Hilarious, and cleverly concocted with image tumbling over image, each one as funny as, or funnier than, the one before.

Comment is about Bitchin' In The Kitchen Sink Drama (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

ha! ?.Great minds think alike eh Paul? I refer you to an old one of mine *are the inanimate really dead?*

Rose ?

Comment is about Bitchin' In The Kitchen Sink Drama (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Colin's comments are really excellent. I'm glad he was bold enough to be so honest; it can be a tough call, especially when someone is very new, and not used to our responses.

Comment is about Song of the Sky (blog)

Original item by Manya

What a great support you have always been, Harry. And I assure you, I was quite 'lost' too. It was still worth the effort, even if just for myself. I wonder if, from time immemorial, poets have gathered together to chat. I never give up hope that some other person might like to respond to an idea - sharing similar thoughts.

Thinking can be a very lonely business.

Comment is about Beauty (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Excellent Ray, spot-on, dead funny, but I have to say I can't imagine you not enthralling each and every audience - no bull intended ??

Aythangyow. Paul

Comment is about BOVINE POETRY (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Suki, I'm so taken by the richness of your words and images that get richer and deeper on re-reading.

Thanks,
Paul

Comment is about The Quantum Paradox (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

I really enjoyed this David.

Thanks for posting.

Paul

Comment is about Mill Girl (blog)

Original item by David Cooke

Dave, thank you for this. You are right in that retirement reduces the stress factor considerably. This I know from first hand. Keith

Comment is about Stress (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

Cheers Linda for both of your comments. ;- )

Comment is about Linda Cosgriff (poet profile)

Original item by Linda Cosgriff

Cheers Raj for your crisp and constructive comments;- ) Tommy

Comment is about Chakraj (poet profile)

Original item by Chakraj

Well expressed thoughts Keith, the only solace I can offer is to observe that after we reach retirement age, many of those stresses inflicted by the workplace quickly fade out of sight... Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about Stress (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

yes I too like the images here especially the blackboard road with its essays of footprints. I think you could look at this poem another day, sometime in the future, and possibly strip it down to something more concise or maybe reap several more poems from the ideas already partly explored. Thanks for posting Manya.
Colin

Comment is about Song of the Sky (blog)

Original item by Manya

Thank you for reading and commenting Keith - much appreciated.

Comment is about After A Break Up (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

excellent last line - quality writing as always.

Comment is about become something frail (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

great ending and i like the cutting of ties image which I'd like to think you actually did but there doesn't appear to be enough hatred in the poem (except for the tiles) to justify such an act. Interesting theme for a poem Cait. Thanks for posting.
Colin

Comment is about What We Leave Behind (and what we take) (blog)

Original item by Cait Abbott

excellent - a hint of George Harrison's Little Piggies perhapsmaybenot - the demo of which was recorded at his Surrey home so you see good things do happen(stance) in Surrey. Oink Oink. Col.

Comment is about BOVINE POETRY (blog)

Original item by ray pool

so simple yet so complex like all your work I'm left in awe

Comment is about The Quantum Paradox (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

at least you can remember it Keith ? Clogs? Feels like we've stepped into a Lowry painting.

Comment is about First Day at School (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

A superb tapestry of images Manya, nicely oven together.

I enjoyed it so much that I might read it again.
Raj

Comment is about Song of the Sky (blog)

Original item by Manya

Contrary to the title this piece has power Stu.
Superb!

Raj

Comment is about become something frail (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Thanks Frances ?

Comment is about North (blog)

Original item by Lan

Thanks for taking the time to read and comment, Frances, I appreciate it.?

Comment is about Lan (poet profile)

Original item by Lan

Dave, Thank you for this as I can vouch for the veracity of your words from experience. A poem to give hope and to inspire. Keith

Comment is about After A Break Up (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

Hi Ray,

Very funny, and a lovely reading of it too. Excellent delivery! Really excellent lines.

Revenge poetry at its finest!

Suki

Comment is about BOVINE POETRY (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Hi Rachel,

I think this poem is as good as the poem that won you PotW a couple of weeks ago..

