Devon Brock
Thu 20th Jun 2019 21:30
I really enjoyed this poem Ray. I didn't at first understand the piece, but after I read your explanation, all that you present with your images makes perfect sense. It may not be for your taste, but it certainly is mine. One of those exquisite poems that forces me to do the heavy lifting. My only wish is that you weren't so forthcoming in your explanation. Nice work!
Comment is about THE MESSAGE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Thanks everyone. I keep turning it over in my head and so many new meanings come about with such a few simple words.
Comment is about X X X (blog)
Original item by Lisa C Bassignani
Really enjoyed this - and made me pause to think for longer than anything else today. Great work, thank you. T
Comment is about Me And My Mortality (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Ah Mae -Passion, Passion, poetically expressed. ><>
Comment is about Funny, Funny (blog)
Original item by Mae Foreman
Hello Lucas BF - Thanks for posting this. A great reading of a sublimely great poem.
Go well
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Comment is about god's grandeur (blog)
Original item by Lucas B. Foley
Yea, well expressed, Jason, full of poetry. -But- no, for me not so. Death is an enemy. I fear it not but it is an enemy, a defeated enemy.
Live long
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Comment is about Me And My Mortality (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Ah Alexandra P - as Martin says lots of meat to chew off the bone (oh dear, hope you're not a vegetarian).
Without vision the people perish and a 'scale' (for weight, size and reality) has been given.
Go well
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Comment is about Seeing Things (blog)
Original item by Alexandra K. Parapadakis
Thanks for your responses Afishamongmany and David. I ought to explain my thoughts as there is no centre otherwise. In my head was an American delegation of evangelists. There may be other similarities, but chiefly the nature of the message is simply that of the gospel , which in itself is to lots of us shrouded(excuse the pun) in myth and mystery. The sober appearance is of course important (cleanliness next to Godliness). Both your comments are very welcome and have caught the flavour I was after!
Not for my taste, though I did write it.
Ray
Comment is about THE MESSAGE (blog)
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Hi MCN - Political poetry I would usually leap frog. But this one being well crafted and accessible I enjoyed. Yea, Illuminati indeed - and on the sands the children cheered and jeered to see Punch and Judy act so weird.
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Comment is about IS IT GOODBYE? (blog)
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Interesting read Ray, enigmatic, dramatic. But who were they and what was the message?
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Comment is about THE MESSAGE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Don - for years the Conservative and Unionist Party - to give it the
full title - has been split between the behaviour of those who ignored the fact that they were elected to govern the country according to its laws and customs and the internal resistance
from within its ranks against that behaviour. In fear of a wipe-out at the polls at the hands of the newly formed Brexit Party (demanding a no holds barred departure from the EU) and
perhaps more in hope than expectation of satisfying a public
now all too aware of mendacious political machinations, past
and ongoing, Boris Johnson is seen as its most likely hope towards winning over a sceptical disillusioned electorate and
returning the mandate of genuine parliamentary sovereignty
to its UK home from abroad.
Comment is about IS IT GOODBYE? (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Thank you DoRoThY, Lisa, Charles S and Steve H. ><>
Comment is about The Brink of Time (blog)
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I daren’t, Kev. But I am hopeful of making Poem of the Week.
Comment is about CAMAY (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thank you all so much for your comments and likes. It's really nice when a piece of writing connects with others so I am really pleased.
J.x
Comment is about Me And My Mortality (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Thank you for the comments. I think the voice actor, and particularly the animators have done a fantastic job.
M.C., I love your considered - probably tongue-in-cheek - analyses.
I do find it extraordinary, though, how some people dare to blame migrants for upsetting "the centuries-old establishment of a society largely at ease with itself" when It is obvious to all but the most wilfully blind among us that the nation's greatest source of unease at the moment is that group of establishment figures vying to lead it, of all stripes. If ever there was on argument for new, as opposed to blue, blood, that is surely the best.
Comment is about A villanelle for the cup that cheers: Julian Jordon's poem accompanies Refugee Week animation (article)
Original item by Greg Freeman
ThanksMC. I’m sure he deserves a better accolade from those who knew him better. But in their absence I thought I’d step in.
Comment is about BROWNIE - MY OBITUARY (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Living down here in Australia
I'm puzzled at what's going on
I do hear however that Boris
Will be your Prime Minister, (forgone)....
Comment is about IS IT GOODBYE? (blog)
Original item by M.C. Newberry
Good advice in a "marketable" format. Perhaps if tobacco and
similar substances were accompanied by images of oldies then
their appeal to youngsters would be considerably reduced.
Comment is about Live much longer don't smoke! A message to teenagers. (blog)
Original item by hugh
Talk about pricking the imagination! ?
Comment is about TEN ON THE SPHINCTER SCALE (blog)
Original item by ray pool
Friendships are always to be valued and although these change
with the passing of time, they are no less valuable.
What we have is what we leave
When we depart and those who grieve
Remember - in his or her own way -
Of who we were back in our day. ?
Comment is about BROWNIE - MY OBITUARY (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Thank you for your comments. I did receive three emails directly to my personal address, but I have not opened them. I never open any messages except those that come directly from the umbrella organization of WRITEOUTLOUD.
I'm certainly curious, of course, but not so much that I sidestep WOL protection.
Comment is about Mind in a Cage (blog)
Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas
i love everything about this write-up......
