?

Comment is about Unsolicited (1968 - 2017) (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Always good to see certain issues discussed.
What is true? What is fact?
Do like poles repel? Or do they attract?

Comment is about We all do it (blog)

Original item by Louis Audet

As everyone else has responded; the love shines brightly out of this beautiful tribute to a much-loved nan.

Of all the poems I've read today & yesterday (Oz time-differences) this one is by far and away, the most memorable demonstration of female nurturing and love I've read.

Very well done - I too stand and salute you, Paul.

Comment is about Nan Was My Nigella (blog)

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I don't know why I like this but I do

Comment is about Charlie Clark (blog)

Original item by Charlie Clark

you could display your whistles in them Ray ?

my old ashtray is knocking about in the garage somewhere but not as glamorous as your malachite and lapis lazuli ones - mine was fashioned from an old car piston.

it's ironic how such a grim pastime was afforded such luxury accessories and how such beautiful stones were turned into items to be stubbed on and piled with stinking ash and butts.

as always you fit so much into your poetry which makes it so pleasurable to read. As an afterthought, perhaps there are craftspeople somewhere who can repurpose these old ashtrays into something new and beautiful like jewellery.

Col

Comment is about SMOKING REQUISITES (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Thanks Suki, really kind of you! And thanks to you also, Andy, as always ?

Comment is about International Women's Day (blog)

Original item by Danni Matthews

Hi John,

Always great to meet folks who appreciate haiku. For me, I think I just love the challenge: infuse as much poetic punch into 17 syllables. It's half torture, half fun lol ? Looking forward to reading your collection!

Comment is about John Garbutt (poet profile)

Original item by John Garbutt

Thanks Cynthia, much appreciated.

David, yes, a right liberty and I just shoe horned it in 'cause I did think it sounded convincing! Thanks.

Comment is about TV SOAPS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Wonderfully evocative and a delight Paul. In expressing this bit of true domestic history, you have simultaneously kicked the whole bullshit contrivance of Celeb chefdom into touch, in my book. My mum had a Spong mincer with cutters and I used to wonder how the mince came out wriggling.
A very fine poem and a joy.

Ray

Comment is about Nan Was My Nigella (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Lovely to read the words of someone not brainwashed by the status quo and the mindlessness of received "wisdom."

Refreshing Laura. x

Ray

Comment is about Unsolicited (1968 - 2017) (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Just heard the Azure Window has collapsed into the sea! What's going on!

Comment is about Prickly Pear (blog)

Original item by David Cooke

Thanks .. I don't like playing it safe when I write.

Comment is about We all do it (blog)

Original item by Louis Audet

Thank you for the lovely comment on my poem "the little things".

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

brilliant! - how much you want for these two lines guv?

haring back from Harrod's in a hackney cab

midnight chocolate cake fridge raids or bolognese in bed

My Nan smoked Piccadilly's but couldn't cook for toffees - unfortunately some days we had no choice when she came to look after us - her custard was either runny or lumpy or solid but never just right and her attempts remain family jokes to this day! Bless - you and her and your Nan too ? The world is richer!

Comment is about Nan Was My Nigella (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

my favourite of the day ?

Comment is about Heroines in the dark (blog)

Original item by Alem Hailu G/Kristos

this is terrific David but did you mean to repeat the whole poem twice? I've been scrolling up and down trying to work it out. It's very good so I didn't mind reading it through again. All the best, Colin

Comment is about Prickly Pear (blog)

Original item by David Cooke

what a lovely and thoughtful response to our comments Cynthia - thanks.

your 'drippling' is growing on me - a bit ?

Comment is about Healing Waters (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thanks Suki, how right you are about memories from childhood/early life. I became a bit teary-eyed today reminiscing about my nan, who I last saw just before my 7th birthday, but who gave me enough love to last a lifetime. Yes, very precious memories.

And how right you are about cooking being an act of love.

Thank you for posting such lovely comments Suki, they are absolutely spot-on ?

Paul

Comment is about Nan Was My Nigella (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Cheers so much Laura.

Raj, as for dessert, even looking at most Indian desserts is enough to bring on diabetes. Having said that, I will put on my "to write" list a poem about pistachio kulfi - a particularly favourite of mine!

Cheers,
Suki

Comment is about Ode To My Vegetable Samosa (blog)

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