Very good - you nail the pain of being in love and the agony of breakup very, very well. Good stanza at the end with some great metaphor and juxtaposition.

Comment is about Finding Words (blog)

Original item by Isobel

This is Just breathtakingly superb. I'm not at all surprised that Cynthia is spurred on intellectually... Wonderful, wonderful imagery...

Well done a superb poem !


Augusta xx

Comment is about An Indulgence (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Thank you my dear friends.

Comment is about I Learn And Study English (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Hi,Cynthia! I am glad to meet you here in Write Out Loud, enjoyed reading your poems and happy to know that you enjoyed reading my poem "I Learn And Study English". Your comment on this poem really inspires me and gives inspiration to write more and better. It is much appreciated and highly valued.
With warmest wishes,
Larisa

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Aww, thanks Larisa! xx

Comment is about Being a Veggie (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

This is excellant Isobel 'Nervous' and 'Isobel' are not easy bedfellows ...

...or are they.

.. I wonder???

Once again this is truely a superb poem

I like it very much.

It reads better ever time .

Augusta xx

Comment is about Finding Words (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Just brilliant, Larisa, made me laugh so much, and it is so clever too -
well done xx

Comment is about I Learn And Study English (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

The poem is purposefully evocative and endeavours to cross the state of being mentally ‘lost’ and ‘abandoned’ and also sewing to that the sense of feeling to that part of a dream that cannot be quite brought to mind in the morning but is remembered in brief coloured moments that tantalise and flash .past your ‘minds eye’ for the briefest of moments, never to return.

Cynthia - thank you for your critique You are so right….

I edit and edit and edit again and whilst I encourage all to do this…

I must sometimes get it down and out to be critiqued or it would be put away and never see the light of day, so many of my poems sleep in closed files neatly marked ‘Works in Progress’.

Once again many thanks
Augusta xx.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi Larisa, thank you so much for your kind comments on "Being a Veggie". All Best Wishes, Love, Lynn xx

Comment is about Larisa Rzhepishevska (poet profile)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

This is a fine poem, Ann, and, to my understanding, quite biographically accurate. Only last month I read a superb essay about Ms Dickinson which put a strange new slant on her 'manipulative powers', part of which was her passion for 'securing away her work', a kind of 'hide and seek' mentality that she exercised with great 'sexual' skill to be the dominant member of her family and close circle of acquaintances.

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Original item by Ann Foxglove

Once again, a super poem, wonderfully 'professional' in the purest sense of inventive images and the love of language to develop them. I think your work is outstanding. I have no problem with 'concrete line pictures'; it's very mod and effective.

For the life of me, I don't know why other readers haven't commented. I'm glad Andy has clued in.

Comment is about barbed (blog)

Original item by owen calvert

Thank you Cynthia - you always make me feel better about stuff I post - am always so nervous about it. I originally wrote it without hyphens but got all those squiggly lines telling me it was wrong - they only disappeared when I put hyphens in - I should have gone with my instincts - American spell checkers - who needs them when they've got a Cynthia? xx

Comment is about Finding Words (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Your poetry is a spur to me, always prodding my intellectual capacities to broader horizons.

Comment is about An Indulgence (blog)

Original item by Marianne Daniels

Fantastic! Like Stefan, I want to come back to this many times just to enjoy its humour and TRUTH. Very, very clever.

Comment is about I Learn And Study English (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

You are so good, so good. This poem is superb in every way, pure beauty. Your metaphors are splendidly original and apt.

Not sure where the hyphens in those pronouns come from; I'd check a grammar book. I find them a bit distracting.

Comment is about Finding Words (blog)

Original item by Isobel

Good Morning Jean Lucy,
I am so pleased that my words struck a chord with you.

I have read your profile with interest and great incredulity... having looked at your profile pic I am very much of the opinion that you have an oil painting in the attic. I am going for a bath in asses milk as soon as I have finished writing.
Once more so many thanks for reading and commenting.

Augusta xx

Comment is about jean lucy thompson (poet profile)

Original item by jean lucy thompson

HAHA!!! brilliant! very clever-and very very very funny!! I,ll read this again-when I need to laugh-many thanks funny Girl-Stefan(mentleman not gentleman)xx(M-xx)

Comment is about I Learn And Study English (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Thank You so much Andy for your enthusiastic comments the plantif reprise at the end of the stanza is to replicate the echo of the plea carrying over the Ocean.

once more many thanks for your encouragement it is very much appreciated.

Augusta xx

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

Lovely lovely airy poem-keep them coming! best regards-Stef-xx

Comment is about Summerland (blog)

Original item by jean lucy thompson

Hi jean Lucy. Re artist block - try local life drawing classes. I started like that - went to life drawing classes and found it inspirational ( though now i don't go there). Best of luck! Thanx for reading my poems. X

Comment is about jean lucy thompson (poet profile)

Original item by jean lucy thompson

Good morning Jean-Lucy.Is this a 'playing the field' poem or the script for the newly voted BT advert? lol!-either way it is beautiful! many thanks-Stefan-xx

Comment is about Love is Blind (blog)

Original item by jean lucy thompson

Thanx 4 comment on "Beauty in boots" :-). I know it's unpolished - I've written it the way it came :-) just was in the mood for a bit of writing after the event. X

Comment is about Andy N (poet profile)

Original item by Andy N

good stuff, phil.. enjoyed this

Comment is about Raise the Barrier (blog)

Original item by Phil Golding

agree with cynthia.. she covers pretty well what i was going to say, but this is quality stuff, bud.. good to see you are still writing - keep em coming!

