lovely... a lovely one to make you smile.. sleepl sloes is wonderful in particular.. x

Comment is about Lucy (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

blimely, m8.. this is powerful stuff.. loved it - nothing else i can add (a rariety for me).

Comment is about Becoming Real (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

I agree with Jo here. I could have never had the guts to share this on here. You're a brave man m8 in particular if this is the truth as it certainly appears like it is.

The circular affects over my own cloak of shame brings it to a nice conclusion. Perhaps for just changing the pace on the first 'my own cloak of shame' i would remove the 'own' just to see if that changes it round a bit and leaves the second one with even more impact.

keep em coming although - enjoyed this.

Comment is about Dysphoria (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

if you hadn't put the painting in there, kathyn - i would quizzed you over the use of mono lake as it would have being a curious way off finishing the poem.

Not sure otherwise, if you need to put broods on a separate line as I think it flows better being put with the previous line.

Enjoyed it otherwise - keep em coming! x

Comment is about A window in. (blog)

Lovely Rach. xx

Comment is about Lucy (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Good poem Steven, and the one you did before this one, 'Cracks'. They feel quite raw. Jo

Comment is about Dysphoria (blog)

Original item by Steven Kenny

Thank you Cynthia :)

Isobel, thank you for your comments, yes obviously poetry is born from the poet's experiences and ideologies and thus reflect his/her culture whether conservative or liberal it will have some indication in the poem...
I agree with you, listening to french people speak makes me melt! I am learning the language and am constantly blown away by it. Finally, a recording of my voice reading the poem will be posted by Paul soon.
thanks again to both of you for showing interest.

Warmly
Fatima

Comment is about Unsuited by Fred Holland translated by Fatima Al Matar (blog)

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You have an interesting style Beulah. It is fascinating the way you end a sentence/meaning with a word that then starts off another one - disconnected but connected thought. That perhaps represents how you perceive on line relationships. You are right in some ways to maintain a guard or alternatively develop a thicker skin. People can disappoint you. You think they are one thing and then find they are something else - just as you yourself probably disappoint others. It is an odd, artificial world. It can bring a lot of comfort in lonely times though. I would recommend getting out onto the performance scene if you can - that turns cyber friends into real people - so lovely to be able to do that.

Comment is about no connecting(for Janet and all loud writers whom I love...without connection) (blog)

Original item by Beulah

What a beautiful style you have! Taking Down The Tree House is especially evocative.

Comment is about Colin Watts (poet profile)

Original item by Colin Watts

Well I'm glad to see you back and posting! I might chance the May one. It should be warm by then. I could take a sleeping bag and a cardboard box and camp out in the hope of getting a spot on the open mic. I might also bring a bag of peanuts to chuck at the compere...

Comment is about Rachel McGladdery (poet profile)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

Gosh Lisa this is powerful and goes deep. If it is autobiographical, as I suspect it is, it must have cost a lot to put it down in writing and share it. It is striking that it is posted so close to Rachel McGladdery's Lucy which is all about the loving parenting we should all have a right to expect. The two works are like light and dark - the two sides of parenting.

I hope you can work through the issues. A dear friend had a father like yours and couldn't - a long and sad story - but it sounds like you are doing better at coming to terms with it than he did

Comment is about My Father's Arm (blog)

Original item by Lisa Milligan

Wocha mean "whimsy"? I put a lot of thought into this! It comes form my training - I was indentured.
Thanks for the post - really liked your most recent blog entry. I think I commented on its page.

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Another enjoyable bit of whimsy and good observation John. I finally ended up with a dentist I liked, but Letitia had to go back to Spain. Such a pity.

Comment is about A Trip to the Dentist (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

This poem, like some of your others, has a hint of the paranoid about it.

Comment is about no connecting(for Janet and all loud writers whom I love...without connection) (blog)

Original item by Beulah

A warming read - beautifully put.

Comment is about Lucy (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

You should try holding them by the testicles (dentists, that is) - it encourages mutual consideration.

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Thanks Greg.
It certainly made for some of the easier rhymes!

Comment is about A Trip to the Dentist (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

I don't think I've ever met a dentist I have warmed to. They seem to be rather a smug, superior bunch. Perhaps that is because they are used to no-one being able to give it back...
An amusing observation, John.

Comment is about A Trip to the Dentist (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

I love this - it is so life affirming! I can so identify with it. Mine has seen 6 spring times (I love that expression) and is normally followed by one of 10. That first snuggle is divine and yes they do seek out the warmest most intimate areas - humans at their most pack like. It's when arguments occur over ownership of duvet that it all gets a bit fraught...

Comment is about Lucy (blog)

Original item by Rachel McGladdery

This is so true, John! They have us in their power. It really made me laugh

Comment is about A Trip to the Dentist (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

I say A slam for all. Slam!

Comment is about no connecting(for Janet and all loud writers whom I love...without connection) (blog)

Original item by Beulah

*******BUTTONS EASTER EGG PRIZE GIVING *******
As stated in the small print, I bought an egg and ate it for you. This is my account of eating it!

Ok , if you're sitting comfortably, we'll begin...
First I ran my fingernail around the rim of the box flap, I slowly prised up the lid and slid my hand in to grab hold of the plastic inner....the heat from my fingertips misted it a little...I opened up the plastic to reveal an egg, wrapped in foil, I slowly raised it to my nose to get a whiff of the aroma, caressed the foil and then found the overlap, I teased the foil from the chocolate underneath, revealing it bit by bit, then I could contain myself no longer, pummelled it, kneaded it with frenzied hands till finally..it broke , not into two neat halves but into fragments, each one as chocolatey as the next...then I ate it all...with 2 cups of tea....I gave the buttons away to the kids who were looking at me plaintively as it was corned beef hash for tea and they were sorely disappointed.
That was your Easter Egg, hope you enjoyed it as much as me... I feel thoroughly sick. :)

Comment is about Tommy Carroll (poet profile)

Original item by Tommy Carroll

Hi Isobel,Where have I been???? I've been to hell in a hand basket...the brink...the dizzy limit...well ok then I've been a bit depressed lol, bouncing slowly back now. I am reading at another couple of publication launch events at That Preston one on April 20th and one May 25th if you fancy chancing it....
x

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

We haven't got grandkids yet Dave, but I can see the relief our parents when it's time to take our kids home.
Like Ray says, that's cool -the shame of the finishing line. Spot on!

Comment is about Family weekend (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Now the buzzing has stopped
I'm horny for your flesh, your zest
You are my savious, I see
your face in my mirror
light of my life

Comment is about Get Creative! (article)

The pen can be wielded liken to a sword Cynthia but I say again this poem carries no real message or malice, instead of which it carries only that of the mischievous creativity that lurks somewhere within my inner most depths..

The fantasy is a dream like sequel, surreal sexual escapism all built around the image of the beautiful young lady sat upon the red leather Chesterfield.

I agree with you entirely that the forum of WOL is not for anything other than poetry prose and the all things similar.. My poems are usually nothing more than spiralling dreamscapes and pure fantasy bonded to a strong instinctive sexual backdrop. I am happy to paint all of my words in strong bright colours and am constantly experimenting with both the visual aspects of verse as well as the poetic construction of the written..

Hey Ho, Cynthia thank you for most encouraging comments once again, the dinner bells fast approach, that’s me back to my ‘Saddle of Lamb’…and a glug or three.

Augusta xx.

Comment is about Cynthia Buell Thomas (poet profile)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

The second verse is 'quotable', the highest praise I can give. I'll never forget the first time someone said that to me.

Comment is about Becoming Real (blog)

Original item by Kealan Coady

to the tune of darkly aging noire
the lamp danced shadows to the wall
as busy as the decor of a welsh woman's flat

all ornament and pottery and floral thing and tat
in all its ugly gordiness the principle still holds
we attach to things precious life like pirates horde gold
when that life is just the memories in the objects that we kept
when we grow old and our footsteps are echoes in the hall
the lamp dances shadows to the wall
that show that time goes by

Comment is about Get Creative! (article)

Stefan, (and Win) you are so right, of course. 'What is poverty?' is likely the biggest question in the world because it transcends just the physical, and must be applied also to the mental, emotional, social and spiritual realms. This poem tried only to use some 'specific' situations to indicate the 'general' in our privileged Western society. I am not the least surprised by your reaction; it was mine too, because I am a global citizen. I am puzzled by the official definition of the 'poverty line' in the UK.

I do have the answering companion piece called 'Joy Is'.

Comment is about Poverty Is (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

hello Winston
Yes, thanks for the Ronaldo poem - I don't think I caught it first time round.
The joke went (you've probably heard it) that Real wanted their £80m back when they heard that you could get big girl's blouses in Primark for £2.99.

Comment is about Winston Plowes (poet profile)

Original item by Winston Plowes

I thought this were great, especially "this living photo-album" and "the inner shame of the finishing line". I'm just off on a family camping holiday and even now I'm holding on to the vision of that finishing line.

Comment is about Family weekend (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

I love this one Dave. It sounds like everyday life in my house - except more often than not the dishwsher goes unstacked and the cup would rather spit at me.I won't comment on the toilet roll overly or it could spiral into another poem. Suffice to say that having lots of females in the house doesn't help.

