Absolutely fantastic. This poem is a real gem, a credit to you. Nice work isobel. I wish i could write as flowingly as this. Just brilliant.

Mike

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Comment is about OASIS (blog)

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Comment is about Expectation (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

Thanks for your comments - you were very kind. I've written better but not for a long time. Decided to just let go of that one before it got added to the pile of unfinished.... xx

Comment is about Rachel McGladdery (poet profile)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Oh Isobel, this was lovely. I am struck dumb when I find a poem I find beautiful and touching (like I did with this) I don't have the vocabulary to do it justice....someone send me an online litcrit kit quick. It made me go 'ahhhh' (in a good way.)
Rachel
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Comment is about OASIS (blog)

Original item by Isobel

I really like this Izz and would agree with comments by the others. The structure and word selection do a great job of creating a reflective mood. I like the way that universal themes such as our desert experiences and feelings that life is elsewhere are handled so delicately. Do keep experimenting - there is more to come.

Comment is about OASIS (blog)

Original item by Isobel

This is a cracker, Ann, one of your very best! I love "scent of sea salt teasing his blow hole." ! It's got fantastic rhythm and music, too. A touch of Lewis Carroll, plus that added, sea-salty ingredient that you certainly don't get in Alice ... Greg

Comment is about My Nagual is a Narwhal (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Yep - would agree that it sounds better so I've changed it - though children can be toothless for a whole host of reasons but bad toothed for only one. Thanks for commenting. It is an odd piece with more than a few bumps but it was just a reflection of how I was feeling for a moment of time and I wanted to place it somewhere. xx

Comment is about OASIS (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Hi Iso

Would have gone for toothless... instead of
A world where bad toothed children

It's easier on the eye and reads well the former sounds just a wee bitte clumsy...

Just my opinion,...Sound message...good read.

Hope to CU in new year..
Gusxx

Comment is about OASIS (blog)

Original item by Isobel

hi Izzy-agree with all afore mentioned-totally! but oh to see you gambolling-in my direction! well,a man can dream can he not? lol-Stef

Comment is about OASIS (blog)

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An interesting one Dave - and very thought provoking. Without the picture, I would never have connected this to a traffic jam - despite the fumes. For me it is about life, the searching for meaning... Lucky are those who can just accept.

Comment is about Edging forward (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

I really hate traffic jams. Its good to see something so productive come from what is a very negative experience!
Cate xx

Comment is about Edging forward (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Very amusing!
Cate xx

Comment is about Limerthick (blog)

I agree with Francine, a message of hope to herald in the New Year! Whats done is done. Whats past is past. Lets get on with making footprints in that ocean of sand. This my motto!! Love this Isobel.
Cate xx

Comment is about OASIS (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Your writing, as I have said before, is so honest, raw, and heartfelt.
It moves me to read it...

xxx

Comment is about I CAN TAKE A LITTLE PAIN... (blog)

Amazing the things we observe and think about in everyday situations.
I love the flow of this with the sudden stops and rhyme... just like edging forward in traffic, and in life : )

Magnifique!

Comment is about Edging forward (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Ha ha - your phone number gave it away!

I'm an old Bacupian myself, living in Hampshire now. Was back up in the valley for xmas. The snow was good.

Comment is about Gray Hamm (poet profile)

Original item by Gray Hamm

hi Rachel-I have not read a better poem than this in ages-stunning! my regards and thanks

Comment is about rejection (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Superb writing once again, taken from life or imagined ..it is well observed and your poetry is excellent.
Well done .
Augusta x

Comment is about rejection (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Rachel, spent half an hour reading all of your stuff, enjoyed it very much.'Dad' stood out, very clever. Look forward to seeing more.


John

Comment is about Rachel McGladdery (poet profile)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Hi Win, thanks for your comments on cycling home (no hands). It had 9 verses but I edited it down, not sure if I might mess about with it a bit more.

John

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

John, thanks for your very encouraging comments on cycling home (no hands), it actually had nine verses but I edited it down, if a poem gets too long I get a nosebleed.

cheers

John

Comment is about John Aikman (poet profile)

Original item by John Aikman

Hi Isobel, thanks for your comments on cycling home (no hands). It started as a daft jaunty piece but ended as it ended.

Happy new year to you.

John

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

And it contains my favourite word (arse) :-)

Comment is about rejection (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Rachel, tremendous, love the resolution (possibly the wrong word) at the end.

