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Wed 7th Jun 2017 07:29

there is something very compelling and enviable in the simple life of a gardener or peasant farmer which many of us only rarely get to glimpse and wonder at - our own complicated hurdy-gurdy lives having spun off in multitude directions that never quite connect sufficiently with the soil for long enough or in meaningful and lasting ways.

The title could almost be the name of a Greek village or holiday villa - in fact what a great name for a villa or a boat or bungalow back home. So much to wonder at here Tom and admire too. Thanks for posting.

Col.

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Karli

Wed 7th Jun 2017 03:09

As amazing as the first time I heard any of your stuff
I wonder what your doing with it

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Adam Whitworth

Wed 7th Jun 2017 00:12

Thankyou Martin. Yes Lego is great and I also recommend that other building system "K-Nex".

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Tom Harding

Wed 7th Jun 2017 00:08

nice ray. amazing i was actually thinking of buying a suede jacket the other day. you've almost sold me.

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Tom Harding

Wed 7th Jun 2017 00:06

hey suki thanks for the recent kind comments, much appreciated!

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Joanne German

Tue 6th Jun 2017 23:48

Patricia and Stefan Wilde

Thanks so much for your comment, means a lot to me that you enjoyed my poem ??

-Joanne

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Martin Elder

Tue 6th Jun 2017 23:11

I love this Tom, particularly the line
'once drove a camel through the eye of a needle'

It is great to turn ideas on their head. great sense of expression her
Fab

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Martin Elder

Tue 6th Jun 2017 23:07

Great poem Candi love it

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Martin Elder

Tue 6th Jun 2017 22:52

what a wonderful poem this is Keith. I love the rhythm of it and how it tells a tale in such a way to capture the reader.
Nice one Keith

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Martin Elder

Tue 6th Jun 2017 22:50

I love this poem. Its amazing how lego has now surpassed its early popularity to be everywhere and so versatile.

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Martin Elder

Tue 6th Jun 2017 22:45

Memory lane has such a wealth of memories to look back on most of which are rich like this one. I don't remember ever having a suede jacket but I do remember having and old RAF great coat I was very attached to and then left it at college and lost it.
Lovely poem Ray thanks for posting

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Ian Whiteley

Tue 6th Jun 2017 21:33

Thanks for the 'likes' and the comments chaps - sorry it's been a while in replying - pleased that you took the time to comment/like
Ian

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Ian Whiteley

Tue 6th Jun 2017 21:31

thanks for commenting on 'This Flower' Francine - I'm pleased you liked it - apologies for delay in replying
Ian

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Ian Whiteley

Tue 6th Jun 2017 21:31

thanks for commenting on 'This Flower' Cynthia - I'm pleased you liked it - apologies for delay in replying
Ian

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Ian Whiteley

Tue 6th Jun 2017 21:30

thanks for commenting on 'This Flower' mate - I'm pleased you liked it - apologies for delay in replying
Ian

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Ian Whiteley

Tue 6th Jun 2017 21:29

thanks for commenting on 'This Flower' John - I'm pleased you liked it - apologies for delay in replying
Ian

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raypool

Tue 6th Jun 2017 20:08

Different approach from your usual pensive self Tom. All string to your bow. This seems to be the division of masculine and feminine in the psyche, crikey! (and how ridiculous are the artificial divisions thus thrown up).
I read somewhere once that the world is heating up due to the predominance of masculinity in mass thinking. (Gulp)

Ray

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keith jeffries

Tue 6th Jun 2017 20:07

Ray, thank you for this. I think it was perhaps the happiest time of my life as it was a carefree existence shared with some very genuine and good people. Thank you again. Keith

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raypool

Tue 6th Jun 2017 19:48

Your experience seem to have been a pleasant one Keith.
I don't know if this was merely a prelude to darker times, but if not the positive side obviously served its purpose.

Ray

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raypool

Tue 6th Jun 2017 19:31

First off guys, my own space for comment was unwittingly like the joker card, leaving nothing in place - cockup of course.
Col, I picked up on that poem of Rick's , very colourful and in great style. I think there is a certain bitterness in the building over of nature's bounty - but of course with rising populations what can we really do (go underground maybe). Thanks, mate.

Rick, I spent hours to the north on coaches - just mind numbing, as you say. Cheers. My overall heart sinking moment is in the Solstice Services near Stonehenge. I remember a patchwork of fields there in 1960 on a bike.

True enough, Mark - equally sad news . Thanks.

Thanks Suki. I wasn't sure if that line would click, but it's nice that you like it! I think the political spectrum has been mined out with it's names, but how about various named cul de sacs to match their progress.

David, nice to hear from you. Grandiosity doesn't cut it does it! (They paved paradise, put up a parking lot).

Ray Love to all.

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keith jeffries

Tue 6th Jun 2017 19:10

Kim, I like this poem but do not share your persepctive. I am particularly drawn to the line
Intellect and compassion? The question mark is telling. Thank you. Keith

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keith jeffries

Tue 6th Jun 2017 18:28

Kim, thank you for this. It is written from the experience of having served in Her Majesty´s Forces for ten years. A humbling and levelling time and a lesson in humanity. Thank you again. Keith

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Kim Whysall-Hammond

Tue 6th Jun 2017 18:04

Wonderful! I wish I had written this.

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Kim Whysall-Hammond

Tue 6th Jun 2017 17:58

Very good unforced rhyming! And a fine poem too... ?

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Wendy

Tue 6th Jun 2017 17:13

Hello LaToya thankyou for your comments I love writing my thoughts down it does make you feel good for years I could not spell but since getting an iPad there is no stopping me now . It makes you forget your troubles and boy does it make you feel good when some one notices what you have said thankyou kind regards Wendy X

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John Andrew Nield

Tue 6th Jun 2017 16:51

Thanks for your appreciated comments, Kevin.

Thing is, you've hit the nail on the head with many of my verses, in as much as I like to take 'classic' jokes and rewrite them in rhyme (I've dubbed them 'Chestnuts Reroasted'), so chances are that you may know the stories I cover in some of any future offerings I'll be putting forward!

Glad you enjoyed this one.

John

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Kim Whysall-Hammond

Tue 6th Jun 2017 10:38

Thank you both for your kind comments.

We were at Wadi Rum, Jordan, in 1995. We slept several nights out in the desert. Lots of adventures, snakes, camels and empty space. I remember it all so vividly.

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Greg Freeman

Tue 6th Jun 2017 10:07

I think you can be assured that the Poetry Society is built on stronger foundations, MC. Have you ever visited the Poetry Cafe in the past? Of course, you're right to raise the matter of the planned poetry bookshop, as others have done, although it has nothing to do with the Poetry Society. Here's a link to the most recent news about the plans https://lunarpoetryblog.wordpress.com/

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keith jeffries

Tue 6th Jun 2017 10:03

Mithun, This poem is good, very good especially stanzas 4 and 5. I agree with much of what Colin has said and hope you don´t mind a little constructive criticism. I also look forward to reading more of your work. Kind Regards. Keith

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Tue 6th Jun 2017 08:31

some lovely lines in here Mithun. I particularly like

I did wish
for the dusk of the moment to linger awhile
but wishes are fishes
they swim away

I think in the next verse 'glance' should really be 'glances' to make full sense - or you could change the line to read something like 'for one more glance' which would keep the rhyme with 'dance' intact and neat.

my only other quibble is the word 'eon' in the last line but only because it is a somewhat odd word that seems a little out of place. However I cannot think of a suitable replacement although you could use the alternative spelling of 'aeon' - I believe 'eon' is more commonly used in N.America. Or even possibly make it plural - 'to stay warm for the aeons ahead'.

having read this through several times now I have to say I like it very much and hope you don't mind me making these few suggestions. Thanks for posting. I look forward to reading some more from you in due course.

all the best
Colin

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Rick Gammon

Tue 6th Jun 2017 08:17

Re 'first drafts' - it takes a week of working on before a pome becomes 'first draft' - then months of fretting and editing - this will go into my new book - as and when I get the stuff collated and edited ?

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Rick Gammon

Tue 6th Jun 2017 08:15

In Barcelona we did the tourist thing and went to the Sagrada Familia - from the outside it is eerily wonderful - it is being 'finished' but to me it's being finished off - the newer bits, while well intentioned, lack the verve, passion and eye ripping virtuosity of the parts that Gaudi over saw.
The guys who went with me were amazed by the building - I was dismayed.

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kJ Walker

Tue 6th Jun 2017 07:21

I could see the punch line coming a mile away. But enjoyed it nonetheless.
A good story, well told.
Nice one, Kevin

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kJ Walker

Tue 6th Jun 2017 07:09

Thanks for posting Keith. I really enjoyed this one. I could just imagine you all squashed into it.

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suki spangles

Tue 6th Jun 2017 04:43

Lovely!

Suki

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suki spangles

Tue 6th Jun 2017 04:40

Hey Ray,

Love the line
Bricked up versions of memory's incursions..

Don't worry, soon we will have:
Simon Cowell Avenue
Arianne Grande Close

And we will all wave plastic candles as we walk down the street, singing Candle in the Wind.

Oh man, you've got me going now..

Suki

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suki spangles

Tue 6th Jun 2017 04:31

Hi there M.C,

The third line is interesting, in that it can be "read" in a few ways - and a thought to ponder..

Thanks for sharing.

Suki

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suki spangles

Tue 6th Jun 2017 04:29

Hi There Rick,

Hope all is well with you.

You say this is a first draft?! Damned fine first draft then.

My favourite verses are the last two, but it's all subjective isn't it?

Cheers!
Suki

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suki spangles

Tue 6th Jun 2017 04:24

Hi Tom,

There's nothing wrong at all with this kind of semi stream of consciousness poetry. Sometimes it can be fun, especially when humour and irony are thrown into the mix.

Thanks for sharing.

Suki

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suki spangles

Tue 6th Jun 2017 04:22

Hi Tom,

Really enjoyed the (dry!) wit here. Lovely poem.
Congratulations on winning POTW.

Suki

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David Blake

Tue 6th Jun 2017 00:25

Most meta poem ever? ?

Got to admit, I've never seen this movie...

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Emer Ni Chorra

Mon 5th Jun 2017 21:36

Beautiful poem.

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Tom Harding

Mon 5th Jun 2017 21:31

Hi ray, thanks for the kind comment on my potw much appreciated!

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Tom Harding

Mon 5th Jun 2017 21:31

Hi Harry thanks for your kind comment on my potw, much appreciated

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John Andrew Nield

Mon 5th Jun 2017 18:13

Beautifully written, Keith.

I could imagine this piece giving comfort to many who read, when in a sad place.

Thank you.

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Tom Harding

Mon 5th Jun 2017 17:56

Hi all thank you for the kind comments, they're very encouraging!

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 5th Jun 2017 17:53

Having contributed to an Indiegogo fund raiser for a poetry
bookshop here in London that was publicised on WOL but never actually materialised, I would like to think this project
is more successful and worthy of the financial efforts and trust of contributors.

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 5th Jun 2017 17:45

The toe and shoe's girth are bid welcome by the earth,
But what's in concrete to comfort the feet?
For the hardness was made for the turn of the wheel...
The need for more speed and its handmaiden: steel!

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Tom Doolan

Mon 5th Jun 2017 17:20

Hello space girl - I want to be your rebel rebel lol :)

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Tom Doolan

Mon 5th Jun 2017 17:13

Well said Nicola :)

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