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Mon 15th Jul 2019 18:45

Keith, Thank you for your comment on "Coin Toss". I appreciate it! Take care. --- J

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John Coopey

Mon 15th Jul 2019 18:43

This is a far superior testament to (specifically) Irish immigration from The Pogues, “Thousands Are Sailing”.
https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=27iJsZpQn3A

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keith jeffries

Mon 15th Jul 2019 18:34

Jason,

A poem overflowing with love and the knowledge that all will be taken care of.

Thank you for this

Keith

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keith jeffries

Mon 15th Jul 2019 18:31

Peter,

I gather from your profile that you might be a newcomer to this site and if so then a very warm welcome indeed. This poem speaks to me of when I was young, when I first experienced a sense of the numinous in its most basic form. My childhood was lonely and like yours in dismal surroundings. This drove me into the countryside where I encountered the "you". I particularly like your pen ultimate stanza as it speaks to me quite powerfully.

I look forward to reading more of your poems.
Greetings from a very sunny Northamptonshire
Keith

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John Coopey

Mon 15th Jul 2019 18:08

Thankyou for your thoughts, MC and Mindy. Both our countries were once kinder to those fleeing persecution and poverty than we are now. It is fortunate that the Jews of Europe were fleeing to the arms of our forefathers and not to us.

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Peter Taylor

Mon 15th Jul 2019 18:01

Hi Jason. These few words are bursting with reaffirmation of love past, present and future; and the care that will endure. Your dad was clearly special; and I imagine you to him.

Peter T

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Mon 15th Jul 2019 18:00

Much wisdom here. I also like the shifting placement of rhymes here. Nice poem.

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Mon 15th Jul 2019 17:42

Thank you kindly, Peter, for your comment on "Coin Toss". I appreciate it!

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Peter Taylor

Mon 15th Jul 2019 17:31

Hi Peter P - we haven't met till now and am really pleased the first poem by another Peter I've come across on WOL is such a good one. I really love the pace and the use of plain language to get such rich messages across. Thanks!

Peter T

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Mon 15th Jul 2019 17:08

Well said, M.C.!!!

It is so popular to hate and blame this country.
You'd think we invented the mirror!

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M.C. Newberry

Mon 15th Jul 2019 16:59

It can be said that this US scenario gained fresh impetus from being attacked from within by certain factions and origins that had been
welcomed on face value (so to speak) and then set about trying
to affect the progress and safety of the country they sought to live
in but with malign/ulterior intent. The situation of the illegal mass
immigration from largely Latin-American South America - the less
stable and more inflammatory neighbour to Uncle Sam - can be
seen as an exacerbation of an ongoing problem facing the social
well-being and established national security of the latter country.
Without being melodramatic, here in the UK we are seeing report
after report of boat-loads of people being found crossing the Channel from the safe havens of Europe, with nearly all being
Iranian. Who is to say that this is not a sneaky way of getting
5th columnists from that unfriendly regime into this country for
purposes other than peaceful? Why aren't they willing to stay in
lands like La Belle France and other receptive liberal European
destinations? Why come here...the vilified oft-criticised old colonial power? The currency of Freedom deserves answers to protect its proper value.

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raypool

Mon 15th Jul 2019 16:50

A compelling tale with a real sense of emergency woven through it - reminiscent of many dodgy events deep in the country. Cleverly you imply that the two bangs are in fact the two other cartridges (as I read it), left to develop in the mind and the sudden exit wraps up the tale nicely.
The film a History of Violence features a shotgun sequence used to deadly effect.

Marvellous read Trevor. Supercharged stuff.

Ray

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Tommy Carroll

Mon 15th Jul 2019 14:57





RE my verse - "in bits"

Laura Taylor responce:
Wed 12th Nov 2014 09:55

"I meant to comment on this at the time - it's stayed with me. The panic, the confusion, the loss of control, the straining attempt to keep the real NOW, and not let go of it, not let it twist itself out of the grasp. It makes me think brain problems/injury/stroke/epilepsy. I become very anxious when I read it.
To make a poem of it - I do admire you for that. I love this one, Tommy."


My responce
Tue 3rd Feb 2015 20:23

"You have it in one Laura"


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Mon 15th Jul 2019 14:52

Lisa, there is a lot to be said for sitting on the fence just in case!




Rose ?

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Mon 15th Jul 2019 14:45

Don,
Thanks for the compliment on my rant
Sometimes I rhyme, sometimes I can't
For the times in which I do
Are inspired by ones like you


Have a good day, Don!

