<Deleted User> (6895)
Sun 5th May 2013 19:38
merci,monsewer(jest)Whiteley.
it brings to mind our happy hippy halcyon days
in 'owd Tropez.xx
Comment is about The Cause Celebre (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
<Deleted User> (6895)
Sun 5th May 2013 19:05
before we pass the black eyed peas
and say..amen
we wanna say lets hope this one deservedly loads up with commentarios.
touch'o'the dastardly dark this one Rach.
Keep rocking!xx
Comment is about Hidden Song of the Godhead (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
Hi Stuart. Interesting piece, this. Might I proffer a suggestion? Have an eye to your use of punctuation; putting commas at the end of each line makes for tough reading - it breaks up the flow of the poem.
Comment is about 13 YEARS (blog)
<Deleted User> (11056)
Sun 5th May 2013 17:53
<Deleted User> (11056)
Sun 5th May 2013 17:51
From one Rose to another, I like the mystique of this piece, great write!
Comment is about monster poem. (blog)
<Deleted User> (11056)
Sun 5th May 2013 17:48
<Deleted User> (11056)
Sun 5th May 2013 17:47
Harry
many thanks for your kind and supportive comments regarding 'azrael' - much appreciated
Ian
Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
Nice work Stuart.
David Subacchi
Comment is about OUR LAS VEGAS WEDDING (For My Love) (blog)
Thanks Stuart and will do!
David
Comment is about IS THIS POETRY? (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
<Deleted User> (11056)
Sun 5th May 2013 13:07
Very nice sentiment, check out my Vegas wedding poem. :)
Comment is about IS THIS POETRY? (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
<Deleted User> (11056)
Sun 5th May 2013 13:06
Powerful stuff, very good! :)
Comment is about Hidden Song of the Godhead (blog)
Original item by Rachel Bond
<Deleted User> (11056)
Sun 5th May 2013 13:02
Nice construction, very clever. :)
Comment is about The Cause Celebre (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Originally 'Is THAT poetry' ? but have changed to 'THIS'. Happy for any comments on this as I am not 100% on which it should be! :)
David
Comment is about IS THIS POETRY? (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
Wow - I'm impressed - at your control as a poet and in your imagination.
I'd agree with Graham's words - highly sensuous!
Comment is about breathing (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
<Deleted User> (6895)
Sat 4th May 2013 23:16
do you ever get out of bed Katy?
(we jest)
we loved the whole poem,especially the way
that you tied it up(ahem)in the last two lines.
xx
Comment is about Voices (blog)
Original item by Katy Megan
You can read more of my poetry and see some videos simply by searching on line for SUBACCHI+POETRY.
Comment is about IS THIS POETRY? (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
Hello Dave,
Glad you liked "I Had A Bream". Many thanks for your kind comments.
Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)
Original item by Dave Bradley
Hello Shirley,
Many thanks for your kind comments on my parody of Abba "I Had A Bream". Glad you liked it.
Comment is about Shirley Smothers (poet profile)
Original item by Shirley Smothers
This is quite simply a lovely piece Ann.
Both sensuous and hesitant. A wonderful mature story
Comment is about breathing (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
<Deleted User> (9882)
Sat 4th May 2013 20:50
you tell me,Miles,
who could resist such an urge?
other than busy ebay'ers!x
Comment is about Just one more (blog)
Nice and brief Ann;great sense of anticipation in this one,especially in the last stanza,'as you wait for oxygen,I see thoughts behind your eyes. I hold my breath.'
Comment is about breathing (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
<Deleted User> (10123)
Sat 4th May 2013 10:36
Hi Isobel great news! your poem has been voted the winner of the: 'a day in the life of comp' You now carry the laurels and the glory, a most worthy winner. Please can you send me your address so that the fantastic, fabulous, not-to-be-missed, outstandingly trivial, prize can wing its way safely to you.
Congratulations, cheers, Nick.
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Letting go - ah yes, still trying! x
Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)
Original item by Nigel Astell
Nigel, how many copies of the anthology do you want?
Comment is about Stockport WoL (group profile)
Original item by Stockport WoL
I like sections three and four.
(The albatross has echoes of Coleridge)
Comment is about Bearings (blog)
Original item by Noetic-fret!
<Deleted User> (6895)
Fri 3rd May 2013 21:10
<Deleted User> (11084)
Fri 3rd May 2013 20:49
very topical old bean, chin chin.
Comment is about UK GIN DEPENDENCE PARTY (blog)
Original item by Attila the Stockbroker
Ian,
The picture and the poem together powerful.
