Wow! Terrifying - agree about the rhyme scheme - especially liked 'let your tongue taste the bitterness of lies - all mercy is spent - and the last verse. Definitely has a biblical sound or perhaps Mother Nature? It is a really powerful image and would be amply deserved!

Jennifer

Comment is about The Deity Screams (blog)

Original item by Jason Bayliss

Thanks Dorothy, Ruth, Adam and Heart. I've had this image in my head for some time now and it's taken a while to form into words but it's nice that it has because now I can stop thinking about it.?

J. x

Comment is about The Deity Screams (blog)

Original item by Jason Bayliss

Been reading your poems and bathing in this powerful imagery. God's muffled cough is great....

Comment is about Modern Crusader (blog)

Original item by Heart of Lead

Your poems are powerfully crafted and always a journey to somewhere epic. Thanks for sharing.

Comment is about The Deity Screams (blog)

Original item by Jason Bayliss

Reminds me a bit of the fog coming in on its little cat feet in that poem by Sandburg. I admire your gift for short and to the point. I bet Don gets through all your poems. Mine are too long but I tried on Sound of Rain.

Comment is about Side By Side (blog)

Original item by Ruth O'Reilly

Beautiful. And the brevity is stunning.

Part of our problems today is because of our disconnect with nature.
Ruth this is a massive invitation for us to cohabit with nature.
Let it resonate guys.

Raj

Comment is about Side By Side (blog)

Original item by Ruth O'Reilly

An epic almost Biblically poetic description of climate change enjoyed the dramatic image you directed with your words. x

Comment is about The Deity Screams (blog)

Original item by Jason Bayliss

Oh I LOVE this. It's going on my wall at work tomorrow. So few words but speaks volumes. ?

Comment is about Side By Side (blog)

Original item by Ruth O'Reilly

Thanks Kate, it's reassuring to know that some of the image that was in my head successfully transferred to paper.

J. x

Comment is about The Deity Screams (blog)

Original item by Jason Bayliss

Thanks Heart, all of these nursery rhymes and early rhymes are so deeply imbedded in our psyche, that they resonate with is all, I think that's perhaps why we all love them so much, because they reach down to the inner child.

J. x

Comment is about A Childhood Nonsense Rhyme From Where I Was Born (blog)

Original item by Jason Bayliss

A good poem for putting matters into perspective.
Thanks
Keith

Comment is about Face Off (blog)

Original item by d.knape

I love this D. It brings to mind our obsession with youth and what a mistake that is. I saw a woman on the street the other day whose lips arrived half a metre before she did. She was distorted by her attempt to remain youthful and the effect inspired sadness rather than admiration. Out of warranty is fine with me

Comment is about Face Off (blog)

Original item by d.knape

Lovely?

Comment is about A morning kiss (blog)

Original item by Alta H Mabin (Ally)

Yes, it seems everyone knows it, or a part of it. A version. I love how old poetry is like a collective memory. Some bits of knowledge passed down but from where, we do not know. To read something I have only heard and probably in Canada... I am thankful you wrote it down here so that our collective memory might be refreshed.

Comment is about A Childhood Nonsense Rhyme From Where I Was Born (blog)

Original item by Jason Bayliss

I read this a few times Jason. Very powerful.

Comment is about The Deity Screams (blog)

Original item by Jason Bayliss

I don't personally have faith, but in my mind's eye I could see a raging God tearing out the pages of the story he'd written and dashing them into the bin. I don't believe that will happen, it just seemed a really powerful image. I hope I've done it justice.

J. x

Comment is about The Deity Screams (blog)

Original item by Jason Bayliss

Well, being an Aussie I can't say I'm thrilled about the result. At least he is a redhead. ?

Comment is about Ben Stokes (blog)

Original item by John E Marks

I listened to the BBC 5Live broadcast and some of the final runs were responded with in roars of approval and near delirium that were the greatest that I have heard at a cricket match.

Well posted John

Tommy

Comment is about Ben Stokes (blog)

Original item by John E Marks

While we are on the subject of muses, I thought you might appreciate this old one I dragged up from my files Don.

Musings on a Muse

He was her muse,
a flint to her imagination.
She hung on every word, not in adoration but because he challenged her at every turn.
There was no convention in their interaction - no "relationship" of which to speak.
But his mind pulled her inward, 
his very presence igniting creativity from somewhere deep within. 
Was this better than love?
More satisfying than sex?
She would never know.
The only thing she knew for sure was that he helped her see the world a different way.
And she was better for it.

Comment is about My Muse is Getting Fussy (blog)

Original item by Don Matthews

Wow Anne,
He is ethereal!

So many stories, in a mere flap of a wing!

Comment is about 'My Blue Hen' - Ann Gray (photo)

So very true dear Jason. We are a cruel, selfish kind.
Thank you my friend!?
Mae

Comment is about The Burden of Man- A Ghazal (blog)

Original item by Mae Foreman

Heavy is the burden of man, which is ironic because we're one of the few, if not the only species intelligent enough to know it and do something about it.
It never ceases to amaze me that the most intelligent species on the planet can be so damn stupid.
A great piece of writing, as ever Mae.

