Hi Paul,
i really like this litttle poem.
It makes me smile. I do love writings which include the planets though. I've done a few myself but haven't posted any for a while.

Janet.x

Comment is about Woven Threads of Life (blog)

Original item by Paul Letch

Hi captain, was really interested reading this, although like Tim, I think as a poetry type blog you could cut out quite a lot of lines to increase the impact e.g leaving work at 12.30 etc, that would have been fine as a newspaper report.

Anyway, apart from that well done, some good lines and hope you've calmed down from the excitement of it all! Cheers Jeff

Comment is about 1st April 2009 - PART 1 (my account of G20) (blog)

Very clever and observational yet could still be very personal. One of those poems which i think most people can relate to in several ways. Man or woman matters not. :-)

Janet.x

Comment is about Perceptual Sense (blog)

Original item by Paul Letch

Hi Paul,
i like the range of emotions running through this,
although it's quite shocking, i can feel the panic rising and the striving for calm.
Nice one.
Janet.x

Comment is about Talk to me (blog)

Original item by Paul Letch

Hi Ant

like the vultures and the black blood.

Winston

Comment is about Gas guzzlers (blog)

Stunning Sian...

Winston x

Steve, some men are bastards / some women are too

Comment is about Tears (blog)

Original item by sian howell

Hi Paul. I liked this a lot. Graphic , strong images and a sort of building in pace till the end

Winston

Comment is about Talk to me (blog)

Original item by Paul Letch

Clever use of imagery, Sian...
"All I see are thorns
hooking my skin
and another empty promise
in a vase."

Liked this poem very much. Have to say though, it irks me as a man, to see how many poems generally have the 'men are b******* who will let you down and hurt you' as a dominant theme.

Comment is about Tears (blog)

Original item by sian howell

hiya man

topper work, great to see work with a love of poetic language and a real joy of creativity.

keep up the pukka work

:-)

d

Comment is about Gareth Durasow (poet profile)

Original item by Gareth Durasow

Well done.
Cx

Comment is about Tears (blog)

Original item by sian howell

you didn't get hte recognition of the greatness of the poem you deserve!


yours sincerly
Dan

Comment is about This is Life (blog)

Original item by Joshua Van-Cook

Really like this one, Mike.



Do u mean:

Of the Modern Architects(architects')?

New forest. As I walk,




and do you really need the ? at the end?

Comment is about Money Controls (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Like this , just smal thing in V2:

A possessed of all 'that' paradox, is the only line I have problems with . 'A' is confusing and don't need to put 'that ' in apostrophes s it disturbs the flow.

Comment is about Laid Bare (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

great poem
you must be the calm in the storm of your life
I understand!

Comment is about Perceptual Sense (blog)

Original item by Paul Letch

This is so simple yet so profound. It is almost as if you speak to each reader directly, well it certainly speaks to me. It describes me at one stage in my life and it is accurate, which is why this touched me, really did.

I very rarely come across a poem which almost feels as if it is about me or my life at a certain point in the past : )

Some would say that it is slightly cliched (eg 'Feelings, Reduced to tears') but I still think that within the framework and boundary it works well. Cliches used well can work and they do here.

You seem like a writer of experience and I look forward to reading more of your work. What I like is the succint nature of this and it does not baffle the reader with images leading to frustration.



Thank you ( what would we do without words hey)

Comment is about Perceptual Sense (blog)

Original item by Paul Letch

Sadly the tale is now wagging the dog and it isn't always those who need and deserve who receive.Good social comment. Wish I knew the answer.

Comment is about WHAT AM I TO DO? (blog)

Sounds like a summer day in Texas, all 275 of them! What a fun poem

Comment is about TODAY IS BLESSED... (blog)

How true at times. Very good poem!

Comment is about Tears (blog)

Original item by sian howell

Wonderful!

Comment is about Perceptual Sense (blog)

Original item by Paul Letch

Simply written with the analogy of the red rose, yet so much underlying emotion...
Forgiveness is never easy for some... and for others, it is too easy...

'All I see are thorns
hooking my skin
and another empty promise'

I never forgive the same mistake twice...

Comment is about Tears (blog)

Original item by sian howell

C'est phénoménal... Je l'aime!
So true and perceptive...

Comment is about Perceptual Sense (blog)

Original item by Paul Letch

going to annotate this and send by email in a few days : )

Comment is about Spared (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Hi there!

I have recently deactivated my facebook account - just couldn't be bothered with it anymore , but feel free to send email !

TC

Comment is about Alan Summers (poet profile)

Original item by Alan Summers

Francine,
Thank you for your lovely comment :0). I think you are right in your observation between the title and the last line in certain respects. It was included as a relationship of the witness being changed forever as a person, to be wearing that pain on his soul like a scar of shame for the lord to see. I may edit a little.... :0)

Comment is about Paul Letch (poet profile)

Original item by Paul Letch

Bienvenue à WOL!
If I may... I love your poem 'I saw your pain'
It is nicely written with a lot of emotion,
however if you dropped the last line completely it would have so much more of an impact because the title reflects your feelings as does the poem itself... : )

Comment is about Paul Letch (poet profile)

Original item by Paul Letch

now steve , do i leave you to be eaten by a passing wolf , or do i rescue you with a smile :)

Comment is about Who are you ? (blog)

like some of the images - but this work is beyond me Carole... the lack of a full stop has me confused?

