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Thu 23rd Jul 2015 14:28

I am so moved by this poem. My emotions are all over the place. Memories flooded back--good and bad. You captured exactly what it is like for a child to live in that sort of dysfunction. The thoughts that repeat and the prayers that are sent up to a God they aren't sure really exists. Very well done. This poem has very much become a favorite for me.

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John Bastard

Thu 23rd Jul 2015 12:36

morning stu
thank you for reading me. I'll definitely submit a couple things to Prolific. It's not often I write haiku, but that day I was just feeling lucky.

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John Bastard

Thu 23rd Jul 2015 12:13

i disagree with cynthia: movies have scenes because art imitates life in exaggerated ways that serve to explore the depth of human feeling.

sometimes a kiss strikes you so deeply and so hard you dip down deep, touching a greater panorama of feeling where goosebumps are miles apart. every detail of the world for a city block spins around you, her, and that blissful eternity of a minute stretches out -- out and out and down for what could very well be forever -- until at last you part and return to the droop-lidded cold reality. Holding hands feels monochromatic by comparison.
or at least that's what i've felt.

you could call it a movie scene or you can call it a moment, bigger than the kiss itself. sometimes it goes the other way and your everything turns into the warmth and tactility of lips touching lips, which is great. but sometimes it goes from outside to inside to outside. really it all depends on what you remember (or what you want)

blah blah blah, ramble ramble
amen

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John Bastard

Thu 23rd Jul 2015 12:06

"shoot, coward. you're only killing a man."

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Darren Scanlon

Thu 23rd Jul 2015 10:44

Thanks so much, Ali

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Stu Buck

Thu 23rd Jul 2015 10:06

these are all excellent, especially the first. have you tried sending them to haiku journal (prolific press)? its a good way of getting yourself in print and the paperback books are really quite sexy.

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Tommy Carroll

Thu 23rd Jul 2015 07:34

Hi Ali, read and be dammed; write and be redeemed.

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ali bell

Thu 23rd Jul 2015 07:30

I liked all the lines! Thanks :)

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JJ

Thu 23rd Jul 2015 06:58

Am glad you liked the lines. (except the 3rd one.)

You describe them well. Thanks for that.

Keep writing. Take care.

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ali bell

Thu 23rd Jul 2015 06:30

Amazing poetry. Great rhyming pattern too. This would be a very nice lullably for a child as well as a beautiful poem.

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ali bell

Thu 23rd Jul 2015 06:23

No need to apologize! Those lines are beautiful.
"Flawless like moonlight" could mean the purity of the color of the rose. "Showered by rain" also describes the process of a flower growing (how a rose is born). Is this what you were thinking? I'm very happy my poem inspired another work!

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JJ

Thu 23rd Jul 2015 05:43

These lines just popped in my mind immediately after i read your lines.

Apologies in advance, that I wrote them without your consent.

Please let me know if you like them?

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flawless like moonlight

showered by rain

miraculously no thorn

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ali bell

Thu 23rd Jul 2015 05:17

Thanks!

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ali bell

Thu 23rd Jul 2015 05:16

Thank you Winston! Yes, it's true that change is necessary for everything to exist. Without change even in our lives, life would be boring and meaningless. There would be no growth. How we deal with change defines us.

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winston plowes

Thu 23rd Jul 2015 00:01

Liked this one. I used to hate change but now realise that life IS about change. It's what you do with those changes. Thx for sharing

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winston plowes

Wed 22nd Jul 2015 23:59

Lovely haiku Ali.

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ali bell

Wed 22nd Jul 2015 21:48

Very nice poem! Great imagery.

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ali bell

Wed 22nd Jul 2015 21:43

Thank you for posting, David! Flock of Seagulls is a great poem.

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ali bell

Wed 22nd Jul 2015 21:40

Raypool: Thank you so much! That means a lot to me.

Cynthia: Thank you! Yes, I live in California, play music, and am in high school. Your words are very encouraging.

People like you two are what helps young writers like me to continue and improve. Thanks again. :)

After studying black holes a bit, I was inspired to write this poem. Surprisingly, I found that black holes are one of the least complex objects in space. I read that "black holes are certainly less complex than the human mind" and that lead me to wonder how amazing it is that a brain so small can be more complicated and less understood than a black hole light years away in outer space. This was also part of my inspiration for "Human Thought".

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ali bell

Wed 22nd Jul 2015 21:27

Thank you so much!

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jeremy young

Wed 22nd Jul 2015 19:59

so am I

it is an issue of the style I am exploring - finding a way to free the language and at the same time drawing on it's etymological basis

and trying establish a grammatical format - through spacing word choice and the natural rhythms of speech - that is not immediately experimental - or unnecessarily surreal

hence my reference to the implied end-stopped enjamb - as one of the principle areas I have been working on is the notion of lines being statements/slogans

my apologies if my reply appeared flippant - was was not intended that way

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 22nd Jul 2015 19:23

Delightful. I'm totally with you. Your interests should include all aspects of the innately wonderful, physical human body.

And never lose sight of 'silly':

'Just a squishy mass that is a brain'.

Great conclusion.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 22nd Jul 2015 19:16

The heart, depth and searching mind of a poet are yours, Ali.

The California girl, right? Still a student? And musical?

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 22nd Jul 2015 19:10

Actually, I was serious.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Wed 22nd Jul 2015 19:01

I don't know how I missed this before; but glad I've caught up. I really like the lyrical sense and the style of imagery of the Early Nineteenth Century Romantics (clinical term), nothing old-fashioned about it. Beauty is Beauty.