The poem has a lightness of hand and something in it that anyone could identify with. Love the personification of the cup x

Comment is about Family weekend (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

I take my mum home today!

Comment is about Family weekend (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

Thank you for your kind comments, much appreciated. Still so new to putting my stuff out there, I anxiously await my babies' acceptance in the wide world!

Comment is about Dave Bradley (poet profile)

Original item by Dave Bradley

German Philospher, I think, therefore I am ;-)
..TC XX

Comment is about Beulah (poet profile)

Original item by Beulah

Made me smile! ;-)

Comment is about Family weekend (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

I enjoyed this Alison - the structure reflects the reflective mood and the nature of the perplexity. What is life without hope? Very well written.

Comment is about Hope (blog)

Original item by Alison Smiles

Alison... fab this one. A strong rhyming scheme but not forced. Great Win :-)

Comment is about Hope (blog)

Original item by Alison Smiles

Hi John, Thought you might like this. It's obviously from a while back -

Will Ronaldo?

Will eighty million pounds
Be too much for an arrogant kid?

Or will Ronaldo be crowned
As top scorer at Real Madrid?

Or will his talents be found
To be lacking and they will get rid?

And will Ronaldo be bound
To return to us, heaven forbid?

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey

Good Evening Isobel

Whilst I am the first to agree Isobel, many a fine and upstanding man of the cloth exists within the main body of the churches establishment, but they are far and few between. The farcicality of chastity for life , in my view the catalyst for this plague of violation and abuse, is main cause for this most unpalatable tainted ministry, in my view the evidence is over whelming.

Take the dishonesties and hypocrisy of our fine upstanding political representatives in parliament. If an honest man or woman be there let them be named, for the life of me I can not identify them.

This hypocrisy and theft of children’s innocence together with relentless avarice and manipulation of guilt has been aside the poor and ignorant for centuries and neither is it localised to the UK. This elitist poison has been with us world wide since we first vacated the caves and formed tribal communities.

‘A House Called Heaven’

My poem, however, does not really highlight the extent of my own views and feelings it is a simply a poem addressing a fantasy brothel called ‘Heaven’ and the type of cliental that would be attracted by such a heavenly establishment..

Augusta xx

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

Wow.
This makes my rather trivial effort on Sheds look a bit lightweight.
Very evocative Dave.
"theatre of dreams... 11 black bags...shed as broken as our hearts" - I can smell it too.
It made me think back to my uncle's shed, also transported (I think) from the grandad's. It was probably about 12ft * 8ft but I recollect it as being the size of a tennis court.
(Thanks for the post on Man U.)

Comment is about Dad's shed (blog)

Original item by Dave Bradley

hi there , thanks for the invite and kind comments , I have something on around that time but I thank you a lot for taking the time to invite me , maybe sometime I will be able to attend one of your events and contribute somehow.
Spencer

Comment is about Beulah (poet profile)

Original item by Beulah

Thanks for your comments on "Sheds" - my rather simplistic guide to marriage guidance counselling.
I do hope your reference to my red hot poker was not a masturbatory allusion! I would have you know that this was simply an adolescent phase I was going through for the rest of my life.

Comment is about Isobel (poet profile)

Original item by Isobel

now if it was not a different elephant i, being i, would love this. Since it was a different elephant, i like it and love the humour-somewhat. nice story.

Comment is about It Was A Beautiful Day (An Elephant Never Forgets) (blog)

A gentle sensitive poem,suitably quirky and imaginative, I instinctively like Peggy whoever she is ;-)
Luv TC XX

Comment is about lemon pips (blog)

Original item by Ann Foxglove

Try Ekchart Tolle 'The Power of Now' he's pretty much into that, pretty good stuff too if you can pull it off. I can't I keep slipping into the past and the future....
TC XX

Comment is about growing Up well (blog)

Original item by Beulah

does the land breed the people or the people the land?

Comment is about English Stoicism (blog)

Original item by Joshua Van-Cook

Nice one John. The last stanza is spot on - so many non-Mancunians support Man U precisely because they want 'their' team to win all the time. Below which are some murky psychological depths

Comment is about Manchester United 1 Chelsea 2 (blog)

Original item by John Coopey

Sorry, I'm spamming a bit this weekend!

Comment is about Hope (blog)

Original item by Alison Smiles

Hello John. I used to think I was a Villain, but I learnt recently that I'm a Villan. Political Correctness, I think.I wrote a poem at the start of the season about mid-table inertia etc. that I'll post after we've lost to Chelsea next week. Try some Viagra, John.

Comment is about John Coopey (poet profile)

Original item by John Coopey