Very powerful. Tension builds right uo to the wonderful last two lines.

Comment is about Hidden (blog)

Original item by Melissa Gentile

Having spent my formative years in Clitheroe, Sabden, Whalley with picnics on the nick of Pendle your poems fills me a great sense of nostalgia. Thank you. Keith

Comment is about The Pennines (blog)

Original item by Roy Chetham

Hello Roy,
Thank you for this fascinating piece of verse. It is beautifully profound and requires several readings. It has a quality that challenges the reader to form his or her own conclusions on the nature of the forest. A real achievement. Thanks again. Keith

Comment is about The Horrible Forest (blog)

Original item by Roy Chetham

Thanks Jemima for the praise and love the story about your neighbours 'tittle' and 'tattle' - great names. I agree with your concerns about Hot Gossip outfits. Scary ?

Aythangyow Ray, kind praise and what a genius of a gent you are to mention 'People Watching'. Respect dear sir.

Thank you both, I'm so grateful.

Paul

Comment is about Gossip's Arrow (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Thanks David Suki and Paul for your thoughts.

The reason I wrote this is how weird it felt to go back and retrace my steps after six years and to remember so much of that earlier time in detail , etched as it were. The same thing can happen I suppose in unchanged environments and can woo us in different ways with a sense of time passing.

David, sadness is something I instinctively pick up on - really it is a way of life with me. I want to heal it, but I am also a sharer of it. The setting was certainly quintessentially English and cossetted, but the parrot just seemed incongruous.

Nice compliment Suki. Sometimes I just indulge myself in detail as if constructing a stage set. It's easy to overdo it! I hope my humour is never vicious, but it is broad.

Cheers Paul. Always good to get your thoughts, which here seem to coincide with the other comments.

Jemima, how kind - you have fallen into my humour pot, but with equal respect I did try his idea of pills, but I didn't persevere long enough for it to go away. I'm anti pill really and in any case after six years I feel fairly confident. Thanks for the advice though. I havn't checked out the tenna pads ; probably more embarrassing than a teenage request for condoms. Can you be serious about the shape? Thanks.
I'm so glad you enjoyed the poem!



Ray

Comment is about TIME FLIES, NOTHING CHANGES (blog)

Original item by ray pool

tear jerkingly beautiful Ray.Might one dare ask(with the greatest of respect)re your urinary probs,isn't there a version of Tenna pads for gentlemen.Sock shaped perhaps?
Thank you.Jemima.

Comment is about TIME FLIES, NOTHING CHANGES (blog)

Original item by ray pool

I think the ducking stool should be re instated Paul, and not just for scolds, but for the male of the species . That would put entertainment back on the local map. I like the way your repetitions and synonyms collect together into a kind of overlay of gossip , a clever aim .

It takes a very strong character not to get drawn into this type of whirlpool. The press are of course superb at doing it and getting it all out there.

I could go on, but there are people watching.....

Aythangow. Ray

Comment is about Gossip's Arrow (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

great poem Paul.Reminds me of two of my neighbours who I call 'tittle and tattle' The three of us get on very well though,and they laugh about my nicknames for them,whenever that is,they allow time for a laugh in between their gossiping.Speaking of which,I might change that to 'hot gossip'ers' although they are a tad old for sexy outfits! Thank you.Jemima.

Comment is about Gossip's Arrow (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Hello dear Carol.
Too you're welcome.
Yes that's a great poem.
And about Galaxy, it's true because Falaki means Skyey or we can say it Galaxy.

Comment is about Wanderer (blog)

Original item by Carol Falaki

Touching and sad aspects of life and inevitable change captured in fine detail here Ray through observation and reflection. Fine writing. And the audio brought it all to life so well.

Paul

Comment is about TIME FLIES, NOTHING CHANGES (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Thank you so much Frances, Suki, Kevin and Col for reading and commenting and thanks too to Adam, Aishah and David for the likes.

Much obliged to you all.

Paul

p.s. thanks for the link Col, greatband, great vid.

Comment is about Gossip's Arrow (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

thanks all, lovely stuff! look forward to reading your stuff when i get back from a busy weekend.

Comment is about take the darkness of this world and make it light (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Often I see poems I could read as pessemistic, even depressive, yet the writing is so good I can only feel happy for the esteemed author.

Bravo.

Comment is about heading west (a candle burned at both ends) (blog)

Original item by nunya

I've read this a couple of times, and it gets better with every read. eavesdropping is a brilliant way to get inspiration, but I could never have pulled all that out of one throw-away comment. loved it

Kevin

Comment is about It Was Similar To The Resurrection Oh But Not The Same (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

"It only takes one match to burn a thousand trees"

https://youtu.be/dIp3XU79oUA

I wonder if 'drinks' works just as good as 'drunks'. I rather like the idea of the drink spilling and causing all the trouble. I can't help but see you wagging your finger at these Someone Somewheres as you write this Paul.

Good stuff.
Col.

PS: best band in the whole of Wales boyo ?

Comment is about Gossip's Arrow (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Caught perhaps between night and day at any given point and the struggle to break free of one's demons and move on, or back. The groundhog has its daily repetitive routine, sees its shadow moving with the sun's trajectory, is rooted in time unlike the author who feels adrift in that same ocean of time.

Okay, so that's my take and I'm happy to admit I'm probably miles off the mark but that's the beauty of an elP poem. Your words allow us to find our own trajectories.

C?L

Comment is about heading west (a candle burned at both ends) (blog)

Original item by nunya

A perfect description of these toxic folk, with wagging tongues. of course we'd never get involved, but it's funny how we can't wait to hear the next snippet.

Kevin

Comment is about Gossip's Arrow (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Lots to think about here Aishah. Like many of us I have lots of answers to the world's problems but how to go about changing anything? The solutions are so simple yet seemingly impossible to put into practice.

Let's hope the lovely people can one day make the world glisten. It's a hope worth clinging to. Thanks for posting.

Colin.

Comment is about Let me tell you something (blog)

Original item by Wonderer

We visited Belsen when I served in Germany, and what happened there was beyond belief.

first line of the third verse "there was no discrimination", I know what you meant by that, but of course it was discrimination that put them there in the first place.

the style in which you wrote this, suited the subject matter perfectly, and made for a moving and thought provoking read.

Kevin

Comment is about Auschwitz : Never Again (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

Thank you all! Mars Volta?! Wow!

Cheers muchly folks!

Hugs,
Suki

Comment is about It Was Similar To The Resurrection Oh But Not The Same (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

Hi Stu,

The magical realist lovelorn word-painting; deep and vast.

Well, I love Neruda, so..

Suki

Comment is about take the darkness of this world and make it light (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Hi Ray,

Your reading is right on the money again. I have listened twice to this; your reading really evokes and brings out the mood of the piece.

It's the combination of light and dark, witty observation and warmth, and then the last two verses take it to a darker place. I like the way you constructed this, although it appears quite effortless..

Thanks for sharing,
Suki

Comment is about TIME FLIES, NOTHING CHANGES (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Hi elP,

The title suggests the poem that might go one way, and then there is the line:

..the groundhog sees his shadow.. which can be as an almost "deja vu all over again" kind of vibe; one day melting into another, then another..

However, the next two lines turns the poem around on itself, almost, and then finally back to the beginning. The rise in the east to the fall..

Hope I have understood this.. Anyway, it works for me, and it is just after four in the morning, so the perfect time to read. There's a certain synchronicity there..

Nice one..

Suki

Comment is about heading west (a candle burned at both ends) (blog)

Original item by nunya

Hi Paul,

Sounds like you might have met some of the weird ones in my work place! Sad people.

Suki

Comment is about Gossip's Arrow (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Circles again, but exactly how harm happens...

Comment is about Gossip's Arrow (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

My gosh, Suki! This is a jewel. Theosophist vs. technocrat? Clever. Clever. And, Stu mentions the Mars Volta--high praise for this certain gift you have with words and creation.

elP

Comment is about It Was Similar To The Resurrection Oh But Not The Same (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

I'm consistently astounded with your writing, Stu. And this, along side the suggestion of accompaniment, is tearful and indescribably beautiful.

elP

Comment is about take the darkness of this world and make it light (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Great use of alliteration. The entire piece has a dry comic effect which I thoroughly enjoyed.

elP

Comment is about Crowese (blog)

Original item by David Lindsay

It does seem a bit odd, Harry. Rather like having a vote to strike for a pay rise, being offered 2% but not reballotting again on whether to accept or reject.

Comment is about THE END OF THE AFFAIR (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

John,
I share your feelings.

On balance the Lib Dems look logical: If the sovereign power ceded it`s sovereignty to a referendum, to decide to leave (without revealing the cost) Then - when the true cost is known - they should again cede the final choice to another referendum...let the people decide. (If things get as messy as I think they will this will be unanswerable)

The final date for nomination is the eleventh of May, and I`m fascinated at (perhaps) the possibility of Tony Blair standing as some sort of alternative independent Labour candidate...The idea is delicious. (but Maybe I`m just dreaming). I can`t see him just standing on the sidelines.

(just waking up for a while) ?

An afterthought:
If all those youngsters who were too lazy to vote in the referendum wake up, they may get up
enough energy (poll tax wise) to actually riot.

Comment is about THE END OF THE AFFAIR (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Hello Suki, Thank you for your words about my poem The Lament of the Technophobe. You are absolutely right in what you say but it still gieves me. Thanks again. Keith

Comment is about Suki Spangles (poet profile)

Original item by Suki Spangles

This will be a difficult election for me, Ray. I expect I shall feel both the smug satisfaction of "I-told-you-so" with a deep sadness that it's come to this.

Comment is about THE END OF THE AFFAIR (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Aythangyow, Raymundo. Your kind words are so encouraging. Glad you and others picked out the first stanza, I probably wrote 30 drafts of it until it finally read like I wanted it to! ##patience is a virtue##

Paul

Comment is about Going Around In Circles (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

A poetic treat and your definitive style gives this a lightness of touch without loss of depth Paul. I love the first stanza especially.

Ray

Comment is about Going Around In Circles (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

A balancing act between a mother's love and the awful seesaw as it tips the other way. Beautifully simple and direct and moving.

Ray

Comment is about Lies (blog)

Original item by Karen Ankers

The first two lines are a tour de force. It gets better even as it poses a curious state of thoughtfulness which captures a real feel for internal strife and non resolution. A difficult thing to describe done so well.

Ray

Comment is about Momentary Musings (blog)

Original item by Neil Robertson

I salute you John and also my granddad who was a communist when there were causes to vote for. Is there a vast difference in the aspirations of Tory and Labour today?
We need to believe in something, but where are the track records we can look to?

Ray

Comment is about THE END OF THE AFFAIR (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

I like the inclusion of Erik Satie Stu. His music has a jagged quality as against say Debussy, so that's spot on. Great imagery here and as always those poetic depths to mine , the gems sparkling in the veins. The great thing about WOL is the variety of styles, and yours always brings joy . I know you suffer with your art, but it's always worth it for us readers.

Ray

Comment is about take the darkness of this world and make it light (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

What a good idea, Colin. I winder if Screaming Lord Such is still around?

Comment is about THE END OF THE AFFAIR (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Hello Kamran

Thank you
A wonderful quote from Khayyam

Your picture is appropriate. Kambiz tells me Falaki means Galaxy

Comment is about Wanderer (blog)

Original item by Carol Falaki

Great imagination at work again Suki.

Wonderfully original stuff!

Paul

Comment is about It Was Similar To The Resurrection Oh But Not The Same (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

I so enjoy the panoramic vision of your writing Stu.

Excellent stuff.

Paul

Comment is about take the darkness of this world and make it light (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Thanks Stu, another lovely comment and I'm very grateful to you.

Paul

Comment is about Going Around In Circles (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

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Comment is about AT THE WATERING HOLE (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Hi Jeff,

Wait until the Internet of Things arrives - that's just around the corner. There will be no going back..

Personally, and perhaps not a little ironically, the techno world we live in has given me so many ideas for poems because it is such a fascinating subject, although it can be a dark one too. Imagine where we will be in ten years? Actually that is sort of impossible now..

Cheers for the read!
Suki

Comment is about The Lament of a Technophobe (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

Hi Karen,

Congratulations on winning poem of the week!

Cheers,
Suki

Comment is about 'Unseen' by Karen Ankers is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

adrenalin junkies

on cardiac medication.

love that!

Comment is about AT THE WATERING HOLE (blog)

Original item by ray pool

i love the way you write suki. its clever, witty and just so full of words. this sort of stuff can easily slip into 'the mars volta' levels of surrealness, where things cease to 'mean', but you keep it grounded beautifully.

Comment is about It Was Similar To The Resurrection Oh But Not The Same (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

great stuff paul, lovely use of metaphor and the description of the seasons wear and tear on the earth.

Comment is about Going Around In Circles (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Dear Frances, I'm really pleased that you liked the first stanza and to read such kind praise makes every second of the writing and editing (ad-finitum) more worthwhile.

Thank you dearly.

Paul

Comment is about Going Around In Circles (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring