DL - to carry on from Harry's comment -
"There's something of a literary fib
In this lament for an idle nib"
Most enjoyable.
Comment is about The Pen (blog)
Original item by David Lindsay
I can absolutely imagine you doing this one live!
And "shittens" is definitely entering my vocabulary!
Comment is about Dante's Cat (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
I echo M.C.'s thoughts on this. Lovely.
Comment is about Some Small Whisper (blog)
Original item by Ian Gant
I have written enough "lyrics" and changed them to know
the doubt and hope to improve that can beset the
endlessly striving imagination.
Whilst new doesn't always mean better, in this instance
the style as shown here appeals for its dreamlike
consistency - the form being more appropriate to the
subject matter IMHO.
In the final analysis, perhaps the writer should write to
please him/herself. After all, authors have to live with
their words when the world has turned the page and moved
on.
Comment is about Afterwards...(again) (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
A thoughtful piece, taking the long view of history. Nicely done.
Comment is about Heaven (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
This made me smile. Especially the line
"Kerplop! Thunk! Blam! One thump, Pow! Swish!"
Perfect. :-)
Comment is about Day Three (blog)
Original item by Andy Sewina aka Danny Wise
I feel I should point out that a good friend of this website has just nominated Write Out Loud in the new wild card category. Just sayin' ...
Comment is about Deadline nears for Saboteur award nominations (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
This one surely ranks with T S Eliot, Laura. The onomatopoeia gives it a Tom and Jerry feel; a sort of "hit and myth." oops.
Ray
Comment is about Dante's Cat (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Lynn,
I`m waiting to see what you do with all this Panama stuff
coming out...go for them Girl!
(Great to see that lovely hair-style so often again)
Comment is about SCROUNGERS! (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Harry you always make such intelligent comments on others' work I am daunted to try the same on yours.
For me these are the best words (in the style I would have written them.......
"The insistent urging of desire
has succumbed
and docile, now rocks
in it`s peaceful bay".
As to your comments about the last five lines etc my only suggestion would be to replace
But just before I went to sleep...... with
"before I fell, I swear"......etc
Harry I love it when words come in that last ditch effort to stay awake, but they have to be captured and I have to get out of bed and write them down, so the cycle continues.
Comment is about Afterwards...(again) (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
Thanks Wolfie: definitely a cathartic experience watching the flames escaping through the open bars like a medieval torture cage. !
Harry, it was crackling I tell you! No regrets. Thanks.
Comment is about DREAMFINDER GENERAL (blog)
Original item by ray pool
But, Ray, was the small print whimpering that you hadn`t read it properly?
Comment is about DREAMFINDER GENERAL (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Sounds like a great night Nigel!
Comment is about Unrehearsed and Raring To Go (blog)
Original item by Nigel Astell
David,
This is a barefaced lie about a scribbler that has just scribbled nine very funny (and self-knowledgeable) stanzas about itself.
(and rhymed!)
Comment is about The Pen (blog)
Original item by David Lindsay
more bitter than angsty - the poem that is - I enjoyed it. I don't figure the merit of these things in their price or prize anymore, but there is a grim pleasure in weighing up the judges' report. Take that as you will.
Comment is about American poet Eric Berlin's 'Night Errand' wins National Poetry Competition (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Afternoon H!
Aye, not doing so bad at the moment ta chick :) Yeh, get yourself along to one :)
It's been a bit of a challenging year family-wise but experience is never wasted, eh? :)
You take care now and I look forward to reading much more of your work.
Comment is about Helen (poet profile)
Original item by Helen
Cheers Harry and Lea!
Hahaa Harry - ace story :D Ah well, the shittens ARE kittens you see ;)
Comment is about Dante's Cat (blog)
Original item by Laura Taylor
<Deleted User> (10960)
Mon 4th Apr 2016 06:04
Hi Stephanie,
Great! Look forward to reading more of your poems if you decide to submit.
Leilanie
Comment is about (blog)
Original item by Stephanie Gomez
Thank YOU Jemima for reading and your lovely words.
Thank you Leilanie for reading. Sounds wonderful and I will consider it.
Comment is about (blog)
Original item by Stephanie Gomez
Thank you for your kind comments, Jemima, and I completely agree about those conferences.
Comment is about SCROUNGERS! (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Sun 3rd Apr 2016 21:59
I love all of this piece,especially,the first part.Thank you Stephanie.Jemima.
Comment is about (blog)
Original item by Stephanie Gomez
Sun 3rd Apr 2016 21:56
" we subsidise their consumption at restaurant and bar"
too right Lynn! the number of times 'conferences' have ben held to discuss the migrant crisis,is the prime example.Discussing luxurious food and wine list's,more like!Good one Lynn.Thank you.Jemima.
Comment is about SCROUNGERS! (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Lynn - here's one back at ya!
Pussy was purring
On my lap quite contented
Cat full up with cream
Rob
Comment is about Incredulity (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Interesting how life is recycled in all sorts of ways, and a nice twist that it is a rat that comes out of hiding for the scraps ! It is always horrible to run over animals and this poem has a nice simple feel to it for me.
Ray
Comment is about CREATURE COMFORTS (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Hi Maggie,
Hope you are well. This is one of my favourites from ZOA. I recall you reading it but not sure if it was T&G or elsewhere.
I am hoping to come along this month, it's been far too long.
Helen x
Comment is about The World's Coat (blog)
Original item by Maggie Sawkins
Lynn Hamilton
Sun 3rd Apr 2016 19:29
Wood chip brings tears to eyes one way or another, Anita. Pleased yours were due to laughter. I'm going to need ladders and an industrial stripper this time! Its very fresh in my memory though, my mum going ballistic at the state of the wall at the side of my bed. I just couldn't resist! Similar feeling to snaring that out of reach crow from up your nose! Xx
Comment is about Woodchip (blog)
Forcefully put. But we should consider the historical
accounts of the Moors raiding far beyond their shores to plunder and capture legions of innocents to be held as slaves in bondage - no doubt contributing
to the splendour of their palaces and gardens.
Religion is a useful tool for the unscrupulous, ready
to prey on the weak and weak-minded. The historical
conflict between "Crown and Church" nearer home serves as a reminder of its power and influence.
I propose that hate is not the preferred human choice.
Mankind is born to laugh and be happy and that shines through even in the most distressing conditions and
situations to be seen today.
Comment is about Heaven (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
I'm sure there are many who identify with the theme of
this well-put observation of how inspiration can fail in
the midst of a humdrum existence. I like the use of
the rhyming last two lines as it progresses...although I'm
slightly confused by the construction of -
"What was it? That needed to be said." - wondering more
along the concept of "What was it that needed to be said?"
which continues the "indecisive" theme of the concept.
But that's a personal interpretation.
Comment is about Scratching Beard, Holding Head (blog)
Original item by Stuart Clark
I admire the preparation and research that surely went
into this poem - an ode to the value of money, so to speak.
interesting though, how we admire some who are very rich
yet "knock" others with that same financial advantage.
Personally, having enough to live life without worrying about
paying bills is always a good basis for contentment. Even
better is being to help out others in need. I'm confused
why some hugely wealthy are ready to indulge themselves
frivolously with grotesque unnecessary purchases when
there is so much reward to be obtained in choosing to lift
others out of the trap of misery and despair.
Comment is about Money (blog)
Original item by David Lindsay
<Deleted User> (10960)
Sun 3rd Apr 2016 14:49
Hi Stephanie,
Just read your poem and thought you might be interested in submitting work to my new Ezine, Bindweed Magazine, if you're looking for another platform for your poetry: https://bindweedmagazine.wordpress.com/submission-guidelines/
Happy writing!
Leilanie Stewart
Comment is about (blog)
Original item by Stephanie Gomez
<Deleted User> (10960)
Sun 3rd Apr 2016 14:36
Hi Stuart,
I just stopped by and read your poem. If you have any similar work that's looking for a home, feel free to check out my new poetry and fiction Ezine, Bindweed Magazine:
https://bindweedmagazine.wordpress.com/submission-guidelines/
Happy writing,
Leilanie Stewart
Comment is about Scratching Beard, Holding Head (blog)
Original item by Stuart Clark
The day of one of our poetry meetings and couldn't think of anything to write and so wrote what I was feeling.
Comment is about Scratching Beard, Holding Head (blog)
Original item by Stuart Clark
I loved David's opening meaningless speech - I could even imagine Cameron saying those very words.
Matt, my only point would be that in reality Jeremy favours a softer approach, and you have him here as a nasty swearing whatsit, but hey, it is your poem and it's very amusing.
Comment is about masterdebate (blog)
Original item by Matt
Hi Rob, cheers for liking my trilogy.
Oh, and here's a haiku just for you:
If God intended
Women to have no pleasure
Why the clitoris?
Apologies for that one, ha ha, couldn't resist...
Comment is about Incredulity (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Ha ha, Jemima, yes, I've known snow at Easter, but fortunately not this year in the south where I am.
Thank you for your comment.
Comment is about Haiku: Easter weather (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Here are the winners of the competition:
First Prize - £200 and publication - Sharon Black, Fishing.
Runner up - £50 and publication - Mary Gilonne, Knot Collector
Runner up - £50 and publication - Rachael Smart, Butchery.
You can read the winning poems and judge's comments here
http://prolebooks.co.uk/poetry%20competition.html
Comment is about Deadline nears for £200 Prole competition (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Oh Lynn I cried laughing at this piece of torment! It took me back to the past and hours, or rather days, of doing just that! Hope there's only one wall of it!! It'll ruin your nails hun x
Anita
Comment is about Woodchip (blog)
An achingly accurate description of the hate filled world we live in. Beautiful words.
Comment is about Heaven (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Sat 2nd Apr 2016 21:34
what Lynn? no snow!? Surely! Thank you.Jemima.
Comment is about Haiku: Easter weather (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Sat 2nd Apr 2016 21:31
Hi again M.C.
Yes,I can understand your valid point.Thank you.Jemima.
Comment is about CREATURE COMFORTS (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Hello *waves back* :)
How's tricks? Is the poetry scene treating you well??
I haven't been doing much open mic these last few months, I've just been too bloody busy! Going to try and go along this month. I miss it.
Hope you are well x
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Thanks for the comments, ladies.
JJ - the problem with polishing is that it tends to remove
the patina. :-)
Comment is about CREATURE COMFORTS (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Sat 2nd Apr 2016 21:15
M.C.I also like this poem,however,I respectfully think it is worthy of a teensy weensy 'polishing'
Thank you.Jemima.
Comment is about CREATURE COMFORTS (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Hello Harry,
Thanks for the thoughts. I was an appalling student of Latin at school but value it along with Greek Mythology as completely worthless knowledge of which more should be taught these days.
One of my favourite belters is Byron,
"The Assyrian came down like a wolf on the fold
And his cohorts were gleaming in purple and gold."
Comment is about FALERNIAN WINE (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Martin Elder
Mon 4th Apr 2016 18:53
This a fab poem Lynn, and to think my parents loved woodchip ,it covered a multitude of uneven surfaces and anything that you wanted to hide. I have to confess that even I have used it in the past. But it was momentary lapse of judgement.!
Comment is about Woodchip (blog)