Chrystel, this has a really nice rhythm and the idea of uncrying tears is really intriguing. It reminds me of a book called Times Arrow where all this horrific stuff is written in reverse order until the beginning where it all ...well I wont spoil it. But again....great poem
Comment is about Three Empty Words (blog)
Original item by Chrystel Roberts
Never be too shy to share your work Amanda. Never ever. I know it takes courage, particularly if you're a newcomer. I really am harmless. Jason will attest to that. Won't you Jason?....
The bottom line is you basically write for yourself, in the way you are comfortable and happy with. If others like it fine. If not? - still fine. Well that's the way I work.... ?
Comment is about Pocket Full Of Lint (blog)
Original item by Amanda Ann;
I ain't a limerick lover
They're too predictable
Inlike my rhyming verses
So unpredictable
Wot Don?......?
Comment is about Blessed With A Curse -A Wretched Rhyme (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Confused as to how I got lumped into the negative comment category I have never put a negative comment on anyone's poem and certainly didn't mean my asking about the 12 to be at all negative I thought it was really cool the idea and everything else about the poem so really not sure why that was said about me and it's not that important to me about the person who said it but I certainly don't want the poet to misinterpret my comment so Chrystal deepest apologies if anything in my comment seemed negative and if someone were to look through all the comments that I make and I make a lot of comments they could see that I've never said anything negative so that really bummed me out
Comment is about who cares, anyway? (blog)
Original item by Chrystel Roberts
The best poems make you want to know more. Thanks for the poetic education. Stunning work John.
Comment is about Zoroastrian (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Sat 31st Aug 2019 03:33
not me.
i did not throw that bag of Cheetos.
whose side are you on?
do you have "Cheetos" in Oz?
Comment is about Don Matthews (poet profile)
Original item by Don Matthews
Sat 31st Aug 2019 03:19
Sat 31st Aug 2019 03:16
Toad in hole
will soon grow old
as he sits in sun
a "Whole Toad In One"
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Sat 31st Aug 2019 03:13
you are the only one who mentioned "Goed"
personally I thought that was the best part!
hahaha
Comment is about Don Matthews (poet profile)
Original item by Don Matthews
I am dyslexic as well, however I love writing and playing with words. I just became brave enough to share my work. thank you for your comment. -Jason Bayliss?
Comment is about Pocket Full Of Lint (blog)
Original item by Amanda Ann;
dk - I liked everything about this. Particularly 'not goed'. Clever
MC - "toad in the hole". Clever
Comment is about The Toad In The Road (blog)
Original item by d.knape
Devon Brock
Sat 31st Aug 2019 00:23
Ah yes, my Bella, now 10, shown as my profile pic, suffers as well.
D
Comment is about Zoroastrian (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Thanks Devon. I have an old black Labrador, Charlie, he is 12 now, so his infirmity causes me some concern, but he still eats well and he really loves sleeping.
Comment is about Zoroastrian (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
I thought that a single line 'scans'?
Where two or more we say can 'scan'
But I'm just a low simple rhymer
What would I know?.....
Comment is about GIVING A HAND (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Hello?
Are you
There?
My credit you're chewing
Up
You
Comment is about Play On Words (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
I'm pleased that you all liked this.
And to some degree feel the same
❤
Comment is about The Nature of Things (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
Thanks for your considerations David. The fact is we don't get a choice , but if there was one - ah there's the rub. I just can't catch you out you scallywag. I can see your point entirely, thanks!
Ray
Comment is about TARIFF (blog)
Original item by ray pool
I can feel the emotion threading each line in this piece with a needle and crimson sew. The stark reality laid bare. Purged. Unmended and mended. Thank you for sharing such an exquisitely viscerally vivid piece. May your river pen flow eternal with creative endeavor. Blessings to you from the Universe ????
Comment is about The Awakening (blog)
Original item by Chakraj
Devon Brock
Fri 30th Aug 2019 22:33
John,
This is so wonderfully consoling. Deciphering your work is like opening a Chinese puzzle box. I mean that as a compliment. Once opened, there is always a gem inside.
D
Comment is about Zoroastrian (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
I suspect said Milligan was a far braver man than me, Leon.
And thanks for the “Like”. Chrystel too.
Comment is about WHEN HITLER BROUGHT THE HOUSE DOWN (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Devon Brock
Fri 30th Aug 2019 22:12
That sounds pretty cool. I love an ever-changing work environment. There are a lot of older machines out there, especially in rural communities, that require such fabrication shops to keep going. The parts are no longer available. But, of course, you know that.
D
Comment is about A Cog in the Works (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
<Deleted User> (17847)
Fri 30th Aug 2019 22:05
John, can I take it for granted that you will have like Mr Milligan had re Adolf, a part in Boris's downfall? ?
Comment is about WHEN HITLER BROUGHT THE HOUSE DOWN (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
I work for a typical small community metal fab and engineering shop. We take on all kinds of work. Lots of chassis for other components, aviation parts, exercise equipment...all those metal parts that everyone just takes for granted. Large and small. I love it because its always changing. My daughter works there also. She does the silkscreening.
Oh yeah...restaurant equipment too!
Comment is about A Cog in the Works (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
Thanks gentlemen. Good quote Don! Luckily it is all theoretical for us normal folk...!
Thanks for dropping in, Lisa, Devon and Ghazala. Many thanks.
Ray
Comment is about TARIFF (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Devon Brock
Fri 30th Aug 2019 21:47
If you don't mind me asking, what sort of things do you make there?
Comment is about A Cog in the Works (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
Yes... It is like that some days...lol..! Its a small shop and a lot of fun.
Comment is about A Cog in the Works (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
Devon Brock
Fri 30th Aug 2019 21:37
Thank you, Lisa. Brought a smile to my face. Makes me think of the music in the old WB cartoons whenever they cut to a factory scene. Ha! Found it -
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=23jdesvCoOY
D
Comment is about A Cog in the Works (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
I appreciate all the likes and comments my poem received.
I was inspired to write it, after reading this message on a inspirational card:
‘Sometimes when I say I'm OK, I want someone to look me in the eyes, hug me tight and say: I know you're not.'
Forgive me if I'm being schmaltzy, but I think that, deep down, we can all relate to those words.
Comment is about who cares, anyway? (blog)
Original item by Chrystel Roberts
Really really good. Love the shaping as well.
J. x
Comment is about who cares, anyway? (blog)
Original item by Chrystel Roberts
Devon Brock
Fri 30th Aug 2019 19:52
Chrystal,
I think the form of this poem adds quite a bit to the thoughts presented here. The distance between reality and expectation. What does courtesy allow? Is the question "How are you" ever sincerely asked? If we answer honestly, are we breaking the rules of civil society? If we did answer honestly, every time, I think there could be a great deal of healing. Thanks for this.
D
Comment is about who cares, anyway? (blog)
Original item by Chrystel Roberts
Thanks for that Lightbox message, Phil. Yes, little Kayla was marvellous. I have two lovely pictures of her which I have put on our Facebook site - maybe I should post them here, too. Her dad said it would be all right. There were 21 floor readers, plus Pete the featured poet and Rodney the compere. And thanks for your comment on my Three Kings poem. That was a pub where myself and fellow former newspaper colleagues met once a month from March 2013 until earlier this year. It changed hands, lost its rhinoceros, and we have moved to a pub a few staggers away, across the road. It's not the same - our pints often slide off the table and crash on the floor. Although maybe the subject of the poem has something to do with that ... that has never occurred to me before ...
Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Devon Brock
Fri 30th Aug 2019 19:39
Louise,
1) I love dogs
2) I love reading about dogs
3) I love reading about the canine/human relationship
4) I love songs about dogs - so here is a link for you:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gO11WcWFLow
Thanks,
D
Comment is about Lara (blog)
Original item by Louise Clarke
Beautiful Dog you have there Lara. Last week it was International Dog Day and this is a good poem for it. You can't beat the unconditional love of a dog
Comment is about Lara (blog)
Original item by Louise Clarke
What is the point that Don, Adam and Graham are hoping to achieve with their negative simplicity?
Am i losing something?
I appreciate the points from Ruth.
Surely Chrystel has a valid point.
Why the negativity folks?
Tommy
psps. I think that I may have missed some of the finer points made by Don, Adam and Graham. Apologies if I have.
tc
Comment is about Ruth O'Reilly (poet profile)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
What is the point that Don, Adam and Graham are hoping to achieve with their negative simplicity?
Am i losing something?
I appreciate the points from Ruth.
Surely Chrystel has a valid point.
Why the negativity folks?
Tommy
ps. I think that I may have missed some of the finer points made by Don, Adam and Graham. Apologies if I have.
Comment is about who cares, anyway? (blog)
Original item by Chrystel Roberts
You are right dear Devon. Thanks! I was actually thinking of removing it from the title. Will do!
Thank you for reading, liking and suggesting!?
Mae
Comment is about Blessed With A Curse -A Wretched Rhyme (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Sorry Laurence, but, I think that I disagree with everything that you say on this post. But feel free to disagree.
Tommy
Comment is about Clausal inference (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Loved it, and yes it is priceless. I also know what Don means. For me it's because I'm dyslexic, it doesn't mean I can't read it, it just means it's more difficult. Great poem though and whoever, "He," is he should think himself lucky ?.
J. x
Comment is about Pocket Full Of Lint (blog)
Original item by Amanda Ann;
Cheers, Ray!
Comment is about Bunty, I Miss You!: Heather Moulson, Dempsey & Windle (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thanks Devon and penguin, I had in mind some sort of outlaw type figure (Black Jack). But it really was like riffing, a bit, which is probably why it seems to have a "beat." I know what you mean Devon, but can't think of the track, it's like the echo of a whisper.
J. x
Comment is about Black Jack (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Great review for a great collection Greg! I would be rushing to add it to my shelf, but I have it. already dog - eared.
Ray Pool
Comment is about Bunty, I Miss You!: Heather Moulson, Dempsey & Windle (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
"Understand" doesn't seem quite the correct word, but you need the rhyme, so...
Last line scan better without "man's"?
Comment is about GIVING A HAND (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Jon Stainsby
Sat 31st Aug 2019 07:03
Very good point, Jason. I agree.
Comment is about Labyrinthine thoughts (blog)
Original item by Jon Stainsby