Thanks

John

Comment is about rejection (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Helloooo,
re your question about the reader assuming the poems are autobiographical, I don't particularly mind. It does feel a little exposing but it's my choice to post them on here isn't it? I admit some of my poems are autobiographical, some aren't, some of the things I write about happened to people I know but not to me personally. I think readers will always assume there's a back story themselves anyway whether that's poetry or prose. I really appreciate your thoughtfulness in asking me that by the way.
Love
Rachel
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Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Do you mind the fact that everyone always assumes that the poems we write are based on ourselves? This is such a strong, personal poem, but you could have invented the scenario. I feel that I'd like to write a poem and leave it open as to whether it is based on me and my experiences. If you write a novel about a mass murderer, people don't assume you are a nmass murderer. Or is it that poetry is always a sort of truth? Don't know. lotsoflove ;-)

Comment is about rejection (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Nice idea. (Perhaps you were a little snail in a previous existance)

Comment is about trails (blog)

Original item by Daniel Hooks

I just sniggered tea on my keyboard after reading your comment on stockings.
Cheeeeers
Rachel
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Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Skenning is squinting in Lancashire Dialect...my mother came from Rossendale so I'm bi-lingual! :)
Cheers
Rachel
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Comment is about Little Clock (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Hi Greg - glad you're well. I used to like walking round Hampton Court, but usually went to Kew Gardens! Miss all those trees - not many where I live, too windy! I put the walking the coast path poem up to remind me what I want to do this coming summer, a sort of new year's resolution. Don't think I'll go just at the moment, the days are too short. But maybe toenails don't grow so fast in the wintertime!

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Good morning Lady Foxgloves.loved this clever neat little poem.I have the best idea to save an elderly Lady like you having to endure carrying the terrible weight of a pair of scissors-wash your feet in carrot juice just prior to embarking on the walk.when half way,lie in the grass and let the rabbits nibble at your tootsies-be alert though! you will need the rest of your feet to walk home on-did you remember to pack a clean vest? your mum would have been very angry if not! happy clippings-Stef

Comment is about walking the coastal path with a pair of nail scissors (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Regarding Animals in their Bags, Mia.. I'll tell you where that piece came from when I see you next, but I was a little drunk shall we say... lol

Comment is about Mia Darlone (poet profile)

Original item by Mia Darlone

very buddhist feel to that, Jeff.. tell you more about that next time we speak..

Comment is about evolution...... (blog)

Original item by JEFF.W

Hi Ann, yes I did have a good Christmas, thanks, including a nice walk along the river beside Hampton Court! Hope you had a decent one too, and very best wishes for a happy and creative new year. My one worry is ... is it really wise to be undertaking a coastal walk in this weather? Hope you're keeping an eye on the forecasts ...
Greg x

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Star G. I liked the mixture in this, would go further maybe with the religeous element. On line at the end would tie things in for me maybe, Win

Comment is about Front Row At Church (blog)

Hi Rachel. After reading the last two of yours I thought I would go for the hat trick. great again! I was in those stockings.... er ...em I'll get my coat. win

Comment is about Stockings (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Loved this very moving piece Rachel. Shoulder shelfing (great) skenning (whats that?)
Win

Comment is about Little Clock (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Lovely. Full of symbolism. From the emotionally charged atmopshere of the communion queue ... to the thrill of online romance.
Pleasing contrasts.

A killer last line, and "you had me" works almost as well.

I wouldn't expect much response on this site, where militant secularists prevail. The churchy context wil put a lot of people off (may even invoke some irrational hostility).

But I like the poem. I like it a lot.It's about love, and being human.

Comment is about Front Row At Church (blog)

There are some superb sections in this one Rachel. Keep posting. marvelous. Win

Comment is about rejection (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Lovely Ann. Win x

Comment is about walking the coastal path with a pair of nail scissors (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

You must have lightning growing toe nails hee hee ! You could always take a saw to the front of your boots ha ha save you the trouble of carting those heavy pesky scissors heh heh Then again you could blag some in the pub ;-) love TC XX

Comment is about walking the coastal path with a pair of nail scissors (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Ta for comment on my nail scissors poem, not really a very good poem but I wrote it to remind me of what I want to carry on doing when the summer comes! Roll on that time!!

Comment is about Rachel McGladdery (poet profile)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Dear Mia, thanks for your comment on the 'Enigma of perception', you are far from thick, I have seen your work as you know ;-), it is just that I am a little crazy, it comes out sometimes in my script ;-) Yours as ever Thaumaturgically Supercharged ha ha ;-)) XX

Comment is about Mia Darlone (poet profile)

Original item by Mia Darlone

hi Rachel-belated thanks from prodigal chops to say ta el mucho for comments-and! do not include copying my habit-slagging ones self off-in your case,totally without reason-all the very best for the New Year rach'-Stefamungus

Comment is about Rachel McGladdery (poet profile)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

This feels jaunty and very upbeat,I like the rhythm in the first verse lots, makes me think of the song Travellin' Light but less sad. Now then, if you just stretch the old hamstrings a bit, you can bite your toenails and leave the scissors at home too! :)
Rachel
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Comment is about walking the coastal path with a pair of nail scissors (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thanks John for your comment. I'm not sure I'm brave so much as ludicrously confessional. I'm setting myself the task for new year of writing about things not feelings...I hate this time of year so if I write about feelings, it'll all get horribly depressing.
Big thanks for reading and commenting,
Rachel
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Comment is about John Aikman (poet profile)

Original item by John Aikman

Massive thanks Isobel, for taking the time to read and comment. It really is appreciated.
Rachel
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Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Thanks Ann, I shouldn't be such a good cook lol! :) off to read your latest in a min.
Thanks
Rachel
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Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thanks again Cynthia for taking time to read my stuff.It's lovely to get such affirming feedback. I laughed at the anal sex comment too!
Thank you
Rachel
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Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thanks for the comments and feedback

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

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