great stuff, kealan. last line is pitch perfect here.. A

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like the change in beat on the last stanza here, lisa.. perhaps it is a stanza too long getting there but i enjoyed it x

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excellent, dave.. made me think of my pet dog that one and i certainly do believe in ghosts

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Original item by Dave Carr

nice stuff, isobel. i thought it was from the heart this piece as i went along.. lot of good bits and lines here, but i particularly liked the ending.. well done.. hope to see you soon on the circuit (resting at the moment until october) xx

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Original item by Isobel

interesting last line, here kath which threw me actually on first read as i originally thought this was out of place, but on second reading, it starts to expand more and more..

top one, my dear... keep em coming.. (are you submitting any for magazines etc?) - i have one i will be blogging myself soon, andy n x

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Original item by Kath Hewitt

Well maybe I thought I'll give up on men and try some dumb beasts instead - er, hang on a tick . . . . . . .

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

How exciting for you!
If I am able to - I will tune in : )

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Original item by Greg Freeman

Lynn - Didn't your mothere ever tell you? You shouldn't have cast out your clout so early

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Original item by Lynn Dye

Now for a Freudian interpretation.....

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Excelleny stuff, Dave. And good to see some form stuff.
To follow Ann. A mate of mine's lad's mate's mate (honest) videoed himself looting and posted it on Facebook. Dumb or what?
It gets better - he was looting Poundland!
He should be dead proud to show his mates his set of crayons and birdfeeder.

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Original item by Dave Carr

Thanks for your thoughts on "The Scourge of God". Glad you enjoyed it.
I don't fancy the burial party's end, but the river-bed thing I fancy. Or maybe Viking style - pushed out into the River Aire on a raft, archer with a fire-arrow, then KABOOSH.

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Yes, there's always been haves and have-nots but 50-60 years of consumerism, a society that relies on people buying things they don't need and 24/7 advertising reinforcing the multiplication of wants - this is a new phenomenon and is taking its toll, I think.
Discipline doesn't have to be instilled by smacking, though an occasional slap wouldn't harm, I agree, no more than would the occasional fag. But what about those who don't stop at an occasional slap? There are plenty of them and for their sakes and their children's sakes I can easily side with the anti-smacking lobby.
I think you want "spin of a coin" not spin on a coin.

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Original item by Isobel

Thank you Lynn and Francine - I appreciate your comments.

Francine, you are a great believer in the power of love. Nowhere is love more needed than in the home - elsewhere I find it is always suspect, shared, questionable. The love of parents, dished out with a little bit of discipline would put pay to so many of this world's problems.

I accept that metaphorical looting goes on with the Haves - but two wrongs don't make a right - if you see where I'm coming from. I don't expect any of those rioters sat about discussing the integrity of their political leaders before they started looting...

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Well done, Isobel, we all have our opinions and yours are very well expressed. I see both sides of most arguments, so nothing new here! I enjoyed your poem. xx

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I understand where you are coming from - to raise compassionate, respectful, responsible children should be everyone's aspiration. It is so much more than that though. It brings up the Nature versus Nurture issue too... One can do everything right and still get it wrong, and vice versa.

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Original item by Isobel

Jeez Laura, how can you say that? It is clear that we need to flog them all and hang them in public, why don't we? I'm sure that will work. Sure of it.

Einstein once said, (and I am repeating myself, I know)that to every complex human problem there is always a simple solution; and it's almost invariably wrong.

Alternatively, we could try to understand the factors at work in our society that have created the conditions in which people feel it's OK to behave like this. I mean, it's not as if our politicians, police, large companies, bankers behave in selfish, short-term, grab-what-you-can-whilst-you-can ways now, is it? So, were are their role models?
The directors of Southern Cross Nursing Home who made a multi-million pound killing by selling the 'care' homes and leasing them back, could not care less about their residents. A year or two later the company goes bust. do they have to repay their big fat profit made at the residents' expense? nope. Short-term profit is the game. Grab it now. Where are they on the courts' lists?
You have it bang on, Laura, as to the source. Maggie 'there's no such thing as society' Thatcher. A self-fulfilling comment.
We are run by a government of millionaires who, no matter how well-meaning they might consider themselves, have absolutely no idea how the rest of Britain lives.
The UK spring?

