Why not keep the light out Lynn. It could be really exciting, just feel your way in!

Comment is about DATING (blog)

Original item by lynn hahn

If anyone else is old enough to remember those short filler films that used to be used to bridge television programmes (I think one was known as the potter's wheel) in the earlier days of broadcasting, then this poem instantly reminds me of such as those.

In each short episode someone demonstrated with effortless ability their particular skill.

This poem does the same, the noises, the smell, the time, the location and best of all the person executing the skill.

Cynthia I have read your work here on WOL for many years and for me this is easily your finest work to date.

An easy POTW for me! Very well done!

Comment is about 'The Farmer's Wife' by Cynthia Buell Thomas is Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

I loved the line "We clutched at lifejackets and straws"
this poem had a nice rhythm to it, and a good vocabulary.
I found it interesting that the tedium of the calm seemed to be harder to endure than the storm itself.
My only criticism would be that parts of it seemed to rhyme and other parts didn't. this is probably ok to do, but to me it seems wrong.
thanks for posting- Cheers Kevin

Comment is about Uncertainty (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

Congratulations on your POTW Cynthia. I absolutely loved this one the first time I read it, and it gets better with every read.
I've also read your replies to the questions. in particular the one about performing. this is a weak point of mine so I'll take your advice on board.

Thanks Kevin

Comment is about 'The Farmer's Wife' by Cynthia Buell Thomas is Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thanks for the kind enthusiastic comment, much appreciated, who is the 'Robbins' you refer to ?
I pretty much write in the moment, I've tried in past to write in a more traditional narrative style, but it never really hits the spot, not really 'me', and find myself back to this kind of thing, constantly chopping words off and up to feel something.

Comment is about Smell Filthy (blog)

Original item by Paul Welsh

carry a torch Lynn, preferably a Maglite so if your date turns out to be dodgy you can always whop him over the head with it.

Comment is about DATING (blog)

Original item by lynn hahn

Hi Lexa, I like this, it has a good flow and if you were to remove the last three lines, a great ending too - 'and Mona Lisa smiles.'

For me those last three lines don't add anything to the poem. Without them the poem could be neatly divided into three separate four-line verses which is how the rhyming suggests it should be.

Hope you don't mind me offering this opinion. Thanks for posting, Colin.

Comment is about Mona Lisa (blog)

Original item by Lyrical Lexa

Makes easy reading Lexa.
You bring warmth to 'a cold and lonely work of art'.

Let's have some more.
Raj

Comment is about Mona Lisa (blog)

Original item by Lyrical Lexa

You've got to kiss a lot of frogs before you find your prince.
Nice one
Kevin

Comment is about Mona Lisa (blog)

Original item by Lyrical Lexa

I'm glad you see it that way Jem. This is our wider family and sometimes a bit if emotional nourishment helps.

Love&Light to you my sweet friend.
Raj

Comment is about M'am your poem is served (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

Beautiful!
Be happy young lady, set your heart free.
Don't let your corrupted emotions become your reality.

Comment is about NOTE TO SELF (blog)

Original item by lyricalinebriality

..being spun around ten times. Love this, very funny.

Comment is about DATING (blog)

Original item by lynn hahn

thank you for commenting on "unmoving" ?
Kind regards, A.

Comment is about Regan Roberts (poet profile)

Original item by Regan Roberts

hi guys
awfully heartened by all yourlovely comments as ever.
no time now but i will soon return for perusal of your poetic wares

(rob - i had it as stretchmarks until the last minute but changed it to skin as i prefer the overall imagery. thanks as ever though, i always appreciate ideas!)

Comment is about there is an ocean behind your eyes (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Cynthia I forgot to thank you for pointing out the missing 'r'.

And oh, corpuses is just a colourful word for bodies. Always good to receive comments from you. You have a sharp eye ... and creative mind.

Raj x

Comment is about M'am your poem is served (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

Raj,perhaps you may not know it but this site will always need your kind of poetry.It can very well be described as the beautiful pourings of soothing and essential oils on troubled waters.Thank you my dear friend.Jemima.

Comment is about M'am your poem is served (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

Thank you Leon. Appreciate it.

Comment is about M'am your poem is served (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

clever hints of clever Robbins.Cannot believe the lack of well deserved comments.