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Mon 15th Jul 2019 14:41

mans inhumanity not only to his own kind but also almost every one of OUR wildlife species never ceases to sicken me. Well written D.M





Rose ?.

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Mon 15th Jul 2019 14:38

Tommy, Thanks for your input on "Pig Slop". I appreciate it! Take care ---- Jason

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J R Harris

Mon 15th Jul 2019 14:01

As for the final... the famous words of the Duke of Wellington come to mind when he defeated Napoleon at Waterloo - "the nearest run thing you ever saw in your life!"

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Mon 15th Jul 2019 13:57

Thank you again, Sophie, for your recent comment on my profile page. You are having more of a struggle than I am I see from what you tell me, and I really do hope you fully recover as soon as possible from your injury.

Please do keep writing, because, I think both you and I know it is one of the best kinds of therapy when it comes to physically and mentally healing of the mind and the body.

My best regards as always.


Rose ?

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Mae Foreman

Mon 15th Jul 2019 13:52

Hi Tommy! Yes Diogrnes and Alexander! Really? I'm diving into your work pronto! I'm curious to find your approach! ?
Thanks for stopping by ?
Mae

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keith jeffries

Mon 15th Jul 2019 13:02

Hello Don,

This poem and its accompanying video clip will provoke quite a response from the readers. My partner is Spanish and from Bilbao. He abhors all such activites and wishes to see Spain bring a halt to what is barbarity in the extreme. The bulls are taunted. In the late 1960´s I was in Spain and went to see a bullfight. I came away sickened vowing never again to witness such gratuitous violence to animals.

Keith

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keith jeffries

Mon 15th Jul 2019 12:48

d.k.,

Thanks, I am really well and so are the two hounds. We enjoy our summer morning walks together.

Greetings
Keith

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Jon Stainsby

Mon 15th Jul 2019 12:19

Thanks, Dorothy

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Lisa C Bassignani

Mon 15th Jul 2019 11:29

Thank you so much Jason.

And thank you to everyone for comments, likes and/or dislikes.
I always appreciate feedback.

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John Coopey

Mon 15th Jul 2019 11:09

Many thanks for the “likes”, Lisa, Devon and Rachel.
I opened the link, Rachel, but saw it was 54 minutes long and I am on my phone now. So I’ll save it to look at when I’m back at the ranch.
We were better people then.

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raypool

Mon 15th Jul 2019 11:05

A kiss such as this a prelude to bliss. Slow motion ecstasy!

Rayy

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Lisa C Bassignani

Mon 15th Jul 2019 11:01

Beautiful!
Take that leap.
Fall in love.

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Jon Stainsby

Mon 15th Jul 2019 10:53

Thanks, John and Lisa.

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Tom

Mon 15th Jul 2019 10:46

Agreed Keith (fountain pen-wise) in fact, I'm going to load a new cartridge now and see if there is some inspiration lurking ? And thanks, You Are My Priest is me giving thanks to all of you lucky readers out there.

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Lisa C Bassignani

Mon 15th Jul 2019 10:44

It is subjective, indeed.

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Lisa C Bassignani

Mon 15th Jul 2019 10:38

Not that I want to promote ANY violence, but I do enjoy when the human runners get gored...serves them right!

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elPintor

Mon 15th Jul 2019 10:18

Any number of discussions could spring up from what you've written, here--such are the undercurrents that pervade these ideas.

It is very sad to see the resurgence of outright bigotry to such a degree that the fringe no longer feel the need to hide its face.

I'm posting a link--again )

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AuPZr68T_fg

I realize others may not share an interest, but it's hard to resist the opportunity to push a little light through the channel you've opened with your post.

Thanks John,

Rachel

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john short

Mon 15th Jul 2019 09:56

Desmond, a philosophical poetic observation on Life with a clear and simple message. Nice work. Tentatively suggest / upon our lives then to ordain/ just to help the rhythm, and re-work the last line. I can't stress enough this is only a suggestion and you may disagree. I think it's more useful to offer constructive criticism than just say nice things all the time. The poem's great - these observations are just about the rhythm.

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john short

Mon 15th Jul 2019 09:25

Jon, rather than just saying nice things, my honest opinion of this is that there's more work to be done. It seems to require another stanza to give the reader a better idea of what it's about and bring the piece into focus. But as I've just added a bit more to one of my old poems possibly that's the mind-set I'm in at the moment. Poetry is so subjective alas.

John S.

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jilliannchadrick@gmail.com

Mon 15th Jul 2019 08:01

? Gratitude Gaëtane ?

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Jon Stainsby

Mon 15th Jul 2019 06:45

Thank you for your poems and your support, Damon.

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Tommy Carroll

Sun 14th Jul 2019 22:47

Mae your exchange between Diogenes and Alexander, I used in verse on this site a while ago. It has great resonance and worthy of greater usage.

Tommy

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d.knape

Sun 14th Jul 2019 22:29

Don't argue with bear
but be beware-
it growls and bites
anytime, anywhere!

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d.knape

Sun 14th Jul 2019 22:20

Thanks Keith.
How's the dog?
for that matter,
how are You?

wink.

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d.knape

Sun 14th Jul 2019 22:18

Thanks Martin.

note: Sweaters marked down this week at Walmart!

wink wink

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Anthony

Sun 14th Jul 2019 21:17

Thank you

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Tommy Carroll

Sun 14th Jul 2019 21:04

Thanks Rachel. I will have to read the article again as my head is sore and I'm suffering from writing simmilar stuff! please see below.


Higg's Boson

by Tommy Carroll

(125 GeV/c2)



The Boson that is Higgs,
hides when it jiggs,

with an end nearly instant
and the unification of quantum chromodynamics still quite distant

the search for the particle,
was often quite farcical

the technology involved
in the cost that's financial

unlike the thing itself
is massively substantial.


Words and lmage Tommy Carroll

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Cait Abbott

Sun 14th Jul 2019 20:02

Thank you all for your kind words

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Mae Foreman

Sun 14th Jul 2019 20:01

No critique of your writing dear Jason! Just the truth that bugs me sometimes, like the deprivation of the "living the dream" for instance! Everybody should have the right to live the dream! ?
Loved the poem in its entirety! One of your best!

x.x.
Mae

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Mae Foreman

Sun 14th Jul 2019 19:23

Thank you so much dear Jason! ? The Dragon spoke wisely once more.
Personally I prefer what the reader reads in my poems over what I write in them! I keep exploiting that poor ingenious, empathetic, insightful reader! And I thank them! Jason, I won't lie, you are one of the best readers of my poems! But on this one all three thrived! Mindy, Martin and as Jason, thank you for your interpretation, it makes my piece a whole lot better than it was when I wrote it!
So thank you all?
Mae

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Tommy Carroll

Sun 14th Jul 2019 19:14

Hi Mart, Purgatory is a place of punishment before being sent through the pearly gates whereas Limbo is a place for those who have died before being Christened but have not sinned. ?

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Jason Bayliss

Sun 14th Jul 2019 18:48

As ever, I love it Mae. I love for all the reasons already mentioned and also for what it represents within us all.
They say the reader takes from each poem what they will and the thing this speaks of to me, deep down, is the eternal battle within us all between desire and doubt, between lust and fear.
On one hand you have the proud, powerful, bold young emperor, full of potential and blissful ignorance, and on the other you have the, "Wise," old man, who sees the deep consequences of the actions of all and some could argue, is so scared of them, seeks safety by living in an urn.
One, Unfettered by his ignorance and one immobilised by his wisdom.
To me, at a deep level, this is Yin and Yang. The dragons of chaos and order, creativeness and control.
There is a line, a sweet spot between them where they would perfectly complement each other, and much like in each of our lives, it is the eternal, internal balance we seek between the will to fulfill desire and the wisdom to know whether we should or not.

Very clever.

Loved it Mae,

J. x

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Jason Bayliss

Sun 14th Jul 2019 18:23

That's what I love about the group of questions we call professionally, "5WH." When questioning a person, they're the questions we are all aiming at because they're the, "Open," questions, the ones you can't answer with, "Yes," or, "No." And therefore, have to answer, in more detail, (sorry, straying into work there?).
For those that may not know, "5WH," is shorthand for, "Who. What. Where. When. Why. How."
Questions that force you to answer in detail and therefore, pretty much the beginning of all the really, "Big," questions.
Lisa, as ever, you nailed it and demonstrated one of the things I love about your writing, a sharp, incisive mind.

J. x

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Lisa C Bassignani

Sun 14th Jul 2019 17:56

Dorothy,
I think the discussion area is the place for this topic. This poem came from a thread there. The 5WH challenge. A new discussion can be started if you choose. I just felt compelled to post it here because of all the religious and anti religious stuff that has been put up lately.
Lisa

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