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d.knape

Wed 4th Sep 2019 02:55


the Jewish state is the ONLY Democracy
in the Middle East.
All the other country's are run by dictators, kings, or religious fanatics.
I'm on the side of Democracy.

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d.knape

Wed 4th Sep 2019 02:52

people who use children
to fight their wars for them,
strapping explosives to their chests
are not Freedom Fighters.

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Ruth O'Reilly

Wed 4th Sep 2019 01:25

All this political Correctness is a bit suspect

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Don Matthews

Wed 4th Sep 2019 00:52

'Man has to lose himself to find himself'

So there's hope for me yet? I was beginning to get worried......

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Don Matthews

Wed 4th Sep 2019 00:47

Like the rhythm
Like the rhyme
Like non-fragile
All the time?....

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Don Matthews

Wed 4th Sep 2019 00:31

Ray

To me you have simply presented two extremes and how they both now live. How they came about is left unsaid, and is not the point. Eva and Stanley could have worked hard to afford their present lifestyle. Derek could have inherited a fortune but been a wastrel resulting in his present lifestyle. Who is the 'better' person?

You concentrated on comparing the extremes with no mention of how they came about. I liked this approach Ray.

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Don Matthews

Wed 4th Sep 2019 00:15

I like the way the mind can jump from the thing under discussion to another thing not in the discussion....

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raypool

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 23:17

Thanks for your prompt and full assessment Brian. I am certainly in emotional territory with this, and am offering no solution nor judgment, simply pointing out that life can be a matter of extremes. I agree with you about the obvious conclusions that will be drawn , in the same way existing prejudices can be drawn out if the bait is dangled in that direction. Obviously Eva and Stanley don't need help but they get choices with their money while Derek would have trouble improving his lot. I don't think I can be accused of over simplifying social differences, but nor would I shrink from them. I just think the distinction between the characters here form an idea. However i'll admit I bought a copy of Hello yesterday and was quite aghast at the standard of journalism in it and how trite and self congratulatory the magazine is. But it sells - I bought one( just the once).
Enjoy the estate worker.

Ray

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Tue 3rd Sep 2019 23:00

Ray - many people who read this may decide that Eva and Stanley are wicked people who have amassed an obscene fortune by exploiting the downtrodden working class.

They may also decide that poor old Derek has been badly treated by a non-caring society and has ended up where he is through no fault of his own.

Part of the reason for these assumptions is because of the nature of the WOL community, but also partly by the skill of the writer in his choice of names and description of lifestyles.

It's a particularly British trait to despise the striver and lionise the skiver. Of course I could be barking up the wrong tree entirely, and Eva and Stanley are in fact a couple of capitalistic pigs who have put Derek and others like him in the gutter as your piece seems to imply.

Anyway, have a good evening. Me...I'm off to roast an Estate worker.

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Adam Rabinowitz

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 21:06

I once worked with a teacher from UK who asked all the students to take out their rubbers. That was a fun moment for her I think.?

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Chrystel Roberts

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 20:40

‘stay on higher ground'

I hear you Raj. Thanks for the sage advice!

Keep smiling

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Raj Ferds

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 19:29

Chrystel,
Stay on the higher ground where you belong. The climate's better there anyway.

This is your poem. You own it. So Celebrate it.
Don't stoop.

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Ruth O'Reilly

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 19:12

Enjoyed Reading your 'When the devil smiles' poem in the Autumn Edition of Printed words. You have a talent for turning a random news story into a totally different creative piece.

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Martin Elder

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 19:08

Thanks a lot guys

Keith
I am with you in the Maigret. its very much that era. I have to say your request for more has set my creativity going with a follow up which I have just written. watch this space for its posting soon

Devon
You have mentioned one of my favourite artists in Hopper and of course the inimitable Bogart. Who can forget the Maltese falcon and Casablanca. strangely enough I dug out my old Ricki lee Jones album which set me off writing a piece about her who was apparently Tom waits girlfriend at one time

Jason
I am so please you liked it does as you say have said it has a real Marlowe feel about it which I had not picked up on immediately. I now picture him solving another case.

