I hadn't thought of this. A 'stranger's' hand reaching out unexpectedly in time of need is rather special. If you know what I mean......
Comment is about Perfect Strangers (blog)
Original item by Chrystel Roberts
If it were not
For up/down weather
We'd have nothing to talk about
Whatever, whatever.....
etc etc.........?
Comment is about Heat Wave (blog)
Original item by Stuart Vanner
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A beautiful poem. And video to accompany it. A perfect choice. Thankyou for sharing. Both poem and video simple. My cup of tea.
D
Comment is about Spanish Rose (blog)
Original item by Vautaw
I like this Amy. I echo Adriana about the last line.....
Comment is about Self Loathing’s Song (blog)
Original item by AS Para
I've also learned something today
Americans end learn with an 'ed'
But Aussies and Brits do it differently
We end it with 't' like I've said
Golly gosh! what would we do without Google?
Comment is about Another Happy Tuesday (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
You crack me up! ? Hey, here's another verse...! Sorry, they keep coming.
Comment is about Argument For The Sake Of The Argument (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
More stuff came up. What
You mean by this Mae? Can foll
Ow drink of spirits
Why you in state of maehem?
Drink up
Hic....
Comment is about Argument For The Sake Of The Argument (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Devon Brock
Tue 27th Aug 2019 23:24
John,
I love your work. Some of the most thought provoking and dense I've ever read. "Between Belsen and Napalm" reads like an address, as I am certain you intended. Wonderful. Oftentimes your work reads as if you are a spectator to a grand charade.
D
Comment is about A wise fool (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Yeah, sorry some more stuff came up! But yes that's the spirit! True Maehem! ?
Thank you Don?
Mae
Comment is about Argument For The Sake Of The Argument (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Words have no meaning
Tra la la la la la la
Tra la la la la
My words? no meaning
I sing tra la for you Mae
Tra la la, Maehem!
Sheesh Don.....
Gosh! Didn't see 2 more verses. No respondo. Haiku'd out.....
Comment is about Argument For The Sake Of The Argument (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
d.k. thanks for your poems, Your stuff has a breadth and depth, simplicity and sincerity.
Go well
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Comment is about afishamongmany (poet profile)
Original item by afishamongmany
It's always a good day if a lesson is learned, well mostly.?
J. x
Comment is about Another Happy Tuesday (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
Thank you all for reading and commenting. I originally titled it "If... not that poem" similar to my "Goodnight Moon...not that book" of a couple days back but thought better of continuing in that vein...so will retitle it with your input.
Adam
Comment is about If Pessimistically Hopeful (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
Oh I really like that fish, really like it. Who wrote it? Yes I'd have to say I didn't set out for biblical exactly but I did aim for an angry God, I hope that came across?
J. x
Comment is about The Deity Screams (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Jason - certainly dramatic and well crafted but in no way biblical.
Many rail against God,
Though of course He's not there
And if He was
They still wouldn't care.
Some with an aside
Deny that He died
But most of the sea,
With a heave and a moan,
Just wish that He'd go
And leave them alone.
Go well
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Comment is about The Deity Screams (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Actually, yeah, "If," is a great title, I know that it's the title of one of my favourite all time poems by Rudyard Kipling, but I would have to agree with Lisa on this one, If is a great title.
J. x
Comment is about If Pessimistically Hopeful (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
Wow, thanks Devon. I don't know what to say except just, thanks.
I saw it as kind of a conductor, but just one who was so pissed off with his orchestra that he decides to conduct them on their last frantic symphony, one that is so difficult and loud and crazed that in making them play it he knows it will destroy them all. Glad you liked it and thank you so much.
J. x
Comment is about The Deity Screams (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Ah John - I too was born between Belsen and Napalm and have sat in that chair. King Solomon was the wisest of men and a mighty fool (as he himself confessed). As he says, 'All is vanity' but life itself is -not- in vain.
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Comment is about A wise fool (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Devon Brock
Tue 27th Aug 2019 21:29
Jason,
This is a fantastic piece. I was immediately struck and awed by the image of one hand on the sea and one in the sky. Approaching this image from a biblical or cultural sense, you have opposing forces joining together to destroy duality returning the earth to a point of unpeopled purification - shorn of free will and doubt. That you consistently utilized that image throughout the poem provides the poem another level of meaning, which I think is the hallmark of great poetry.
D
Comment is about The Deity Screams (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
'If' is a good title...I wrote one years ago along this line that I called 'If' Yours is much better Adam.
My 4th grade teacher would always question us with ' what if...'
Wonder...be curious...dream
Comment is about If Pessimistically Hopeful (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
Thanks Tommy, A Fish and Kate. Yes fantastic atmosphere Tommy. I'm saying nowt about Yorkshire folk liking to get their money's worth! It's nice to find out you're an Aussie Kate. I have a nephew in Perth. At least you'll know what cricket is, unlike most of our American cousins. They play a simplified form of cricket called baseball (wink!) don't they?. Strange how many games/sports were invented by us Brits. Nothing better to do, I suppose. Cricket began in SE England in the C16.
John
Comment is about Ben Stokes (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Indeed, Fish. A soul? It is why I asked the question through the frivolous vehicle of the broom sketch.
Comment is about TRIG'S BROOM (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
And that it is. Totally agree with this message.
J. x
Comment is about Tipping point (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Sometimes the strangers hand feels like the most familiar, it's true.
J. x
Comment is about Perfect Strangers (blog)
Original item by Chrystel Roberts
Bit of a long necked triumph this, Ruth. Great poem about great news.
J. x
Comment is about Giraffe (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Thank you very much Branwell. It was born of disappointment in those that should give you better.
J. x
Comment is about Riffing On Divinity (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Ghazala Lari
Tue 27th Aug 2019 18:24
True! Weather plays a pertinent role in our attitude, behaviour and feelings.?
Comment is about Heat Wave (blog)
Original item by Stuart Vanner
Ghazala Lari
Tue 27th Aug 2019 18:19
I know the feeling, been through a similar situation in life. God is always there even if no one is there.?
Comment is about Perfect Strangers (blog)
Original item by Chrystel Roberts
Well said, Stuart!
I guess, a lot of people forget that there is a thing called Karma, until...
Comment is about Karma (blog)
Original item by Stuart Vanner
Beautiful poem Adam. You could title it “If” which is a pessimistically hopeful word!
Comment is about If Pessimistically Hopeful (blog)
Original item by Adam Rabinowitz
Thanks Amanda, I was happy with the flow of this one, sometimes how you say something is as important as what you choose to say.
J. x
Comment is about Riffing On Divinity (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
you guys are amazing. keep writing and I will keep reading.
Comment is about Amanda Ann; (poet profile)
Original item by Amanda Ann;
Hi Amanda, just wanted to say thanks for your kind comments on, "Sing Me To Sleep." It was a very personal poem but I'm glad to share it and glad you liked it.
J. x
Comment is about Amanda Ann; (poet profile)
Original item by Amanda Ann;
Nigel Thanks for swerving your Neck around to this poem! Glad you liked it, I think its me in kids TV mode or something ?
Comment is about Giraffe (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Don, Adam's gonna start thinking I write these shorties just for you and there you go forgetting me....but seriously when you try to present your art form and it creates comment outside of you that is a good thing I believe
Comment is about Side By Side (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
I love how it slips off my tongue. very creative.
Comment is about Riffing On Divinity (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Kate I'm glad that you 'got' how I was trying to say more though chose few words!
Raj Thank you for reading, I like to sometimes aim to construct my pieces as mini meditation which doesn't take you too far away from my main focus.
Adam, Thanks for reading. I do enjoy the length of your poems because they always have a certain flow about them. I must check out the poem you mentioned. As a kid my mom would read Khubla Khan to me which I loved but was somewhat disappointed when she told me it was an unfinished poem....Maybe subconsciously I just want to make sure I finish my poem by having it short!
Comment is about Side By Side (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
This really moved me. its so peaceful. well done. love it.
Comment is about Sing Me To Sleep (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Jason Baylor, thank you so much for your comment.
Comment is about Ungracfully Confess (blog)
Original item by Amanda Ann;
Very True Dorothy Nature is part of that infinite intelligence that always adjusts and adapts. Thanks for reading
Comment is about Side By Side (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Adam - don't let me be your guide to a good poem. Plenty of people here like long poems. I just fall asleep. Each to his own my friend.
Kate - 'So few words but speaks volumes'. This to me is the art of poetry. Why I like a well-crafted haiku. Short, succint but speaks volumes. Thanks for bringing this up Kate
Ruth - Oh sorry. Nearly forgot you. Yes, I really like it.
Comment is about Side By Side (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
Crossed eyes
can't decide
truth or lie!
Comment is about What's Left? (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
You're jolly right Jennifer. You or I would not want to be plain old jennifer and don would we? Hey? Why are you jennifer Malden and not Jennifer Malden?
Miss Muse Thalia is also a bit puzzled at this also?
Comment is about My Muse is Getting Fussy (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
So many good reasons to stick your neck out Ruth and write this excellent poem.
Comment is about Giraffe (blog)
Original item by Ruth O'Reilly
I like your Musing on a Muse Kate.
I have just been told the Golden Rule of maintaining a healthy muse relationship.
Rule 4: Never ever, not once, consummate your relationship with your muse
Thalia often tempts me Kate but you will be pleased to know I say no blossom each time. She keeps coming back for more, little vixen, but I gotta be careful not bite the hand which feeds me. Am I doing the right thing Kate?....
Comment is about My Muse is Getting Fussy (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Nice Don! Of course she's getting uppity/fussy if you don't concede her a capital letter. She did come up with something though.
Jennifer
Comment is about My Muse is Getting Fussy (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Thank you Jennifer, much appreciated, and those were some of my favourite lines too.
And thank you Lisa for liking.
J. x
Comment is about The Deity Screams (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Devon Brock
Wed 28th Aug 2019 00:26
Familiar hands sweat with obligation. A stranger's hand cries with you.
D
Comment is about Perfect Strangers (blog)
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