Comment is about Smell Filthy (blog)

Original item by Paul Welsh

what I would kindly describe as soft touch poetry

Comment is about M'am your poem is served (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

Rosie ma love, glad you like it.
Col thanks for the flattering comment.
MGS welcome back.
Cynthia, yes I am having fun. Point take.

Raj

Comment is about M'am your poem is served (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

You are having FUN. Delightfully free and imaginative. Love the title.

Check 'your' for 'r'. What are 'corpuses'?

Comment is about M'am your poem is served (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

Raj, will you please check out my poem 'The Question', (not too far back). I so want to put 'wolf' as the final word, as in 'we so need an alpha wolf', not 'star'. Whichever word I choose, it is the ultimate 'impact of intent'. I had 'wolf'; I want 'wolf', but I'm being pinched by some kind of argument of what is 'worldly' and what is 'lordly'. Or fact versus fantasy. I'd like your input. For me, the poem 'hangs in my head', because I feel phoney about the ending.

You're a thinker. Why did I change it? This is a serious question.

Comment is about Chakraj (poet profile)

Original item by Chakraj

Is it definitely on this Wednesday?

Bill

Review is about Dead Good Poets' Society on 2 Aug 2017 (event)

Yes.

Comment is about Vertices (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

melancholic clearances

Comment is about Wilderness 2001, 2021 (blog)

Original item by Chris Armstrong

thanks for taking the time to reply Connor - it's always good to hear some background. I don't know why but I think a lot of people think about suicide but thankfully very few actually carry it through.

Perhaps when we are low and our thoughts reach that point we come across some sort of psychological barrier we instinctively will not cross. So there is no choice but to retreat and to retreat is to find a better place once more. It certainly seems to be the way my brain works on occasion - I go there, I come back. I go there, I come back. Such a strange game.

Enjoyed your reading btw. Look forward to your next offering. Take it easy - have a nice weekend. Col.

Comment is about Ringling Brothers (blog)

Original item by Connor Lannes

you have such a unique style - keep 'em coming you charmer ?

Comment is about M'am your poem is served (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

naughty Mr Ray. Time for your medication. Someone will be along shortly to give you your bath. You'll like that I'm sure.

Comment is about WHOOPS APOCALIPS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

so good

Comment is about looking backward (a sign during the day) (blog)

Original item by nunya

Seems like all women visiting you here lol! Good luck.

Write more Mr. Chakraj ?

Comment is about She blows hot, blows cold (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

Visiting your page just now @ date: 072917

Here I am
Liking and commenting without hesitating
For a friend I met
In Write Out Loud
A gig I never forget
So as the name Chakraj
Be blessed and be merry
And may life be good to you!

xx -MGS

Comment is about M'am your poem is served (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

so nice to see genuine,honest,pure poetry like this Raj.



Lotsa love my friend.


Rose ?+? for good luck!

Comment is about M'am your poem is served (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

Hey, Stu..so glad to see you post. I always look forward to reading your work and am reminded with this latest just exactly why that's so. Such graceful use of language with just that subtle hint of elevated eroticism--quite beautiful, and without the slightest hint of pretense.

I thought of this just after reading...

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FyUkqlF8HjU

The movie is, The Band's Visit, and (for me) the actress, Ronit Elkabetz, encapsulates beautifully the character you've drawn.


So good to see you, Stu..all the best..

Rachel

Comment is about there is an ocean behind your eyes (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Apparently that is poetry. Lovely, parody, innit Ray?

Suki

Comment is about WHOOPS APOCALIPS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Hi Stu,

I can only echo what David has already said..

Hope you are okay. Take it easy, friend.

Suki

Comment is about there is an ocean behind your eyes (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

and include me too please Wendy as one of those who cares.Thank you.Jemima.

Comment is about Suffering Long Term (blog)

Original item by Wendy Higson

Hi New Shoes - thanks for your comment, really pleased to connect.

Turnign things around is key.

Comment is about Perspective (blog)

Original item by Rich

Thanks for dropping by Kevin. Yes, it is that simple! It's a horrible feeling too.

David, The sad thing is when we are here and waiting for something we feel we need or deserve and are invisible. But hey that's fantasy after all. Actually it isn't.

