'If' is a good title...I wrote one years ago along this line that I called 'If' Yours is much better Adam.
My 4th grade teacher would always question us with ' what if...'
Wonder...be curious...dream
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Thanks Tommy, A Fish and Kate. Yes fantastic atmosphere Tommy. I'm saying nowt about Yorkshire folk liking to get their money's worth! It's nice to find out you're an Aussie Kate. I have a nephew in Perth. At least you'll know what cricket is, unlike most of our American cousins. They play a simplified form of cricket called baseball (wink!) don't they?. Strange how many games/sports were invented by us Brits. Nothing better to do, I suppose. Cricket began in SE England in the C16.
John
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Indeed, Fish. A soul? It is why I asked the question through the frivolous vehicle of the broom sketch.
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And that it is. Totally agree with this message.
J. x
Comment is about Tipping point (blog)
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Sometimes the strangers hand feels like the most familiar, it's true.
J. x
Comment is about Perfect Strangers (blog)
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Bit of a long necked triumph this, Ruth. Great poem about great news.
J. x
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Thank you very much Branwell. It was born of disappointment in those that should give you better.
J. x
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Ghazala Lari
Tue 27th Aug 2019 18:24
True! Weather plays a pertinent role in our attitude, behaviour and feelings.?
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Ghazala Lari
Tue 27th Aug 2019 18:19
I know the feeling, been through a similar situation in life. God is always there even if no one is there.?
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Well said, Stuart!
I guess, a lot of people forget that there is a thing called Karma, until...
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Beautiful poem Adam. You could title it “If” which is a pessimistically hopeful word!
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Thanks Amanda, I was happy with the flow of this one, sometimes how you say something is as important as what you choose to say.
J. x
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you guys are amazing. keep writing and I will keep reading.
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Hi Amanda, just wanted to say thanks for your kind comments on, "Sing Me To Sleep." It was a very personal poem but I'm glad to share it and glad you liked it.
J. x
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Nigel Thanks for swerving your Neck around to this poem! Glad you liked it, I think its me in kids TV mode or something ?
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Don, Adam's gonna start thinking I write these shorties just for you and there you go forgetting me....but seriously when you try to present your art form and it creates comment outside of you that is a good thing I believe
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I love how it slips off my tongue. very creative.
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Kate I'm glad that you 'got' how I was trying to say more though chose few words!
Raj Thank you for reading, I like to sometimes aim to construct my pieces as mini meditation which doesn't take you too far away from my main focus.
Adam, Thanks for reading. I do enjoy the length of your poems because they always have a certain flow about them. I must check out the poem you mentioned. As a kid my mom would read Khubla Khan to me which I loved but was somewhat disappointed when she told me it was an unfinished poem....Maybe subconsciously I just want to make sure I finish my poem by having it short!
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This really moved me. its so peaceful. well done. love it.
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Jason Baylor, thank you so much for your comment.
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Very True Dorothy Nature is part of that infinite intelligence that always adjusts and adapts. Thanks for reading
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Adam - don't let me be your guide to a good poem. Plenty of people here like long poems. I just fall asleep. Each to his own my friend.
Kate - 'So few words but speaks volumes'. This to me is the art of poetry. Why I like a well-crafted haiku. Short, succint but speaks volumes. Thanks for bringing this up Kate
Ruth - Oh sorry. Nearly forgot you. Yes, I really like it.
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Crossed eyes
can't decide
truth or lie!
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You're jolly right Jennifer. You or I would not want to be plain old jennifer and don would we? Hey? Why are you jennifer Malden and not Jennifer Malden?
Miss Muse Thalia is also a bit puzzled at this also?
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So many good reasons to stick your neck out Ruth and write this excellent poem.
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I like your Musing on a Muse Kate.
I have just been told the Golden Rule of maintaining a healthy muse relationship.
Rule 4: Never ever, not once, consummate your relationship with your muse
Thalia often tempts me Kate but you will be pleased to know I say no blossom each time. She keeps coming back for more, little vixen, but I gotta be careful not bite the hand which feeds me. Am I doing the right thing Kate?....
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Nice Don! Of course she's getting uppity/fussy if you don't concede her a capital letter. She did come up with something though.
Jennifer
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Thank you Jennifer, much appreciated, and those were some of my favourite lines too.
And thank you Lisa for liking.
J. x
Comment is about The Deity Screams (blog)
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Wow! Terrifying - agree about the rhyme scheme - especially liked 'let your tongue taste the bitterness of lies - all mercy is spent - and the last verse. Definitely has a biblical sound or perhaps Mother Nature? It is a really powerful image and would be amply deserved!
Jennifer
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Thanks Dorothy, Ruth, Adam and Heart. I've had this image in my head for some time now and it's taken a while to form into words but it's nice that it has because now I can stop thinking about it.?
J. x
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Been reading your poems and bathing in this powerful imagery. God's muffled cough is great....
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Your poems are powerfully crafted and always a journey to somewhere epic. Thanks for sharing.
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Reminds me a bit of the fog coming in on its little cat feet in that poem by Sandburg. I admire your gift for short and to the point. I bet Don gets through all your poems. Mine are too long but I tried on Sound of Rain.
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Beautiful. And the brevity is stunning.
Part of our problems today is because of our disconnect with nature.
Ruth this is a massive invitation for us to cohabit with nature.
Let it resonate guys.
Raj
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An epic almost Biblically poetic description of climate change enjoyed the dramatic image you directed with your words. x
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<Deleted User> (22444)
Tue 27th Aug 2019 12:44
Oh I LOVE this. It's going on my wall at work tomorrow. So few words but speaks volumes. ?
Comment is about Side By Side (blog)
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Thanks Kate, it's reassuring to know that some of the image that was in my head successfully transferred to paper.
J. x
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Thanks Heart, all of these nursery rhymes and early rhymes are so deeply imbedded in our psyche, that they resonate with is all, I think that's perhaps why we all love them so much, because they reach down to the inner child.
J. x
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A good poem for putting matters into perspective.
Thanks
Keith
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<Deleted User> (22444)
Tue 27th Aug 2019 11:44
I love this D. It brings to mind our obsession with youth and what a mistake that is. I saw a woman on the street the other day whose lips arrived half a metre before she did. She was distorted by her attempt to remain youthful and the effect inspired sadness rather than admiration. Out of warranty is fine with me
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<Deleted User> (22444)
Tue 27th Aug 2019 11:41
Yes, it seems everyone knows it, or a part of it. A version. I love how old poetry is like a collective memory. Some bits of knowledge passed down but from where, we do not know. To read something I have only heard and probably in Canada... I am thankful you wrote it down here so that our collective memory might be refreshed.
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<Deleted User> (22444)
Tue 27th Aug 2019 11:40
I read this a few times Jason. Very powerful.
Comment is about The Deity Screams (blog)
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I don't personally have faith, but in my mind's eye I could see a raging God tearing out the pages of the story he'd written and dashing them into the bin. I don't believe that will happen, it just seemed a really powerful image. I hope I've done it justice.
J. x
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<Deleted User> (22444)
Tue 27th Aug 2019 11:26
Well, being an Aussie I can't say I'm thrilled about the result. At least he is a redhead. ?
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I listened to the BBC 5Live broadcast and some of the final runs were responded with in roars of approval and near delirium that were the greatest that I have heard at a cricket match.
Well posted John
Tommy
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<Deleted User> (22444)
Tue 27th Aug 2019 11:20
While we are on the subject of muses, I thought you might appreciate this old one I dragged up from my files Don.
Musings on a Muse
He was her muse,
a flint to her imagination.
She hung on every word, not in adoration but because he challenged her at every turn.
There was no convention in their interaction - no "relationship" of which to speak.
But his mind pulled her inward,
his very presence igniting creativity from somewhere deep within.
Was this better than love?
More satisfying than sex?
She would never know.
The only thing she knew for sure was that he helped her see the world a different way.
And she was better for it.
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Devon Brock
Tue 27th Aug 2019 21:29
Jason,
This is a fantastic piece. I was immediately struck and awed by the image of one hand on the sea and one in the sky. Approaching this image from a biblical or cultural sense, you have opposing forces joining together to destroy duality returning the earth to a point of unpeopled purification - shorn of free will and doubt. That you consistently utilized that image throughout the poem provides the poem another level of meaning, which I think is the hallmark of great poetry.
D
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