Once again thank you so much

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Ruth O'Reilly

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 19:02

I'm partial to a beanie
Upon my head
Beans in a tin
When I need to
Be fed
When I was young
And still at school
I'd watch Rowan Atkinson
Playing the fool
My thoughts
On beans
Could go on an on
But Beanz Means Heinz
Was the best Slogan

Michael McIntyre riding that imaginary horse was something I need to erase though :D

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Ruth O'Reilly

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 18:29

Thank you Nigel ?

Thanks For reading Do.Rothy Yeah I got a medieval romantic fantasy vibe to it as it came to me.

Don - Being Lost is one of the most creative places to be....I've begun to like when I find myself there....in this poem though, just like Sister Sledge I was Lost in Music. The music of the week of being my muse, just a bit of free writing with a printed prompt that's all.

As Ghandi once said 'Man has to lose himself to find himself'

Added to that I'll say he may find even more aspects to himself when he returns!

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Chrystel Roberts

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 18:19

Hey Leon,

I appreciate your comment.

I feel like this is the second time within 7 days that I've had to explain my work! lol, it fazes me NOT!

Some people like my poetry and others don't; fair enough. We are all entitled to an opinion. Diversity makes life interesting.

However, there is a difference between constructive criticism and ‘throwing shade'. I would certainly never do the latter to a fellow poet.

I do not take myself too seriously and remain unapologetic about my work.

Keep it real, Leon!

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keith jeffries

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 18:18

Don and Ray,

Thank you for your comments as they are much appreciated.
Keith

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raypool

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 18:04

Thanks Don for that. You're being very nice to me.....

Ray

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raypool

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 18:02

Hi Keith. I especially like the first line - the sort of invasion of humans in the overall time frame you describe so well. I could almost imagine a war poem coming because of that. A nicely turned sentiment that we can all respond to in our own way. It is hard these days to get away from that distant sound of traffic, but this gives us that impression!

Ray

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raypool

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 17:57

Thanks for the likes, Jon and Kate.

Hi Trevor. It's easy to try being clever with the sound of word bites which can be tempting, but you're right I started with a view and hope it came across succinctly. Your point with the last line would certainly tidy up the poem, but it does for me punctuate the philosophy of a grudging acceptance of sobriety with its lack of pleasure I suppose. Thanks for that though.

Ruth, it can be quite surreal to be the only sober person, but I can act a bit squiffy and blend in. I've got to be quite good at it. Being a pianist I have seen the rise of comfort zones at functions over the course of many evenings.

Cheers Don. I like it 'cause it saves time....

Ray

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raypool

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 17:48

Hi Trevor. Although I recall your earlier version of this (I hope I'm right!) it's always a pleasure to share with your observations, keen and detailed but delivered in brush strokes with a back story such as is here presented. You have captured an atmosphere that I felt when staying in the area. There is up the east coast a sort of lost kingdom by the sea which is reflected in a perceived delicacy especially sculpted by the light which seems so serene. I think of Benjamin Britten in Aldeburgh for example whose mysterious view of life was personified in the area.

Ray

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Jason Bayliss

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 16:25

Ok, on one hand I see what they mean, I'm dyslexic and it's a bit harder to read like this, on the other hand, if this is the style you prefer then of course you should stick with it.
Although to be fair, I don't think anyone was suggesting you change, just voicing a preference.
Either way, loved it.

J. x

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Don Matthews

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 15:40

Nicely penned. Serious thoughts.

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Don Matthews

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 15:26

Interesting thought Nigel...

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Don Matthews

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 15:24

I'm lost.....

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Nigel Astell

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 14:55

Thanks for your like Franziska

with this unpredictable weather we are having at the moment
I feel I am being ambushed every day!

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Nigel Astell

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 14:45

Top best selling songs - - -
but I choose this poem as my number one!

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Nigel Astell

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 14:17

Thanks everyone for their likes.

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Nigel Astell

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 14:10

I think that many poets need a site like this to build themselves into true self-belief.

thanks for that Ruth

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raypool

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 11:57

Hi Devon. You make a good point re sociopathy. Sociopaths are hot wired to exploit opportunities at any cost I believe, and so many make high positions in business. They are hard to control as they are often in control and can bite back!

Hi David. Thanks for your thoughts - I hesitated on putting Christian ethics in as it does have a sub text, it should have been in quotes really! Your observations are dead right - in rising up you need the reverse of a clear conscience, which is no conscience. Two powers are essential to the wheeler dealer - blinding confidence and a thick skin.

Thanks for stopping by Jon.

All the best, Ray

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Tue 3rd Sep 2019 11:54

You may have a personal story behind this poem Chrystel, so I've taken it as it reads, and it does so in a way I love. Cheers.

LS.

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keith jeffries

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 11:52

Penguin,

A poem worthy of real acclaim as it accurately describes what can be found in most towns and cities. Dysfunctional people for whatever reason herded together in what becomes a ghetto. Well done

Thanks
Keith

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keith jeffries

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 11:46

d.k.,

Noble sentiments in a well rhymed poem. Penguin raises an interesting point about freedom fighters. The Israelis regard the Palestinians as terrorists but others see them as freedom fighters. Having said that I stand firmly alongside the pro democracy movement in Hong Kong which faces a dictatorship.

Thank you for this
Keith

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Tue 3rd Sep 2019 11:44

Totally agree with previous comments. ?

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Ray Miller

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 11:29

The poem itself uses English in quite a novel way. Apt, I suppose. I couldn't watch the video. Ross and McIntyre is too much this early in the day.

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Ray Miller

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 11:25

I'd have liked the poem to be more specific, rather than about "Freedom fighters everywhere" . Fighters for freedom often end up on opposing sides, after all. In short, whose side are you on?

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d.knape

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 11:15

For Freedom Fighters everywhere
whoever they may be
a reminder it takes courage
to fight for Liberty.

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trevor homer

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 10:55

Keith - thanks for taking the time to comment. For me it is a comment on the present and a snapshot of thoughts on a recent visit to Kent. I'm very much of the here and now.

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John Coopey

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 10:55

It would be a huge error of judgement not to consider democracy anything but a fragile construct.

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Devon Brock

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 10:36

Excellent JC. I read in Geldof's voice as well.

D

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Don Matthews

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 10:12

Jeremiad - clever....

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Don Matthews

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 10:09

Ah Jason, you've beaten me to it. Yes, a masterpiece. To me.

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Don Matthews

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 10:07

Dark. But so damn good. As a rhymer I enjoyed the clever use of the technique.....

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Jason Bayliss

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 10:07

That penguin, is a proper little masterpiece. There's so much that I absolutely love about this poem. We all have an estate like this somewhere in our town or city, and many of us have at one time or other lived on or near one. The real joy is that you've done such a good job of describing this one, whether it's real or just exists in your head you've painted the picture perfectly. Excellent!

J. x

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Don Matthews

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 09:26

Ah Keith. I lived in England for 6 years. One thing I dearly miss is the local village. And village green. We just don't have them here.

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keith jeffries

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 09:09

Don,

Thank you for this humour. Many years ago I attended University in California which necessitated buying a car. I quickly came to realise that the vocabulary relating to a car is very different to ours. Gas pedals, hoods, trunks windshield wipers to name a few. After buying the car I realised that it was low on petrol so I stopped and asked a passer by where the nearest Petrol Station was. He looked quizzically at me. I repeated my question and drew his attention to the dashboard which displayed my need of petrol. O, he replied you need gas. From then on I was on a learning curve. Bless them they do try.

Keith

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keith jeffries

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 08:58

Devon, Leon and Kevin,

Thank you for your kind comments. We now languish in the final days of summer with Harvest Festivals not far away. I shall have to visit local villages in search of homemade marmalade.

Keith

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Don Matthews

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 08:48

Jeez John, rough stuff. I'm pleased to see you've calmed down a bit since 2012....

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Jason Bayliss

Tue 3rd Sep 2019 08:41

If anything, the fact that you're reaching for something you can't explain as well, just adds to why I like it.

J. x

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