Comment is about Picnic In The Dark. (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

Hi, Lynn! Very nice and interesting poem. Enjoyed reading it. You are really too polite and sweet. With warmest wishes, Larisa

Comment is about Being a Veggie (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Hi, dear Jean Lucy! Thank you very much for your comment on my poem "I Would Come Back". With warmest wishes, Larisa

Comment is about jean lucy thompson (poet profile)

Original item by jean lucy thompson

Thank you so much my dears.

Comment is about I WOULD COME BACK (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

..Wahay!!!! You bloomin got it! yes, it's absolutely the massaging away of guilt...nice to know it's been read and found agreeable at different levels though! (Must be a mum of 4 thing ;) )

Rach
xxx

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Hi Berny-just popped on to say hi-hope you and the cutey pie on pik are keeping ok-catch you soon-Stef-xx

Comment is about bernadette herbertson (poet profile)

Original item by bernadette herbertson

But let me not compare thee,with Pauls secretary!! cheers oh jammer of greengage-lorra luv,luv! Steffers-xx(B-xx)

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Great :) That pretty much happened to me once only I was lucky the man spoke and we formed a beautiful friendship only he sadly didnt wear a feather just the hat :)

Comment is about Proud as a Peacock (blog)

Original item by Dorinda MacDowell

Nice poem Ann can relate I sometimes feel I might be invisible or a ghost even :)

Comment is about no matter (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Points noted ie the Starman poem Much appreciated - the 'heaven' is purely emotional btw

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Nice one Larisa :)

Comment is about I WOULD COME BACK (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

But on the other hand Lynn-I hope you are not the kind of Lady who tucks her skirt in her drawers-when shes donkey-stoning the front door step-OH! I mean to say!! all that cellulite-urgh! Mr SW-xx(B-xx)

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Good evening Jean-Lucy-was your first 11-18 posting in blank verse? ha! dont worry-you will get the hang of it-as the Bishop said to....no,better not!-thanks Jean-Stef-xx

Comment is about jean lucy thompson (poet profile)

Original item by jean lucy thompson

Lol Stef, I don't want to smack all carnivores' legs, only the one that wouldn't let me enjoy my eggs! Yes, everyone to their own, that was my point really. Paul's secretart (whoops freudian slip there??) well, she might eat quorn sausages like me!! ;-) xx

Comment is about Being a Veggie (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

er.....scuse me girly! where did you get 'extolling' from? if you are dead posh..our friendship could be called into question! hee...hee..ah! yes coincidence re prom walking...forgot to tell you-it was in a very posh seaside location..might be a little too posh-even for you-it was in a very classy place called B******OL-dont want to give too much away-otherwise all the riff-raff will be here in flat capped droves-ferrets and all.The 'peace and tranquility' garden had a bronze statue in it-supposedly of Les Dawson-ha! looked more like Tessie'o'Shea! he worked a lot in Blackpool eh Lynn.....DOH!-Stef-xx(B-xx)

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Good evening Phil.Good poem!any suggestions(in poetry or otherwise) of working towards a better society,will do for me-best regards Phil-Stefan.

Comment is about Raise the Barrier (blog)

Original item by Phil Golding

Ditto Lynns comments Odessa girl! hope you are well dear-thank you-Stefan-xx(McCoy-xx)

Comment is about I WOULD COME BACK (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Good evening Lynn.You tell em chuck! everyone to their own tastes of course.It really would be nice to be able to defer from eating meat(as I do...ouch! my legs-lol!)but breaking old habits can be so hard.I think the best meat eaters can do-is do so,but as with-anything-in moderation? Different angle to ponder on here Lynn-wonder if Pauls secretary is a veggie-or meat eater? oh you are awful Mr Wilde! cheers greengage girl-Stefano-xx(B...sausages!-xx)

Comment is about Being a Veggie (blog)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Lovely poem, Larisa, enjoyed it! The picture is lovely too. Love, Lynn xx

Comment is about I WOULD COME BACK (blog)

Original item by Larisa Rzhepishevska

Good evening Dave.A lot of work gone into this(personal) poem-lots of great heartfelt lines.thanks matey-Stefan.

Comment is about Wishing Well (blog)

Original item by Dave Dunn

Good evening to you Greg.I think your comment on my milarkey poem'Word for lost' is the first comment that I have had from you(?)nevertheless it shall be accepted with great gratitude-very kind of you Greg-hope you are well-thanks-Stefan.

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Tee hee - I like this one a lot. Underlining it is the knowledge that for a big chunk of the time you are probably not 'that kind of mother'... Doing something good like baking a cake or making jam massages the guilt away n'est-ce pas? One I can identify with...and beautifully expressed as ever. x

Comment is about Jelly Babies (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

I knew it! I'm an IDIOT.
- not at all !!
but it WAS a gift - if you give a kid matches... :)

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thanks Greg, I have, on your suggestion tried doing what you said and liked the result lots...though I think I'll stick with negates (although I love the idea of sweetness tying in with the jammy theme)just because I like the shape of it in my mouth when I read it for some reason, the definite articles are definitely better gone!
Cheers
Rach
x

Comment is about Greg Freeman (poet profile)

Original item by Greg Freeman

Thanks Cynthia, I really appreciated the comment, I did mess around with spacing more than usual this time, I had put it on facebook and looking at it, there were loads of line spacings that just didn't make sense...so I changed them before putting them on here, I need to watch that I think.
Rachel
x

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Thanks for the comment on Jelly Babies :)
Bramble jelly is dead easy, the recipe is pimps, just berries (I used about 3 lbs)normal sugar and the juice of 2 lemons, it did involve some yakky straining through a sieve though to get rid of pips and the odd caterpillar :)

Comment is about Lynn Dye (poet profile)

Original item by Lynn Dye

Love this poem, Rachel. Just been making greengage jam from my garden, but have to admit eyeing up the berries in local fields while dog walking! Good one x

Comment is about Jelly Babies (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery