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M.C. Newberry

Wed 17th Jun 2015 16:42

Further to my previous comment, I look forward to the
opportunity of submitting self-financed publications to
this planned poetry "shop window" and wait on the
information needed to follow up. I'm sure there others
with the same idea, beyond the usual poetry publishers.

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M.C. Newberry

Wed 17th Jun 2015 16:22

Harry - somehow I am left with the thought "Clapped out"!!
:-))

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Nigel Astell

Wed 17th Jun 2015 13:34

A thumb a forefinger perfectly placed
write lines that are ripened once read.

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Corr Lens

Wed 17th Jun 2015 10:40

Love the pace. First of yours I've read I'm excited to read the rest!

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Corr Lens

Wed 17th Jun 2015 10:37

<3 is all. Very nice as always.

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Corr Lens

Wed 17th Jun 2015 10:34

typical Dave.

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Corr Lens

Wed 17th Jun 2015 10:31

Im a blasphemer, but whoever knelt backward onto that porcelain pew has my vote for pope. Very valid theistic request.

ps- did it work? did you wait to find out?!

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Tommy Carroll

Wed 17th Jun 2015 10:15

Hi Becky Tommy

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Travis Brow

Wed 17th Jun 2015 10:15

Short and sweet Tommy, nice piece. I think it'd work as well if it ended after 'departure'

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Ged the Poet

Tue 16th Jun 2015 21:06

Thank you very all much for your very kind appraisal on this 30th anniversary of the Battle of Orgreave. A most significant moment in British social history.

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Lynn Hamilton

Tue 16th Jun 2015 19:20

Hello Helen. Thank you for reading and commenting on 'The 19th Floor'. Your comment took me by complete surprise and brought a tiny watery drop to my eye. x

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Lynn Hamilton

Tue 16th Jun 2015 19:17

Mr B. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. The fact that you took the time to highlight a piece of 'The 19th Floor' means that I may now have to buy a bigger hat! Thank you and much appreciated.

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Lynn Hamilton

Tue 16th Jun 2015 19:12

Evening Martin. Thank you so much for your positive comments on 'The 19th Floor'. Feeling quite please with meself.

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Lynn Hamilton

Tue 16th Jun 2015 19:10

Hello Andy. Thanks for reading and commenting on the 'The 19th Floor'. Much appreciated and chuffed to bits you enjoyed it.

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Joshua Van-Cook

Tue 16th Jun 2015 18:38

This is very good. I heartily appreciate the fine term of phrase and suggestion prevalent in this piece. Nicely done.

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gavin purnell

Tue 16th Jun 2015 16:09

You write alot like me I think. Im knew here so you might get to see some of my work soon.

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gavin purnell

Tue 16th Jun 2015 16:05

Your right alot of people will never know what love is. And most people experience different types of love.

Past looks, intelligence, character and personalities lies a sense of pure emotion which you can connect to and be at peace. You have to be brave and open minded as this is totally a unselfish act which can only be achieved when two people have the same awareness.

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Lan

Tue 16th Jun 2015 13:07

Love the repetition in this one, it takes me to a place I go to sometimes where I am just done, and I don't want to push myself or feel pushed by anyone else to grow or change or challenge myself etc - not sure if that was the intended effect, but works for me xx

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Lan

Tue 16th Jun 2015 12:56

Hi Daz, thanks for your kind comment on 'kick arse steam-punk fucking wonder woman', I appreciate it. It was a fun one to write ;)

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Lan

Tue 16th Jun 2015 12:53

Hi Harry, thanks for taking the time to read and comment on 'End of Innocence', I appreciate it.

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<Deleted User> (9882)

Tue 16th Jun 2015 09:17

are we talking hypnotic advertising here Martin? seems so

cool composing!


Thank you.
Rose.x

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John Coopey

Mon 15th Jun 2015 22:07

Hanging on to it is not normally a problem for me, Harry. Now holding it in - that's different.
Incidentally I'm just enjoying reading, "Eats, Shites and Leaves" - really.

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Harry O'Neill

Mon 15th Jun 2015 21:31

Believe me, John,
As someone who endured two prostate ops during my geriatric uni studies, take my word for it,
If you`ve got to get rid of it - pray!

Cynthia,
I`ve never been able to get rid of the waste material in my head...even by praying,

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Harry O'Neill

Mon 15th Jun 2015 21:21

Cynthia,
I was sitting alone on a bench near a school only the other day when a class of infants in their little yellow outside jackets passed. Every one - without exception - hailed me with a cheery Hi ya! (much to the amusement of the teachers)..and me hi ya -ing back. Every one of them was a lovely little innocent `cheer you up`.

It wasn`t until I looked at my newspaper (with all this immigration waffle) that I recalled that five of the kids (out of a class of about thirty) were black. (and that I couldn`t really tell if there were any polish kids among them (we have two Polish shops). and I said to myself Blimey!...and this is Cheshire!

Thank God someone is doing an adequate reproducing job for us and helping to provide us with such heart - warming little scenes.

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Helen Elliott

Mon 15th Jun 2015 21:04

Hi Harry,

Thanks again for your comments on 'Belief'.

Perhaps some of the poems that I have blogged are a tad personal for the full meaning to be clear. Problem is I become quite attached to them :)
As for wishing me luck with performing - thank you! I love the forms and I feel comfortable writing them. Challenging but rewarding.

Helen :)

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Harry O'Neill

Mon 15th Jun 2015 20:48

M.C.
Never mind this no applause stuff - I want to hear the claps!

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Mon 15th Jun 2015 20:10

Just to add to previous comments Andy - for me, the poem didn't need the photo - I find it too much of an intimate distraction and the words themselves convey enough for me to formulate my own 'poem in a photograph'.
Hope you don't mind me saying this. All the best.

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Dave Carr

Mon 15th Jun 2015 18:40

Sorry Harry.
But you know I'll do anything for a cheap laugh.
Dave

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Harry O'Neill

Mon 15th Jun 2015 16:34

Lynn,
No wonder at the number of comments on this.

(particularly stanzas seven, eight, and ten...and that title
and the ending)...all of which convey a quiver of concern
in the reader.

This poem seems to skate on too thin an ice.

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Harry O'Neill

Mon 15th Jun 2015 16:08

Dave,
Will you show a bit of respect!...(and yet, somehow, this makes me want to cry and cry and cry)

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David Cooke

Mon 15th Jun 2015 15:56

Yes, and the monstrous appartment blocks that Stalin built also have a bit of Disney about hem too.

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Ganesh Singh

Mon 15th Jun 2015 14:06

Behat Umda.

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Preeti Sinha

Mon 15th Jun 2015 10:25

What an ending. Lynn, you are effortlessly brilliant. And while it may not be autobiographical, I hope you're doing well :)

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Mon 15th Jun 2015 09:29

not one iota less than absolutely beautiful.

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Helen Elliott

Mon 15th Jun 2015 09:23

Superb writing. Best poem I have read for a while. Clever, powerful and each stanza as good as the last x

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Harry O'Neill

Mon 15th Jun 2015 01:20

Thomas,
This blog chimed in with something I`ve been pondering on for a while.

I agree with almost all you are saying, but I`ve put my comments on the discussion section to try and get some
feed back.

Thanks for helping me think.

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Martin Elder

Sun 14th Jun 2015 23:12

I agree with Andy, this has definitely got to be your best so far. I love the opening stanza. Yes it does sound Paul Simon like but, its inviting the reader to carry on.
' Hello loneliness come on in you have just missed happiness.'
Great stuff

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John Bastard

Sun 14th Jun 2015 21:55

'Paranoia is in the

Bedroom

She’s staring

Into the mirror

To see if he

Can get her

Reflection to

Take some of

The blame'

gets me misty.

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Sun 14th Jun 2015 19:16

me too David - I don't think S&G would have used the F-word though - or 'river of piss' - in their songs.

Lynn, this does have a song-like feel to it - just needs a chorus - maybe the last 4 lines? x

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Sun 14th Jun 2015 18:08

If I may, I would like to add my own compliments and appreciation for this poem.

Graham mentioned the use of 'dad' at the end. I don't usually like to give too much away in a title, but in this case, I think 'Missing You Dad' makes for three powerful and moving words.

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Andy N

Sun 14th Jun 2015 18:07

nice use of the reference to the 19th floor at the end, Lynn.

Not going to talk about the personal aspect of it as it's not right for me to comment on that (i do understand it however) but from a technical point of view, i think this is probably your best i have seen blogged so far.

keep it up! xx

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Lynn Hamilton

Sun 14th Jun 2015 17:29

Hi Andy. Thanks for reading and your comments, once again x.

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Lynn Hamilton

Sun 14th Jun 2015 17:07

Thank you Martin for reading and your lovely comment. Much appreciated.

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Lynn Hamilton

Sun 14th Jun 2015 17:05

Thanks again for reading Dazzer.

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Lynn Hamilton

Sun 14th Jun 2015 16:55

I like it too. Great one again Zach

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Lynn Hamilton

Sun 14th Jun 2015 16:48

This is absolutely lovely, Preeti. I can connect with this piece in so many ways (especially the taxes ;)) and you have in my humble opinion expressed the deep longing for a daughter to have the protection of her father, once again. Brlliant. xx

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David Cooke

Sun 14th Jun 2015 14:38

Hi M.C. Thanks for your interest in my poem 'The Gift'. The poem is really just a personal poem about my relationship with the old man (my grandfather).

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 14th Jun 2015 12:32

A thoughtful piece Celia.
I really like the short but full lines until the last one, which needs to be split into three (IMO).
I love the killer line "you reverberate in the space, surprised by my voice". Wonderful.

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Graham Sherwood

Sun 14th Jun 2015 12:23

This is a lovely piece of work Preeti. I keep reading it over and over and can't make my mind up whether the dad is really necessary.

In one way it's good to know (for the purposes of the poem) that you are missing your dad but in another way it would be clever to make us wonder who it was.

Either way its a lovely, light-feeling thoughtful piece, a daydream almost.

Well done!

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David Cooke

Sun 14th Jun 2015 10:18

Hi Daniel

Glad you liked my Mass poem!

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