thank you Anne, for your very kind comment on Bedouin, Debz xx

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

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thank you Gus, for taking time out from Grandfatherly duties and sending me your lovely supportive words once more,thank you, Debz xx

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

I adore this. A lovely reminder for me (I have a natural tendency towards grumpiness) I love the domestic details, it feels homely and very real. The spatula exclamation mark is just perfect.
Rachel
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Comment is about A Wonderful Day (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thank you Cynthia....it's a bugger for ventriloquists to read though! :) Thanks for taking the time to read and comment,
Cheers
Rachel
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Comment is about Sunrise Over England (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Rachel, this is very engaging. 'blind - blossom - ribbon - boil' etc. has lovely internal music. The personification of the 'bolting trees' is novel. From fancy to reality is well captured by the 'hissing motorway'.

Now I shall read the other comments.

Comment is about Sunrise Over England (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Super scooper, Dave. The thought has been with us all, often. In the old outhouses I knew, you prayed for newspaper; otherwise - catalogue pages that folded like razor blades. The 'funnies' were a bonanza. Oh, Boy!

Enjoyed the other comments.

Comment is about Softer (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Loved this.
We had a catfish of enormous proportions, a village legend. It was never caught. Not really sure it ever existed; but we kids watched for it constantly. One day a waterlogged tree trunk nearly gave us hysterics.

Comment is about Big Fish in Masvingo Lake (blog)

Original item by Greg Freeman

At 17 I enjoyed different rhythms, and had no compunction about combining them in one poem. This is nostalgia to the hilt - even then tipping a nod to both secular and sacred (two words I have eschewed long since).

Comment is about The Christmas Tree (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Indeed it is!
This made me think... I have stories - LOL : )

Comment is about Softer (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Oh yes! Just cottoned on to the pattern thanks to your comment. How clever!!!!!
Cate xx

Comment is about Christmas (blog)

Original item by sian howell

Te he he..... good one! I like the foreign thingies where you just squirt a bit of water onto your little bunty and hey presto you`re as clean as a whistle!!!! Might treat myself to one someday!
Youve beat me to the sprung rhythm, Ive rooted mine out, but its rather dark and not at all festive so I will wait till after Christmas to put it up.
Cate xx

Comment is about Softer (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Yep ..... them there oldies can be canny buggers!!
Cate xx

Comment is about Big Fish in Masvingo Lake (blog)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Dave, you've touched upon a universal topic here that is usually hardly discussed. Yet just look at the interest it's attracted already! Things must have got better after all, just like Tony Blair said. But do you find that recycled paper is a tad rougher than Andrex? Greg

Comment is about Softer (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Hi Thomas

For me, 'good' poetry shows an awareness of what to say without actually saying it. 'Great' poetry digs a little deeper than that - the words from 'great' poets are usually shaped and made to sound as if they have always belonged next to each other, and while this particular piece feels a little loose, the use of certain refrains do their best to keep it all together.

I've read your other postings too. I agree with Dave Bradley when he says you have talent - your work is enjoyable.

Comment is about One of These Years (blog)

Original item by Tom

It was strange actually, we were driving down to a festival and had set off from The North at about 3 a.m., the sun rose just south of Birmingham, the trees really did look like they were taking a breather before setting off again uphill.
Thanks for reading and commenting
Rachel
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Comment is about Sunrise Over England (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Thanks Ann, a dint is a dent in my local accent, plus it sounds better with rinse.
Just re-read what I've put there and it doesn't make much sense...or does it? Sorry, I'm tired!
Glad you liked it
Cheers
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Comment is about Where the Wind Sweeps Down To The Sea (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

I really like this poem, it just flows so beautifully, very resonant for me personally too.
Rachel
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Comment is about The man who dripped digitalis (blog)

Original item by Gaia Holmes

Hi Ann, thanks for the kind comments so far and the tip about posting gradually. I just wanted to get a handful up and then I'll add to them as and when I can in future (one at a time!). So far it seems like a great place to read and share stuff, so quite exciting really! Thanks again, Thom

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

I know the Romans used toilet spoons - dread to think what for! (ex-archaeology student A.F.)

Comment is about Softer (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Hi again, a really nice poem and those bolts of trees stopping to have a rest - great and unusual image, really like it.

Comment is about Sunrise Over England (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Love the gull stalking the sand in a parody of tap! And a great first line too. What's a dint? I love the sea in winter too!

Comment is about Where the Wind Sweeps Down To The Sea (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

I really like tis, all about passion, yet you sound such a gentleman in that last line!

Comment is about Lay Down Your Guard (blog)

Original item by Tom

A beautiful sensitive poem, carefully thought out and full of love - and poetry.

Comment is about Your Poem Is Still Young (blog)

Original item by Tom

Hi Thomas - your poems are very good. I know I encouraged you to post some bloggs, but they would get more attention if you maybe put one up a day rather than several all at a time. I have found that if people see a stream of them together, they might not read them all properly, and some people even seem to almost resent seeing several bloggs in a row. As I feel I encouraged you in the first place, I don't want your poetry (which really is a lovely addition to this sight) to sink without trace all in one go. I know I'm sounding like your old mum giving you advice but I would actually delete them except the first one or two, then pop them back up individually over the days to come. But do tell me to but out if you like! lol AF x

Comment is about Tom (poet profile)

Original item by Tom

Hi Thomas

I was struck by this. Powerful, balanced, provocative use of language, and as Francine says, we can all relate to it. Also interested to read your profile. You certainly have talent - I hope you stick on WOL and keep posting

Comment is about One of These Years (blog)

Original item by Tom

Retirement is wonderful Steve, but I seem to be rushing round busier than ever. I can't answer Gus' question, but did visit the Bet Shean archaeological site in Israel in October. The display by the (mixed sex) 2000 year old public latrines there says that people used a leaf and twig. Hmmm.

Comment is about Softer (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Thanks for the suggestion Andy, also thanks for reading it! I spent aaaaages sorting and re-sorting the order of the 4 shorter lines to find out which sounded right. Do you know, I have just re-read it without the motorway bit (which seemed important at time of writing because I saw the view from the car and committed it to memory) but you're right, it sounds lots better.
Thanks for that
Rachel

Comment is about Sunrise Over England (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Is this what retirement has done for you?
Given you the time to contemplate that is.

Steve

Comment is about Softer (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

nice one, sian... enjoyed this

Comment is about Christmas (blog)

Original item by sian howell

Cheers Winston, it was written about Fleetwood (where I grew up) Whitby in January sounds brill...the sea side in winter is the best....feeling all nostalgic now! :)

Comment is about Where the Wind Sweeps Down To The Sea (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

very well wrote indeed.. bet this took a while to write! x

Comment is about Bedouin (blog)

Original item by Deborah Jordan Bailey

enjoyed this rachel in particular the poem seems to get shorter and shorter lines by the end... have you considered removing the last line 'the motorway slides by...' as i think 'kissed with freckles' could be a lovely ending? x

Comment is about Sunrise Over England (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

A quite interesting history Dave for instance what did queen Victoria use? ... or Queen Elizabeth 1St... or for that matter the ordinary work a day man and woman through the ages......

I was used to Newspaper on a string when I was a lad..TitBits was my favorite publication...

kept me in the lav for hours...

Good Read
Gus

Comment is about Softer (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Hi Sian

Re Christmas - yes definately better.

Comment is about sian howell (poet profile)

Original item by sian howell

Do you know? Now that you've pointed me in the right direction on this, it almost sings like a carol. I wanted to say at the end "and a partridge in a pear tree" really clever. Graham x

Comment is about Christmas (blog)

Original item by sian howell

Ah! you clever girl. what a lovely hidden little treat. I can se I'm going to have to watch a bit more carefully from now on.

Comment is about sian howell (poet profile)

Original item by sian howell

Loved this elemental offering Rachel... I love windy stormy costal holidays, going to stay near Whitby in Jan for a weekend and hope there are aspects of this poem of yours in my visit. Keep posting.Win x

Comment is about Where the Wind Sweeps Down To The Sea (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Thanks for reading Camel and I, Dave. I enjoy reading your site and the variety of your subject. I enjoy the reflective mood of Thinking Back as it really doea provide the image. Best, janex

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Many thanks for taking the time to read Camel and I, hoping I find you full of thought, enthusiasm and originality as always, jane

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

This is so true, it should be placed in everyones hallway as they exit to the trolls.

Comment is about A Wonderful Day (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thanks Cate you are most kind...did you notice what I did with each line? if not take another look, I was just trying to set myself a little challenge. sian x

Comment is about Cate (poet profile)

Original item by Cate

Ah, I see what you mean, Cynthia, I hadn't thought of a giraffe interloping in on my nativity trail. However, its the twice mentioned neck length reference isn't it? Well, camels stand 7foot at the shoulder and can eat vegetation at 9-10 foot high so I think they might be able to peer upto a window. But mainly, having read Terry Pratchett books, I think they are very nosey!!. Best, jane

Comment is about Camel and I (blog)

Original item by jane wilcock

I think we can all relate to this one!

And here I have been meaning to study Spanish...
One of these days... Just not today ; )

Comment is about One of These Years (blog)

Original item by Tom

Sorry Thomas, I tried to email your profile email and it bounced back. Have you written it correctly?

Comment is about Tom (poet profile)

Original item by Tom

Hello Thomas, welcome to WOL. If this is a taste of what is to come, we're in for a treat. Your words are very well chosen.
If you'd like some initial criticism, I would punctuate your lines to give them more emphasis, so that we can read them as you do.
It helps this too if a poet doesn't start each line with a capital letter, although many poets do not think this important. It's up to you.

Comment is about Tom (poet profile)

Original item by Tom

This really is quite delightful, although perhaps a bit long. Loved the repetitive chorus, like "Chicken Lickin' " or whatever name is given to 'the sky is falling' story.
I do have a question: a couple of times I almost had the impression of 'giraffe' characteristics rather than 'camel' and I had to remind myself of the image I'm supposed to be seeing. Could be just me, but I did struggle with it.

Comment is about Camel and I (blog)

Original item by jane wilcock

Absolutely fabulous! I'm not a night owl - yet. This is so DYNAMIC. Love it.
You can check, you know, to see who the other person is.

Comment is about 1 user on line (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Some people just have to do it their way : )

Comment is about Biography of a Backward Man. (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

hi there matey thanks for your comments on the "recycling" poem

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

thanks for you comments on the "recycling" poem :)

Comment is about Kealan Coady (poet profile)

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