Ah thank you Robert :) I haven't written haiku in too long, so thank YOU for the jogged elbow :)
And I wouldn't say you still had SO much to learn - from what I've read over the last couple of days, you're doing well alright!
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Laura - I am in awe, not only of your dedication to structure in each stanza, but also of the cadence and rhythm so expertly crafted. I still have so much to learn!
Rob
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Phwoar - THIS is a line! Her velvet collisions dress the air.
Love it.
Comment is about The Moth (blog)
Original item by Simon Austin
NICE SYLLABLES! great.
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Stately home
unexplained presence
teenage Queen
brutality disfigured.
What am I ?
The theme for Monday is put together a poem with a puzzle so the person listening can work out who or what it is about.
If you think of one bring it along with you and we shall try and solve the riddle!
On Saturday the 9th April there will be a Write Out Loud workshop at the Gallery at 10.30am to 12.30 followed by an open mic later at 3.30 to 4-30pm.
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really enjoyed this. its wonderfully gothic and sensual, and reminds me a lot of the hg wells story of the same name, in tone rather than content. taken metaphorically, as a poem about a woman in the throws of love, or literally as a description of a moths futility, its excellent and actually works both ways, a clever thing indeed. i am smitten. some great lines too. velvet collisions. lovely.
Comment is about The Moth (blog)
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Thu 7th Apr 2016 23:35
ha! put that in your offshore account D.C. and bloody well choke on it! nice bit of arse booting here,Lynn.Thank you.Jemima.
Comment is about Haiku: Tax corruption (blog)
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Sorry to hear you've had a tough time of it. I read your Mothering Sunday poem and assume it is connected. If so, then I am so sorry :( x
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Ray,
Firstly, I like the title. Both my 4 year old son and my husband have type 1 Diabetes, and it is very frustrating when people don't differentiate between the types.
If I had a quid for every time someone asked me if I gave my own child too many sweets, and therefore 'gave' him this horrible condition, I would be a seriously rich woman!
As for Type 2, I worry that effects of poor education when it comes to our diet, will have a detrimental effect for many years to come (a bit like smoking of the previous generation).
If people could spend some time in the life of a family with insulin dependent Diabetics, injecting themselves a minimum of 4 times daily, pricking their fingers double that, and dealing with the constant highs and lows of this horrible condition, then they might be think twice about their lifestyle choices.
Thanks for the read :)
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Just to clarify Laura about the mirror - when the backing starts to deteriorate behind the glass you get that kind of distressed look, black holes if you like, that are apparently sought after by collectors, believe it or not. I think a kind of fungus takes hold. Check it out, lass. Thanks for the interest and I hope you are happy with it. !
Ray
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Hi,
I hope you can also give my pamphlet 'Codes of Conduct' some support by nominating it in the pamphlet section of the Saboteur Awards. Cinnamon Press are the publishers.
Thank you,
Neil Elder
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Well done, PEN. A simple idea, but – as so many of the poets discovered – also one which challenges us and takes us out of our comfort zone. And keeps vulnerable writers in the public eye.
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Plenty worth reading following my modest four lines.
Thanks for all the comments/opinions. Informative and
informed stuff!
Dominic - I am in good company, needing only to cite
the Gershwins' song "It Ain't Necessarily So" from "Porgy
and Bess" - sung by the character Sporting Life (played
in the film version by the inimitable Sammy Davis Jr.).
"The things that you're li'ble
To read in the Bible,
It ain't necessarily so".
I was just more punctilious in the spelling as befits a literary
site. :-)
Comment is about SEPARATION (blog)
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That's another great choice of poem, Ted. Thank you.
Comment is about 'Watching the world swim fast and shining, right before his eyes' (article)
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Love that last line, Chris. :-)
Comment is about Counting Sheep (blog)
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Well done, I find myself in arguments all the time, how can they be justified while genuine disabled people renting houses are scared of where their next meal will come from? And why am I always angry ?
Comment is about Panama scandal and atrocities of government (blog)
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'Two Tribes' always makes me think of Frankie Goes To Hollywood, so a poem about rugby was the last thing I expected! Nicely done, though. :-)
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Sorry if I took this wrong stu but I could not help myself from laughing hysterically, excellent
Comment is about Haiku: Having cats in Spring (blog)
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I like the way you've structured this poem with the two voices set up at opposite sides of the page: really captures the sense of a self at war. Nice work.
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Crooked chins and fisticuffs, broken noses and bellies of fluff excellent poem for gentlemen toughs...well done, very good
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Thank you Laura, the lying shysters indeed!
Comment is about Panama scandal and atrocities of government (blog)
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saw it at the cinema. it was great. like looking in a mirror and seeing cave staring back.
Comment is about gone (blog)
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Ooo no, never even heard of that film, it looks ace! Must watch that, thanks for the rec!
Yeh, I wondered that too. He might not be able to write anything at all. I suspect he will, but you never know. Such a godawful tragedy, that. You do your best to raise your kids with as much information about the real world as possible...to go, armed with that knowledge and yet still come unstuck...heartbreaking.
Comment is about gone (blog)
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very, very nice poem Vicki I can just picture the scene.
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Hahaa :D
You ever read his letter to MTV? There's a live clip of him reading it now, on Letters of Note. If you've not seen it, you'll love this :D
http://www.lettersofnote.com/2012/02/my-muse-is-not-horse.html
Comment is about gone (blog)
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cheers both. i havent written a haiku in ages. rob, you are inspiring people to write this fine old form again it seems!
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wonderful! he was amazing live. it was a greatest hits tour and people kept calling out songs for him to play. his response - 'i'll play what i fucking want' before launching into deanna.
great stuff.
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Fab. I do love a well written haiku. I used to use them to break me out of certain rhythmic patterns that I fall into without noticing.
Hmm. Not done one for ages. Might give it a go!
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Overcome with envy that you've seen him live. I quite often stick on the Brixton Academy gig for 'that' version of Stagger Lee - it's offensively brilliant, and the band are breathtaking.
Ooo enjoy the book! Reckon you'll love it!
Beg to differ - as poets, we can make up all the words we bloody well choose to. I made up 'shittens', so 'Caveian' is now in the lexiconnnn! :D
ps - a good friend of mine once used 'drim' in her poem, to describe the weather, and the printer changed it to 'grim' even after she'd proofed 'drim'. She was well pissed off!
Comment is about gone (blog)
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Stu - love it mate and thanks for making it available for public consumption.
Rob
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thanks both!
i have never read that laura and i cant believe i have not. i have seen nick cave in concert (i sat next to my emotional man friend stefan who cried like a baby when he played the ship song) and it was phenomenal. murder ballads is an astonishing album and this poem is totally caveian although that isnt a word...
i am ordering that book off amazon as we type.
Comment is about gone (blog)
Original item by Stuart Buck
Sanguine - an under-used word if ever there was one.
Once again Stu, you've given us a crack in the door to something very strange and unsettling, in the vein of Nick Cave, I would say. You ever read And the Ass Saw the Angel?
Comment is about gone (blog)
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Fungal mirrors? Hmmm. Interesting image. I shall think on that, doesn't throw anything up immediately mind, but I will ponder.
Comment is about SNOBS (blog)
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*applauds*
As you well know Lynn, this is right up my street :) Well done, good piece, the lying shysters.
Comment is about Panama scandal and atrocities of government (blog)
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Yes yes yes! Can not WAIT for this!!
Comment is about Linton Kwesi Johnson and Hollie McNish at Liverpool's WOW festival (article)
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It started off with telling visitors downstairs that the poetry reading was taking place upstairs - - - then more acts turned up and this really set it off! We ended up asking for more time to the staff downstairs who had just cleared all the food and wine away but we managed it and everyone had a ball!
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Thank you Jemima and MC, much appreciated.
Comment is about Panama scandal and atrocities of government (blog)
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Thanks Harry. I wrote this last Easter, following a very productive day making bonnets for my kids. My boy won a prize, my girl didn't (cue lots of dramatic tears lol)
Thanks for commenting :)
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Thanks chaps. Yes, it has been a breath of fresh air and I think anyone and everyone who isn't a Spurs fan is willing Leicester to finish top.
What a story! I only wish i'd have had Vardy and Mahrez in my dream team from the start haha :)
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This is so good (and actually so me). Well written, Dusty.
Comment is about Dotage (blog)
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I like this, and can identify with it a bit - my memory's been 'spotty' for years!
I also remember Pickie, though - always freezing as I recall!
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yeh, I was going to cite Aristotle and Plato, though we're not really on nodding terms, but sifting through this I think Harry makes the point best, don't dismiss anyone as outdated for visiting hell on everyone else: and the psychologist might say god is near, that is, "in the last analysis we discover only ourselves."
As a western European, thus somewhat Christian I found Ian's alternative first line adjusted the tone to the spirit I wanted from it. There is an unreliable bible rhyme there somewhere MC: what next?
kind rgards all
Dom.
Aristotle Aristotle
was a bugger for the bottle,
Hobbs was fond of his dram,
and old Descartes was a drunken old fart,
I drink therefore I am.
Monty Python.
Comment is about SEPARATION (blog)
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Wed 6th Apr 2016 23:51
job so well done Lynn,attagirl! Thank you.Jemima.
Comment is about Panama scandal and atrocities of government (blog)
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Nice triolet, Helen.
Can't see them blowing it now. The mighty Spurs will do well to settle for top 4.
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Laura Taylor
Fri 8th Apr 2016 15:10
So do I :D Ta very much Jonathan!
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