Thanks for taking the time to read and to comment!
--My intention was knead-- like as in preparing bread..Though it is a play on "need" and "Knead"

Comment is about (blog)

Original item by Brent Cameron

Thanks you Ricky and Keith. I thought this might make a change from the vitriolic take often associated with this hoary subject!

Ray

Comment is about OLD POLITICIANS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

I guess we do our best to 'civilise' ourselves but those primal urges outrun us.

Thanks, both for your thoughtful replies ?

Comment is about On mishearing Macbeth Act V: “What a sigh is there!” (blog)

Original item by Rick Gammon

Brilliant - and honest - and not so terrible. No, not so terrible.

If there is this driving sexual force for new life in animal males (and MY new life in particular), then why do we castigate the male of the human species for reacting so basically. A thought doesn't equate an action. Humans are in transition. There is much to 'sort out' from basic physicality to spiritual beings.

We're working on it. The real clinker is: men and women still put so much emphasis on sheer sexual attraction, about as basic as you can get. And still the 'dominant factor' even for casual social association. Otherwise, women's excessive makeup, see-through clothes and stiletto heels would be an abomination to both sexes.

Now I will read the prior comment. Might be interesting.

Comment is about On mishearing Macbeth Act V: “What a sigh is there!” (blog)

Original item by Rick Gammon

Hi Keith, thank you for your kind comment about 'The Innocents', much appreciated.

Paul

Comment is about keith jeffries (poet profile)

Original item by keith jeffries

Good advice, expertly put. I would quit when ahead, myself, finishing the poem with 'make fear part of the journey. You'll see that it's less intimidating.' I realise you have used the final lines as the actual teaching essence, but I do wonder why. I think the point is already clearly made. The listener will be astute, or not. And no further 'words' will make a difference.

I had an amazing interchange with an Iraqui sheik once. And his emphasis was clearly on the idea that the listener/student/disciple must also rise to meet the mind of the spiritual instructor. Or no spiritual intercourse has really taken place.

Comment is about Meet Fear, my new friend. (blog)

Original item by Chakraj

Terrific. Great theme, much enjoyed. Good subject for the discipline of metre and rhyme.

Comment is about Doggerel (I'm trying everything) (blog)

Original item by Hazel ettridge

thank you for the comment.

Comment is about Ricky (poet profile)

Original item by Ricky

The fact is that centuries of human advancement have
not changed the basic behavioural attitude that Nature
maintains in the male/female scenario.
On the one hand, human social interaction demands we
behave in "acceptable" ways, whilst on the other hand,
nature eggs on our minds and bodies with its inbuilt
urges designed to propel our propagation onwards, with
no mind to recognise "civilised" (religious?) attitudes.
that are intended to inhibit and control.
I've little doubt that men of Shakespeare's time had just
the same thoughts in mind - albeit not in the theatre
where men and boys took women's roles - or that,
despite the claustrophobic clothing and (literally)
buttoned-up sexual interaction of Victorian days, the
same thoughts existed. Nature will find (have?) its way
despite the best of intentions and efforts to restrain
it within human society - using the criminal law to
punish those who force themselves on others outside
the accepted circumstances "of the moment". But
that's what courts are for...not least for the protection
of those unable to defend themselves...and the law
even defines ages of consent before offering the arena
of the court for decision and judgement. Confining this
dissertation to adults:
Men will seek...men hope to find
But it's women who decide if they mind!

Comment is about On mishearing Macbeth Act V: “What a sigh is there!” (blog)

Original item by Rick Gammon

This is interesting. I probably don't 'get' the precise intention because I'm not quite sure what you mean by 'a john'. I can surmise, but I may be off track. Also, is your intent the word 'knead' as with 'preparing bread etc.', as opposed to 'kneeing someone in the groin' etc?

I think this is really good, thought provoking. The last two lines are superb. I will try to find time to read more.

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Original item by Brent Cameron

been away for the weekend and havent caught up properly but dropping in to say this is really rather beautiful. your work is often cold and austere (thats a compliment) meaning that when you do touch on emotions and self the result is all the more powerful.

Comment is about chalk one up (blog)

Original item by nunya

Ricky, ¨Symphony in the Night ¨ is a beautifully crafted poem. Thank you for this. Keith

Comment is about Ricky (poet profile)

Original item by Ricky

Ray, I like this as it really sums up the political forum. Thanks. Keith

Comment is about OLD POLITICIANS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Thanks, Suki, it might be argued that my entire existence has had a 'psychedelicised vibe to it' ?

and I ain't alone ?

Comment is about To Anaïs - A Lover I Met On The Way (blog)

Original item by Rick Gammon

Hi Ricky, this is a great theme for a poem and one that could easily have a story woven into the descriptive lines already set down.

