Enjoyed this, Tommy, good one :-)
Comment is about waiting wanting (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
thank you Hannah and M.C for your kind words
Comment is about A Gift X (blog)
Original item by David R Mellor
<Deleted User> (11750)
Mon 30th Dec 2013 18:45
<Deleted User> (11750)
Mon 30th Dec 2013 18:44
I LOVE this. I'm new to this website and have been looking at numerous poems but this is the first one I've found that's really caught my attention. Do you have your own blog? I have just created one. Maybe you'd like to see it? http://lifeastoldbymypen.weebly.com/
Comment is about waiting wanting (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
<Deleted User> (11750)
Mon 30th Dec 2013 18:42
I really like this, although I'm not so keen on the title. Do you have your own blog? I have just created one. Maybe you'd like to have a look?
http://lifeastoldbymypen.weebly.com/
Comment is about Patterns (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
<Deleted User> (11750)
Mon 30th Dec 2013 18:38
I'm interested to read that you prefer the first two verses as I personally preferred the last two. I love the concept too.
Comment is about Time is in the Moment (blog)
Original item by Steve Higgins
Great questions, nicely put - among the most important questions there are. If 'God is' then clearly something is going on which is beyond human understanding. We do (as a race) appear to expect that we ought to be able to understand everything. Could be aiming too high.
Comment is about Hung Out To Dry (blog)
Original item by Jonnie Falafel
That's a familiar feeling and the poem captures it well. Nice one Dave.
Comment is about Voices Off (blog)
Original item by Dave Morgan
Pertinent and challenging.
What sort of "merciful" Father does that to his
Son? And to what purpose? It only adds mystery
to the witty observation by Ogden Nash -
How odd of God
To choose the Jews.
Why didn't He do the job on the Romans - or was
that a tacit admission that Might is Right - on
Earth or in Heaven? OK - I know the Romans had
their day eventually but that was more a matter
of human action or inaction as time went by.
After all, we all love a change! And we all
love a good story too.
Comment is about Hung Out To Dry (blog)
Original item by Jonnie Falafel
Hi Cynthia Glad you got the poems and sorry to hear that you've been unwell. Hope things pick up in the New ear and that you find some stuff in the book you like.
Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
Books arrived safely almost immediately. My computer wonked out just before sending you a message, and hasn't recouped until today (incorrect info from experts silenced my Christmas period - not a bad thing - and I was quite ill too, but better now. Better computer access - better me - what's not to like!) I will greatly enjoy your poems. Happy New Year!
Comment is about David Cooke (poet profile)
Original item by David Cooke
thanks for the comment m8 over that christmas poem. thankfully it was on a set rate on that day is all i am gonna say lol.
glad you liked it seriously however. bit of a jigsaw poem this one if you know what i mean.
Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)
Original item by Nigel Astell
thankfully it was on a set rate, nigel. lol.
glad you liked it m8. bit of a jigsaw poem this one if you know what i mean.
Comment is about Christmas Poem for Cathy (2013) (blog)
Original item by Andy N
i can relate to this. seen a few christmas like this with memories of my own family.
Comment is about Surviving Christmas (blog)
Original item by Gray Nicholls
lot said in a few words, lory. i can relate to this. lovely (if that is the right word).
Comment is about dream (blog)
Original item by Lory Gaur
Hear,hear...makes the poetry world sound quite exciting and unexpectedly topical. Echoing Isabel Wigan continues to be the liveliest and most irreverent of nights, obviously not everyone's cup of tea, but with a high premium on entertainment and audience involvement.
Well done Greg.
Comment is about Scandals, royalty, and a great loss: poetry's big news in 2013 (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
It's been good looking back. I've had great fun, along with other Write Out Loud correspondents, in covering all this in the past year. And yes, Julian, I have alerted the necessary media - twice! - in case they weren't paying sufficient attention first time around.
Comment is about Scandals, royalty, and a great loss: poetry's big news in 2013 (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Greg, a magnificently written, superbly conceived piece. You should have down this professionally you know! I hope you have FB and Twatted it?
Comment is about Scandals, royalty, and a great loss: poetry's big news in 2013 (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
Thank you very much Patricia and Stefan and best wishes for 2014.
Comment is about THE BOMB THAT DIDN'T EXPLODE (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
My subtlety didn't fool you then, Steve. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Comment is about Christmas Wrap (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Wrap -rap -Hey, I've just got it! Great one dude . .
Comment is about Christmas Wrap (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
thank u so much.. :)
i sure like the idea of more morphine :P
besties to you too... :)
Comment is about dream (blog)
Original item by Lory Gaur
<Deleted User> (5552)
Sun 29th Dec 2013 07:17
a nice piece of work - the last stanza pretty much sums up the motif
Comment is about Coastlines and laughter (blog)
Original item by Gray Nicholls
The first two verses came straight out of my pen and sat in my notebook for a considerable time while I worked out what was to come next. I did think of ending after verse four as I wasn't quite so happy with the last part but your suggestion is excellent. Many thanks MC.
Comment is about Time is in the Moment (blog)
Original item by Steve Higgins
<Deleted User> (6895)
Sun 29th Dec 2013 00:33
Indeed the inaction of that bomb WAS a miracle!
we went to Malta years ago and actually have a photo of our children stood next to it-some size it is and all! it would most certainly have completely blown that beautiful building to bits.