Comment is about Cause and Effect (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

I'm not wishing to resurrect any arguments here - I think we've all done the riots to death. I just felt like I wanted to say my piece in a blog, like everyone else. It's the first serious thing I've written in ages. Not great poetry but very heart felt :)

Peace to all. x

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Original item by Isobel

Really really interesting discussion. People may like to know that the Toxteth community in Liverpool, working with the police, has identified significant numbers of vehicles and occupants trying to come into the area to cause trouble. This is ordinary people getting active and caring about and protecting their community

http://www.facebook.com/pages/Toxteth-Against-The-Riots/139844202770437

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Original item by Laura Taylor

I've never felt haunted by anything or anyone, I sort of wish I had. My cat has never haunted me but last night I dreamed she re-appeared with two little kittens. Aaaah! They were just like her only littler.

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Original item by Dave Carr

And what would you use to break down its doors?
Perchance a pen, for tis mightier than the sword...

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Original item by Dave Carr

Wuff wuff - there's always one straggler - I bet if you were to riot, you'd be the only one attacking Waterstones... :))

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Original item by Dave Carr

We can only present one poem per month to be on show continually in blogs. Once we blog another it drops behind the other one. You can access it by clicking on previous but it isn't as evident as it used to be in the past. The new system was devised to share out blog space equally and accommodate those who wanted to blog large numbers of poems without people complaining.

It isn't a problem for me cos I'm not that prolific nowadays. I would normally hold off blogging a second on the heels though.

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Original item by Dave Carr

Didn't mean to cover it up.
How does that work?

Comment is about Reading, Rioting and (A)rithmetic - a villanelle (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

A great performance piece also Dave - I enjoyed listening to this last night - and I am always impressed by anyone who can do a villanelle - I remember starting one ages ago and abandoning it... It's a pity you've covered this one up by the other so quickly!

I like your little story Ann - it is really funny! A friend of mine had her shop looted and vandalised in Manchester. It is a skate boarding shop that also sells expensive watches and trainers (Vans - I'd never heard of them). The trainers didn't go cos there were only right feet and all the left were locked up in the basement. Everything else went though. Funnily enough she recognised a few regular customers on the CCTV footage...

The sad thing is that some boards were decorated by original artwork from famous skaters - impossible to replace really and the business was only just starting to do thrive after much hard effort.

Comment is about Reading, Rioting and (A)rithmetic - a villanelle (blog)

Original item by Dave Carr

I missed the deadline - but here's one anyway.

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Original item by Dave Carr

Not so sure of the ocean breath Ann. My wife won't even kiss me after a tuna/mayo sandwich. Love fat as a bottle though.

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thanks for that insight Ray. I would agree with you there on the warped nature of the money markets. It happens time and time again. Every time there is a financial crisis, millions are lost to economies and millions made by these bastards. It struck me as really depressing how shortly (very shortly) after Japan got hit by the Tsunami and nuclear melt down - the news focussed on the market impact...

I don't understand finance enough but I would have thought that markets could be suspended just for a period of time for things to settle. If that was accepted practise and not out of the norm perhaps we could correct this shabby side of things.

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Hello Cynthia, Thank you for your comment on "Three's a crowd."
Coming from one who writes so beautifully is a tribute indeed.

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God that seal was CUTE! ;)

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thanks, ladies. Regarding the scapegoat martyrs - it's probably not exactly what you think. But anyway I did a 2nd version which omitted lines 5-8 and changed the title to Market Forces. I'm fascinated and appalled that somewhere - and this is just one example - there are people making money out of the crisis in Greece, placing wagers, making decisions that exacerbate the situation and ruin lives. And it will happen here, I guess. If this is the best system we can come up with we really are a sorry bunch.

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Good one, Kealan, thoughtful and strong, and using structured poetic form.