Comment is about Who are you ? (blog)

Hi John,
thanks for your comment on 'Anemone.'
Perhaps the reason you liked it is because it's unassuming with a delicate approach towards the changing landscape. A kind of gentle acceptance of growing up. It's based on a park i played in as a child where i still walk through. It always evokes a lovely memory even though some of the changes weren't welcome, at least it is still there for me and future generations too. :-) nostalgia. You just can't beat it.

Janet.x

Comment is about John Darwin (poet profile)

Original item by John Darwin

and the world turns......
:-)
Janet.x

Comment is about Gas guzzlers (blog)

i have read it , i am sure you understand its hard for me to comment on x

Comment is about one day, all of this will be gone (blog)

Whilst I was reading this - the phrase that kept coming to mind was 'O brave, new world...'.
1984 has been and gone, and the reality is far more prosaic and predictable than predicted .... Not a cheery vision of the future, but accurate and well written.
Cx

Comment is about Gas guzzlers (blog)

hi Anthony thanks for your interest in Gone to Earth..The whole piece just came to me and I think when I wrote "sylvan" I had in mind a Mellors type figure Sian X

Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

Hi Anthony,

really like this poem - and your other work

I agree with Helen re the opening stanza

Comment is about moving on (blog)

Original item by Anthony Emmerson

read itmany times -love it and can relate to it

Comment is about Who are you ? (blog)

he knew the power of rifle
standard issue
can take himself apart in the dark
and he often does
in foxhole cold the desert
dug in
a bunker man
a ration can peeler


great image this Pete... a ration can peeler excellent

steve

Comment is about This is it lad, this is war (blog)

Much emotion and imagery... I feel as though I had experienced this...
Très bien fait Pete : )

Comment is about This is it lad, this is war (blog)

Excellent.
Cx

Comment is about one day, all of this will be gone (blog)

So there you are! Lost your address and would like to get in touch about the Southport Readings we do.
Brian Wake.

Comment is about Bill Brierley (poet profile)

Original item by Bill Brierley

This is beautifully written with sensitivity to the feelings of frustration of many...

Comment is about Money Controls (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Complexity within the simplicity.
I like this Carole.

Janet.x

Comment is about Who are you ? (blog)

Nice words Barry. Cannot say more than that.
Mike
x

Comment is about Look for the Light (blog)

Pete man, I sense this poem. I feel it to be one of your better ones. It has so much emotion and yes, pain! Yes, it imbues upon me a last request, in lasting haunting words that make me feel fearful for the authors well being. It also emulates a lot of what people are really feeling at the moment. Outstanding work that I wish the powers that be could take note of. As this reflects an auful lot about the time we live.
Realistic and crytstal clear, the clarity of such a tired person, a tired human being cannot go unnoticed much longer.
Mike
x

Comment is about one day, all of this will be gone (blog)

Hi
Thanks for your comments on Requiem - always pleased when somebody even reads, even better if they like it.
Hope you're well?
Cx

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

Hi Pete,
This prompted some very deep thoughts from within me. I'm still scanning through the reel of film in my mind.
Maybe, no matter how insignificant a life appears to be, the memory of what we meant to others and the significance of that life for others is all we need to know for now.
Perhaps the container for the remains, ashes, bones or whatever else we choose to save acts as a kind of time capsule for others to discover and wonder about or recall a memory in times of need.

See, you've done it again.
Got me thinking. :-)

Well done Pete, i love this poem.
Janet.x

Comment is about one day, all of this will be gone (blog)

What price freedom indeed!

Your poem encapsulates the need for equilibrium. Significant of the equinox which ideally would be all year round for the economy.

Very thought provoking and so much depth, like Pete i think it's quite haunting.

Janet.x

Comment is about Money Controls (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

A classic poem of alienation..." I see for every light a dulled soul awaiting death" ... powerful imagery. And there is hope in the piece too, with the fleeting reference to freedom. The best poetry is serious about the human condition, and I like this very much, Mike.

Comment is about Money Controls (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!

Gus i can be so slow , i only just got the pickled onion joke :))))


and now its getting more and more tempting to use it :)

Comment is about Gus Jonsson (poet profile)

Original item by Gus Jonsson

thanks for comment on poem steve ., i am always pleasantly surprised when people find anything to like .

Comment is about Steve Regan (poet profile)

Original item by Steve Regan

All poems should contain elements of the personal (other wise they'd be pretty poor) and should be honest but a poem should also contain elements from the real world, pimped up language, metaphors etc. I'm not criticising you personally, or your experience, but the poem itself.

Comment is about ‘Sympathy Synchronicity' (blog)

"The chill of the twenty-first

Century"

Hi Mike, like the idea of the21st century chill
I always feel the haunting in your work, I enjoy that.

You could sell pain sometimes.

Comment is about Money Controls (blog)

Original item by Noetic-fret!