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Stu Buck

Wed 22nd Jul 2015 15:45

just realised I wrote all that and didnt recommend any of their music...

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yY2aHxWV1xE

this song will sum them up a lot better than i ever could.

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Stu Buck

Wed 22nd Jul 2015 15:38

Hello Ray,
Half man Half biscuit are a band from the wirral. They have been around for ages now, and were a massive part of my musical journey. The music is fairly basic, post-punk style but the lyrics are something else. They perfectly detail the monotony of living, the ridiculousness of celebrity culture and are very english! here's some of my favourite lines so you can see what you think;

You never hear of folk getting knocked on the bonce
Although there was a drive-by shouting once

I’m gonna feed our children non-organic food
And with the money saved, take them to the zoo

Did you play in the Garden of Eden?
Were the goalkeeper’s gloves to you tossed?
‘Cos it seems to me you’re the reason
You’re the reason why Paradise lost

although the line i instantly thought of when i read your piece was, somewhat bizarrely...

I want to perch myself halfway up a metal staircase with the Polydor girls and talk about meerkats

I dont do them much justice, but they really are fab!

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raypool

Wed 22nd Jul 2015 15:29

Thanks Stu for your assessment of K K .Perhaps you could give me an example of Half man half biscuit if possible , there's such a lot to learn in this poetry game. I'll take it as a compliment. Cheers, Ray

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John Coopey

Wed 22nd Jul 2015 12:40

You old goat!
(Whatever works for us old uns, eh?)

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Gus Jonsson

Wed 22nd Jul 2015 11:51

Thank you, as ever Cynthia.

Romance as ever......how are you ? ...hope all is well.

Thank you once again.
Gus xx

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Gus Jonsson

Wed 22nd Jul 2015 11:49

Thank you, as ever Cynthia.

Romance as ever......how are you ? ...hope all is well.

Thank you once again.
Gus xx

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Stu Buck

Wed 22nd Jul 2015 11:49

this runs very much like a half man half biscuit lyric, which is a huge compliment.

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raypool

Tue 21st Jul 2015 20:12

very powerful in its simplicity as Graham says. To me I can envisage a sort of frontier mind , in the almost casual inevitability of it.

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raypool

Tue 21st Jul 2015 20:03

HI : I am an old fella, but you appear young and I must say this is a very mature poem and so perceptive. There is more to it than meets the eye.... Super lines, enjoyed it.

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jeremy young

Tue 21st Jul 2015 19:44

I see what you mean - the problems of the implied end-stopped enjamb....

*seeks metaphysical explanation for an inherent problem of style*

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John Coopey

Tue 21st Jul 2015 18:16

I think he is now, Graham.

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John Coopey

Tue 21st Jul 2015 18:16

A criticism of my case, Tommy, might be that goals were easier to come by in the 60's. I'd agree with that so I think the acid test would be the percentage of goals scored by Greaves, Rooney et al of all the goals scored in the games in which they played. I'd still wager that Greavsie would top the list.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 21st Jul 2015 16:54

Warmly romantic, and sincere. The 'name' is personified in many ways, but very relate-able as the image compounds.

It's great to see you back on-line in Poetry Blogs.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 21st Jul 2015 16:31

I want to read all your work, but not today. Duty calls. I've been too long at the keyboard already.

What do you teach?

You have a fine face; a man of the sun with a great smile. Presuming the photo is of yourself, but who knows? Regardless, it's a good image to accompany your work.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 21st Jul 2015 16:26

A virulent sense of sarcasm, highly effective. There is nothing simple about this poem; more like milk and vinegar in a mixer (which result has many good uses in everyday life.)

I presume an 'ancestry' of pillage and rape, like almost anywhere in the wide world of war. It sure doesn't pin you down.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 21st Jul 2015 16:13

This is a whole philosophy of life in a few lines, perhaps as the major undercurrent of a beloved religion. Very telling and influential.

Aren't you the gentleman from the western U.S., the chap who has a new farm? I'm going to check.

And, yes, you are.

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Preeti Sinha

Tue 21st Jul 2015 16:10

I inspired you to write this! Wow, this is stunning! I wish I could understand poetry :o
You write so eloquently. There's no confusion in your head.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 21st Jul 2015 16:02

Your ideas are captivating, and then your evocative images do them full justice.

Are you 'dripping rain within the bounds of your pulled-in coat?' Or do you actually mean something different? It's the 'when' that is puzzling. Or maybe a hyphen again after 'rain' - maybe that's it.

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Cynthia Buell Thomas

Tue 21st Jul 2015 15:45

You must be having a good laugh. Super job on the spelling and grammar errors.

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Graham Sherwood

Tue 21st Jul 2015 07:47

The last I heard JC was that it was going to be a long recovery. Never a good sign, could mean anything. Wasn't he about to invested into the THFC Hall of Fame. Can't believe he isn't in it already. I saw his one man show a few years ago in Northampton. Brilliant whit. Let's hope for the best.

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Alex Swarbrick

Tue 21st Jul 2015 05:00

Lovely.Like this :)

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Tommy Carroll

Tue 21st Jul 2015 01:04

I'm not sure John, but I think Rooney's record (so far) includes far more friendlies. If taken into account Greaves feat is even more impressive.

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John Coopey

Mon 20th Jul 2015 22:43

Although he's out, Graham, I don't see any reports indicating much of a recovery.

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Graham Sherwood

Mon 20th Jul 2015 22:29

Come on Jimmy

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Joe Conor Williams

Mon 20th Jul 2015 15:07

I'm hoping to perform it live soon. A bit angrier than my usual stuff but I'm just drawing off what I'm seeing around me in the city. Thanks for the kind words.

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