I love this too, Larisa, it is really good, well done. xx

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Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

wanna see my peonies ? :)

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Treacherous throbbing and thighs being pervaded can you elucidate further

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Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

This is so funny and true, Gemma!
You make some great observations in this.

'It ain’t just marker pens and glue that get ‘em all high
If it takes all week
And is ten times more expensive
Than buying it ready-made
They will make it'

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Original item by Gemma Lees

Your poem is all the more moving Lynn because there is not a trace of self pity. Such a sad sad thing to happen especially as you were so very young at the time. But I expect getting through it helped to make you the kind and lovely person you so obviously are. xx

Comment is about Empty (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Thanks Graham - I did jot it down in a rush, so maybe one day will return to it. I keep thinking of more and more verses too. Cos that's the way I am ! ;-)

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Ann, Ann Ann! I really wish you'd have developed this with a little more time. What wonderful ideas too many to mention. Please never use cos, it's awful. I wanted every last line to be a variation too like the last one.
Terrific work but needs more time and thoughts

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Cynthia, you're very kind to me. Most of the poems I've whacked on this site I've had published or published myself.
Feedback is great. I submit so many coz I get bored too easy.
I myself don't give many comments coz I don't know much about poems or poetry and am no critic.
Thank you, thank you, thank you.xx

Comment is about The Parting (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Rest in peace and memory Sharon.

Comment is about Empty (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

This is the very first poem that I shared with WOL. I'm feeling nostalgic today, remembering so many comments which readers have shared.

Comment is about The Parting (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

If I were to guess, I would say this is about an off/on relationship, where hurt so deep has been inflicted that now the scars are toughened, resistant to any further infliction.

Would agree that the last verse is hard to fathom - that 'why' doesn't seem to fit cos it isn't a question. It feels to me like it should be a 'while'.

Moving a realtionship beyond the minors isn't easy for many of us. Needles and haystacks come to mind...

I like the poem - it is enigmatic but not too so.

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Funny! FUNNY!! F U N N Y!!! Love your humour expressed with such language skills and line planning. Can't believe no one else has commented; but you have posted quite a few in a short time. That might present a problem if you're looking for feedback. But maybe you aren't. Still, the value of multiple posting is worth a think. In my experience, many readers/commentators don't like overload by a single poet. WOL may be unique in this matter; but it's a great site, well worth cultivating.

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Original item by David Mac

This is hard to fathom, and yet I do like it. I do get 'the minors', of course, and 'I play to win'; 'I'm impulsive like that'. etc. Would you be willing to offer any explanation, a practice I usually don't like?

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And you are still 'we' - that is touching for me Lynn. Experiences like this probably do bind a couple together. I like the non rhyming end - I'm more into free verse at the moment - it seems to be the mood I'm in. You are brave to share this with us. x

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Original item by Lynn Dye

This really is good, Lynn. Sharing such an experience supports and teaches us all.Very poignant are:'mine was that one who was sadly born dead' and 'Nothing to show she had been'. And your poem is enhanced by rhyme and rhythm too. Well done.

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Original item by Lynn Dye

Stef - I never do politics - now you know why! (And I don't do Arthur Askey impressions either - unlike someone I know!)

Comment is about nosing towards america (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

i.e Blair having been referred to as Bush,s little puppy..without the need for the unreeled toilet roll-? aythankyor!

Comment is about nosing towards america (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hilarious, and yet - so barbed with meaning. You are very talented. IMO, interpretation could take this into any field because you are addressing major universal themes, while gleefully thumbing your sophisticated nose.

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Original item by David Mac

Oh dear! Silly me!! I must actually READ your comments Stefan! (I do - honest I do!!) I thought you were talking about the dog - you usually are! (Or so Gemma says!) xx

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

I think it is the sound of it, like 'galloping ponies'. Hence Lady Godiva? Just a thought. Who knows what was whispered through your brain as you slept? Another life? Another world? I'm glad you caught a remnant of the feeling; it is a delightful fantasy, just as irrelevant as dreams are.

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

think you missed the joke Ann! heres a clue.....Blair/Bush...or should that be t'uther way round? ta chuck

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

That's because, Greg, only my imaginary twin sister can do it! ;-)

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Love the rollicking feeling of this Ann, particularly "Your boots are made from catfish scales / There’s mink fur glued to your fingernails". Haven't a clue how you actually juggle peonies, tho!

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Stef,thank you so much for your sympathies, but I guess I should have added that this was 41 years ago. (Where does the time go? Argghh!) Since then we have 3 healthy kids and 6 grandchildren, so don't normally dwell too much on the one we lost. However, we never really forget, and I was inspired by the really good poem by Laura Taylor, posted on Friday. All I can say about the name is that we would have called her Sharon, but back in 1969 babies like mine were really whisked away never to be seen, so we were never given a chance to name her. Thanks again, my dear Stef. xxxx

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Original item by Lynn Dye

I love the last verse Larissa! Nice poem. And I love autumn as a time of year. xx

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Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

I woke up this morning and this was in my head - inexplicably!

