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Comment is about A favour, please... (blog)

Original item by Fifi Fanshawe

I really enjoyed the joy in this, Harry.

For me, the last two lines - (or at least the last) needs to be tweaked.
Perhaps...

And me - I stood watching -
What could I do but fall in love right there?

Comment is about BETTY IN A WINDY SUNSET (blog)

Mmmm...

'Next night
alone
I feel his flesh
against my mouth.'

Comment is about in sleep (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Mmmm... Love it!

My favourite part:

'the glance of some, positioned perfectly
for my love, the kind that dipped into me to help
or stood outside and never knew me.
An unimaginable amount of things

suspend themselves in the hint of love,
the ripe clutch of any You.'

Comment is about Make Believe (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Hi John, Yes .Thank you. It took a whole block of carbolic! Thought it might make a change, Win

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

Very witty, Fifi - really enjoyed this : )

Comment is about A favour, please... (blog)

Original item by Fifi Fanshawe

So, as far as I understand it comes to RUGBY or may be to FOOTBALL? I don't know.

Comment is about Larisa Rzhepishevska (poet profile)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Bloody Hell, Win! You've scrubbed up well. Nice photo.

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

Made me smile too, Fifi. Well done.

Although it looks like the video isn't now there, it should work if you go to youtube and enter Fifi's name in their search bar. :)

Comment is about A favour, please... (blog)

Original item by Fifi Fanshawe

Video not found on youtube - or here. Has
someone deleted it?

Comment is about A favour, please... (blog)

Original item by Fifi Fanshawe

Hello Larisa,
"The Good and the English".
It's a joke, really. Although the English and the Scots are united as British, England and Scotland have fought each other for nearly 2000 years. The last battle between England and Scotland was at Culloden in 1745. When England play Scotland at football or rugby, the Scots till refer to England as "The Old Enemy".

Comment is about Larisa Rzhepishevska (poet profile)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Lovely John! You should always feel sorry for Santa. Only comes once a year - and then it's down someone's chimney . . .

Regards,

A.E.

Comment is about Dear Sarah and Samantha (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Never mind what Coopey says - you fill yer boots lass! :)

Regards,

A.E.

Comment is about in sleep (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Ooooh Marianne! That is so beautifully painful! The more I read it the better it gets. But I'd love to hear you read it as you intend it to be heard! All the tragic darkness of a jet cameo. Loved it.

Regards,

A.E.

Comment is about Make Believe (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Hello, dear John!
Thank you so much for answering my questions! But...please...explain those words: The Good and the English.
With love,
Larisa

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

He would have approved Tommy. Probably the most honest thinker comedy's ever seen.

Regards,

A.E.

Comment is about I love Bill Hicks (while being tickled) (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

You really made me smile Fifi! That was great fun! Looks like the facial reconstruction is going well :)

Regards,

A.E.

Comment is about A favour, please... (blog)

Original item by Fifi Fanshawe

You Old Tryer!
Dead neat MC, again. I reckon the language is simple enough (I mean that as a compliment) that it would make a cracking song. (But, then again, you knew that!)

Comment is about I SAW HER WALK IN - Country Love (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

Yer dirty Gerty!

Comment is about in sleep (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

...and faithful, unrelenting rhythm as well, Ian. Excellent.

Comment is about The Heart of Winter (blog)

Original item by Ian Gant

This is wonderful Freda, and all the more powerful for being seen through the confused eyes of a child. It appeals to all the senses and puts the reader into the fragile memory you have created. It has a slowly meandering pace, which fits the voice perfectly. Subtle yet exquisitely detailed. A richly rewarding read.

Regards,

A.E.

Comment is about In the End (blog)

Original item by Freda Davis

Enjoyed this, Matt. I don't know the game (I'm not much of a gamer, I'm afraid) but I enjoyed the poetic ride.
If I was being picky I'm less enthusiastic about "did" and "do" in the 2nd and 4th stanzas - they always seem like stocking fillers to me.

Comment is about An Ode To Skyrim (blog)

Original item by Matt Tilke

"HOW MUCH?" (Trad: Old Yorkshire saying).

Comment is about Chance to be published: Flarestack Poets pamphlet competition (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

'Ey up, youth.
Glad you liked "Everybody's Gone Serfin'". I think you can get it at HMV.
I know what you mean about "If you don't want slaughtered". When I've performed it I change it to "You could end up slaughtered". Her Majesty agreed it was preferable.

Comment is about Richie Muster (poet profile)

Original item by Richie Muster

Oh, I like this one - some fantastic turns of phrase. It's crying out to be set to music.

Comment is about The Heart of Winter (blog)

Original item by Ian Gant

agree with the bulk of your waffle
on me grinders milarkey
you didnt finish lettering
me fave word-next time just send pikkys.

Glad the cherubic th'archer seems to
have found his target.nice one!

off to see if I can stop writing shite.
catch yer when the shiny fing is over
the yard-arm.

phanxalot monsewer!

Comment is about Richie Muster (poet profile)

Original item by Richie Muster

I'm not sure I like the fortress either. Sorry to be so opinionated! These would be my suggestons: 'The Rack' 'Waters of Lethe' 'Cold Hell' or you could leave it as it is. Others will probably disagree with me and I might disagree with myself tomorrow.