Suki

Comment is about R.E.M. (blog)

Original item by nunya

Hi Rick,

I think the ambiguity of this works really well; it could be read in a few ways.

Love the book, btw!

Take it easy!

Suki

Comment is about From Across The Street (blog)

Original item by Rick Gammon

Thanks Mark. Yes, it was fun while it lasted. Well someone has to take the p.... Thanks for the rhyme. It is the etcetera that worries me!

Ray

Comment is about ROMEO AND JULIET IN REAL TIME (blog)

Original item by ray pool

As good as ever Stu. As Ray says, the power indeed comes shining through.

Great stuff.

Paul

Comment is about become something frail (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Thanks Stu, very generous compliment indeed and I'm very grateful to you.

Paul

Comment is about minds under arrest (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Cheers Paul for your comment re: The end of an affair. Tommy ?

Comment is about Paul Waring (poet profile)

Original item by Paul Waring

Hi Rick. The first line obviously sets the stamp and the rest is a list of details - the question is I think would be how your son impacts on your idea of her and the secrecy - it seems to float above emotion and judgement, which makes it quite delicate and a bit spooky.

Enjoying your book by the way!

Ray

Comment is about From Across The Street (blog)

Original item by Rick Gammon

A parable to the unknown Stu - the power comes shining through, a glorious array of images as always - I think of a kaleidoscope shaken and revealed . Great stuff.

Ray

Comment is about become something frail (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Thanks Col: It's not always pleasant going over old ground. I think it was the confluence of events that resonated in my memory - it's funny how things come back to you - post funeral especially.

Glad you liked this Paul. a nice compliment.

Thanks David. With this I just let it ramble on from my mind with basically an account of what happened, and there was enough emotion in it to get through; I enjoyed writing it.

Nice expressive comment Rose. Thank you so much.

HI Stu. A sense of helplessness seems to invade us from time to time and we have to let things pass on much as they distress us. Memories flood back. Of course I like to get emotional responses don't we all?

HI Mark. A valid point you make and a nice true story. You got me thinking there, but not guilty - i'd given up by the time I reached the cat - it was a hundred feet long!

Love to all. Ray

Comment is about WHAT'S NEW PUSSYCAT? (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Sad, but nice poem. Enjoy your site very much.

http://chriscampbellturner.blogspot.ca/

Comment is about What We Leave Behind (and what we take) (blog)

Original item by Cait Abbott

Thanks Cynthia and Stu - I'm playing around with ambiguity at the moment - why did he hope he was not seen? possibly because she did not see him or that she did see him and pretended not to - I think he had feelings for her - I dunno - I'm trying to open doors of possibilities perhaps - it may form a part of a larger piece in time - but for now I'm trying for 'pithy but potent' ?

Comment is about From Across The Street (blog)

Original item by Rick Gammon

It's fun to conceive of a generational thing and put it
across so well. I think there's a poem in the readily
observed obsession of today's younger folk with their
mobile phones - seen at almost every time & place and in
every possible situation:
They're never alone
With a mobile phone
Smile or frown
They scroll on down (etc.). ?

Comment is about ROMEO AND JULIET IN REAL TIME (blog)

Original item by ray pool

It's like some recurring disease, with the vulgar glitz replacing those unsightly eruptions of the skin. Has ANY
recent entry actually become a successful song in its
own right...anywhere and at any time beyond the place and night in question?

Comment is about EuroTrash -- Dix Points (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

It leaves the painful suspicion that the swing of the scythe
brought about the rest, with its poignant passing of a small
existence, victim of a careless action never to be remedied.
I recall finding a seagull with a damaged wing on rocks in Torbay
one distant afternoon and locating a
local guy whose bungalow was a
menagerie of various wildlife. I like to
think he saved it because the alternative was too depressing to
contemplate. Funny how these
things stay with you.

Comment is about WHAT'S NEW PUSSYCAT? (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Harry, I thank you so much for giving me a straight honest opinion - you have exonerated me in the role of old git (no chance of a real copy of nubile girlie sound) but the exasperation of that form comes over apparently. Just playing with ideas really. I think your point is salient about audio; it is quite a discipline dealing with this "radio like" opportunity, and I do enjoy the freedom of it.

Many thanks and may good fortune dog your heels with nothing trodden in.

Ray

Comment is about ROMEO AND JULIET IN REAL TIME (blog)

Original item by ray pool

The title of the book "Beyond Belief" perfectly addressed
the public revulsion at the crimes committed by Brady and
Hindley. Their callous sadism that took those young
barely lived lives should remind us that there IS evil in
the world and we should always be on our guard against it - and those
who would "explain" it away.
We are ALL captains of our own souls and make our
choices accordingly. Therefore, we must be held accountable, responsible and properly punished for such
vile deeds.
It revolts me that the likes of Harry Roberts should be
allowed the freedom he stole from the three unarmed
police officers shot to death without compunction that
awful day in Shepherds Bush back in the 1960s. Have we lost the
conviction of retribution when "life"
for such crimes becomes a lottery
- a points awards system for the "don't cares" that promises release
...and sooner rather than later?

Comment is about Eternal Flames (blog)

Original item by Mike Bartram

Cynthia,
You have tackled a subject here which everyone knows when they see or feel it, but all get lost when they try to describe it.

Ho strange that the word seems to have vanished from almost all discussion about poetry nowadays ?

I salute your courage.

Comment is about Beauty (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

You are an instinctive and intuitive writer.

Comment is about From Across The Street (blog)

Original item by Rick Gammon

Just got back to this,
It made me think how the
addition of sight or sound can help a poem.

Pictures?...almost any well-chosen picture in it`s
small square will tend to out-class the poem it is
intended to illustrate.

Audio?...gives the poet the opportunity to nuance
his written words in the way he wishes.

Colin`s comment raises the question of how we `take`
the written word of this one...We could take it as the
sentimentally amused comment of an older person on
the gushings of love-lorn youth, but Ray`s vocalisation
is plainly taking the mickey (shame on the miserable
old git!)...Voice certainly `places` the poem.

It is useful to compare this with Ray`s recent poem
`Moment of Truth`, (20/4) where two differing kind
of voices are used to excellently bring out the musing
of the old guy and the calming control of the narrator
(which fittingly maintains the tone of the poem)

Comment is about ROMEO AND JULIET IN REAL TIME (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Headlong and effective, a torrent of words but thoughtful and well-aimed, with skill.

I must find time to go back and read more of your work.

Comment is about Your Tune. (blog)

Original item by Alexandra K. Parapadakis

thanks guys, sorry im late to my own party, but your comments are much appreciated.

Comment is about i am light once more (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

cheers both - mistakes corrected and comments enjoyed!

Comment is about leaves of glass (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Welcome to WOL, Manya. Your sample here is very interesting, and intriguing. Some fine imagery. I look forward to more poems. Poetry is a good outlet for thoughts, a kind of 'sorting machine' - good analogy that.

If you have many pieces backed up, it's probably a good idea to bring them into WOL at perhaps two a week. That seems to 'go down' well with fellow poets, rather than a flood of work all at once. Makes sense; it's a big site these days.

Comment is about Manya (poet profile)

Original item by Manya

Have I said "this is your best work" before? If I have replace it with this piece.

You set your stall out very precisely with this one.

It's all attraction, saturation, contraction, detraction in equal measures.

You are beginning to use words in a much more piercing way.

Comment is about Your Tune. (blog)

Original item by Alexandra K. Parapadakis

Very imaginative, and then supported with interesting imagery. I like the way you have bound the poem together with repetition at the end.

Would you consider 'nobody but a small red flower'? The two words 'nobody but' with the 'b' alliteration are a lovely sound together and smooth in texture. Just a thought.

Comment is about Song of the Sky (blog)

Original item by Manya

heartbreaking ray. i once rescued a cat who later died, i think ours lasted a couple of nights. very sad, you had me welling up.

Comment is about WHAT'S NEW PUSSYCAT? (blog)

Original item by ray pool