I like haikus made into poems like this. I've done a couple myself and wonder why it's not more popular. After all, what is language if not to have fun with? Great stuff Lynn.

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Original item by Lynn Dye

Thanks Harry/Laura, just tried to make the words speak for themselves. I agree withJohn. It deserves a wide audience.

Comment is about Kaleidoscope: Laura Taylor, Flapjack (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Wonderful foray into northern life with all its finesse! The innocence of youth is a wonderful thing, tha' knows.

Ray

Comment is about We're off to Never never land - Paracetamol, cucumber sandwiches and the lost rent boy Version 2 (blog)

Original item by Matt

Lynn,
I`ve got a funny feeling that this one is `taking the Micky` in more ways than one. :)

Comment is about their first night together (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

I take this as `about` the un-pin-down-ability of poetry n.

A Chesterton example of paradox:

`Take the case of courage. No quality has ever so much addled the brains and tangled the definitions of merely rational sages. Courage is almost a contradiction in terms. It means a strong desire to live taking the form of a readiness to die. 'He that will lose his life, the same shall save it,' is not a piece of mysticism for saints and heroes. It is a piece of everyday advice for sailors or mountaineers. It might be printed in an Alpine guide or a drill book. This paradox is the whole principle of courage; even of quite earthly or brutal courage. A man cut off by the sea may save his life if we will risk it on the precipice.`

Tommy`s piece mentions mathematics, confusion, and
the point at which motion defines all laws. it also talks about a conflation of contradictory assertions. All of which jusifies elPintor fetching in science and mathematics.It is also obviously talking about poetry, with which the thing is connected....I think elPintors comments are valid.

The things being talked about here is the connection of mathematics to the scientific changes which seem to be shaking the former certainties of the old sciences, and a
connection to the traditional - sometimes paradoxical -
indeterminacy of meaning in language.

Sometimes this leads to a sort of wooly, disconnected theory of poetry... Personally, I think a good exercise in
considering this is to read some (good) modern stuff against the interpretive towsing given to Shakespeare`s
sonnet 18 In `Wikipedia sonnet 18`.

Comment is about Paradoxes: 1; 2; 1.5 and (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Thanks for your interpretation and advice Graham :)

Comment is about Battle of our chests (blog)

Original item by Alexandra K. Parapadakis

Ray - you are more than welcome.
Rob

Comment is about ray pool (poet profile)

Original item by ray pool

There should be more articles about this.

Comment is about Kaleidoscope: Laura Taylor, Flapjack (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Fully deserved for "Alas, a lack and three times woe" alone, JH. A little disappointed however that you couldn't find room for "Odds, balls and bodkins".

Comment is about 'Spoon With A View' by Jonathan Humble is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thanks for your comments Robert. Pleased you liked it. Harry

Comment is about Come the Revolution (blog)

Original item by harry

thanks for the like Robert, Harry.

Comment is about Revolting peasants (blog)

Original item by harry

Beautiful

Comment is about memememe.jpg (photo)

Original item by Corr Lens

Gorgeous man. Muaah! Will write soooooooon!

Comment is about Corr Lens (poet profile)

Original item by Corr Lens

Hi,

I have been on the site now going on about two months, and have since been reading your work. Being somewhat new around here, I realize I run the risk of, unintentionally, "rubbing someone the wrong way", however, I only respond when something has caught my attention and the piece moves me to do so; even then, only when I like the work and I can come up with words to express my thoughts. I would never try to manipulate anyone through a response to their work. I commented because I enjoyed reading it (over and over) and found the form particularly interesting.

If I said that I understand the piece completely as you intended it, I would be, at the least, exaggerating. That said, the "terminology" you've used intermixed with poetic phrasing (particularly, "Movement never occupies a series of definite spaces, sobbing in and out of existence, but a wail that rises and falls, occupying- deserting, being and not being simultaneously..") grabbed my attention. There are very particular words you've used that suggest "science" and "mathematics" (ie uncertainty, changeover, series of definite spaces), yet you've intermixed them with words like "confusion"..suffice it to say that it shows that you've put a fair amount of thought and work into putting this together.

Some of my reaction is based in memories of the amazement I've felt as a result of taking classes in mathematics. I'm no "beautiful mind", yet I can appreciate the excitement of coming to a sort of revelation through study. So, I hope I understand, yet I can only interpret through the lens of my own perspective.

Hope that answers your questions, Tommy,

elP

Comment is about Paradoxes: 1; 2; 1.5 and (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Hi Phil Glad you liked my 'Cogs'. I see we're both 1953ers!

Comment is about Phil Ireland (poet profile)

Original item by Phil Ireland

Ouch!

Comment is about A Shoot Off In Your Room (blog)

Original item by Madison

elp- Hi, having given some thought to your response, and considerable effort into the piece, I have to wonder from whence your conclusions arrive. Have and when have you- if ever- read other work of mine? or, am I experiencing an Hemorrhagic interlude? Not wishing to appear (oh dear) flippant nor drunk, I wonder am I experiencing clever manipulation? I say this as I am a very open yet frivolous chap. I do enjoy your analysis, and, wonder (once again) if you understand the piece or are you just playing with gramma? Anyway you have taken some considerable effort, and I have, as already stated, enjoyed your response. I do consider it (your response) interesting. Yours in pergatude Tommy

Comment is about Paradoxes: 1; 2; 1.5 and (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

I love that you Loved it.......Thanks Jade

Comment is about Hourglass Appraisal (blog)

Original item by kimafia Jones

Thank you both. I just tried to let the words speak for themselves.

Comment is about Writing the revolution: ferocity and finesse at Laura Taylor's 'Kaleidoscope' launch (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thanks a bunch, Jade..your comment's much appreciated.

elP

Comment is about smatterings of hope (blog)

Original item by nunya

Cheers Rob, appreciate it.

Thanks Stu. Great places these derelict areas for the odd poem ! Glad you liked it.

Ray

Comment is about INDUSTRIAL WASTELAND (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Harry - I like this piece for a number of reasons. Come the revolution and the rich on funeral pyres the 'revolutionaries' must resist the temptation of hoarding the repatriated gold. If not, they become the despised rich and the revolution becomes a 'merry-go-round'. I like that you have realised this, and the repetition of the line 'Burn the rich' could be seen to emphasise the point - Along with the closing stanza. Nicely written sir!
Rob

Comment is about Come the Revolution (blog)

Original item by harry

A huge Thank You to Dave - I am beyond chuffed that I can finally put all of this out into the world. It's massive fun doing the ranty stuff, but I've been wanting folk to know about the other stuff for ages now. Cheers!

Comment is about Kaleidoscope: Laura Taylor, Flapjack (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Great rhyme scheme, loved the audio:)

Comment is about Timelessness (blog)

Original item by Phil Ireland

Julian, thank you so much for this blinding review, and for coming to the launch. It was a great moment when I saw your face :D

And Harry - ace to see you too! Thanks so much for coming and buying a copy. 'Robust' :D Well that's one way of putting it haha :D

Comment is about Writing the revolution: ferocity and finesse at Laura Taylor's 'Kaleidoscope' launch (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

thanks all. back to normal with this one!

Comment is about life (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

cheers both, just a bit of fun inspired by something called an anti-slam, where people stand up and read the worst poem (cheesy, punny etc) they can.

im reading it monday night so i shall report on how it goes!

if anyone wants proof of how wonderful anti-slams are, go to the link below and enjoy.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VANCLiH5ifs

Comment is about tripping balls with billy shakespeare (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Thanks for reading my poem. Glad you liked it. Maybe I should get into writing Haikus, they seem short. Chrissy x

Comment is about Gestures (blog)

Original item by Chrissy R.

Thanks David for reading my words. Seducer or Seduced? I'll have to think about that one. Chrissy x

Comment is about The Seducer (blog)

Original item by Chrissy R.

Phil - time is a constrict invented by man, but has become the governor to whom we have all become slaves. How much 'freedom' would we have without these confines which shackle us to the clock? Nice piece.
Rob

Comment is about Timelessness (blog)

Original item by Phil Ireland

Chrissy - I can promise you plenty of short ones! xx Liked this.
Rob

Comment is about Gestures (blog)

Original item by Chrissy R.

Having read your poems do you want to be the seducer
or the seduced

I hate to think of you sitting there completely bored

Although I know the feeling well enough

Comment is about The Seducer (blog)

Original item by Chrissy R.

Hello Mrs.
Just to say thank you for your kind words on Thursday.
For all the time you have given me.
Good luck with everything.
I'm still too nervous to put a profile up on here, some sad memories for me.
See you whenever.
love me :) x
Ps forgot my password and had changed email so had to make a new one with the full name !

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

So much truth here, David. Well written, I love it.

Comment is about The Jolly Merchant Bankers (blog)

Original item by David Lindsay

Thanks, gents.
I wish I could add the name of the author whose lines I
recite to myself at any given opportunity. They take me
to a panorama of the high seas and a lone square rigger
slicing its graceful way through uncertain weather near
the bottom of the world. The picture is always vivid in my mind.

Comment is about CLIPPER (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

How to imagine a life spent in a "well-watered" goldfish
bowl, with every second of life scrutinised and judged?
Scary and surely likely to induce problems for anyone
less used from childhood to the duties and the demands.
There can be no one who could ever hope do it better.
What a trouper - blessed with that magical smile!
Here's a health unto Her Majesty.

Comment is about Queen (blog)

Original item by Charity Kosta

Dave,
A fair and honest representation of the types of poems in Laura`s collection. (with enlightening specimens of the originals)

I like your comment that Laura has a much wider emotional range that tub thumping anger, and that she repays re- reading.

Comment is about Kaleidoscope: Laura Taylor, Flapjack (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

If you follow this rhetoric with the wonderful quantitive easing to bail out the banks and flood the markets with money, you have a recipe for investing in London properties creating unreachable ghettoes in our streets.

A fine poem, David.

Comment is about The Jolly Merchant Bankers (blog)

Original item by David Lindsay

Almost a touch of Frankenstein in this Stu. Wonderful use of the imagination , rolling away with itself. Seems to cover most foul promises and hopes offered by the elected whoever they are.

The usual power is in there!

Ray

Comment is about life (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Stu - this is like the Bard on acid. Not my favourite of your pieces, as I found it a bit gimmicky, but I can still appreciate the skill involved. Cheers.
Rob

Comment is about tripping balls with billy shakespeare (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Stu - an alternative 'theory of life'. Does Hawking know how powerful his opponent is? I doubt it. I find the piece exciting, twisted, beautiful and disturbing at the same time. Nice one Stu.
Rob

Comment is about life (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Julian,
Very good account of what was a quite robust launch evening.

I like that alliteration in the second paragraph...and the way you quote from the genitalial `Environmental Intercourse, (which - being from the personna of the fracker - manages somehow to also criticise a masculinely brutal kind of rape.)

It was great to actually meet you, a modern facilitator of
poetry, at last. (especially just around the corner from the old O`Connors Liverpool Scene hangout)

Comment is about Writing the revolution: ferocity and finesse at Laura Taylor's 'Kaleidoscope' launch (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Oops, sorry to spoil it, Tommy, ha ha ha.

I'll just pretend next time ;~)

Thanks for comment, appreciated. x

Comment is about sensual awakening (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

GERRRRRRRROUT! - hang on your "old man"? You have a spouse? :~( (he walks away with hands in pockets-and shouts over his shoulder " I never liked it anyway)...

;~))

Comment is about sensual awakening (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Rob - I think it may have been a fictional character in the book I was reading, but then being happily married, perhaps it was my old man, ha ha. Or perhaps I have too vivid an imagination!!
Thank you for compliment. xx

Jemima - thanks for the laugh and the mention of yoghurt - well, why not, I say!

Thanks also to R and Chrissy for liking x

Comment is about sensual awakening (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Good one indeed. I can definitely connect with this poem, Stu. Well done.

Comment is about life (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

This is wonderfully written

- Jade

Comment is about smatterings of hope (blog)

Original item by nunya

I like this poem

- Jade

Comment is about Fuck It Why Not (blog)

Original item by Corr Lens

thats gorgeous ray

Comment is about INDUSTRIAL WASTELAND (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Cresting the rise I came upon brickworks

gashes of red powdered spent force

cascades of guts pushed back

to a stubbled hill

Comment is about INDUSTRIAL WASTELAND (blog)

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