Great subject, well-written and much enjoyed.

Comment is about MY MOUSE (blog)

Original item by Jonalyn Cajefe

What a charming and sincere poem. God bless good aunts the world over, from forever. Excellent topic to share. The last two lines are very strong.

Comment is about My Aunt from Wales (blog)

Original item by IanQ

The thoughts and feelings have always been there, in your heart and head, and now they come through your finger tips to make the 'written word'. Welcome to WOL, for a wonderful journey with other 'friends' who feel exactly the same - the drive to just 'share'. Once the pot is open the ideas and words just flow; it's quite an uplifting experience.

And the resource within yourself seems endless.

Welcome aboard.

Comment is about IanQ (poet profile)

Original item by IanQ

Another work worth reading, as it 'explores and discusses' such important ideas. Mind you (ha ha) I'm a bit puzzled as to how anyone separates 'mind' from 'me'. Perhaps a different direction of 'thinking', but still the same 'mind'? Funny how people use the expression: 'I'm of two minds.....' which means only indecision.

Super title.

Just thinking. That's the effect of your poems. But that IS what you want, isn't it?

Comment is about This morning I included me (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

Good commentary on a difficult subject and still a very current issue.

Comment is about Train Tracks (blog)

Original item by Wonderer

Andres,welcome to WOL. You have a fruitful imagination and sensitivity to the world around you. Your photo doesn't look very 'old' but your ideas are very sophisticated and strongly expressed.

I look forward to more of your work.

Comment is about Andres S. (poet profile)

Original item by Andres S.

You are not only an 'interested reader-writer' you are interesting to read. Your thoughts run deep, and are worth sharing.

Spell checks do not pick up everything. The 'threw' you have used is past tense of 'throw' as in 'I threw the ball.' I'm pretty sure you meant 'through' as in 'passing through'. Don't let such spelling block your writing, of course. I'm thinking, if you are this keenly observant and just plain clever, that you won't mind a helping hand sorting some 'spelling bugs' out. English is the pits! for spelling.

Comment is about Fruition (blog)

Original item by Andres S.

re your welcoming additional welcoming Raj.
Thanks for *stretching out and making ME feel good*


Rose ?&?

Comment is about This morning I included me (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

Thank you Rose, I find that encouraging.
hey great to have you back.

Raj x

Comment is about This morning I included me (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

Raj,this so much reminds me of the song/hymn *be still my soul* and almost had the same tear jerking effect on me.

*stretch out to the max and make others feel good*

definitely the best advice one can give our *me's*

loved it and then some!

Rose ?

Comment is about This morning I included me (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

Thank you also Colin for your comment. Keith

Comment is about Self Destruction (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

Ray & Kevin, Thank you both for your comments on Self Destruction. It took a long time before I could muster the courage to write it. I procrastinated as it is based firmly in my personal experience. I managed to reached the end of the tunnel and stay outside in the light. There is no going back. It is a dark place. Thanks to both again. Keith

Comment is about Self Destruction (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

I wonder what the thought processes are which makes a person decide this is what they are going to do for a living? An interesting subject for a poem Paul. As you say - it's a dirty job - and someone's got to write a poem about it...

Comment is about It's a dirty job... (blog)

Original item by Paul Nunn

the warm air yesterday was full of dandelion weed seed heads floating by. I wonder if it was for you too and whether that sparked this lovely poem? Thanks for posting. Colin.

Comment is about Dandelion (blog)

Original item by Becky Sowray

you've got my vote Ray - rhymes with May - Pool - rhymes with Fool. Now where's that paddle...?

Comment is about FORWARD TOGETHER LET US GO (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Hi Keith. Glad to hear you were able to find the real you. This was an honest,well written piece.
Shame you had to take the bottle back though, rather than keeping it solely for celebrating. Maybe there's another poem in that.

Kevin

Comment is about Self Destruction (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

Thanks, Ray, I will cherish your exoneration and carry it with me - however from your closing words you might just need mine ?

Thanks, Adriana, as I wrote it I felt as if I was walking on Top Witherns - very Heathcliffe ?

Comment is about Bird Fly Away (blog)

Original item by Rick Gammon

Thank you..??????

Comment is about MY MOUSE (blog)

Original item by Jonalyn Cajefe

'Like' - I LOVED this! ?
So clever AND funny; as a visually oriented reader, I laughed out loud! Well done, Paul.
Everyone's comments are spot on.
Do you mind if I link it on my blog?
Thanks for the permission, Paul.
https://wordpress.com/post/francesmacaulayforde.wordpress.com/7472

Comment is about Bitchin' In The Kitchen Sink Drama (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

I read this Suki as that nothing goes unnoticed in the universe but is converted into vibration that resounds on the participants, and comes around to revisit us (karma). I can live with this concept - but I could be off beam of course. In any case it is beautifully expressed and deeply disturbing and yet offers a solution. A touch of eastern philosophy in my book.

Ray

Comment is about The Quantum Paradox (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

I think of the kitchen sketch of Morecambe and Wise Paul. I like the slapstick quality to the poem - a feast of comparisons and quite appropriate where two people share a kitchen and project their angst onto the utensils. (Especially in mine).
Very enjoyable ! Ray Aythangyow.

Comment is about Bitchin' In The Kitchen Sink Drama (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

A fine poem to a horrendous crime Ian, and it reminds me of the long arm of the law and how a justice prevails in time. In a sense the loneliness of moorland adds a chill to the poem and the silent prayer from the unseen heart of the victim. We will always live in hope I think.

Ray

Comment is about Gone (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

Rick you cruel and sensitive lovely bastard ! I found this very affecting I must say. It reads like a confessional and I for one as the priest must forgive you. A girl I once went out with said : "I get the feeling you're just going out with me 'til someone better comes along." I didn't disillusion her.

Ray

Comment is about Bird Fly Away (blog)

Original item by Rick Gammon

a surreal scene conjured up out of the matchwood of dreamscapes - very interesting imagery and with your usual opening into worlds of interpretation Rachel.
A fine read indeed.

Ray

Comment is about transfixation (blog)

Original item by nunya

Simple and moving Adam, this speaks for itself . Thanks for sharing.

Ray

Comment is about Always Mistaken (blog)

Original item by Adam Whitworth

I really am sorry for you Adam.Its easy for me to say that time is a healer (albeit never completely) but I sincerely hope for you that it does as much as possible in easing your suffering and hopefully as soon as possible.My sympathies.Jemima.

Comment is about Always Mistaken (blog)

Original item by Adam Whitworth

It's nice to hear a happy ending with this Keith. So many of us are caught up in the spiral - so here's to you and shall we say a narrow escape (assuming this is a true story).

Ray.

Comment is about Self Destruction (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

Ha-ha Suki, very good, they could call in Feastenders (I always felt starved of entertainment when I watched it!).

How we laughed....??

Thanks again Suki.

Paul

Comment is about Bitchin' In The Kitchen Sink Drama (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

oh Adam.Lost for words.But not for as much sympathy as my heart has to give you.


Rose

Comment is about Always Mistaken (blog)

Original item by Adam Whitworth

@Raj Ferds, thanks for your wonderful insight.

Comment is about Kwin (poet profile)

Original item by Kwin

Indeed it is difficult to see how a person is sick, and probably never come out of the hospital ... I have a poem on this subject in my blog - http://www.casestudywriter.org/ .

Comment is about Sympathy (blog)

Original item by Cara Joy Deane

Hi Cynthia Glad you liked my Mill Girl & Willy Ronis is a great photographer.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

HI Paul Glad you liked Mill Girl. (Willy Ronis is my favourite photographer).

Comment is about Paul Waring (poet profile)

Original item by Paul Waring

Thanks all you lovely contributors. Col, i'll check out that demo thanks. Paul, I tend to care too much and expect more than is my due, probably. But I can watch paint dry at home! Suki, thanks, revenge is satisfied. David, i'm now thinking of the speeches of George V1 for no reason;
he certainly had an invisible audience.

Again Love to all who like my muck spreading.

Ray

Comment is about BOVINE POETRY (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Cheers guys, many thanks!

Comment is about The Quantum Paradox (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

Hi Paul,

A magical realist kitchen sink drama>They should have scenes like this in East Enders. I might watch it then!

Suki

Comment is about Bitchin' In The Kitchen Sink Drama (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Hello Paul, I have read two of your poems which are really very good, tinged with humour and a good sense of rhyme. I look forward to reading more. Thanks. Keith

Comment is about Paul Nunn (poet profile)

Original item by Paul Nunn

I love that, Cynthia. I agree, 'nobody but' does sound good to say.
And thank you for your honesty, Colin. I'll try make my poems shorter and more concise further on, and follow your advice (:

Comment is about Song of the Sky (blog)

Original item by Manya

Thank you for your comments, everyone! This is my first proper poem and since I really want to pursue poetry as a career, your criticism and ideas are extremely helpful!

Comment is about Song of the Sky (blog)

Original item by Manya

Hello, Suki and David..thanks, as always, for reading and commenting.

Somewhat at a tangent to the piece, but words are so inadequate.

Rachel

Comment is about R.E.M. (blog)

Original item by nunya

I've just started reading Vuong's work and--you're right--he's fantastic. I don't buy much poetry but I'm definitely considering his book. You couldn't have made a more welcome suggestion.

Rachel

Comment is about Stuart Buck (poet profile)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Thanks C?L,

Interesting you and David both mention a part II to this one which has been in the pipeline for weeks and ended up as a sort of hybrid of two pieces 'Kitchen Cupboard Love' and 'Fruit Bowl Fracas'. The latter holds most promise for a part II. We'll see.

Thanks as ever for endorsing my efforts.

Paul

Comment is about Bitchin' In The Kitchen Sink Drama (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

this is very good David but forgive me if I wonder out loud whether the two middle verses are somewhat (un)intentionally erotic - her mind wandering as she kneels, 'a handmaid or lover bestowing an intimate gift'. And then again as an ingenue, an innocent young woman perhaps. Apologies if my interpretation is way off the mark.

The last verse is a lovely interpretation of the image and contrasts her abstracted and dreamy solitude to that of the noisy mill. I agree with Cynthia about the build up and thank you also for the photography reference which I will certainly check out. All the best, Colin

Comment is about Mill Girl (blog)

Original item by David Cooke

Hello Cara, welcome to WoL and thanks for sharing this very personal poem. I look forward to reading some more from you in due course. All the best, Colin.

Comment is about Demon (blog)

Original item by Cara Joy Deane

excellent Paul. I reckon you could've done at least another dozen or so verses. As David said, a part II beckons and your audience awaits ?

Col

Comment is about Bitchin' In The Kitchen Sink Drama (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Thank you so dear David, Rose, Cynthia and Raj.

You are so kind for endorsing this loopy output!

Rose, just found your poem from 2014, very wry and very good indeed ?

Paul

Comment is about Bitchin' In The Kitchen Sink Drama (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

I really like this. It gave me goose bumps. Thanks for sharing.

Comment is about Gone (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

approaching this subject from a different angle gives it just the right balance of emotion it deserves. There is also something strangely comforting in the line 'I am still in nature' as if Mother Earth is looking after this poor boy's remains until 'one day / You’ll get warmer / And find me / If you keep looking'. The counting to ten is also very clever.

I'm often a bit iffy about this type of news related poetry but I think you have done exceedingly well here. My only slight quibble is the line 'Now burns in hell' which I find a little unrealistic maybe. Sorry, struggling to find the right word to explain what I mean.

Thanks for posting Ian.
Colin

Comment is about Gone (blog)

Original item by Ian Whiteley

A wonderful scenario. And built upon an accident, 'a broken thread'. A disruption.Vital to the cloth. Time consuming. And costly. The possibilities of interpretation are just endless. The second verse is lovely.

Thanks for the reference to Willi Ronis.

Comment is about Mill Girl (blog)

Original item by David Cooke

Hahaha, that was funny Paul. I like the way you've personified everyday kitchen utensils.

I particularly like the various visual layers overlapping in a seamless sequence. Excellent craft.

Believe it or not but I've been singing "Bitchin' in the Kitchen" for the past hour, trying to put Shaggy-type lyrics to it.?

Raj

Comment is about Bitchin' In The Kitchen Sink Drama (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring