Sharp and snazzy, a great poem, full of the fertility of life and love. All the verses are great, but the last one is superb: 'liquid woman' pissing with associative ideas.

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Very imaginative. I especially liked the 'school kid' stanza.

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A form of psychological 'escapism' for both dominant and submissive.

I think "Escape' would work as a tag.

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Thanks for the comment and suggestion on Nothing Remains,I think your idea is great and will enter the edited version in the Escape competition. I'll keep the full version for general use as, as you noticed its in memory of my mum and the day we scattered her ashes at Crich stand. It was very winds and I managed to catch some of the Ash in my mouth when it blew back, numpty son not doing as he was told!! Hope to see you at Sale - Dave

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The Green Room is trying to find alternative funding.

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Don't ruin my pipe dreams Cynthia! I was looking forward to putting my feet up one day...

I am sorry to hear about the Green room. It's a great venue with a really cheap bar - which has to make it a winner for me! The auditorium bit is just perfect for slams - can't understand why it is closing...

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oi! what the Bardot have you done to your copper topping Lynn-you won,t be a match for Benji now-only jesting-looks very nice-best to you always-Stef.xx

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Yes... You can take this two ways.
I prefer to see it as consensual... even though a bit twisted.

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You had me with the first line!

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Hello Anna - I bought a copy of Ghosts at the Dinner Table from you at Sale Waterside last month.reason I decided to invest was that I particularly liked the last poem you read "For Ruth Berry", which seemed to hit a common chord.
Should pay more attention springs to mind initially but despite this the poem picks out a lot of emotions which could equally attributed to other situations and sections of society which in my case is mental health/Institutionalisation.The poem remains great as is the rest of the material and I now understand the funny look you gave me when I passed comment as I made the purchase!

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thanks Jean for comments on 'Sister Moon/disturbing dreams' and 'blushed profusion'.

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Reads beautifully,hope you're well and hope you've been enjoying yourself on the bike in the good weather - David

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A gem. A multi-faceted tiny gem.

I hope this isn't really happening to you. It is a common enough scenario. (And the awfullest part of all is that the kneeler can be addicted to the kneeling in a kindof crazy reciprocity of mutual parasitism, which makes it very difficult to debrief).

"as you sneer with approval at my shame". Genius line. Total genius.

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I loved the repeat that wasn't a repeat of the rainbow lines. Nicely done.

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Yes - this does have a drug induced feel to it - the come down and the withdrawal also.

I like the way you have used a different tempo/metre for the second verse. It really expresses the 'back to reality' nightmarish touch down.

That's one way many of escape, I suppose. I still haven't been to mary's garden - it's on my to do list before I die. Someone told me they just laughed for the entire duration and it was no big deal. I suppose it depends on what you left and what you are coming back to. x

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Can't think of owt worse than being in a tent with the rain pinging on the cloth, snuggled or otherwise. That brings back horrible memories of a holiday in Paignton where my ex got a fever and sweated both our bags out. It was cold and vile - I should have written a poem about it.

Heh heh - didn't notice the clever title Dave. I guess if it had been a number 2 it would have been Shi

x

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All photos Guitar n Verse Bolton May 2011 taken by Andy N

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Unique, Driven and Determined pics by Jennie

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Nice relaxing strain - when will it rain, nice being snuggled up in a tent when the rains pinging on the cloth -

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hi Laura,

It is indeed that tempestuous bitch MaryJane!! if you know her well enough, you ought to know her old friend mr white too!! anxiety ridden is very apt! thanx for commenting xx

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Ha ha - I love it! I'd love it more if his hands weren't obscuring the big picture...

You've managed to put a big smile on my face which is brilliant! Black humour cos there is some sadness in it - and I think we can all recognise a bit of life's trials - but funny nonetheless!

I get the impression of a round peg in a square hole. Love the analysis of school - can totally identify - it is even worse nowadays - if you are into creative writing that is. My secondary school child doesn't seem to do any of it. In my days it stopped at A level stage but it stops a lot earlier now.

'some years passed
I walked the aisle
no-one saw I didn't smile'

Could identify with that one also - though I did have a laugh on my wedding day - it wasn't shared with the right person...

I'm impressed by the speed you wrote it. I'm labouring to do owt at the moment. You are a lovely addition to the site! xx

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Is this some sort of family reunion? lol. Win

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Hello there.

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mary - mary jane? ;)

Love this Kath - how the second stanza takes on a whole new anxiety ridden life!

