Cheers chaps

Yes - hide it well away Stu. DisGUSting stuff ?

Comment is about No Fragrance Allowed (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

Ray, very interesting poem with a rich taste of the fascinating history of London. Now you've started me googling names of places, too.

Cheers,

Paul

Comment is about THE LANES OF LONDON (blog)

Original item by ray pool

good to see you back Paul - would love to stay and chat but have to dash! C?L

Comment is about Enigma Variations (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

a veritable Monopoly Board Lane of historical references Ray which for all their fascination somehow, for me, masks the poem that lies beneath and makes it a bit of a listing of past events but I appreciate from where this came. The olde English quote is a masterly insertion and funnily enough I was only the other day thinking how cool it might be to attempt writing a poem in that style but with a modern context. Despite my negativity I very much enjoyed and in part am getting my own back for you comparing my poem to Ernie! C?L

Comment is about THE LANES OF LONDON (blog)

Original item by ray pool

I am somewhat lost for words - this is so staggeringly brilliant. It baffles me how you find so many amazing word combos in every poem you post yet each one is so very different and there is rarely a hint of overlap. What I love about your writing is that I sense your influences percolating through unabashed. I hope that comes across as a compliment as your writing is also quite unique.

It also triggers so much in the readers own personal catalogue of influence - little snippets that have lingered in ones imagination. It's like you have provided the stem from which our imagination can branch off in many different directions. This for me was one of the things that came to mind, from Joni Mitchell:

He opens up his suitcase
In the continental suite
And people twenty stories down
Colored currents in the street
A helicopter lands on the Pan Am roof
Like a dragonfly on a tomb
And business men in button downs
Press into conference rooms
Battalions of paper-minded males
Talking commodities and sales
While at home their paper wives
And paper kids
Paper the walls to keep their gut reactions hid

Comment is about Nocturne Dance (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

A poignant attemp to put into words that which is almost impossible to define!
The unusual structure is somewhat difficult to follow but the words are spot-on.

Comment is about Love (blog)

Original item by Chris Armstrong

this is by far my favourite of the poems you have recently posted - it is quite compelling and draws the reader into unexpected places via the beguiling image of the deer's beauty. Thanks for posting. Colin

Comment is about Relations (blog)

Original item by Dyphrent

Still basking in the glow of a remarkable Write Out Loud Woking on Monday night. Fifteen poets turned up to read and contribute to a wonderful mix of content and styles, including three making their debut at the New Inn - Della Reynolds, Phil Whittick, and Molly Carpenter. Good to see Geoffrey and Lorri Pimlott back from Thailand, others who were here last month returning for more, and never to forget the staunch and invaluable support of our regulars! The full list of readers was Tricia McNamee, Dave Atchinson, Della Reynolds, Carla Scarano, Phil Whittick, Simon Wright, Kitty Coles, Amel Oudjida, Molly Carpenter, Geoffrey Pimlott, Peter Taylor, Amanda Briggs, Andy V Frost, Eddie Chauncy, and Ray Pool. Many thanks from comperes Rodney Wood and Greg Freeman.

Review is about Write Out Loud Woking on 20 Mar 2017 (event)

Ray - try the whole album on YouTube - just type in Wishbone Ash New England. Some terrific tracks. Always liked the rather enigmatic album cover.

good linkage from Stu too - haven't heard that track for yonks. Another great band.

Col

Comment is about RHYMING ROCK (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Keep going Maria. You can only get better.
Yes I noticed the pathos in your work. Nothing wrong with that. Gives you an identity. Stay enlightened.

Raj
x

Comment is about I'm better now (blog)

Original item by Maria Renea

Thanks, Ray and Suki, I don't know "The Crying Game" but I'll take your word for it. ?
The pome is a kind of rework of a scene from my novel, based on a real afternoon in Galway.
I'm glad to be getting back in the flow after a winter of discontent.

p.s.
Phocas is the unluckiest saint of them all - twice his gaff was lost into the sea - I used the name as it sounds like 'focus' and an Irish pal thought it sounded like f*ck us. So that's a win double.
And Phocas is the patron saint of gardeners - make that a treble :)
I discovered the Big Wind by happy accident.

Rick.

Comment is about Last Summer in Co. Clare (blog)

Original item by Rick Gammon

there is a bravery in the way you write which i always enjoy. certain lines at first seem like nonsense before revealing themselves to be both clever and beautifully phrased. i dont really think i have read many poems like the ones you post and i think thats because you have the utmost confidence in your writing. and so you should.

edit - this really is fucking brilliant.

Comment is about Nocturne Dance (blog)

Original item by Suki Spangles

lovely little piece, dark and foreboding.

(i think it should read 'put' not 'but' on line 7)

Comment is about He. (blog)

Original item by Qazi Fasih

Hey Rick,
And they said romance was dead..

Funny stuff!

Suki

Comment is about Last Summer in Co. Clare (blog)

Original item by Rick Gammon

Yeah, but you watered the plants Stu. No one's perfect!

Suki

Comment is about dear richard, (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

thank you, Raj. I was trying to show a transformation within this poem. I feel that there is a common trait of transformation or a mood of sadness or enlightenment within my works. thank you for your kind words, I will continue to write. x

Comment is about I'm better now (blog)

Original item by Maria Renea

Intriguing stuff Ray. You evoked some interesting comments and feedback with this one too.

Suki

Comment is about RHYMING ROCK (blog)

Original item by ray pool

An eloquent and fascinating offering from and in tribute to the brain and a glimpse past the physical to the psychical,
altogether really well put together if I may say so Keith.

Ray

Comment is about A Profound Labyrinth (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

Thanks , Stu, appreciate it and am altogether intrigued about the Lorelei connection. It seems like a big compliment , and I am in esteemed company!

Ray

Comment is about RHYMING ROCK (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Ron, Your experiences, though bad, have made you into a beacon, not only of the Lord, but a means for you to use your written talents in His service. Write some more please. Thanks. Keith

Comment is about Ron Stier (poet profile)

Original item by Ron Stier

Grotesque and wonderful Rick . This is a live reading condensed onto the page. I love the flamboyant liberties of the lines . I'm reminded of the film The Crying Game in a certain sense of the details..

Ray

Comment is about Last Summer in Co. Clare (blog)

Original item by Rick Gammon

cheers ray. i spent ages (well, an hour which is a lifetime for me) writing something for world poetry day, then jotted this underneath. after eating a sandwich, i discovered i liked this far more and decided to erase the other from existence.

Comment is about dear richard, (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

A distillation of social unease and dystopia, and a sense of shifting alliances. Big trouble ahead for you Stu!

Glad to see you coming on again.

Ray

Comment is about dear richard, (blog)

Original item by Stuart Buck

Thanks, MC. I'm afraid age had not diminished my fascination for female nooks and crannies. Only these days I can't for the life of me remember why.
(I'll ask Harry).

Comment is about HAVE I PEAKED TOO SOON? (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Here's your sequel to Lynx outburst Laura....

The Axe Effect. Then you got something to compare with.

Good whinge.
Raj

Comment is about No Fragrance Allowed (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

brilliant ray. as for lorelei, i can only think of this;

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3diz8I0AVVk

from one of my favourite bands.

Comment is about RHYMING ROCK (blog)

Original item by ray pool

*hides his freshly purchased can of lynx*

Comment is about No Fragrance Allowed (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

I am so glad I grew up through the 50s into the 60s -
arguably the most prolific era for consistently popular
song hits that still get played today - and remain as
"listenable" as they were then in the heyday of the two
and a half minute single. I was also fortunate with an
elder sister who loved Frank Sinatra and the door opened
to an equally wonderful alternative style (and musical past), and the ongoing discovery of so much more that
had gone before, including the big band days of Miller,
Goodman, Barnet, the Dorsey brothers and so many
others. Play on!!

Comment is about TAKE ME BACK TO ROCKN'ROLL - a re-post for a reason (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Hair today...gone tomorrow?
May be the cause of angst and sorrow!
Your self-analysis is deserving of respect and, with
certain reservations, sympathy. But, of course, it
comes with the benefit of hindsight that age brings.
Such is the cruel reality of life. Keep scribbling while
you're dribbling!

Comment is about HAVE I PEAKED TOO SOON? (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Hello Brian,
I have read most of the poems you have submitted to this site and some over again. You are very talented indeed and I think you need to know it. Your writing skills, ability to express yourself and the style with which you write has a unique quality. Please write more and more. I have enjoyed and in some cases learned something from your words. Thanks. Keith

Comment is about Brian Belyea (poet profile)

Original item by Brian Belyea

Brian,
This is an incredibly powerful and frank poem the like of which I have not read before. The style you use adds to its gravity and the impact on the reader is almost too much to bear. Yet I thank you for it. I can tell it took courage to write but you have written well. Thanks again. Keith

Comment is about Abuse (blog)

Original item by Brian Belyea

Along with Buddy Holly they were to my mind the most influential songwriters of rock 'n' roll.

Comment is about TAKE ME BACK TO ROCKN'ROLL - a re-post for a reason (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

No may have even offered a submission had I known about it.

