I'm not a big fan of poems that repeat the same words such as here Forget You.
However, when I ignore the repetitions, the words are really very pleasing and applicable. I like your work Georgina.

Comment is about All Lies. (blog)

Hi Dave, thank you for your comments on "Being a Veggie". It's ages since I tried soya beans, and yes, they didn't do much good for me neither! I see that Cynthia thinks you should add a verse from your own perspective, and we could make it a WOL community effort. Sounds good to me, ball in your court maybe? Thanks Dave, Warm regards, Lynn

Comment is about Dave Dunn (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Dunn

Ann write what you want to write. To hell with who reads it.

Comment is about poem for daljit (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Enjoyed this very much, Dave, especially friends on line being like petals in the wind.
Warmest Wishes, Lynn x

Comment is about Like Petals In The Wind (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

Hi Cynthia, thank you for your comments on "Being a Veggie". When I wrote it I kept adding bits, to make all the points I wanted to, and then ended up wondering if it was too long! I agree it would be good to open it for discussion though, with others adding their twopennorth. Thanks again Cynthia. x

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi - "the guy with all the answers" - Thanks for the v kind comments. This is an amalgam of 2 lucid dreams I had (my previous poem was the first) - although I had been trying for years, they came out of the blue. I've only ever had 5 or 6 in total. I wrote them all down, but I dont think the others have much poetic potential. all the best. B

Comment is about bernadette herbertson (poet profile)

Original item by bernadette herbertson

Thank you, dear Bernadette!

Comment is about Feelings Have No Age (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

This is great, Thomas. The vernacular style is consistent, rough, earthy and pungent, with the titillating insertions of allusions from 'educated society'; the ploughman philosopher quite encapsulated. There are many superb images: 'bleak greed and deep dark' being only one.

Comment is about To Live In The Light (blog)

Original item by Tom

Yes another brilliant one So sad - so real

Comment is about The Sea At Night Does Not Rest (blog)

Original item by Tom

I really like this Thomas; must read more :)

Comment is about To Live In The Light (blog)

Original item by Tom

Hi Greg I thought you had disappeared! Glad you like Chemo. It's about my father-in-law. He is a bit of a character. I showed him the poem yesterday and said I'd make him famous by putting it on the net. I'll have to get it taken somewhere so that he can have a properly printed copy. I'll look at your new posting when I get a minute to read it properly.

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

Original item by Greg Freeman

very nice poem larisa lv bernadette x

Comment is about Feelings Have No Age (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

This is terrific, a journey of searching and finding within a tight, well-constructed work. Outstanding, IMO, is 'Drag yourself to imagination' among others. I had not yet joined WOL when you wrote this. Some of your later stuff seems different somehow.

Comment is about Hidden World Unknown (blog)

Punchy, sincere and personal. One of the 'worths' of poetry is true emotional contact with others; this succeeds well.

Comment is about Moment of craziness (blog)

Very innovative way of expressing the search for one's personal identity. It's a tried and true metaphor that never loses its attraction for fresh writers.

Comment is about Mirror on the wall (blog)

Francine is right, this does have lovely visual and emotional images plus real drama of 'daring me not to leave'. The last line is a masterful summation of the poem's seduction.

Comment is about Moments By the Sea (blog)

Great opening line: The poem by which now I live' and also 'With him I breathe differently'; 'while we are falling upward'. The poem does have a sincere tone of romantic lamentation, as Ann says.

Comment is about A Journey Through Me (blog)

This is a good social comment with some fine advice. I think the last line probably should be: 'save yourself from self-destruction'.

Comment is about Junk-Pot-Lady (blog)

This 'tumbling words' style is very nerve-catching, definitely setting a pervasive mood. Perhaps no punctuation would be better than only some, since punctuation steers ideas, and I'm not sure these flashes of thought should be guided. I think you have a great skill with 'word music' throughout all your lines.
If you are the least interested, you might check out 'Girl in a Lake' which I posted some time back (2009, but close to the end of the year.)

Comment is about Sighs of Miles (blog)

Perhaps I get a bit mixed in the syntax, but the overall meaning is dynamic with some dramatic imagery in the general metaphor. Excellent are 'Shielding bleeding ink' and 'each speaking sheet's corner'. I love the essence of an 'eeee' scream in it. The poem certainly requires more than one reading. Like Andy, I find the final line 'For every part of me is a recorder' is a powerful conclusion. This poem should have much more shared response.

Comment is about Lines against Storms (blog)

Here's mine from the workshop, all based on a walk through Wigan that morning:

Walking through Whelley
He spies through a window, quick
Elvis stares back from plates

Sunday morning, here
Glass and kebabs in gutters
Stepping over blood

The Kittywake plumes
Wave at a lone fisherman
Bring cider to lips

Comment is about Hotku (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

Now that is an interesting point, Dave. This would work well as a WOL 'community' effort. Add a verse from your perspective - great idea. Any takers? Move it to Discussions? Well done, Lynn. BTW, that picture is fab.

Comment is about Being a Veggie (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Daljit is a wise man, Ann. I think a poem is like a piece of wood that you wittle away at. The trick is knowing when it's finished, and when to stop. Meanwhile I look forward to a poem about the frogs!

Comment is about poem for daljit (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Went on a poetry writing course last week. Have become poetically paralysed! But the course was FAB! There were lots of tiny baby frogs everywhere!

Comment is about poem for daljit (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

glad you like the two lighthouse pieces, cynthia... more story based certainly than i have done before, but that's probably because they were basicially true (you know the person who fell in the bog!).

thanks again x

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

top stuff, isobel again. this is totally different from your other piece in pace and tone. i think i prefer this one as i am in a love poem mood (though i love the other one) more at the moment and i like the last stanza in particular xx

Comment is about Finding Words (blog)

Original item by Isobel

enjoyed this isobel.. excellent stuff as always.. interested to see you wrote this quickly (I'm currently in that blank phase at the moment) good to see last thursday at the book launch - has being a while hasn't it? x

Comment is about Flashing Blue Lights (blog)

Original item by Isobel

nice stuff Georgina.

one minor thing for to perhaps consider..

on the bit you write..

Forget you to their smiles and their daily crisis,

forget you as another face in the crowd,

I think you may want to put a full stop at the end of 'Forget you to their smiles and their daily crisis' as it seems to stop for a second when i was reading this back.

top stuff thou.. enjoyed this a lot

Comment is about All Lies. (blog)

good stuff, steven. particularly like the second one, but all are good. how did you find writing them? i did a ton of them years back - drove me almost mental! lol

Comment is about Hotku (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

Hi - thanks for the comments - I'll post another one of the "lucid dreaming" ones. B

Comment is about jean lucy thompson (poet profile)

Original item by jean lucy thompson

I can relate to the feeling in this Isobel...
I like the 'fast write' spontaneity of it.
The spelling can be either way, and I like the way you spelled it (originally) as it gives the allusion to more than one interpretation - which is definitely your style ; )

Comment is about Flashing Blue Lights (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Yes it was a fast write cynthia - I get very rare flashes like that after weeks of a dry spell. Ball was a definite spelling mistake but I love your interpretation and being balled out sounds like a lorra fun! x

Comment is about Flashing Blue Lights (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Hehe - I am glad to see such positive comments Larisa - I knew it would go down well:)

Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about I Learn And Study English (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Hi Lyn - the veggie diet is a good one on the whole, I did find out the hard way that soya beans have it in for my digestive tract though, so I allow them to linger in the fields now - and adopted a mainly fish alternative. Sadly they don't yet offer Kentucky fried cod, so some chicken slips down too now and then...

I've always found a nut roast every bit as mouth watering as any joint, or a nice aubergine bake, yummy :)

Personally I could add a few stanzas to the tale - the topic is under exposed in general, lol.

Best wishes, Dave

Comment is about Being a Veggie (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

This is good, Lynn, with an excellent social point to make. I did read through, but I do think it could easily be shorter, maybe even by three stanzas. IMO, a point well made doesn't have to be whipped almost to overkill.

Comment is about Being a Veggie (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Another good one, Isobel. It feels like a 'fast write', but is very entertaining and pushes a lot of social buttons. Not sure whether to laugh or cry at the 'message' therein, since the 'driver' is not likely to be the only 'dark smudge on an asphalt road'. Too bad the copper wasn't a woman, or maybe the copper was....! BTW, is 'ball out' a deliberate ploy for making fun of masculinity, instead of 'bawl out'?

Comment is about Flashing Blue Lights (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Thank you for your comment, Louise! I feel so bad that at launch party I didn't have time to speak with all that lovely people. ... well, I hope - next time. X

Comment is about Louise Fazackerley (poet profile)

Original item by Louise Fazackerley

Oh, you are such a lovely. I will, of course carry on beating myself up for it, it's as natural as breathing, BUT, me and one of my older sisters last night, and me and my younger sister earlier today spoke about this exact thing. You can't put a true value on big families can you, teaches you stuff you don't know you've learnt till you need it.
Thanks Isobel
xxx

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Good evening Wych-thanks for the helping of others on this-will certainly run through it all at later date-many thanks for your time and effort-Stef.

Comment is about JotSpeak.com (blog)

Original item by Steven Dark

I really liked this Cynthia; poor leaf clinging on there the last bastion of summer and yes so pleased it found happiness in the end :)

Comment is about the little leaf (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Ha - I've obviously set myself up for an awful lot of backchat here...
I think you should write a poem called 'Dashing Red Lights' Dave - and you give a whole new meaning to the expression 'putting your foot down'...

Comment is about Flashing Blue Lights (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Love it. But next time there are any comments from the back seat on my driving it'll get a mention (-;

Comment is about Flashing Blue Lights (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Great. The others have said it all. It left me feeling that writing the poem was a little like beachcombing after the storm - picking up the bits and pieces and trying to tell their story.

Comment is about Finding Words (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Been thinking about Jelly Babies and the comment you left on my profile. I don't think we should beat ourselves up too much about the things we don't do. Our gift to them is their siblings. That's how they learn to share, stand up for themselves, understand and accept they are not the centre of the universe - great lessons for later life - I don't think they need jam on it... xx

Comment is about Rachel McGladdery (poet profile)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Well actually Banksy, I think statistics would beg to differ...
Ha ha - this is based on a true story but I only drive like that when I'm lost - as I was on this particular night your honour...

Comment is about Flashing Blue Lights (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Hi Cynthia - thanks for comment on my Emily Dickinson poem. I am very intrigued by the article you mention. Is there any way I can get hold of it? I have only recently discovered her and she is my new obsession! xx

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

yeah - wimmin drivers eh ??
gotta love em ;)

Comment is about Flashing Blue Lights (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Many thanks Alain for your comments on Love is Blind I wrote it this mornin after a dream still fresh in my mind

Comment is about To the Hurricane - a tribute to Alex Higgins 1949-2010 (blog)

Original item by Alain English

Que c'est vrai...
Tu exprimes le sentiment d'amour et de rompre très bien dans ce poème, Isobel.

J'aime ces images:
'Acid pear drops melting on the tongue
Icicles to stone
Calcium deposit'

Et cette dernière strophe est magnifique !
'Warm lips cool
Paint themselves
In foreign shades
Seal themselves with fear
And the tide rushing out
Leaves a desolate shore'


Bravo ! Tu sais toujours trouver les mots ; )
xxx

Comment is about Finding Words (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Thanks for your comment Alain - am delighted that you liked my poem. I keep waiting for you to bring some of your gigs up North - be doing! x

Comment is about Alain English (poet profile)

Original item by Alain English