Good poem David-all the best to you for 2014.xx
Comment is about THE BOMB THAT DIDN'T EXPLODE (blog)
Original item by David Subacchi
<Deleted User> (6895)
Sun 29th Dec 2013 00:21
'maybe its you,'....me? me?.. old Mr Wilde?
oh go on then let it be me-then you would need morphine-haha! cute poem Lory.
Best to you for 2014 from the old duffers.xx
Comment is about dream (blog)
Original item by Lory Gaur
<Deleted User> (6895)
Sun 29th Dec 2013 00:13
awww!! lovely poem Jane and soo nice to see you blogging again (wasnt meant to rhyme but hey! it just comes natural-haha)we wish you and yours all the very best for the coming New year.xx
Comment is about Christmas (blog)
Original item by jane wilcock
<Deleted User> (9882)
Sat 28th Dec 2013 22:47
woahhh!!I nearly missed this beaut!
Comment is about grey sky drinking (blog)
Original item by Paul Sands
<Deleted User> (9882)
Sat 28th Dec 2013 21:49
this fab piece is sooo worthy of me having to put my continental cocktail and say once again-WOW!
Best wishes for the New Year
O writer of excellence.x
Comment is about painted into a corner (blog)
Original item by Paul Sands
Up and down that snow white hill
hope that meter was not running high
it's double rate you know Christmas time.
Comment is about Christmas Poem for Cathy (2013) (blog)
Original item by Andy N
And a Merry Christmas to you Larisa! xx
Comment is about Merry Christmas! (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
That's a great review of the year Greg - you bring it all back so effortlessly!
I don't have any personal highlights - just know that I've thoroughly enjoyed all the nights at Writeoutloud Wigan (The Tudor) - poets of all different abilities and backgrounds, getting together to make great entertainment.
I really loved the Marsden jazz festival also; just wish we had one this side of the Pennines too.
Here's to 2014 - happy New Year, everyone! x
Comment is about Scandals, royalty, and a great loss: poetry's big news in 2013 (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
I particularly like the first two verses - food
for thought and well conceived.
Not certain about the last line - my own thoughts
tend to go along with the downbeat words in the preceding line...to finish (in my mind) -
"And time can tear apart".
I guess it depends on whether you seek to finish
on an "upbeat" note.
I look forward to your work in 2014.
Cheers
Comment is about Time is in the Moment (blog)
Original item by Steve Higgins
Hey brudda - dem lines is a riot
One day dis guy might even try it.
An' go in for de gangsta rap
If some bro hands me shit for crap!
:-)
Comment is about Christmas Wrap (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Lory, content at the simultaneous loss and finding of and in another is a find! I shall use it. ;)
Comment is about that silence.. (blog)
Original item by Lory Gaur
and yet you feel content.
hi tommy :)
Comment is about that silence.. (blog)
Original item by Lory Gaur
It seems that there always seems to be loss in the finding... hi Lory, Tommy
Comment is about that silence.. (blog)
Original item by Lory Gaur
i really like this, ian. it went in a direction i wasn't expecting which makes which in my eyes is always a good thing. good stuff man
Comment is about Circe's Antidote (blog)
Original item by Ian Whiteley
there is a frozen element in this big style.
i like this as it doesn't drag the point out.
Comment is about that silence.. (blog)
Original item by Lory Gaur
perfect for christmas time. love this
Comment is about Merry Christmas! (blog)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
like the use of chasing patterns at the beginning of each stanza here, dave. it works really well. excellent stuff
Comment is about Patterns (blog)
Original item by Dave Bradley
hope you all had a good christmas. sorry for the quietness. had a lot on really but my schedule is a lot more manageable now so should be able to start coming down more in the new year.
Comment is about Stockport WoL (group profile)
Original item by Stockport WoL
hope you had a good christmas, nigel. sorry for the quietness. been writing a lot but not performance based / under my real name (if that makes sense) but i will be back in the new year.
speak soon
andy
Comment is about Nigel Astell (poet profile)
Original item by Nigel Astell
thanks M.C. for your comment on my Christmas Poem.. I wrote it really for my partner, but she loved it that much she suggested i blog it and as i like it too, here we go. glad you like it and hope you had a good xmas / regards for next year.
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
thanks M.C. I wrote it really for my partner, but she loved it that much she suggested i blog it and as i like it too, here we go. glad you like it and hope you had a good xmas / regards for next year.
Comment is about Christmas Poem for Cathy (2013) (blog)
Original item by Andy N
Shevaughn
Tue 31st Dec 2013 08:03
Tommy,
Wow this poem is very well written, while reading it was like a movie playing in my mind (in a good way haha). I felt the intensity that you are portraying through this poem with every line. The passion that you and your then lover,mostly U, show,is magnificent.
Everybody has different perceptions of a poem.Many have judged mine by telling me how to write it,hell,that's my job not their's! But even then,there's no stopping people from doing that.
You are right,affection is blatant in your poem,Theres no doubt about that whatsoever. The way you have put your emotions down to writing is really gripping and arresting,When I reached the ending,I wanted to yell out "Tommy don't stop!!" Haha I mean the only thing I didn't like about your poem is the fact that it came to an end!
--Shevaughn.
Comment is about Hold me - when does the giving ever stop? (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll