This is lovely and juicy and seasonal, Rachel. My favourite lines are "the sun slant through the ruby", "storing bounty up for winter," and "spooning scented jelly." The words ruby and bounty are terrific. Suggested tiny tweaks ... I just wonder if you might consider another word or phrase for "negates"? Sweetens? You could also do away with the definite articles around "carping" and "thorns in fingers," if you wanted to, I reckon. PS The blackberries at the end of our garden are the biggest I've ever seen this year!

Comment is about Jelly Babies (blog)

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Thank you Andy for your comment, I did some changes as you recommended, Do you think it sounds better, now?

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

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Thanks you so much for the comments on my poem Woman of the Flowing Hair :)

Comment is about bernadette herbertson (poet profile)

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Thanks Cynthia for your comments on my poem Woman of the Flowing Hair Much appreciated

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

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Thanks Andy luv your work btw

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

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Good morning Rach-what a wonderfully mumsy poet you are-loved this as much as everyone of your poems-keep it up,who knows,one day you might get on Radio Lancs! up the Lancashire Lassies! (no,not that kind of up!)lorra love-Wildey-xx

Comment is about Jelly Babies (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

nice poem particularly like the last image of a recorder...

have you considered possibly removing the 1st stanza altogether as i love the blowing storm image and think it could start the piece off beauitfully.

excellent stuff however.. x

Comment is about Lines against Storms (blog)

vey nice, jean-lucy.. really enjoyed this - defo has a hymn / song like quality to this in places... it's possibly a little bit too long for my personal taste and the last stanza possibly should be split up, but i enjoyed this...x

Comment is about Death's Journey (blog)

Original item by jean lucy thompson

Hello again Jean-Lucy.another lovely poem,interlaced with wonderful romantic spirituality. What a lovely addition to these blogs you are!-many thanks-my very best regards-Stefan Wilde-xx

Comment is about Death's Journey (blog)

Original item by jean lucy thompson

Good evening Jean-Lucy.Clever title to a great poem! especially like the last line-keepin' me scarf on tonight! thanks-Stefan-xx

Comment is about Rouge (blog)

Original item by jean lucy thompson

I like this poem very much - a nice piece of evocation.DO you know the song? My young love said to me/"My mother won't mind...one of our haunting melodies but the words were from Padraig Colum.
Lovely creation yours.
Steve Smith

Comment is about he moves through the fair (blog)

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Hi Ann hope alls well with you..have left a comment on ..on being emily dickinson... lv bernadette xx

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

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Hi Ann what a brill poem..am i right in thinking it is about unfulfilled dreams tinged with sadness ...lv bernadette xx

Comment is about on being emily dickinson (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

really enjoyed reading this steve and as one who has difficulty with sleeping throughout the night I can relate to this poem well ! really good poem..best wishes bernadette

Comment is about Night Watch (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

Hi jean what a beautiful poem this is and so meaningful and thought provoking..bernadette x

Comment is about Woman of the Flowing Hair (blog)

Original item by jean lucy thompson

Hi Larisa. JotSpeak is a new online community for spoken (and written word). It provides a platform for writers & (non-musical) performers. Just sign up on the main page - it's all free and they are planning to add premium content so that writers can ear a few pennies from their work. BTW I love your work :)

Comment is about Larisa Rzhepishevska (poet profile)

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Thanks Anniepoo, that all seems so far away now...I have still had to do my own ironing...tsk! :)
Love and peas (sweet ones)
Rachel
x

Comment is about Ann Foxglove (poet profile)

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Cheers Greg,
I felt a bit like Miss World (only fatter and older) and could quite easily have cried a bit!(cringe)
It's fab though, hell of a confidence boost,great for days like today when I have just this minute received a rejection email from a publisher who got my name wrong!:)

Rachel
x

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

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Well done for winning the Wigan Slam, Rachel! Seems to me it's a bit like winning the FA Cup. Onwards and upwards!

Comment is about Rachel McGladdery (poet profile)

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Excuse me! Could you please tell me a bit more about JotSpeak.com? I am very much interested in it.
With warmest wishes,
Larisa

Comment is about Once in every while (blog)

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Thank you Larisa :)

Comment is about Once in every while (blog)

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Beautiful poem!

Comment is about Once in every while (blog)

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It was hugely complimentary in all ways. I think the poem is beautiful and written with great 'technical poetical' skill.

Comment is about Savage Goddess (blog)

Original item by Steven Dark

Terrific! Glad I also read the comments though.

Comment is about red X (blog)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Hi Cynthia. Re: comment on 'Savage Goddess' I never remove comments. Please try posting it again. I don't know why it's not there ... (:

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

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Hi Cynthia. I never remove comments. Please try posting it again. I don't know why it's not here ... (:

Comment is about Savage Goddess (blog)

Original item by Steven Dark

This put me in mind of my piece 'Typical Archetypal Archetypes'. Nice piece Bernadette. Love the profile pic :)

Comment is about ALPHABET LOVER (blog)

Original item by bernadette herbertson

Any particular reason why you removed my comment? Just so I'll be aware.

Comment is about Savage Goddess (blog)

Original item by Steven Dark

Cynthia, thank you for your comment on 'And Where is Your God?'. It is the first time the phrase 'consummate poetical skill' has been applied to my work and it is praise indeed which I truly appreciate. Thank you for that. I don't read as much as I should on WOL but I will make every effort and reciprocate. Wytchewoode

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

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You have so much to say that deserves to be heard, but, here, IMO, you get a bit wishy-washy by over-emphasis. A person constantly 'bonged on the bean' soon adapts and ceases to notice. I think it is like that with words too: a few, well-chosen and well-placed, have more effect than a barrage which becomes 'white word noise'. And, to be honest, I would shape this more for easier, punchier reading; it almost slips into treatise.

Comment is about death is not the end (blog)

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Strong, relevant, and expressing with consummate poetical skill the thought of many. It is really wonderful to have you back again.

Comment is about ... and where is your God? (blog)

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Fast and funny. I like the ambiguity of not quite knowing the significance of the photo used, whether you are 'ooh lala-ing' a child or an adult; or vice versa. It was the use of 'tonight'.

Comment is about ALPHABET LOVER (blog)

Original item by bernadette herbertson

An ode to a plastic petrol bottle or a soiled nappie or a netted seal washed on to our pristine shale, shell and sand! This is brilliant, so unorthodox of topic and lovely of execution that it creates the need to 'rethink' what rubbish actually is. Very clever.

I am aware that you may have used the term 'flotsam' as any article from a shipwreck, which association lends a peculiar potency to the beauty of your words since it could be, literally, a body.

Comment is about Flotsam (blog)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Hi Berni, yes, I do like the picture and it does compliment the poem - where do you find them? I could really do with adding some pics for my poems too! Have to agree with Stef about your new profile picture - what a lovely little boy! xxx

Stef - if I could scrub up that well I really would be laughing!!! xxx

Comment is about ALPHABET LOVER (blog)

Original item by bernadette herbertson

Many many thanks Wytchewoode,for comments on 'Verdant assemblage' they really do give encouragement-which is one of the main purposes after all methinks-best regards-Stef

Comment is about Steven Dark (poet profile)

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This,being the third poem of yours which I have read tonight,doubtless suggests your love of spiritual writing-I personally,find it quite moving and love the indefinite aspect of it-the almost mergence of sprituality and hints of mythology-please keep them coming-love them! thank you-Stefan-xx

Comment is about Woman of the Flowing Hair (blog)

Original item by jean lucy thompson

Good evening again Jean-enjoyed this poem-very spiritual indeed!-many thanks-Mr Wilde-xx

Comment is about Starman (blog)

Original item by jean lucy thompson

Good evening Jean-long time no read-so to speak(or type)love the overall image this poem presents-perhaps a pictorial image would have complimented it methinks-but beautiful regardless-very nice to have you back.Look forward to forthcoming work-thank you-Stefan Wilde-xx

Comment is about Fairyscape (blog)

Original item by jean lucy thompson

Good evening Bern'o'Herby!both poem and picture are beautiful(even if there is a hint of...you know what!)may I be a lazy git,Berny and say thanks for-ALL-my poems(because I didnt want you to miss my replies on older poems etc) that you have commented on-it really is very kind of you-keep your poems coming now girly!! and love that handsome little chap that has taken over your picture-thank heaven for the kids eh-yes indeed the image alongside the poem is ......pwoah!!! its not Lynn when she,s scrubbed up is it?lol! goodnight lovely Lady-and!-hope to hear from you and vice-versa-lorra love chuck-Stef-xxxx

Comment is about ALPHABET LOVER (blog)

Original item by bernadette herbertson

Good evening Lynn-SNAP! we have been prom walking with Skip,our friends Patterdale pooch-AND DOUBLE SNAP! we also had fish'n'chips! but oh the frustration of getting to the chandelers after it just closed-grrr! glad Benji had lovely day out as well-I bet that lad is such a spoiled bow-wow! as to the new poems....come on! get them on-ASAP! thanks for all kindnesses and comments Lynn-continue to all enjoy your well earned sanding week! best wishes to you and yours-Stef-xx(G-xx)

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Thank you so much Lynn for your positive comment . I did this one tonight and wasnt sure whether to put it on but thought it was worth a go..glad you like it .. xxx i love the picture and think it is so stunning and that it compliments the poem ..what do you think ?

Comment is about ALPHABET LOVER (blog)

Original item by bernadette herbertson

Yes comments noted tyvm :)

Comment is about Woman of the Flowing Hair (blog)

Original item by jean lucy thompson

Very much enjoyed this, Bernadette. It's clever and quirky, love it. xxx

Comment is about ALPHABET LOVER (blog)

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Hi Bernadette, thank you for kind comments on the 17 1/2 sequels. Nice to hear from you again, hope you are well. Love Lynn xx

Comment is about bernadette herbertson (poet profile)

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Thanks Issi, appreciated.

Cheers too Cynf, stick it in as you please. love is, afterall, complicatedly simple.

Comment is about Court out (blog)

Original item by Christopher Dawson

Love these, Ms Millar. It's great to read a tight fast zingy new voice! It would be easier to comment if these three were blogged separately. I will get back to your previous post later; I'm pressed for time.

Comment is about New Poetry (blog)

Original item by Liz Millar

Some deep thoughts here, with some very imaginative expressions. It has an essence of beauty captured in words. Perhaps you could condense a bit and keep this vitality still intact. 'to grieve' - 'to mourn' I can understand the spelling compulsion to link it to 'grave'.

Comment is about Woman of the Flowing Hair (blog)

Original item by jean lucy thompson

This has much imaginative charm, particular and elusive by turn. The listing technique of natural visuals sets a clear scenario for the thoughts to follow. It's hard to place the meaning of 'Heaven'(which is not a bad thing) as to whether it's an emotional state or 'a religious idea'. In short, whether or not, you're dead. Such concrete images as 'Stained colour at my feet', 'Crosses unbalanced' are two of many lovely phrases. Check spelling of 'rain-washed' and 'spiral' Probably just typos. One more point: I'd be inclined to leave out punctuation altogether; leave the reader to sort you out. I did not find that which is there all that helpful to understanding, and actually bumpy interruptives. ALL, in my opinion, of course.

Comment is about Starman (blog)

Original item by jean lucy thompson

Gooooooooooooood morning Herbygirl! ta chuck for comments and posting on my profile-hope you are not overdoing things generally-as to my fine figure poet image...that was taken when I was twenty one...hee hee! hope very much to see you on blogs soon-indeed,they are quite busy-and the poetry is absolutely amazing for sure! thanks love-my best regards to you and yours-Stefan-xx

Comment is about bernadette herbertson (poet profile)

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Good morning Mr and Mrs boat painters(stick a brush in Benji,s paw as well,don,t forget! and get the office girls sequels on the go-in between undercoat and gloss-lol!-thanks to you Lynn as always-Stef-xx(Benji-xx)

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