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Lynn-very sorry to hear of your loss indeed-might I respectfully ask,what her name was? the last verse sadly true-my sympathies to you-Stef-xx

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Original item by Lynn Dye

Thanks, Francine and Ann.

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The Gift...
- Ha! beat yer to it ! :)

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Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

I had the very best of secondary modern education so I can appreciate the story. It feels good to make it against all the odds - although my making it was on a much tinier scale - just surviving it was great...
The last line seems to stick out like a sore thumb in the flow of things - but perhaps you planned it like that.

Comment is about The dim little girl from the Secondary Modern (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

Autumn is the best season of the year for parting. lol Spring will come soon and ...new love poems and romances will appear.

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Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Is it really so sad, my dear friends? The end is optimistic, isn't it?

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Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Good evening Larisa-oh what a sad poem! but well done nevertheless-Stef-xx(M-xx)

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Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Oh my dear friend, the pains of deception bite so deep, those wounds take so long to heal...
Best wishes, Dave

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Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

I totally love this, and I'm not the least sure why. I've read it many times, and seem to glean a bit more with each reading. It is imperative to follow your punctuation. I just seem to remember a picture of a girl, ankle-deep in snow, turning back to look at the viewer, her destiny a dark background, indistinct. 'confusion dieted the cure'; 'stuff the smile with a cork'; 'selfish scars' are only some of so many amazing ideas.

It does remind me of Dylan Thomas' work. I have read some of his poems out loud, to myself, and actually started to cry, for the sake of Beauty, I guess. No explanation ever articulated.

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Original item by Marianne Daniels

I like it very much also, Lucy. IMO, I think the 'comment' of the last stanza is unnecessary, and actually aborts the feeling you have evoked by limiting your idea. The 'baby's smile' covers all angles, leaving 'chaos' to be any universal environment.

Comment is about Mother - I'm not 100% happy with this. It needs work, comments/ideas welcome!! :) (blog)

Original item by MissLucy

Stalking and lies are somewhat related. I picked up the aggression and the need to falsify it which I labelled (not well) pragmatism and romanticism.

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Hi - The Gift - Oh I dunno - round ere it's Quetzalcoatl this & Quetzalcoatl that. I don't normally ever write poems about writing poems, but I thought I would make an exception here.

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Nosing towards America - joking apart, I dont think you or I or anyone else can help this - some poems just ARE working towards a punchline, but you have to hope to hold the reader's interest until the end - then WHAM!
Other poems, the crucial "feature" can be elsewhere & some are just lyrical all the way through with no punchline at all.
just my 2 cents xx

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

A super poem, Ann. I enjoyed sliding down line after line, 'tousled with bladder wrack' being my favourite among many fine images. IMO, the stanza about the real places might have used (would you believe it!) an adjective or two for the 'rooves and windows'. The final stanza is just superb, leaving the reader to colour in the dog (mine being dark chocolate like my sister's.)

Comment is about nosing towards america (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Fantastic poem. It should be required curriculum reading from ages 14 up; and posted in huge print inside a lighted gilded frame right beside the bar in all pubs. Talk about Poetry in Motion!

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Original item by David Mac

Wow, what a narrative. I like it, it's dry, caustic and pretty compelling. Plus, I appreciate the picture of Carey Mulligan.

Comment is about The dim little girl from the Secondary Modern (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

I dont know how you do it again - a poem that I read thinking "this is good, but it's not really for me" then the last stanza puts it in another realm !
do you do it on porpoise ?

Comment is about nosing towards america (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

sounds like a typical Friday night round ours :)

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Original item by David Mac

Hi Lynn - thanks for commenting on 'How To Mend A Broken Heart' :) Best Wishes, Dave

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Original item by Lynn Dye

Thanks guys! Sorry Stef, it was a golden lab! (Otherwise I would have obviously called the poem "Brown-nosing Towards America" wouldn't I! ;-) xx

Comment is about nosing towards america (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Hi Dave-I did a poem similar to this one,called'Laughatory'..great minds'n'all that jazz-ta-Stef.

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Original item by David Mac

Good evening lovely Larisa-boy! you continue to amaze me! this is excellent! you should be proud of yourself-I sincerely love this poem-please keep them coming,a pleasure to read-my love to you-Stefan-xx(M-xx)ps-Sharyn Owen was spot on when she commented that 'you have a gift for joyousness'-you certainly do!

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Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Snap! I,ve been to 'where gulls come to be lonely' as the great 'D.T.' described Milkwood as being i.e. coastal town-burying my grandsons-in sand! unfortunately,I had to dig them up again-lol! lovely poem Ann-would,nt dare ask you to include 'brown' at the beginning of the last line..hee hee! my day was spent in Benllech bay on the Island of Anglesey-boy I love that place! I found that giving the seagulls the 'death stare' keeps em off yer cornetto! lots of apostrophes! today!-best regards lovely Lady!! Stef!!xx!!(G-xx!!)

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Lovely poem, Dave, enjoyed this.
Lynn x

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Original item by Dave Dunn