Comment is about Outer Hebrides to Offa's Dyke: 'Best of British' anthology to be launched (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Dyphrent, welcome to WOL. And LOOK! A first poem chosen as Poem of the Week. Congratulations! That's a record, I think, and a real honour.

The poem following your 'bio' is very intense with some fine ideas. I really like 'presuppositions, prejudices and pride' an excellently alliterated list.

I take it that you feel 'possessed' by poetry. I think that most of us contributing poems here, and reading other works on site, know exactly what you mean. It's a great common denominator that ties us all together.

May we know where you live?

Comment is about Dyphrent (poet profile)

Original item by Dyphrent

A very interesting work, like a chant with drums or clapping, and dancing, the subject 'song' being thrown from singer to singer to insert their ideas as they can or wish, thinking on the spur of the moment. Thoughts sometimes seem elaborated by the next person, or dropped entirely for a new idea. Any effort to rhyme is highly respected.

Perhaps that is why the word 'man' seems to embrace both a 'male person' and the idea of 'mankind'. This is a really complex understanding perhaps not grasped by 'all the singers', and they can contribute only what they 'know'.

My thoughts have come from this perceived spontaneity.

Comment is about 'Man' by Dyphrent is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

HI David, you pose a physical/metaphysical question - in order to answer I must resort to self cannibalism. Just a matter of taste.

Thanks elP an intriguing parallel there. I am thinking "mermaid" myth connecting with the sea ( where you buy the rock). Hope that meets you half way!

Old Shoes, well spotted, the poem was a sort of trip in a way. No offense, and thanks for troubling.

Colin - what a great track - sends me into more thinking. That's the beauty of comments like yours, often a challenge.

Ray

Comment is about RHYMING ROCK (blog)

Original item by ray pool

This is indeed a world created within another that spins forever creating yet more worlds everytime we put our poetic minds together.

Comment is about March 2017 Collage Poem - Internationalism (blog)

Original item by Stockport WoL

I sent a version of this to a former girlfriend (strictly platonic) her response? A well considered, "Yuk!"

I guess it's a boy thing/girl thing ?

Comment is about Last Summer in Co. Clare (blog)

Original item by Rick Gammon

I see this poem as having been written by a very liberated woman who is not afraid to write down her feelings towards either her 'man' or her ideal of a 'man' and what is wrong with that? Us male poets waffle on endlessly about the beauty of 'woman' but when a woman celebrates her vision of 'man' in this way she should not be unjustly berated but celebrated.

this is a bold poem with strong sentiments, it looks you straight in the eye without compromise. I don't know the writer's cultural background but it has the beat of tribal Africa mixed with the deep south songs of the cotton plantation slave. It's not often we get such a poem as this here on WoL.

well done Dyphrent.
Colin.

Comment is about 'Man' by Dyphrent is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

I thought the ending was too twee so removed the closing line "Your father whom you never really knew?".

Comment is about In Passing (blog)

Original item by Rick Gammon

Nice one Maria.

I like the way how the central message of 'thank you' strings together all that you wanted to say ...ending with a positive transformation.

Raj

Comment is about I'm better now (blog)

Original item by Maria Renea

What a delight. She feels part human and part landscape.

Comment is about the dance (blog)

Original item by Twilbury Wist

Hi Ken. thanks for comment on "Grimstone Low"
I'm going to rework the ending
cheers kevin

Comment is about ken eaton-dykes (poet profile)

Original item by ken eaton-dykes

hi Harry. thanks for comment on Grimstone Low. I will re-look at it and alter the ending
Cheers Kevin

Comment is about Harry O`N eill (poet profile)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

Maybe a more liberated woman would have added some less complementary adjectives to that list of undeserved flattery describing "Man"

Or was "Man" mistakenly intended as a generality for the wonder that is Mankind ???

Comment is about 'Man' by Dyphrent is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

as you have all commented, a good beat to it. Ken, your comment as enigmatic as the poem, which I suppose was your intention?

Comment is about 'Man' by Dyphrent is Write Out Loud's Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Graham, Tom - we're all too long in the tooth to know that it turns to rat-shit in the end.

Comment is about THE PROMISED LAND (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Steady on JC I nearly started tapping my foot! A bit early for fist pumping!

Comment is about THE PROMISED LAND (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Come on you Spurs - Go Harry go go go lol

Comment is about THE PROMISED LAND (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

very very clever, Linda. would suggest reading it out at Stockport but not sure how you would manage it.

still class x

Comment is about On Censorship (blog)

Original item by Linda Cosgriff