Comment is about Nick Coleman (poet profile)

Original item by Nick Coleman

Yes, you are right about "Depression" title. Thanks.
I had thought of calling it The Castle but reckoned that was too Kafkaesque. Might settle on The Fortress

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Nice poem, tricky ending.In the penultimate verse "as" might be better starting the next line

I’ll not pass
this way
again
as dawn breaks
with rain.

Comment is about in sleep (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Your knowledge and experience paint a grim picture of what is happening in mental health care though.

I like the way you slide your medical speak jargon in here almost imperceptibly. This is a very clever poem with plenty of humour but an underlying weariness also.

Comment is about The Drug Lunch (blog)

Some great lines here Laura, thanx for comment on heyday poem jeff x

Comment is about Tigerella Warrior (blog)

Original item by Laura Taylor

beautiful poem.

fantasy and fakery in love are just a fuckery.
i cant be fudged x

Comment is about Make Believe (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Aloha, Spud...

'If your hairdo is flaxen
It’s a give-away
Then you must be Saxon -
Serfin’s here to stay'...

...ha-ha, loved the flaxen/Saxon rhyme. I did stumble over the 'if you want slaughtered' line though: I kept wanting to put 'to be' in there. There, that's my carp over and done with for the day.

If only little Englanders would learn a bit of history the silly braindead buggers would quickly realise what mongrels they are, too. Me I'm happy to be 57 [or more] varieties.

Comment is about Everybody's Gone Serfin' (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

This is a wonderful poem Marianne. And deeply romantic. Beautifully written!

Comment is about Make Believe (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Clever and neat. I really love the way you use your knowledge and experience in your poems.

Comment is about The Drug Lunch (blog)

sweet content emotion sad, you take us through it succinctly

Comment is about in sleep (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Thanks for comment on Keep off grass. Ought to have said crackers, not crackin'
And like your Sam an Samantha letter, except am I to understand that Santa doesn't really exist - that is subversive talk.

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

Ooooo that's an intriguing last verse! Interesting piece Ann

Comment is about in sleep (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Ann - just a couple of things I wanted to say to you and keep forgetting! Firstly - bloody well done on setting up the open mic night, that's fantastic. I am thinking of setting one up myself in St Helens as we don't have one here, so if I do, I'll be in touch with you! Second - congrats on the radio show :D Oh, and there's a third and fourth - your poetry has come on in leaps and bounds since I've been a member on here (been nice seeing each other's stuff improve), and that's a cracking photie of you! :D

Take care, have a lovely xmas break, Laura xxx

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

One of my favourite poems is Leigh Hunt's "Jenny Kissed Me". These lines carry on
a grand tradition...brevity is bliss!

Comment is about BETTY IN A WINDY SUNSET (blog)

No, don't delete FOAD. It's far better than any of that stylised rap 'n' rant stuff that gets put on here. Besides when a chap asks for a Herman Hermits CD he doesn't deserve to be mocked by some pimply grot.

Comment is about Richie Muster (poet profile)

Original item by Richie Muster

You come across as a hoary old bastard but I'll wish you the very best for Christmas anyway!

Comment is about Richie Muster (poet profile)

Original item by Richie Muster

I agree with everyone else here, Freda. It's truly a marvellous read.

Comment is about In the End (blog)

Original item by Freda Davis

Hi Stef - evicted Colin, you say?
Well, no, but this poem does nothing for his self esteem!!!
And how did you know about my ears??
Lol,
L xx

Comment is about Restless (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Thank you everyone for your lovely comments. xx

Comment is about Restless (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

a masterful use of imagery and words - first rate

Comment is about BETTY IN A WINDY SUNSET (blog)

wow i love this what a great read.


We kneeled on the seat, and the stars had fallen down.


All the blaze of the sky was caught in the trees.

The windows were full of light spilling onto the people.

My aunt said ‘don’t worry, because it’s all over now.’

just a selection from a piece packed with sensually evoking memorabilia like a living museum.
absolutely smashing x

Comment is about In the End (blog)

Original item by Freda Davis

ayup squire.
as to the non-existent word-unameable.
the easiest way out of that blooper-is-
(and you might find this idea very useful
with your newfound victim-er sorry-love)
blame someone else.

and who is the nearest person to the
back of my hand?
you guessed it!

in order to clear your foggy nog re
the(newly corrected)mistake
(that my-WIFE-made-ha!)
is the viewing of some old unknown duffers
phizog bunged onto canvas and squared off
with a few bits of warped B&Q shit timber.

fog/nog/phizog?..add christmas log-
and thats a start for shit yuletide poem! or a shit joke
like wot i rote.

ta for spotting the blooper-YOU F....nice man

good luck with l'amour!

Comment is about Richie Muster (poet profile)

Original item by Richie Muster

Wonderful, evocative, child's-eye view. I remember the smell of the gas mask my mother kept under the stairs years after the joyful madness you describe; uncertain of what came after, as you say.

Comment is about In the End (blog)

Original item by Freda Davis

Haha - awww John, you are one big soppy get sometimes ;D

Comment is about Dear Sarah and Samantha (blog)

Original item by John Coopey