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Original item by Kealan Coady

Steve, I was referring to the use of capitallized nouns for complex ideas, but can't remember the term, and haven't the time right now to dig it up. Although it's probably in Courtly stuff, or Romanticism. Later 'gator.

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Original item by Tommy Carroll

It's a very good poem Ray - but not obvious.

I'm presuming this is a piece of social commentary which is why I didn't comment initially. I'm still too ticked off by what's happened to appreciate talk of 'makeshift scapegoat martyrs on standby for the slaughter'

I liked the rythm you got going in that 3rd verse too - it mirrored the pounding of hooves - which I guess you were going for.

We're in different stands on this one Ray - it doesn't stop me appreciating the craftmanship of your work though.

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"a connoisseur of social symptoms" - indeed, you are, par excellence!

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Many thanks for your comment on Cause and Effect Lynn, appreciated. Aye - we are living through interesting and testing times at the moment, let's hope we can all join together and pull each other through it eh? Thanks again x

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Original item by Lynn Dye

Thanks for taking the time to read and think about Cause and Effect Jeff, always appreciated. We are all entitled to our opinions, as long as we try our best to ensure that they aren't formed by the constant stream of propaganda that passes for news so much these days. I would totally agree that we need to value society, each other, and as the working class we did used to do that. Some still do, but the divide and rule policies of the Tories has worked its own brand of filth on us.

It is up to us all now to look after each other, and part of that is to understand the roots of these troubles, and to join together. We must practice tolerance to an even greater degree than ever before, to our fellow men, if we are to ever get out of this without a complete collapse of society.

This bloody soapbox is taking a right battering lately innit? ;)

Take care chuck, hope to see you soon

Much love xx

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Original item by Jeffarama!

Really good poem Dave. I've never tried a villanelle, the fact that you have stuck to the form but you're talking about such a contrasting topic is wonderfull.
It may be an apocryphal story, but someone told me about one particular street in London. Every shop had been broken into, everything had been stolen, all the shops were now standing empty. Every single shop except - Waterstones! They'd left that one intact!

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Original item by Dave Carr

Great rhythm to this Ray - love that third stanza, the staccato choppiness of it

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If what we saw out on the streets this week is our future regime, then God help us...

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Original item by Tommy Carroll

'Treat enemies with dignity'

'Have a reason to riot
The people have to agree'

I like it too. :)

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Original item by Kealan Coady

Brilliant :)

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Original item by Dave Carr

I disagree strongly about the use of initial caps in this poem, Cynthia. I think they weaken the poem - which isn't very strong anyway, becaue of its naive left-wing politics (sorry Tommy).

Dearie me, this blog section and its comments, are they about an exchange of honest opinions or do they merely constitute a bland social network which offers everyone "hugs". We have a responsibility as poets to be honest in our opinions.

And as a feminist and a men's liberationist, I feel that women are the worst offenders in these blog comments in offering facile "hugs" style comments.

Come girls, time to woman up!

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Original item by Tommy Carroll

No, it is not impossible.
You can be passionate about something and take great pleasure
in putting an end to it...

'We must kill the system
With love.'

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Original item by Kealan Coady

It's impossible to kill and love

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Original item by Kealan Coady

Hi Natasha

That 'permissions' notice is more than likely because you are not a full member of WOL. Contact Julian at his profile below for more datails as he is the one taking entries. or email julian@julianjordan.co.uk

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Original item by Greg Freeman

Hah! What an absolute waste of time! Over and out!

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This poem is written and is based on a well known novel "Master and Margaret" by Mikhail Bulgakov

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Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Hello, dear Lynn! Thank you so much for your comment. How are you? I've missed you!
With love and warmest wishes, Larisa

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Original item by Lynn Dye

Well done, Laura, very much enjoyed your poem, and also the discussion from all on here. I also feel sorrow at such distruction, and can blame parenting up to a point, but I also look at the bigger picture, and while it doesn't excuse their behaviour, we should try and understand the cause and effect. I agree with your views on governments and banking; in fact, my other half could have written this too!

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