The poem would also stand on its own with a suitable sub-title.
(Often I feel that a picture `overpowers` the poem
but this would `work` with any apt picture)
Comment is about Azrael (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
Marianne,
This one is a sly lie.
Comment is about The Blahs (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
I like this, Gus. From a 'poetry view', I would carve out some adjectives that don't add much and detract a lot from the movement of words and rhythm, burdening the ideas that could surge freely forward into our minds. The repetition is skillful and effective.
Comment is about Dark Night (blog)
Original item by Gus Jonsson
Do you drink some kind of magic 'poetry potion'? Perhaps you have tiny, writhing glass flasks lined up in a dark cupboard, red, yellow, blue, green, and purple liquids, gleaming into your eyes when your creak open the door, scanning the rainbow bottles, frowning, to take your choice.
I really like that fantasy. Your breadth of ideas amazes me.
Comment is about The Blahs (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
<Deleted User> (9882)
Fri 3rd May 2013 13:00
Thanks for your comments Cynthia!
David
Comment is about AMERICANO (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
Hello there just wanna say, thanks for that comment I appreciate when someone truly understands what I write
Comment is about Noetic-fret! (poet profile)
Original item by Noetic-fret!
Thanks folks for the comments.
Cynthia,...fixed it, thanks. :)
Comment is about Posthumous (blog)
Original item by Harry O`N eill
That's wonderful news Mark. Being able to express your feelings in poetry is what it's all about for me. To then have those feelings go directly to the people who inspired your words, is the most rewarding of all.
Comment is about One Of Us - A Stephen Lawrence Tribute (blog)
Original item by Mark Mr T Thompson
<Deleted User> (6315)
Thu 2nd May 2013 04:05
Late on the uptake..oh god I remember nights like those..couldn't take them now! Super sound clip Ian!
Comment is about Drunk (Spinning Wheel Blues) (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
really well done Mark - a fitting tribute
Comment is about One Of Us - A Stephen Lawrence Tribute (blog)
Original item by Mark Mr T Thompson
I've just been told that the piece has been shown to Doreen Lawrence and that the Stephen Lawrence Charitable Trust will feature it on their website. Some opinions are more important than Mr Newberry to me! Thanks again to all who made positive and supportive comments.
Comment is about One Of Us - A Stephen Lawrence Tribute (blog)
Original item by Mark Mr T Thompson
Absolutely well done to you Frances. What a prize to win, too! now, who's going to review YOUR work?
Comment is about Write Out Loud's reviews editor wins poetry award (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thank you sir, that's very kind of you, I'm glad you're enjoying them - the 'macabre' is right up my street, so there will be plenty more :)
Thanks again
Simon
Comment is about Danse Macabre (The Dance of Death) (blog)
Original item by Simon Austin
Fantastic again! This sort of poetry is right up my street :-) Your use and choice of words is precise and totally appropriate, giving a real beauty to the horrors it portrays. Keep up the good (and prolific) work mate
Ian
Comment is about Danse Macabre (The Dance of Death) (blog)
Original item by Simon Austin
Fantastic poem full of rich imagery Simon. Really enjoying reading your stuff.
Ian
Comment is about Unto the Somme (blog)
Original item by Simon Austin
Fascism lurks in the brightest corners; perhaps the 'person' who threw the bomb hides behind a facade of respectability. Well thank all the gods they can't bomb ideas! It's good to know that Freedom still exists [in every sense of the word]. We are entering dark times, very dark times indeed and a single candle is all it takes to shine a light for the righteous. Property isn't the only theft: stealing our right to free and fair knowledge is perhaps even more invidious. Rage on!
Comment is about Write Out Loud regulars in collection supporting fire-hit bookshop (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
thanks for your insightful comments on 'drunk' John. The music was an attempt at a carousel (spinning) and a music box playing a lullaby (sleep) so you were pretty much spot on.
Also loving 'I have a bream' - reminded me of what i used to shout when i got home from school - "Mam, Im here"
Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)
Original item by John Coopey
good one Ray
try Quince tarts on the 17th day - yummy :-)
Comment is about Ordering Food (blog)
Lesley Hale
Sun 5th May 2013 20:14
Thanks to Alex for pulling this together. Pleased I could offer something useful.
Please buy from Lulu rather than Amazon, to avoid the tax-avoiders.
Lesley Hale
Comment is about Write Out Loud regulars in collection supporting fire-hit bookshop (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman