Doing what comes naturally - you paint a great picture Dave! I like the idea of the projectile loving and the light from her eyes/stars/moon being all mixed together.
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Ha - awwww, this is lovely Dave :) Put a big smile on my face
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Iso - There is nothing wrong with miserable! Win lol
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Love is ...? Neat and effective, this, Dave. Well-aimed, you might say.
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I'm as selfish as the next man, Isobel; as I say, it beats proper work and there's a certain amount of guilt being salved having 4 biological children of our own, which is at least 2 too many.
Thanks, Cynthia. My idea of Renaissance Man is one who's capable of spinning several plates in the air. I'm not. See how it's only females have commented!I posted this on another site and only a female fully understood it.
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Philipos
Wed 4th May 2011 18:47
Hello Simon - good to see you on WOL with your two stonking starter poems - thought 'standard issue' perhaps a cliche in 'Noir' but the rest was super and a refreshing read from our norm - well done
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This is a very apt poem, Ray. I really like 'even when confined to brackets', a great line. 'Once upon a time there lived a Renaissance Man...' story to be continued. May he whirl madly in a circle diagram once more!
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Re: totally selfish, free of kids - a PIPE DREAM OPIUM FILTERED!
P.S. That's a phrase out of my latest poem. Taking it to the Greenroom this month. Maybe the last gig held there; art cult cuts and all that.
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Terry White
Wed 4th May 2011 12:18
Val, thank you for your comments on 'Don't Go' The middle two lines you said could stand on their own were separate poems I combined, so your right, for a while they were standing on their own.
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Hi Terry,
I like your poem. But I love the middle two verses I think they stand alone and would speak out to many...
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Aww thanks for worrying about me. I'm fine - still sane, despite mixing with so many poets...
The tone of my last one was a bit sad and wistful - mementos bring that out - the thought that everything in life is so impermanent and the only things that endure are our memories.
Untitled was about world/people weariness - inspired by someone else but applicable to myself at times also.
Am touched that you've taken the time to read. Glad to see you bobbing in and out of the site as well. xx
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Hi Isobel,
How are things with you - well I hope?
I found your last poem - "Memento" - very sad and wistful. I'm never sure that I interpret your work as you intend; not that that is necessarily a bad thing. In fact, so was the previous "Untitled" one. I hope this is just me, and not a reflection of your present state of mind.
Regards,
A.E. X
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There's no limit, Larisa, though whether people would vote for a poem which came as part of such a large batch is questionable. But WOL is pretty free and easy.
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Hi, Dave! Isobel is so right. You inspire me so much. Can I write 10 poems?
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Hi again Cynthia I think I'll leave my naked lady a while now and maybe look at it again some time later. I actually posted this one almost immediately after writing it, so I probably need a bit more distance from it. Thanks anyway, though, for your very thoughtful and careful reading.
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You must be one of the kindest men on the planet. One thing I know for sure is that I don't want to start rearing anyone else's children after my own. Grandparents often seem to take on that role nowadays and it is something I dread my kids asking me to do. One day I hope to live my life in a totally selfish way. Have a feeling it will never happen though...
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Thanks, Ann and Isobel.We've started fostering again after several years break(beats a proper job) and it is,as Isobel surmised, the difficulty of doing anything else apart from look after kids. I thought I'd never write a thing again but I'm slowly resurfacing.The thing about nursery rhymes - and I know them all - they are so insidious, they really do go round and round your head all day long. And I'm not a New Man just a very, very old one.
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Tue 3rd May 2011 10:23
Hey John!
Simple yet moving! Got me thinking!
Best wishes
Jonboy
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Je trouve que c'est très bien exprimé... et moi je suis pareille ; )
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Well done you for getting this going again. Have already started writing one but it's miserable as sin so I'll wait for something more miserable to be posted first so I can hide in its shadow.
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Ha ha - we'll fight them on the beaches... won't we Francine!
Julian - thanks for your contribution - much appreciated. You are technically right about all moments being in time. I just think that the phrase visually re-inforces the suspension of the moment - for me at least. The poem would flow just as well without it though so it's a matter of preference I suppose.
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Hi Simon Thanks for your kind comments on La Nue Provencale & good to see you here on WOL. I recognize your Parakeets because Greg spoke highly of it to me a while ago. Greg knows a good poem when he sees one! If you're on Face Book and want to hook up I am
www.facebook.com/davidcookepoet
Will look again at Parakeets and will check out Noir when I can give them proper attention.
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Hi Isobel - I'm not sure why I appear in the Wigan WOL group, as I live in Surrey. Cheers, Simon
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Ray - pressed (flattened) paper aeroplanes in a book when opened would pop up and flutter a bit (in the wind)... just use your imagination ; )
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Mon 2nd May 2011 15:56
I love the warmth of the contributions, as much as that expressed in the poem; a reflected warmth, I reckon.