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Areet Mart!! Heh - what a surprise to see you here! ;D

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Hi Martin, Welcome to WOL. Hope you enhoy the site. Winston

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Thanks for your comment Alan - I've left a response on my poem - it was massive LOL - wouldn't want to clutter your profile with it! x

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Thanks everyone. Appreciated. The clue is in the title Iz (-:

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You seem to think along my lines. The world is hideously over populated but I can't complain too much having done quite a bit of 'adding' myself. I also fear the day when all illnesses are cured - that goes against the trend also... I suppose I'd be the first to want a cure if one of mine was ill.

I think you are great for putting back into society the way you are Ray - conscience salving or not - not many people would give it a second thought. x

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Hi Isobel. Thanks for your comments on my escape! Close, with the last one but the meaning doesn't matter too much to me in this one. Its more the collection of words. Oops, missed the title off, added in now Win x

This is an interesting title Escape / ecsaping / escapism.

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ps Was it a number 1 or 2? It kind of changes the mental image...

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Doing what comes naturally - you paint a great picture Dave! I like the idea of the projectile loving and the light from her eyes/stars/moon being all mixed together.

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Ha - awwww, this is lovely Dave :) Put a big smile on my face

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Iso - There is nothing wrong with miserable! Win lol

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Love is ...? Neat and effective, this, Dave. Well-aimed, you might say.

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I'm as selfish as the next man, Isobel; as I say, it beats proper work and there's a certain amount of guilt being salved having 4 biological children of our own, which is at least 2 too many.
Thanks, Cynthia. My idea of Renaissance Man is one who's capable of spinning several plates in the air. I'm not. See how it's only females have commented!I posted this on another site and only a female fully understood it.

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Hello Simon - good to see you on WOL with your two stonking starter poems - thought 'standard issue' perhaps a cliche in 'Noir' but the rest was super and a refreshing read from our norm - well done

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This is a very apt poem, Ray. I really like 'even when confined to brackets', a great line. 'Once upon a time there lived a Renaissance Man...' story to be continued. May he whirl madly in a circle diagram once more!

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Re: totally selfish, free of kids - a PIPE DREAM OPIUM FILTERED!

P.S. That's a phrase out of my latest poem. Taking it to the Greenroom this month. Maybe the last gig held there; art cult cuts and all that.

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Val, thank you for your comments on 'Don't Go' The middle two lines you said could stand on their own were separate poems I combined, so your right, for a while they were standing on their own.

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Hi Terry,
I like your poem. But I love the middle two verses I think they stand alone and would speak out to many...

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Aww thanks for worrying about me. I'm fine - still sane, despite mixing with so many poets...

The tone of my last one was a bit sad and wistful - mementos bring that out - the thought that everything in life is so impermanent and the only things that endure are our memories.

Untitled was about world/people weariness - inspired by someone else but applicable to myself at times also.

Am touched that you've taken the time to read. Glad to see you bobbing in and out of the site as well. xx

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Hi Isobel,

How are things with you - well I hope?

I found your last poem - "Memento" - very sad and wistful. I'm never sure that I interpret your work as you intend; not that that is necessarily a bad thing. In fact, so was the previous "Untitled" one. I hope this is just me, and not a reflection of your present state of mind.

Regards,

A.E. X

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There's no limit, Larisa, though whether people would vote for a poem which came as part of such a large batch is questionable. But WOL is pretty free and easy.

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Hi, Dave! Isobel is so right. You inspire me so much. Can I write 10 poems?

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Hi again Cynthia I think I'll leave my naked lady a while now and maybe look at it again some time later. I actually posted this one almost immediately after writing it, so I probably need a bit more distance from it. Thanks anyway, though, for your very thoughtful and careful reading.

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You must be one of the kindest men on the planet. One thing I know for sure is that I don't want to start rearing anyone else's children after my own. Grandparents often seem to take on that role nowadays and it is something I dread my kids asking me to do. One day I hope to live my life in a totally selfish way. Have a feeling it will never happen though...

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Thanks, Ann and Isobel.We've started fostering again after several years break(beats a proper job) and it is,as Isobel surmised, the difficulty of doing anything else apart from look after kids. I thought I'd never write a thing again but I'm slowly resurfacing.The thing about nursery rhymes - and I know them all - they are so insidious, they really do go round and round your head all day long. And I'm not a New Man just a very, very old one.

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