I read your bio and was interested to see you are from Kentucky. I had the pleasure of camping and hiking around the Daniel Boone National Forest last year. Kentucky is a beautiful part of the world with a rich tradition of music and storytelling.

Thanks for posting,
Colin

Comment is about The Schooners (blog)

Original item by Ricky

Thanks for the appreciation cynthia

Comment is about Morning Sun (blog)

Original item by Gelo leysa

Very good sir.

Comment is about DEATH OF NELSON (blog)

Original item by David Subacchi

A good poem my friend. Nobody is a lost cause and never quit.

Comment is about Dont Quit (blog)

Original item by Samual Jake

Very good poem. Interesting subject.

Comment is about OLD POLITICIANS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Enjoyed your poem very much. Look forward to reading much more.

Comment is about Sweet Nothings (A Homage to Hugo Williams's poem of the same name) (blog)

Original item by Andy N

Hi Martin,
Thanks for reading. The topic has been on my mind these past few months, and I guess my feelings finally found the words.
Thank you for the feedback​ ?

Comment is about Epidemic (blog)

Original item by Melissa Gentile

Hi elP,

Reading about your experience reminds me of certain different though painful experiences. It's not just about memory, but the way they often arise again and again unbidden, and relived again and again, breathing new life into something you wish would remain a corpse.

What can I say? Looking at it, gazing at it, and letting go is a victory - of sorts.

Brilliant write.

Suki

Comment is about chalk one up (blog)

Original item by nunya

Has a magic realist slightly psychedelicised vibe to it. The choice of Anais is inspired. Excellent Ray.

Suki

Comment is about To Anaïs - A Lover I Met On The Way (blog)

Original item by Rick Gammon

Good evening David, I was typing my previous response so long (with one eye on Match of the Day) that you managed to post your comment in the mean time!

Thank you so much, your interpretations could all help explain the piece. My intention was to write a distressing fantasy about a person who becomes somebody else (who is quite dysfunctional) and are distressed because they know what's happening to them but have no control.

Over-active imagination? Guilty as charged your honour ?

Paul

Edit. David, just read your previous comment, no problem, I found it a really interesting point.

Comment is about Being Someone Else (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Cynthia, thank you...lovely as ever to read your comments.

Col, what an adventure-filled day you've had, with a touch of daring-do (so says Daring Waring). Beware! Sat night tv is the devil in disguise ?. Hope you've had chance to relax and find yourself now! And thanks so much for the praise.

Paul

Comment is about Being Someone Else (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

an interesting conception to have a fantasy figure falling short of imagined perfection and the consequent patching together , perhaps to take into account the failure of our own heroic figures.

An effective and fascinating trip with the prospect of holding one's head high. A worthy winner !

Ray

Comment is about 'Around the Cirrus and Nimbostratus' by Simon Widdop is Poem of the Week (article)

Original item by Greg Freeman

I drove up the wrong side of the road today. Was looking for the VW garage after a long cycle ride in the Swansea sun. Turned out to be a Skoda and Seat garage now. They'd moved the Vdubs across town which was annoying as we'd cycled near to it earlier on. So we drove across town and the nice woman served us hot chocolates and we apologised for looking so scruffy and could we use your loo please to wash our oily hands before sitting in the manager's ex-demo runaround that was in reality a bit more than we wanted to spend and no we don't have a hard copy brochure for that model but I can email one if you like. I also cycled in the pedestrian lane a few times but only to frighten the little kiddies on scooters. Paul, why is Saturday TV so bad? Great poem.
All the best,
Mr Someone Else

Comment is about Being Someone Else (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Buck's antlers eh? I can just see them falling about. Well get your own back then. Stare them out. They couldn't cope with that. Just kidding of course. And thanks for your kind comments on Curfew, which reminds me i have to be somewhere by 8pm or I'll be timed out.

Comment is about Garden Party (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Hi Hazel, loved this, but I don't think "garbage" was a strong enough word. I treat lawns for a living, and leaves are absolutely the bain of my life. They look nice enough on the trees though.

Cheers Kevin

Comment is about Autumn Leaves (blog)

Original item by Hazel ettridge

Good one. Excellent topic. I couldn't watch war movies of any kind for years - freaked me out. Still haven't seen 'Saving Private Ryan', a 'recent' film. Thought I'd grow out of it, but maybe not.

Comment is about JACK AND JOHN (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

To the open heart and mind, words always come.

Comment is about Morning Writing (blog)

Original item by Ricky

Welcome to WOL. Will you share with us where you live? We have so many friends now, around the world.

Comment is about Gelo leysa (poet profile)

Original item by Gelo leysa

Fine sentiments, and very true too.

Comment is about Morning Sun (blog)

Original item by Gelo leysa

Very interesting premise, well developed. A good take on the 'I'm just not myself to-day' syndrome, so commonly flipped out.

Comment is about Being Someone Else (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring

Another excellent contribution. Thanks.

Comment is about DEATH OF NELSON (blog)

Original item by David Subacchi

With many thanks to excellent ideas for changes. I totally take your points. But I have decided that I will leave this work basically as it is.

After much consideration, I understand that I do not want 'clarity' or 'precision' because there is nothing clear or precise about the situation. Nor do I want specific images that can be isolated from the whole, because each thought/observation/reaction bleeds together to 'be' the whole. They cannot exist separately in a straight line. It's not everyone's 'thing'; but this time, it's 'my thing', written in circles, convolutions, frontwards, backwards, exactly as I want. Relationships of words flow throughout. Not everything in life can be 'pinned down' to logic.

Comment is about Girl in a Lake (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Well I'm with you Cynthia, poo, is a dirty word. I think it's a shame we have shuffled away from cock and plumped for the puritan's, cockerel, but we all manage the to and fro of vowels between the English and American, with cups and rubbers on the tube. But i'd rather say shit and shiolah anyday, than come to terms with poo. Posh too.

Comment is about Garden Party (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

Well, I'm never exactly sure when I might take a good thing too far. I hope this isn't one of those times.

Comment is about Garden Party (blog)

Original item by Cynthia Buell Thomas

You can find more of my poetry including videos on line by searching on DAVID SUBACCHI.

Comment is about DEATH OF NELSON (blog)

Original item by David Subacchi

If justice can emerge, the culprit(s) should be hauled
before the court that waits to judge culpability.
Dictators and their supporters feed off each other and
that is very obvious in the alliance between the reigning
politicians of Syria and their big collaborator - Russia...
the biggest friend of the word "No (niet!)" in any United
Nations attempt to confront tyranny.

Comment is about Chemical Attack - Syria (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

Thanks everyone,

(I was just trying to re-record the gratitude)

Graham, I agree with that Gentile...(If only I could do stuff like `the Book of Job`.)...Now that`s bed-rock reality!

get back commenting shortly...(I `ope! ?)

Comment is about Colette (blog)

Original item by Harry O`N eill

"The signs of new life came into bloom", it's like spring following a harsh winter. I just feel for the poor people around the world who are still going through it.
sadly I notice your very next poem is about Syria, no spring in sight there.

Kevin

Comment is about Just after... (blog)

Original item by keith jeffries

really good.
if this story was on the telly, it would be a mini-series, as there was too much happening for one episode. yet you were able to tell the whole story in one poem.
I agree with Keith, "it says much more than the words you have used".

Kevin

Comment is about Robbers tongue (blog)

Original item by Martin Elder

Sorry Daniel, but I'm just not having that. I've been reading through some of your stuff, and I'm sure that when you take to the mic people put their mobiles down and listen.
Another good 'un, albeit too modest.

Cheers Kevin.

Comment is about THE INSIGNIFICANT POET (blog)

Original item by Daniel Dwyran

Keith - you're welcome! It was another that started in my
overnight bed and emerged more fully as I lay there
resisting the feeling I should get up! Not the first time
it's happened to yours truly. But inspiration - whatever
its source - is not to be sneezed at.
MC

Comment is about JACK AND JOHN (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

elP - don't get carried away now - it's all in a dream! As a musician I was lucky to get free travel at one time .
I hope you get what you wish for.

Ray

Comment is about NIGHT ERRORS (blog)

Original item by ray pool

Aythangyow Paul - i'm afraid the reference was purely between the sheets !

Col: I love the brevity and nice to hear from you .

Martin: Glad you enjoyed this, cheers.

Ray

Comment is about HISTORIES AND MYSTERIES (blog)

Original item by ray pool

MC. Thank you for this. Keith

Comment is about JACK AND JOHN (blog)

Original item by M.C. Newberry

lovely lilting rhythm to this piece Zakiya especially in the first half. I like the repetition of some of the words and the rhymes within lines like broken / awoken. Yes, rhymes don't have to be relegated to the ends of lines and mixing them up adds layers in my opinion. Thanks for posting.
Colin

Comment is about Not Noticed by Zakiya Johnson (blog)

Original item by Abstract Mystery

Thanks John for your kind comment and praise of my first audio attempt. It is especially nice coming from you who has probably led the way on here with recordings.

Cheers,

Paul

Comment is about Jazz Notes, Harlem 1950's (blog)

Original item by Paul Waring