Well thought out Old Shoes well spotted. Thanks.

Thanks Col glad you liked the simple stuff this time around!

Suki, I loved your comment here. On a serious note, it does take a leap of faith to leave things unsaid and respect the reader to enter in as you seem destined to do.

I'll check out Uncle Albert C. So much still to read.

Love to all for time taken . Ray

Comment is about THE APPOINTMENT (blog)

Original item by ray pool

What a joy Stu to see the seismic pleasure of your words in this offering. David is so right In mentioning the capturing and expanding analysis of possibilities of moments. This is just wonderful . Sometimes hard times can result in an up shift of quality of this type, and may I say this may be the case here. Maybe not but there is a suffering at work in the lines.

I also look forward to you ticking my workboxes too !

Ray

Comment is about there is an ocean behind your eyes (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Powerful in its meeting and melding of insistent life forces
for good and ill. The lines that have cancer ringing the doorbell pack a poetic punch.

Comment is about 'Each year he dug, bulldozed, and set fire to those determined vines' (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Stu - Sorry to hear about your recent troubles. I hope they are now all behind you.
I like this return piece and the maternal longing of the 'waitress'. Might I suggest one, small change?
In my head the 'stretched skin' line sounds better as

'stretch marks, teary eyes and tantrums'

but feel free to ignore me. Let's have many more mate.
Rob

Comment is about there is an ocean behind your eyes (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

hello all. due to some severe upheaval in my life of late i havent managed to read as much of your work as i would have liked. truth is, this is the first thing i have write in what seems like forever. i hope your all well and look forward to getting back to normal as soon as possible.

Comment is about there is an ocean behind your eyes (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Hey there Colin, always glad to see your comments on my stuff!

So really what I wanted to go for in this poem was discussing this feeling that I went through during darker periods in my life.

I used to feel like my suffering and pain was a show for everyone to enjoy, as if hurting me and making me feel bad entertainment, and suicide would be the final act. I used to even think I deserved it because of how deep into a hole I was.

I chose the title Ringling Brothers because of the connotation that they've been 'dead' for quite a few years now, as are my feelings on that topic.

I ope that I might've cleared some stuff up!

Comment is about Ringling Brothers (blog)

Original item by Connor Lannes

I like this. No wacky punchline, and no bolt-on profundity - other writers might be tempted. A. Case of beer winging its way to you. Camus comedy. Excellent, Ray; excellent rays.

Suki

Comment is about THE APPOINTMENT (blog)

Original item by ray pool

3 good comments here already and I agree with them all.

Comment is about THE APPOINTMENT (blog)

Original item by ray pool

your thoughts and words have a nice flow Ameya and I am enjoying reading them. Thanks for posting. Colin.

Comment is about Desolated desert rose (blog)

Original item by Ameya.

Hi Connor, I'm intrigued, can't quite pin this down. I think maybe the title is throwing me because Ringling Bros closed down a few months back yet there is this suicide theme which I'm trying also to connect. I like the poem, the subject matter is different and that in itself will always attract me like a moth to light.

I have to say I have never been a lover of circuses especially those that 'train' and perform animals. With dwindling audience numbers and a society less accepting of these acts of 'entertainment' perhaps the noose was gripping evermore tighter around the Ringling/Barnum neck. Am I getting closer? I wish the same for SeaWorld and other aqua prisons. Empty the tanks. I hate to see animals held captive and (ab)used for financial gain.

thanks for posting and piquing my interest.
Col.

Comment is about Ringling Brothers (blog)

Original item by Connor Lannes

If anyone has a poems about music: jazz, skiffle, so forth, we are looking for submissions for such poems to be displayed on posters in shops, pubs and cafés during the Marsden Jazz Festival, and for a fortnight either side.
Submissions here: https://www.writeoutloud.net/competitions/poemsinshops

Comment is about 'Skiffle' by Leon Stolgard is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Lonnie was mine too! Rock Island Line, the Battle of new Orleans, and my first record, My Old Man's Dustman. They don't make them like that any more (thank goodness?)

Comment is about 'Skiffle' by Leon Stolgard is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

good?

Comment is about Anticipation (blog)

Original item by Louis Audet