I too, like to try removing what seem extraneous words. Aren't all moments "in time"?
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Hot,hot, hot - the way I like my men - burning the skin in fact!
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Yes, you could well be right about that Greg. Who was it said 'Once a Catholic.... ?'
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At the risk of being the biggest commenter on my own stuff LOL - I just wanted to say one last thing. Am going to leave the heat/warmth as is. Mulled it over in the shower and realised exactly what I was trying to say. Heat for me equates to passion, warmth to tenderness. You need both for a healthy relationship - though many have a problem with one or the other. All new relationships have promise though - that's what keeps us going!
Thank you everyone who commented. x
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This bird poem was written last May, Isobel, when there was more rain. There is a marked difference this year, with such a dry spell here in the Northwest. I hesitated to post it after such a recent 'bird poem'. I adore most birds, with even a grudging admiration for the magpies and feral pigeons.
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Ann, you are on the ball! They are two separate references, but obviously can be read together as a 'couple'. I changed it only recently too; now I must fix the ambiguity, but can't remember what I had before.
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Hi Cynthia I've had another look at La Nue Provencale and think that, hopefully, I've made it reflect better what you actually see in the image. The time sequence in the first stanza is now maybe a bit more straight forward. See what you reckon.
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Ooo - I like your thoughts on 'worn' Ann - that works just as well. That's what I love about language - its nuances. That's what I love about this site - communing with people who share the same passion for language. It isn't about perfection for me - it's the quest for it maybe - and the exploration. Gosh - I could start writing another poem!
I think I'll hand the warmth/heat to the Miller/Buell-Thomas corner - I should probably have looked for a different word. Can't think of one off hand - hope would be too close to promise - I'll chew it over.
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Like it Isobel. I was thinking of "worn" as in worn threadbare sort of thing. It's nice to read your own thoughts on your poem too. And in one way the poem reads like ancient love letter from say a WWI soldier, and yet also hints at an up to date parallel, perhaps in your own life.x
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I'd agree Ann - I think old nursery rhymes give us a wealth of imagery to use in poetry if you really look hard at the original meanings. I once started writing a poem using that very same nursery rhyme - never finished it though... probably got interrupted by the kids!
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I feel very dense - do oranges and lemons come into it? That always used to scare the hell out of me! Very sinister that chant "Here comes a candle to light you to bed. Here comes a chopper to chop off your head!" HELP!!!!
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I'm assuming this is about the difficulty even 'New Men' have in looking after children. I may be wrong of course - I have been with many of yours in the past.
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Last 4 lines are really nice, a bit prayer-like, I thought. Would something that's been pressed flutter? I tried it on a shirt and the answer was no.I'd still agree with Cynthia about heat and warmth.
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It does the same to some women Ray...
I can remember one song I had to sing quite vividly 'The wheels on the bus go round and round...' - it's a newer version of the mulberry bush song - repetitive and mind blowing.
I like the humour in this - it's a bit whacky - especially the 'even when confined to brackets'. Perhaps it's harder for a poet to have their minds confined in this way - we are all dreamers, after all...
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You have tantalised me with this one Ray! A good poem, I've read it several times. Intriguing!
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Hi Greg - Thanks! I'm off to Lundy for a few days - so hopefully lots of looking out to sea for me! (Where's those sea sickness pills?) :)
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You're looking out to sea again, Ann. Some of your best poems do that.
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Hi Cynthia Thanks for the very considered response to my provencal lady. I'm thinking about your comments. I have slightly shifted my time frame to before the point we see in the photo which may have complicated it all a bit. By the way if you write a poem about a painting it's call 'ekphrastic' ( if that's how you spell it!). I suppose you can use it for photos as well. I thought the time sequence made sense. She wakes up early before the sun is up but then eventually gets up herself a bit later. I think, though, that I may have to tinker with the bit about the shutter. She probably opens it when the sun is much stronger than I suggest so 'seep' and 'premonition' might need changing. Maybe 'sweep' and 'summons' - but it's got to have the right sound/cadence. Btw my new collection 'In the Distance' is now available on Amazon if you fancy a signed copy!
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Thanks but - who WERE all those nuns?
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This is brilliant, really deep and raw xo
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Have just noticed that you are a member of the Wigan WOL group - can't understand why you are not showing up in the group - it is saying there are only 3 members so far - I'm wondering if that is happening to other people. Hope to see you there some time anyway.
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Isobel
Thu 5th May 2011 13:20
ps Was it a number 1 or 2? It kind of changes the mental image...
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