excellent, Rach.. possibly in need of a comma near the beginning as the synthax threw me a bit near the start but i still enjoyed it xx
Comment is about wine and roses (blog)
interesting piece, Russell which i enjoyed considering I am quite familar with Bukowski and also as a ex postman myself once upon a time although if i am honest it is a bit prosey...
would be interested in learning where this came from?
Comment is about God Loves a Sinner (blog)
Original item by Russell J Turner
the last line worked really well, Marianne in particular for me although i did enjoy the full piece xx
Comment is about Make Believe (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
i agree with jeff here totally, Lynne.
nice stuff.. made me smile on these cold winter nights - lol
Comment is about Restless (blog)
Original item by Lynn Dye
''kiss me in the haystacks'' oo er missus!
Comment is about wine and roses (blog)
This is wonderful, Fifi - you capture the true spirit!
I especially like the ending...
'I make up the season that’s here but a while
Of goodwill to all men, those we do - and don’t - know:
May you give and receive love wherever you go.'
Comment is about The Nine Letters of Christmas (blog)
Original item by Fifi Fanshawe
<Deleted User> (7075)
Sun 18th Dec 2011 18:16
P.S. Thats not me that Laura's refering to! Win
Comment is about An Ode To Skyrim (blog)
Original item by Matt Tilke
Hi J.C. - yes, I thought I.G.'s post showed
just how much thought and care can go into these things. This was consistently inventive
with a clear grasp of language, and left its message without being either portentious or pompous.
And a happy Christmas to you too!
Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)
Original item by John Coopey
Mmmm... You've captured this so well.
Love these lines:
'it's a slow burn
to a turn
in the straight jacket'
'oh a girl knows when she's pretty
far gone
it's always another bum
leave a light on
for love'
(Typos - corrected)
Comment is about wine and roses (blog)
Pleased to see you found Ian Gant on the site.
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Thoroughly enjoyed this too, Ian. It's a rollocking ride.
Pleased to see MC Newberry has found you. You should check out his stuff - I think you'll like it. Also Richie Muster.
Comment is about DECEMBER MUSINGS ( A Modern Christmas Carol ) (blog)
Original item by Ian Gant
Glad you liked "Akram and the Tank". (I think you liked "Akram and the Tank")!
Comment is about Richie Muster (poet profile)
Original item by Richie Muster
Glad you liked "Dear Sarah and Samantha", AE. I will say this about Santa - he might only come once a year down the chimney but at least he embraces diversity. He doesn't care if its the front or back flue.
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)
Original item by Anthony Emmerson
'Ey up, monkey,
Glad you liked "Dear Sarah and Samantha"
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Hi Fifi
lol. You are a v funny lady. Win x
Comment is about Fifi Fanshawe (poet profile)
Original item by Fifi Fanshawe
Hi Winston,
Thanks for the comments on the video - I just have to grow into the rest of me now!
:)
Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)
Original item by Winston Plowes
Thanks Isobel. That was me at the end of the course, so I learned a huge amount! x
Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)
Original item by Isobel
Timely and thoughtful - well worth having to
lead us to all facets of what Christmas can mean. But finishing on a totally apt reminder
of the true essence of Christmas - charity and
love. Excellent.
Comment is about DECEMBER MUSINGS ( A Modern Christmas Carol ) (blog)
Original item by Ian Gant
fuckin great man, really enjoyed this. There's too much poetry around that is clearly written as a performance piece or for a particular audience. But this on the other hand is a pure.
It reads completely effortlessly, especially if you like bill hicks. good stuff.
Comment is about I love Bill Hicks (while being tickled) (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Thanks for taking time to read/listen to Depression. Impressed You were almost spot on with the influences. I had recently re-read some Kafka and D.T's Rage Rage against the dying of the light, and Bonzo's Canyon was in my head, but alter Bosch to Albrecht Durer a print of whose is above my desk.
Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)
Original item by John Coopey
I love him to bits Laura-...Lenny Bruce- Mort Sahl-
Richard Pryor- Bill Hicks- George Carlin :o)
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
yes your right. its a crap line.
the only peace ive ever known is better, but then 'no one wants to know' follows it so i changed it. feel free to suggest a better one x
Comment is about hope (blog)
Very entertaining FiFi and brilliantly performed. Were they able to teach you anything on that course? x
Comment is about A favour, please... (blog)
Original item by Fifi Fanshawe
Hi Anthony,
Just wanted to say how extraordinary a poem 'Visiting Neil' is - and I felt that before I read the full story.
Reading it for the first time tonight (and then going back over and over it) I know that it has become one of my favourite poems and it will stay with me forever.
Your words are imaginative, conjuring instant pictures in the mind; you express yourself with a rare beauty and depth. Heart-rendingly gorgeous.
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)
Original item by Anthony Emmerson
"Surely the rising number of mentally challenged patients is proportional to the rise in population, like the proliferation of poets?"
I'm not sure whether your tongue isn't firmly in your cheek, Cynthia, but mentally challenged is not the same as mentally ill. My views on mental illnesses and population have been expressed in poetic form.
http://www.writeoutloud.net/public/blogentry.php?blogentryid=15713
Comment is about The Drug Lunch (blog)
steve mellor
Fri 16th Dec 2011 19:05
Hello Anthony
Your comment is much appreciated
Meldrewesque? I honestly think you may have hit the nail on the head.
No hiding from the truth sadly
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)
Original item by Anthony Emmerson
Hi Lynn,
Thanks for your comments - I'm glad it made you smile.
Fifi x
Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)
Original item by Lynn Dye
Hi Anthony,
Thanks for your comments on When I Was Nine - I'll let you know when the surgical reconstruction's finished!
Fifi x
Comment is about Anthony Emmerson (poet profile)
Original item by Anthony Emmerson
Hi Laura,
Sorry about the link. Try this one:
http://bit.ly/rPqaXx
Thanks,
Fifi
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Hi M.C.,
Sorry about the link. Try this one:
http://bit.ly/rPqaXx
Thanks,
Fifi
Comment is about M.C. Newberry (poet profile)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
The lines are lovely. Without the picture the poem could be so different. I saw a mother with a son, with perhaps a secret kiss good-night. Where has 'he' gone the next day? To war? To marriage? To 'too old to be openly hugged and kissed'? The poem's power of suggestion is its great strength.
P.S. The picture really is fab, with its Oedipus overtones.
Comment is about in sleep (blog)
Original item by Ann Foxglove
This is truly lovely. I found myself a bit confused with 'I' and 'You', a switch from personal to universal, I'm presuming. I also rearranged several lines (turnings) in stanza 4, to suit myself, for clarity. Among many superb images, I especially love "the whole of me/contained in the wrestle of love".
Comment is about Make Believe (blog)
Original item by Marianne Daniels
This is very clever, with a sophisticated rhyme scheme so cool you could miss it, not realizing its subtle influence as you enjoy the words, the images and the chilling message. Surely the rising number of mentally challenged patients is proportional to the rise in population, like the proliferation of poets? 'Couches' are a slow, costly process, not always effective either, and definitely geared to the moneyed class. It's a tough nut.
Comment is about The Drug Lunch (blog)
hi Laura thanx for the comments i appreciate it. no ive not read Wrath, ill have to check it out. not sure what id take, maybe the love of my life who ive not yet... id defo take a pen and paper lol. did you write when depressed. i often do. ive many dark poems. some light ones...
Comment is about OLD (blog)
Original item by NICK ARMBRISTER
Thanks all. I have indeed hung up my white coat but I can get more than enough madness at home, believe me.
Comment is about The Drug Lunch (blog)
This is a cracking read, Stella. You perform too? I'd like to hear this. I'd stop it at
'please
don't walk on the fields' tho. I don't mean excise the last segment, merely move it up into the body of the poem.
Comment is about Christmas Comes Early (blog)
I too loved
'i was scraped off the road
and lifted in the warm arms
of someone
a man ill never see
as close to god as there can be'...
I had no probs putting myself there in the moment but did stumble [ever so slightly] over
'it was the only peace I've ever been'. Ummm?
Comment is about hope (blog)
I an' I, an' t'ing [in-a Babylon]
this is neat-o. If I can find the address of the short story-writing comp. I saw recently, you ought to send this in.
RPGs all round and make mine a tequila slammer. Hotsaaaah!
Comment is about Akram and the Tank (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
My pleasure, chuck. By the way, all I want for Christmas is a Dukla[?] Prague Away Kit, if you're offering...
Comment is about Laura Taylor (poet profile)
Original item by Laura Taylor
Thanks everybody. For some reason the back end of the URL has disappeared. So I've edited the entry to give a better link:
http://bit.ly/rPqaXx
or as Lynn suggests, visit youtube and put Fifi Fanshawe in their search bar.
Much appreciated!
Comment is about A favour, please... (blog)
Original item by Fifi Fanshawe
Hello Larisa,
It's not just at football and rugby that England and Scotland have a rivalry. These are just examples. The best way I can describe the relationship of England and Scotland is that they are like brothers. They may be rivals, they may fight each other but they are family.
Incidentally, my suggestion that The Good and The English was the answer to question 1 was a joke response. If you are entering a proper competition I do not think this will do as an answer. I'm afraid I don't know the real answer.
Sorry.
Comment is about Larisa Rzhepishevska (poet profile)
Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska
Cheers Richie re 'Gordon' :)
Comment is about Richie Muster (poet profile)
Original item by Richie Muster
I love this - packed to the brim with great lines, and dripping contempt for the industry. I am a huge believer in the 'talking cure' but I guess it just doesn't make enough money for the people at the top who don't give a shit about the people they're selling the drugs to.
Brilliant Ray, love it
Comment is about The Drug Lunch (blog)
Mmm I like this. You know what it reminds me of? When Ma, in The Grapes of Wrath, looks through her box of precious things, and has to decide what to take with her on the long journey to California. Have you ever read it? That scene is heartbreaking - they have almost nothing in terms of material possessions, but have to make these difficult choices anyway.
I do really like this - and I reckon it would make a great theme for a competition.
My keepsake? It's a toss up between the 3 sand-coloured pebbles from the beach at Mawbray where I went with the love of my life, or the collection of dried berries and conkers that I got from Taylor Park last year, during a period of depression. When we got home from the park, my darling arranged them into a smiley face :)
Comment is about OLD (blog)
Original item by NICK ARMBRISTER
Hahaa - skyrim :D A friend of mine has just given up his voluntary role as moderator of a huge site in order to devote more time to this bloody 'game'!! More addictive than WoW? Possibly!
Comment is about An Ode To Skyrim (blog)
Original item by Matt Tilke
Do you like Lenny Bruce too, Tommy?
Comment is about I love Bill Hicks (while being tickled) (blog)
Original item by Tommy Carroll
Andy N
Sun 18th Dec 2011 21:10
like the ending here in particular, Kealan but another good, solid piece buddy
Comment is about Olfactory Evoked Recall (blog)
Original item by Kealan Coady