Colin David Karen Desmond and Richard thanks so much for the likes. This is not an easy comment rider really so I appreciate the ticks! Right up there on the virtual viaduct Colin pun and book in hand as always . Beeching made continuous strides. Yes, I still miss that toot toot. Thanks.
Ray
Comment is about THE VIADUCT (blog)
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Wonderfully lyrical Tom. Wraps the reader in a mood and the idea of "plain soup" is almost hermetically religious as if a certain humility has gone into the writing. You have aligned the human condition with a season beautifully.
Ray
Comment is about First Snow (blog)
Original item by Tom Harding
Highly original Ian. The idea like lunacy itself is appealing and is contrary in an ironic way to all that commends the iPhone itself - anti matter almost. Thousands of fishes can't be wrong though can they?
Nice poem. Ray
Comment is about Bait (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
I'm converted Connor. I think you're in the John Belushi zone here. Wonderfully tragic.
Ray
Comment is about Infomercial (blog)
Original item by Connor Lannes
I certainly wear the trousers in our house and I've got Our Gert's permission to say so.
Comment is about TIPS FOR THE NEWLY MARRIED MAN (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
<Deleted User> (18118)
Wed 27th Sep 2017 19:08
How could anyone say no after that? Heartfelt, moving.
Comment is about Forgive me (blog)
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<Deleted User> (18118)
Wed 27th Sep 2017 18:56
Twilight magic, love this poem.
Comment is about Fireflies (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Men would rather be out on the piss
Than discover the joys of domestic bliss...but let me ask:
So who makes the bed in your house?
But remember the old saying...
you make your bed or you lie about it. ?
Comment is about TIPS FOR THE NEWLY MARRIED MAN (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
my eyes are alight also, how wonderful! i love the immediacy, the dark and the light and all the while the little pinpricks of light dancing through the air. lovely stuff and a great backstory.
Comment is about Fireflies (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
<Deleted User> (13762)
Wed 27th Sep 2017 15:36
thank you Paul, your continued support is very much valued. See ya around the net buddy. C?L
Comment is about 'At the sink' by Colin Hill is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
My husband asked, 'Why are your eyes so alight?'
'I have just written a poem,' I answered, 'And I like it.' I had the script in my hand.
'All that!' he said in amazement.
'Well, yes. It just came. It just came. Can't help it. Didn't ask it for it. Had to write it down. No idea why. Doesn't matter. But I feel better inside my head. Breathing is easier.'
And he just smiled and shook his head.
Comment is about Fireflies (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Your book arrived safely, and I do look forward to enjoying it in full.
Many thanks.
Comment is about Karen Ankers (poet profile)
Original item by Karen Ankers
Wed 27th Sep 2017 12:41
Hi Ian, after reading your poem this morning, this came to mind. I thought you might like it.
Fat Mans Hook
I’m an old fat carp
That should know better
But them lures
Just keep getting better
All shiny and knew
With a big sharp hook
I’m caught again
On that fat mans hook.
He reels me in,every time
The big fat man
With his spiel and lines..
Comment is about Bait (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Hi, David.
Just read "The Fox" in your Samples (above).
It's a great poem that jogs along very well and can be read as a light, bouncy narration.
However, it also seems to me to be full of very well crafted - and very subtle - metaphors, which lifts it up into a higher league altogether.
An excellent poem!
Richard
Comment is about David Lindsay (poet profile)
Original item by David Lindsay
C?L, Congratulations, worthy winner of POTW. Another crafted, creative and cheeky ? piece of writing from that inventive mine of a mind of yours.
Well done my friend, richly deserved.
Paul
Comment is about 'At the sink' by Colin Hill is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I've spent the weekend on and off reading the letters of Sylvia Plath to Ted Hughes and wonder if you have too.
This is so similarly redolent of her totally consumed love for TH to an almost suicidal degree (sadly prophetic for her).
I hope this is autobiographical Alexandra. To be able to be bursting with this sort of fervour is a wonderful state.
The analogy of cradling a bomb is excellent.
* well done on getting a jazz poem into the chosen list
Comment is about I see why love is red. (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Wed 27th Sep 2017 08:41
excellent Ray and the backing vocals by birds and cars add an almost perfect backdrop to the scene. All that's missing is a distant toot toot of a steam train as it disappears into the distance at the end of the last line. Ha, the last line. I'll get my axe!
Col.
Comment is about THE VIADUCT (blog)
Original item by ray pool
<Deleted User> (13762)
Wed 27th Sep 2017 08:14
nice one Ian. I haven't kept up with the finer technological advances of the latest iPhone but it seems to me whatever they are doesn't justify the enormous price tag to upgrade. I would be tempted to add 'slightly' before 'slicker' if only to piss the makers off!
I like the way you have 'tackled' the subject matter (excuse the pun). It reminds me also of a line from a Patrick Fitzgerald song: 'me and you are just little fishes swimming in a rising tide - small fry'.
Col.
Comment is about Bait (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Wed 27th Sep 2017 08:04
thank you Stu, those are very kind and generous words indeed. All the best to you. Col.
Comment is about 'At the sink' by Colin Hill is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Wed 27th Sep 2017 06:15
Hi Ray thanks for your comments. You raise a few big questions there. What is and how do you define conscious.What is life,what happens after we die. So many different answered and opinions are out there.
More controversy. So what’s the answer? Google or Wickapiedia ?
Thanks,Des
Comment is about Thanks Mom (blog)
Original item by DESMOND CHILDS
ramy
Wed 27th Sep 2017 02:24
i was set into the picture after the first paragraph. nicely written!
Comment is about Forgetting the air (blog)
Original item by David T Jones
thanks for commenting on 'the devil don't own me' MC - working on the tune to go with it for future recording
Ian
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
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<Deleted User> (10985)
Tue 26th Sep 2017 22:57
Woo hoo !
#HappyHappyHappy
: )
Comment is about Marsden's Poster Poems competition - here are the winners! (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
It is an original and brave poem that puts consciousness there in the womb Desmond and as Colin says that sparks strong feelings. I often wonder about previous lives and the continuance of spirit experience so entailed.
Ray
Comment is about Thanks Mom (blog)
Original item by DESMOND CHILDS
LIke the puns etc Col. Massive difference in meanings goes to show how variable our language can be. This only happened the other day!
Thanks Hannah. I get talking so easily to people that my days are always full of chat!
Mark, it is so important we keep up human interaction - I see supermarkets are beginning to phase out tills in favour of self checkouts. One more link closing off. Thanks folks for the likes too.
Ray
Comment is about BUYING A CARPET (blog)
Original item by ray pool
<Deleted User> (18118)
Tue 26th Sep 2017 18:43
Fantastic poem !
Thank you for your comment on my poem. Really appreciated.
Hannah
Comment is about Sweet Surrender (blog)
Original item by Chakraj
<Deleted User> (18118)
Tue 26th Sep 2017 18:41
Autumn evokes many feelings. Enjoyed this poem very much.
Thank you for your comment on my poem.
Comment is about LEAVES AND LIVES (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Atmospheric and appealing in equal measure.
Comment is about 'The boys stroke their new muscles, the girls sweeten their lips' (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I've still got my 45rpm disc of Telstar!
This is a parallel universe of the soaps on TV. Trivia
taken seriously because it can matter for the way we
measure and value our connection with others in this
funny old life.
Recently, I bought a used car and the salesman and I
found ourselves talking about everything but the car!
But he made a sale and I left with a smile from common
interests visited in the process.
Comment is about BUYING A CARPET (blog)
Original item by ray pool
This is very well thought out indeed. I would shorten the last line though, it looks to wordy compared to how succinct the rest of the work is.
Good work.
Graham
Comment is about Afeared rose (blog)
Original item by Utkarsha Sharma
a fine choice and you come across as a genuinely caring bloke who just loves writing and reading. and lets face it, the world could do with a few more of them.
Comment is about 'At the sink' by Colin Hill is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Tue 26th Sep 2017 12:35
Thank you Colin for your comments. I can imagine that your prose night was a very emotive, it is a very controversial subject whether to allow terminations or not. I belive ultimately a woman has the right to choose. But as you say it is a very emotive issue.
As for saying my poem makes you think of Kate Bush's 'Breathing' I take that as a great compliment, she is one of my favorite artists. Thanks, Des.
Comment is about Thanks Mom (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Tue 26th Sep 2017 12:24
well done to everyone - quite a few names I recognise there - look forward to seeing some pictures of the poem posters.
Comment is about Marsden's Poster Poems competition - here are the winners! (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I loved this one right from 'a rock doesn't in the river run'
Comment is about A Poem in Progress (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Tue 26th Sep 2017 09:00
I don't know why I still like this but I do
Comment is about Charlie Clark (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Tue 26th Sep 2017 08:48
love those last three lines NS. makes me want to drive off into the sunset on an adventure...
Comment is about The Eye Of The Storm (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Tue 26th Sep 2017 08:39
I was listening to a live reading of a piece of prose last night given by two people - one read the voice of the mother who was waiting to receive the morning after pill and the other read the voice of the unborn child who also lamented the loss of previously terminated siblings. It was very effective and emotive. As is yours Desmond but for obviously different reasons. I can't help but think also of Kate Bush's 'Breathing'. Thanks for posting. All the best, Colin.
Comment is about Thanks Mom (blog)
Original item by DESMOND CHILDS
<Deleted User> (13762)
Tue 26th Sep 2017 08:07
thank you Mr Old / New / Warn Out Shoes - I do love the way your name is so interchangeable (depending on your mood?) Buttocks and bacon? You make me sound like I'm a cannibal! Hope all is well in your neck of the woods. All the best, Col.
Comment is about 'At the sink' by Colin Hill is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
awesome and gave a good smile
Comment is about A Poem in Progress (blog)
Original item by MyDystopiA
Ooops, what I meant is "The theme is close to my heart since it lifts human bonding..."
Comment is about I Give My Soul to You (blog)
Original item by Kay Li Su
I love this Kay Li.
The theme is lose to my heart since it lifts human boding and intimacy to a higher plane. I'd like to see some more.
It flows sweetly too. Thank you so much.
Raj
Comment is about I Give My Soul to You (blog)
Original item by Kay Li Su
Colin, Colin, Colin, I really don't know what to say. but you are a pretty swell dude. and if I knew anything about real poetry, I'd critique the hell out or you right now. you always strike the feeling in your work. and on a personal note; I have always said the two best things in life are boobs and bacon. But in your case it looks like it's buttocks and bacon.
Write on brother
Warn Out Shoes, OUT!
Comment is about 'At the sink' by Colin Hill is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Like the T-shirt, Nigel - they could catch on!
Comment is about Write Out Loud Stockport's open mic away day - in Marple (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
The Journey
A young writer starts a journey
towards a dream to come true
getting her very own book published
Rain or shine snow or hurricane
W O L poets on Marple open mic
beer and poetry what a night!
Well done Linda and you too Nicola with your new book!
Comment is about Write Out Loud Stockport's open mic away day - in Marple (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I thought this started off as a nice night time stroll, then boom, surprise. I enjoyed this very much. Thank You.
Comment is about INHALE/EXHALE (blog)
Original item by invisible
Thanks Stu and Karen.
Stu - you disgust me ?
Comment is about Tai Chi (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
<Deleted User> (13762)
Mon 25th Sep 2017 08:59
I like the way this pings and flips between the first and last who's. Good stuff. Life certainly can be like a game of pinball some days. Col.
Comment is about (blog)
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Trevor Wainwright
Wed 27th Sep 2017 22:36
And in Castleford, 5 Towns Radio has been having a poetry week, not just a measly day. All presenters have been either reciting or playing theirs and others poems. Poems from Talking Zebras, Pontefract Family Centre Adults with learning difficuties, Rose Drew, Alan Gillott, PP Hartnett, Andy Humphrey, Chris Nosnibor, Trev the Road Poet, Susan McCartney, Jane Steele, and may more and this goes on until Saturday. www.5townsradio.com the little radio staion tat makes a big effort. Who neds a day when you can have a week?
Comment is about Hold on to your hat, Sir John! It's National Poetry Day (article)
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