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Francine

Tue 13th Dec 2011 06:46

Hi Lynn,
Thank you so much for your lovely comments on 'The Berry Bridge' : )

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Francine

Tue 13th Dec 2011 06:40

Hi Winston,
Thank you for your comment on 'The Berry Bridge'... And the info regarding Blackpool Tower : )

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Francine

Tue 13th Dec 2011 06:33

Hi Andy,
Thank you once again for your lovely comments on 'The Berry Bridge' : )

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Francine

Tue 13th Dec 2011 06:30

Thank you for your lovely words, Cynthia. It is always a pleasure to hear from you!

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Francine

Tue 13th Dec 2011 06:21

Hi Laura,
Thank you for your comments on 'The Berry Bridge'...
Made me smile because I am full of childish delight : )

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M.C. Newberry

Tue 13th Dec 2011 02:17

This verse was written after the above walk a
number of years ago when I would visit my sister and brother-in-law for Christmas Day.
And, yes, there IS a Heathen Street in Durley...the setting for my walk.

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Tommy Carroll

Tue 13th Dec 2011 00:40

:o)

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Tommy Carroll

Tue 13th Dec 2011 00:39

thank you Laura :o)

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Tommy Carroll

Tue 13th Dec 2011 00:36

Kealan I think you're correct to 'stare down' capitalism- in its purest form or otherwise.
I think your first stanza is a good broad opening. I fail to see any opening for 'humour' in any part of your work here- Tommy

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Mon 12th Dec 2011 22:00

Love you, my dear Lynn. I thought Englishmen do not understand jokes.

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Ray Miller

Mon 12th Dec 2011 21:47

Is there really a Heathen Street somewhere? Enjoyed the poem and as I hate to see a strict metre spoiled, how about " and had me hurry home"?

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Ray Miller

Mon 12th Dec 2011 21:35

It's a weird poem, indeed. I don't think the first two lines belong with it at all.Next two are good, though.

"When the profits curl uncertainty?"Or uncertainly?

"Then bury it under a business"
I know it's no laughing matter but this line made me laugh anyhow.

I think the capitalism in its purest form shtick is unneccessary.



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steve mellor

Mon 12th Dec 2011 21:30

Hi Isobel
Whilst I am still trying to figure out whether I am more like cystitis, constipation or thrush, I thought I should thank you for your kind comment ;-)) on Inevitable
This is, to some extent, what was going through my mind waiting for 6:30
But am I the only person who is immediately convinced that everything that is on the 'good' horizon, is bound to get fucked up?
Get the inevitable out of the way, and then you can get on with 'normal' life

I took the liberty of excluding myself from the list of candidates to be likened to a period. I think I'm more of an irritant than a curse. But you can correct me if I'm wrong ;-)))))))))))))))

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winston plowes

Mon 12th Dec 2011 21:29

Isobel, Much of Mariannes writing defise categorisation and might be considered by many as inaccessible. There is often little structure and leaps in tense and subject even within the same line at times. I heard someone once say they could come up with any such random words and phrases. And indeed they could, but it would never match Mariannes work which for me is somehow 'beyond imagination'. The reader is bombarded by images and constructs and what comes out? For me new love in all its uncertain excitement in its unknown future and its beauty. I canot be wrong of course as this is what it means to me. It may mean something else to you and you canot be wrong in your interpretation either as you own this. Have I waffled on enough? Win x

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Lynn Dye

Mon 12th Dec 2011 21:24

No apologies necessary, Larisa. Gave me a giggle. :) Warmest wishes, Lynn xx

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Lynn Dye

Mon 12th Dec 2011 21:17

Hi MC, thank you for your comment on Seizing the Moment. Just like to wish your sister all the best for her op next year. :)

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jane wilcock

Mon 12th Dec 2011 21:13

Hi Isobel, no this story is not actual, it's a modern Christmas story in verse. I'm happy though to chat to all on the street, the reasons people ask for money is interesting and sometimes genuine.

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Larisa Rzhepishevska

Mon 12th Dec 2011 21:13

I am very sorry for this poem,but.... I am sure you'll understand it as a joke.

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jane wilcock

Mon 12th Dec 2011 21:13

Hi Isobel, no this story is not actual, it's a modern Christmas story in verse. I'm happy though to chat to all on the street, the reasons people ask for money is interesting and sometimes genuine.

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Lynn Dye

Mon 12th Dec 2011 21:07

Hi Tommy, thanks for your comment on Seizing the Moment - you were right of course, my typo! :0)

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Isobel

Mon 12th Dec 2011 21:04

I think you were very brave to do that, if this is a true story Jane. I'm not sure many people out on the streets would be able to appreciate that - which isn't to underestimate their spirituality.

Perhaps it was better than being ignored though.

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Isobel

Mon 12th Dec 2011 20:58

How do you know this is about new love Winston? I'm still trying to fathom it out. This could be a stranger in the true sense of the word though. The dilated eyes could just be leering...

I don't really understand but maybe I'm not supposed to.

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Isobel

Mon 12th Dec 2011 20:48

I thought I'd try to do a proper critique but it takes so long - far easier to say 'lovely poem', I think.

I noticed that your 10/9 metre went adrift towards the end - unless it is a type of classical structure I don't know about - which is highly possible since I'm no expert.

I like your use of time honoured poetic tools - assonance, alliteration, rhyme - also the fact that you've so obviously worked on this. It's not a poem that's been just chucked together.

I love the idea of the star that also serves as a distress signal - and the way you convey the implicit sadness of it all.

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Ray Miller

Mon 12th Dec 2011 20:04

Good poem, Dave. I like sofa-pinned, at the heart and on the edge.

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Ray Miller

Mon 12th Dec 2011 19:53

Thanks, Steve. Now you mention it I recall that anyone who's ever commented on this thought splinters of sea was rubbish. So I've changed it at last.

some are gonna think that is genius.

Give me the names, the names!

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Ray Miller

Mon 12th Dec 2011 19:37

Hello Matt. I've read this a few times and I'm still not sure what it's about, not that that's all important. There's some nice lines - I like "out of place and beautiful" - but I think it's suffering from a desire to be poetic in a few places.
Do you need to say that night is "blackened"? granite and fortress? metallic and steel?

In awe that such simplicity

Can be seen in such normality

As to be beautiful

As to be noticed

Only by some

I like the ending except I'd do away with the 2nd "such" and finish the poem at "As to be noticed".




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Jeff Dawson

Mon 12th Dec 2011 18:52

Great lines as always, great pic and glad the angel turned up X

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Laura Taylor

Mon 12th Dec 2011 16:06

Thanks for doing this on Thursday btw :D Loved it!

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Laura Taylor

Mon 12th Dec 2011 16:05

Hello fellow Neutral Milk Hotel fan!! Wow, that's a rarity. I meet so few people who are into them! I mentioned them to Winston on here and he got the album and got RIGHT into it :D I never had a favourite album in a lifetime's worth of music obsession...so that shows you how pretty bloody special it is!

Jeff Mangum's around and about these days you know, he was supposed to be curating an ATP but as far as I can tell it's all gone tits up. Ticket price was ridiculous though.

If I hear of him playing any gigs, I'll give you a shout :)

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Matt Tilke

Mon 12th Dec 2011 13:11

Thanks Graham

Actually the 2 buts were an error, the first one wasn't supposed to be there so yes totally agree with you on that one, I have now edited. I quite like the use of hopelessly twice though as I feel the last line is more of a repitition of the previous. Constructive criticism always welcome though so thanks for your honesty.

Matt

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Laura Taylor

Mon 12th Dec 2011 10:29

Ooo those last two lines are a killer - scorchingly honest

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Laura Taylor

Mon 12th Dec 2011 10:04

Fantastic snap shot - been there myself, too. I love how you've framed it with those opening and closing lines - inspired.

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Laura Taylor

Mon 12th Dec 2011 10:02

Love this Dave - and for a change, everyone else did serious and I did funny for the Tudor book!

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Laura Taylor

Mon 12th Dec 2011 09:48

Ta for your note on Tigerella Houston - I was pleased with it :)

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Laura Taylor

Mon 12th Dec 2011 09:41

Hehe, ta Graham but you can lose that 'W' - me middle name is after a hated auntie! ;p

Also, I'm from St Helens, not Wigan. I've had to keep thrashing that into Jeff Dawson, don't make me do it to you! ;D

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John F Keane

Mon 12th Dec 2011 07:14

I liked this, but the issues are really complex. For example, because many aspects of British culture are dysfunctional (you mention high pregnancy rates, for instance) does that automatically make all immigrant contributions great? Are say, honour killings great? Isn't a more mature, modulated response than blanket approbation of immigrant cultures required?

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jean lucy thompson

Mon 12th Dec 2011 00:54

Hahahaha Least it hasnt got a hole in it Or has it ?

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jean lucy thompson

Mon 12th Dec 2011 00:53

Woo hoo saved again by the little green men Enjoyed the poem vm

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jean lucy thompson

Mon 12th Dec 2011 00:48

Hmm yes the horn would get in the way never thought about it before; poor Unicorns I love them sooo much Lovely poem btw :)

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 11th Dec 2011 22:29



Good tradional John.

I`ll be in Bethlehem on friday and tell them about it.

Next time they do the Chester Cycle you could do a modern one for them.

Merry Christmas to you and `Gertie`

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jean lucy thompson

Sun 11th Dec 2011 22:21

Gee Thanks Winston :)

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jean lucy thompson

Sun 11th Dec 2011 22:20

Thanks for your comment Tommy much appreciated :)

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 11th Dec 2011 22:08


Good, strong pagan stuff Cynthia...well better than all this solemn evolutionary guff about million degree temperatures etc;

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 11th Dec 2011 22:00



Heartfelt

I like the dot after Father in the title.

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Harry O'Neill

Sun 11th Dec 2011 21:57



Lovely

I`ll be in Bethlehem on friday

(WHAT IT`S ALL ABOUT)

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Poets Corner

Sun 11th Dec 2011 21:55

Thanks to everybody and 'all great Poets' who have made our first 3 months at 'Poets Corner' a resounding success.
So make it a firm date for the 3rd Tuesday of each month from 8 til late!
We will not be meeting in December.. so our next 'Poets Corner' will be on Tuesday 17th January...
Come and see our Guest Poet Laura W Taylor and other Poets strut their stuff at 'Glassfire'...where we promise you all a warm and friendly welcome!

Have a Great Christmas and New Year!..
Thank You - Graham Robinson

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John F Keane

Sun 11th Dec 2011 21:45

Jane

That is just what came to the people as the collage poem developed. It jumps along like the poetic imagination itself, leaving the reader to impose his/her own meaning.

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Gareth Writer-Davies

Sun 11th Dec 2011 21:41

Thanks for the comments on "Love and Darts"-I enjoyed your "Goodbye to Thursday Street" immensely. I still get my coal delivered by strong, black arms!

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Tommy Carroll

Sun 11th Dec 2011 21:19

Hi Andy, thanks for the comment- the ending came as a shock to me-almost 'automotive'.

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Philipos

Sun 11th Dec 2011 21:18

Hi Jane, 'Luminance' so grateful for the comments and glad you enjoyed the read. Much obliged.

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