Comment is about My Muse Has Gone Off Bike-Riding (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Unique poem with such a beautiful blend of life n death.. Brilliant piece..
Comment is about Me And My Mortality (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Absolutely brilliant piece..
Comment is about Shadows Climb In My Cold Room (blog)
Original item by Tom
Great poem and full of great visuals, nice little journey as well. ?
Comment is about Eddie Condon's apprentice (blog)
Original item by Martin Elder
Brian - have you chained your bike?
Comment is about My Muse Has Gone Off Bike-Riding (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
kj we need more humour
On our WOLers site
Need to dry the squibs out though
Give them bit more bite.....
Comment is about This Ain't No Aussie Launchpad Don (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
Hi Jason,
This is a lovely piece, an arrow from the heart, straight and true.
Thanks.
Peter
Comment is about Me And My Mortality (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
Keep the non-explosive fully Australian made rockets (or as we call them. Damp squibs) coming. We need more humour.
Comment is about This Ain't No Aussie Launchpad Don (blog)
Original item by Don Matthews
The only thing certain in life is death. This is a different (and probably unique) way of looking at our own mortality.
I have no fear of death, but I hope to see more things on this earth before he welcomes me as a friend.
Comment is about Me And My Mortality (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
First class. Can't wait to see this one performed live.
Comment is about CAMAY (blog)
Original item by John Coopey
Like Devon I thought it was stunning. The way you juxtaxposed you and death showed another way of expressing things. Both entering at birth and uniting at end was nice thinking. Well done.
Comment is about Me And My Mortality (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss
A nice positive poem Eve. I like the title.
Comment is about Sparklers in the dark (blog)
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Devon Brock
Wed 19th Jun 2019 23:46
Now here's the beauty of solid poetry. You may be speaking to someone or someplace, that I don't know. But what you have accomplished here is to give me a lost love song of the place of my childhood - Appalachia. You have let me tell my story (to myself) in this poem. You have bridged the gap between poet and reader. You have taken me back to a yearning for the great hills of my birth, you SOB, and I love it. And BTW, you solidly landed the form.
Comment is about Villanesque (blog)
Original item by John E Marks
Devon Brock
Wed 19th Jun 2019 23:32
Oh man. "The blue-remembered hills of home". That's a sucker punch. Nice work.
Comment is about Villanesque (blog)
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Devon Brock
Wed 19th Jun 2019 23:29
Hey Fred, volunteerism is tough on dedicated souls like yourself. So many get into it, for the best of reasons to find that they cannot stomach the commitment and leave. Hang tough, keep writing great poetry, and know that the politician is not the hand that consoles, yours is.
Comment is about When did I sign up? (A Carers lament) (blog)
Original item by Rick Varden
Thank you Rose, the care system is more than the ‘mini crisis’ that they report. It’s a real and present danger to us all and shows no signs of improving.
If it wasn’t for writing and performing poetry I wouldn’t be around to complain, it gets that bad. Cheers
Comment is about When did I sign up? (A Carers lament) (blog)
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Devon Brock
Wed 19th Jun 2019 23:16
Interesting treatise on the nature of poetry, Peter.
Comment is about AND BECAUSE (blog)
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Devon Brock
Wed 19th Jun 2019 23:10
Chagall - every time I look at my wife, my marriage - I think Chagall!
Comment is about A Dying Art (blog)
Original item by Jennifer Malden
Thanks Don, Jason and Martin for the comments. In case anyone is interested - but prob you can recognize the first names - Saska was Rembrandt's young wife, and in an Edinburgh Gallery there is a portrait of her rosily, floridly naked in a dark fur! As Fish said, Stanley is Stanley Spencer, then Pierre Auguste Renoir , Edgar Degas, Maudit = maledetto = Modigliani, Gustav Klimt, and Egon Schiele. The girl in the picture is Simonetta Vespucci posing for Sandro Filipepi's (Botticelli's) Primavera. She has the most incredibly 'modern' face, could be a present day Vogue model, and she was a famous Florentine beauty. It has always been one of my favourite paintings, and I can go and see it any day, apart from having to queue for hours. Jennifer
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Devon Brock
Wed 19th Jun 2019 22:56
Great stuff Eiren. Reads like obsession!
Comment is about I wonder (blog)
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Devon Brock
Wed 19th Jun 2019 22:22
Very positive message, Sarah. I enjoyed how you built this poem from the small to the large, from the natural to manufactured. Nicely crafted.
Comment is about Heartburn no more (blog)
Original item by Sarah Louise mcnee
I must admit there is something strangely hypnotic about watching planes both take off and land. Well at least there is for me.
Nice one Peter
Comment is about AND BECAUSE (blog)
Original item by Peter Taylor
I like the perspective of looking from the outside in gathering pace with the inevitable.
While I felt death
Like a wound
From a black rose.
what great lines
love it
Comment is about Death Party (blog)
Original item by David Irvine
Cheers Don,
It’s actually about my old mum. Looking after her takes it’s toll. Sometimes a poem is a good way to let out a little steam and at the same time talk about what she and others are going through.
Thanks for looking in.
Comment is about Days of Dementia (blog)
Original item by Steve Higgins
Lisa C Bassignani
Thu 20th Jun 2019 21:49
None of us will get out alive.
This is wonderful Jason
Comment is about Me And My Mortality (blog)
Original item by Jason Bayliss