J. x

Comment is about The Burden of Man- A Ghazal (blog)

Original item by Mae Foreman

Good comments are here for this page. But we need more good material about this https://bestwritingclues.com/reviews/rushessay-review/ site comments for the page, which means that from your comments we are trying to collect something best. But still we not get it now.

Comment is about Good comments (blog)

Original item by Hasmukh Mehta

Sometimes one has to let it out, dear Adam! I will visit your profile and read your angry pieces! But you have a point, wallowing on all these unpleasant emotions doesn't do much good. Writing them away though,that is pretty powerful! Thanks for liking and commenting ?
Mae

Comment is about Divine Sacrifice (blog)

Original item by Mae Foreman

Thank you Adam! I'm glad it found a home for it! Also, I'll send you all the details for the Ghazal! ?
Mae

Comment is about The Burden of Man- A Ghazal (blog)

Original item by Mae Foreman

Thalia has told me
To all WOLers tell
Who in our relationship
Holds and rings the bell

Good fella......

Comment is about My Muse is Getting Fussy (blog)

Original item by Don Matthews

lol, while I sympathize with the baby in the pram, can't help wondering who was calling...

Comment is about hugh (poet profile)

Original item by hugh

It's a deal!

Comment is about Jason Bayliss (poet profile)

Original item by Jason Bayliss

Beautifully written.

J. x

Comment is about Ungracfully Confess (blog)

Original item by Amanda Ann;

She pushed her pram and lit a fag,
Her skin wrinkled and her cheeks did sag.
Baby's lungs filled up with smoke,
Coughing and spluttering ready to choke.
Her phone rang and gave her a start,
As to the cigarette counter she did dart.
She ignored the ring and switched it off,
Baby in pram continued to cough.
Twenty cigarettes she did buy,
Baby in pram continued to cry

Comment is about Mother Knows Best (blog)

Original item by Chrystel Roberts

No probs, will do, and all I would ask is the same in return.

J. x

Comment is about fallen (blog)

Original item by Chrystel Roberts

Please please someone come up with a better title.

Comment is about If Pessimistically Hopeful (blog)

Original item by Adam Rabinowitz

good laugh, very creative.

write on

Comment is about The Separation (blog)

Original item by branwell kent

As always, you've put a smile on my face!

Thank you

Comment is about Don Matthews (poet profile)

Original item by Don Matthews

Hey Amanda,

I'm glad you enjoyed the poem!It makes me feel good to know that others appreciate my work.

Have a great day

Comment is about Amanda Ann; (poet profile)

Original item by Amanda Ann;

What about Apple? Surely they're not malignant? Are Blackberry's still available ? Ain't heard no cancer deaths from these. Possibility?
Hey Don. Peaches-n-Cream's a new brand in town. Cancer-proof written in 1mth guarantee. Sheesh. Don't make 'em to last these days. Obvious Chinese shit. Oh? Why not? Colour don't suit. Further suggestions needed......

Comment is about Mother Knows Best (blog)

Original item by Chrystel Roberts

I enjoyed this so much! absolutely loved it.

Comment is about Mother Knows Best (blog)

Original item by Chrystel Roberts

Ruth - Thalia my Muse was just playing a joke on me. She hid the bike. I've had strong words to her and she's promised not to do it again......jolly women.

Comment is about Letting off steam (blog)

Original item by Ruth O'Reilly

Dear Afisha,
thanks for your comment on
"white horses in a darkened field"

poetry is trying...
yet I try
as best I can.

Comment is about afishamongmany (poet profile)

Original item by afishamongmany

thanks for reading and commenting on the poem
White Horses in a Darkened Field
i knda liked it myself.

Comment is about Don Matthews (poet profile)

Original item by Don Matthews

Don you know Thalia will never let you down!

Comment is about Letting off steam (blog)

Original item by Ruth O'Reilly

Adriana thanks so much for reading & letting me know the lines you liked ?

Comment is about Letting off steam (blog)

Original item by Ruth O'Reilly

Fight the good fight...nice arrangement of words!

Comment is about Safe Space (blog)

Original item by Adam Rabinowitz

Hi Adam, how would you like me to challenge you to do a Ghazal? Here's the info!

https://www.poetryfoundation.org/learn/glossary-terms/ghazal

Comment is about Adam Rabinowitz (poet profile)

Original item by Adam Rabinowitz

And that's why you should never let your shadow lead the way,(just advise every now and then.)

J. x

Comment is about The Separation (blog)

Original item by branwell kent

Will do, and yes the word set, unbelievable isn't it??

J. x

Comment is about Chrystel Roberts (poet profile)

Original item by Chrystel Roberts

Nokia phones are particularly bad I hear. Gonna have to trade mine in for a non-malignant type. Any suggestions?........

A sharp, smart piece Chrystel.

Comment is about Mother Knows Best (blog)

Original item by Chrystel Roberts

I'm waiting for a tsunami for inspiration. My muse has gone off on a bike......

Comment is about Letting off steam (blog)

Original item by Ruth O'Reilly

Golly gosh! a marriage not made in heaven then Bran?....

Comment is about The Separation (blog)

Original item by branwell kent

You've brought in on yourselves earthlings
Earthlings you are to blame
You will not take things seriously
You still think it's a game

Comment is about We Can’t Breath (blog)

Original item by Rick Varden