That last line made me shiver! Great stuff!
Comment is about HUG (blog)
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Hi Leon. He was definitely one of a kind. Thanks for your feedback. T ?
Comment is about Tears in Tennessee (blog)
Original item by Tom Doolan
patricia Hughes
Wed 9th Aug 2017 17:47
Passion is an unquenchable fire. Nice work Joselin. T?
Comment is about Soulmate (blog)
Original item by Joselin
The theme of "one upmanship" is always worth exploring,
especially in view of its relevance to times past when
even a slum street had its social divisions...check who
washes and polishes their doorstep regularly!
This is both entertaining and enlightening as a reminder
for some and an essay into the unknown for others more
recently born.
Comment is about Aunt Win (nie) (blog)
Original item by Jane C. Steele
Haha! personally I've never self-harmed but I'm coming around to consider writing poetry to be the closest thing to it!
Comment is about POETRY (blog)
Original item by lynn hahn
Thanks Colin. I think poets are a special breed.
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Wed 9th Aug 2017 15:30
Absolutely brilliant Tim. Well done you - and the audience too for joining in.
Comment is about Where Are The Skydancers? (blog)
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<Deleted User> (17847)
Wed 9th Aug 2017 15:13
appreciate the dedication Tom.We are less one real nice guy and brilliant country music star.
Comment is about Tears in Tennessee (blog)
Original item by Tom Doolan
Indeed, Graham. Ah, but the memories! What damage we could have done then with what we know now; and what damage we could do now with the right equipment.
Comment is about THOSE HOTTIES FROM THE GDR (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Colin and Martin, Thank you both for your kind comments. As always they are much appreciated and a source of encouragement. Keith
Comment is about Where the heart is... (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
I love the line 'with at least ten different crimes in our pockets'. But the whole poem is a winner. Just wondering whether you have ever been to Arundel castle it is quite impressive.
nice one Andy
Comment is about Scrumping Arundel (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Yes I can totally relate to this Keith. Nothing better than being surrounded with books, pictures and all of those possessions that mean something to you personally
Nice one
Comment is about Where the heart is... (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
Agree with Tiffany in that it is intriguing leaving me wanting more. Nice one Terry
Comment is about Right of passage (blog)
Original item by terry l shuff
As you quite rightly point out JC, most of the things mentioned in this piece are long lost to the past!
Comment is about THOSE HOTTIES FROM THE GDR (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thanks Cynthia.
The Hen Harrier protest went well on Sunday and I think about 200 people turned up. There's a video if me reading the poem here https://youtu.be/H5ebk63qoqo
Comment is about Where Are The Skydancers? (blog)
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<Deleted User> (13762)
Wed 9th Aug 2017 08:03
<Deleted User> (13762)
Wed 9th Aug 2017 08:02
excellent Keith. 'My autobiography not yet written is here for publication' I like very much.
Comment is about Where the heart is... (blog)
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This is pretty intriguing...
Comment is about Right of passage (blog)
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Yes, thanks Rose. And my reply was of course, tongue in cheek. ?
Comment is about Bridge of Sorrows (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
You are very kind Cynthia and much appreciated for your delicacy, as opposed to my severity. I have had this poem in my mind for 28 years.
John
Comment is about INFANT MORTALITY (blog)
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<Deleted User> (9882)
Tue 8th Aug 2017 21:52
aw so sorry Trev for the surname mistake.My apologies.Hope you are well.
catch you later.
Rose ?
Comment is about Bridge of Sorrows (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
The first ten lines joined to the last ten lines - for me - cover deep thoughts finely expressed, with insight and power. The 'middle' seems like ranting stuck in rewind, accomplishing nothing. Now, maybe, that is exactly your intent. With great effect.
When does a suffering person effect a separation from the deliberate enjoyment of self-destruction?
Comment is about if my ugly had a shape it would be a spiral (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
This is hard reading, blunt and severe, and very effective. I like the hard honesty of it, and the lovely line like 'now even your blanket-smell has gone' and 'What else can I do for you?'
Comment is about INFANT MORTALITY (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Kealan, so great to see you posting again.Here, on WOL.
A work deep and penetrating in thought. Like Stu, I so admire the final thought, but also the very first one. The rest is meaningful development but the first and last lines open and close the work like a titled cover.
Comment is about The Dig (blog)
Original item by Kealan Coady
Strong and effective. Well said.
Comment is about Where Are The Skydancers? (blog)
Original item by Tim Ellis
You might be right, MC. Perhaps it is a prayer of thanks.
Comment is about HEY, MO! (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Never thought of that. I always thought he assumed that
position in gratitude for being granted his victory. But we
have a Muslim voted in as mayor in London so why not a Muslim "Sports Personality of the Year" on the BBC?
Comment is about HEY, MO! (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
A lot more praise than criticism I'm sure.
As ever it's a pleasure to read.
Many thanks Kevin
Comment is about This Is Me (blog)
Original item by Wendy Higson
Thanks for these kind comments.
Comment is about John Michael Porter (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
You sum up the unkown lives of nearly all the departed and in a way challenges the very idea of headstones and the like when after time there is little if any significance in an epitaph. A poem to provoke thought and well composed. Thank you. Keith
Comment is about John Michael Porter (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
Stu, Thank you for your comments. You sum up our plight in the face of others whose plight is far worse. It is indeed a dilema. Keith
Comment is about They are ours (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
always lovely to read your stuff harry, you write with such a delicate touch that i believe can only be learnt through a long life well lived
Comment is about Betty in a windy sunset. (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
really very lovely, short, sweet and nicely penned.
Comment is about Amber (blog)
Original item by MyDystopiA
i think this poem accurately reflects the feelings many of us have, of helplessness, selfishness and, perhaps worst of all, numbness to the plight of millions worse off than us. a thought provoking piece, well written as always
Comment is about They are ours (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
excellent. i love way it flows (down down ever deeper) and a beautiful last line.
Comment is about The Dig (blog)
Original item by Kealan Coady
Colin, Thank you indeed for this well informed response. You are right in all you say, regrettably. 663 million people in the world lack access to safe water and 2.4 billion lack access to a toilet. And Scotland and Catalan want independence. My God!. Thanks again. Keith
Comment is about They are ours (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
I live in a bedsit and can relate. I slept on a suitcase and a broken pull out bed for months. This poem pretty much mirrored my sentiments.
Comment is about Respect (blog)
Original item by Wendy Higson
<Deleted User> (13762)
Tue 8th Aug 2017 08:34
as global citizens it seems we have become somewhat impotent to the needs of others and can only help by placing our trust and money into the hands of aid agencies and governments, the latter of which seem perpetually incapable of effecting any meaningful and lasting change.
as a volunteer for an 'aid' charity working in Africa I could talk endlessly about the pros and cons of what has now become an industry in itself. In some ways almost all aid (excepting responses to natural disasters) inevitably by-passes and props up corrupt governments and business. We tackle the effects but not the causes.
your poem raises valid and difficult questions Keith to which I have only scratched the surface. Thanks for posting.
Colin.
Comment is about They are ours (blog)
Original item by keith jeffries
I like the idea of a light struggling to stay.
Fibonacci is what I think beauty is- each to their own!
Comment is about if my ugly had a shape it would be a spiral (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Cheers Colin. I know the feeling about needing the sea. I live in Bradford, pretty much in the middle of the country, and sometimes just have to head off to the coast for a fix!
Comment is about Far Horizons (blog)
Original item by Trevor Alexander
elPintor
Mon 7th Aug 2017 23:02
And, that's the thing, David--nobody seemed to understand 'til someone got an eye put out...
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vVRv5WG94F4
Love, Rachel
ps
What's up, Colin? Thanks for readin', man.
Comment is about parastasis (blog)
Original item by nunya
Thanks Rose for liking this
Also thanks for reading this Stu. Might see you at Sale next week if you are there.
Cheers Martin
Comment is about imagination (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Thanks...that is just what I was going for. Wish I could come up with a tune. I would love to sing country western. I can't play the guitar either. Sort of a problem.
Comment is about NO MONEY ON THE TABLE (blog)
Original item by lynn hahn
<Deleted User> (10985)
Mon 7th Aug 2017 20:01
Thank you Martin. Same thing happened to me. A teacher at school was very encouraging when I was about 15. I still have the written feedback she gave me on an assessment piece. It's been a slow burn since then, but it was always there ... never too late, they say.
JH : )
Comment is about 'Incoming' by Jonathan Humble is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)
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Jane C. Steele
Wed 9th Aug 2017 22:11
Trevor and M.C - thank you both for commenting.
I'm pleased the poem found favour.
Cheers Jane
Comment is about Aunt Win (nie) (blog)
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